Revising a Peer 's Narrative Piece by Amy Gollatz https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2 Where does the piece lack description? en-us 2015-11-05 18:25:31 UTC 2025-11-19 03:21:34 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.storage.googleapis.com/portrait/notebook.jpg I think the sentence number two what about you? fourth person number 5 third person. https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79834013 because the auther needs to give more detail about who is talking or it wont make sense

]]> 2015-11-06 17:19:39 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79834013 I think that the sentence don't let your hopes down kid ;and I never knew what he meant until now https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835015 is confusing because he jumps right to that

]]> 2015-11-06 17:23:04 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835015 I think the sentence:In the past three years is confusing. https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835317 because it doesn't tell you about the past three years and it goes to a different topic right away

]]> 2015-11-06 17:24:03 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835317 I think the sentence: I hit one twin then the other twin till they lost all of their speed. https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835341 because after they lost there speed did they spin out?

]]> 2015-11-06 17:24:07 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835341 In think the sentence: I was waiting in a long crowded line https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835345 because how long was the line how crowed is the line

]]> 2015-11-06 17:24:07 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835345 I think that the sentence finally the race in front of the people in front of me was over. https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835357 because it doesn't make any sense to me.

]]> 2015-11-06 17:24:09 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835357 then the twins passed https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835378 I don't know who the twins are

]]> 2015-11-06 17:24:13 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835378 I think the sentence       I was waiting in a long crowded line, smoke was in the air                                                                         because the auther didn't say were he was. https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835391 2015-11-06 17:24:15 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835391 i think the athour should add more detail when he sais  fourth person ,number 5 and number 2 https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835537 because I don't know who number 5 is or who number 2 is.

]]> 2015-11-06 17:24:39 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835537 I think  the  athour  should https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835645 2015-11-06 17:24:58 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79835645 I think the sentence to-n-fro https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79836290 is confusing

]]> 2015-11-06 17:26:57 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79836290 Then the twins https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79836399 2015-11-06 17:27:16 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79836399 Who is number one? https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79836542 it tells nothing of who he is at all it just says number one

]]> 2015-11-06 17:27:41 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79836542 I don't know what the words mean https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79836550 Psh nuh uh

]]> 2015-11-06 17:27:42 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79836550 I think the sentence we started our engines slowly 3 2 1 go needs https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79836655 2015-11-06 17:28:05 UTC https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79836655 Ipassed the finish line https://padlet.com/agollatz/page2/wish/79836742 are you in the kart stil

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