OE Introductions - 7th by MeShaun Vaughn https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol Made with a lightning strike of genius en-us 2017-03-27 17:12:41 UTC 2017-04-17 16:04:12 UTC hello@padlet.com Madelyn Mauck - Clarify your meaning of the work as a whole for score https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162903594 In The Ice Storm, by Rick Moody, Wendy's manic behavior is developed through her desire to experiment sexually at such a young age, her need to to have a partner, and her refusal to be like her mother. Wendy experiments sexually with partners from both sexes, because in the early 70s,  promiscuous behavior was becoming more of a trend rather than a scandal. Wendy's need to have a partner is developed through the fact that she settles for Mike just because she wants some action. As the plot continues, it becomes evident that Elena is not very involved in Wendy's life and Wendy wishes more than anything to be nothing like her mother. Wendy accomplishes this by being extremely conversational and acting out impulsively through her sexual experiments. Wendy's manic behavior really only effects the reputation of herself and the reputations of the people involved. 

"just because she wants some action" -- keep your tone and language use formal

]]> 2017-03-27 17:35:54 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162903594 Isaac Olusina - 5 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162903672 In efforts to condemn the sinful life lived circa 1970, Rick Moody's Ice Storm depicts a 'typical' suburban family along with their respective lifestyles. While attempting to differ from the submissive values her mother, Elena holds; Wendy excecutes in many activities degrading to herself as well as the view of her respective family, demonstrating a rather substantial sense of manic behavior. 

"executes " is not the right word here...Her family is respectable? You may refer to the "activities" as depraved, deplorable; these adjectives work]]> 2017-03-27 17:36:08 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162903672 Kiana Moon - 7 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162903696 Time is an evolution that whisks throughout Emily Brontë's Wuthering Heights. Lockwood, an aspiring tenant, encounters the tragedies of the Heathcliff family past that has met their match with the belittling element. The head of Thurcross Grange, Heathcliff himself, is a barer of the most disasterous occurrences where his ill desired task to abandon his once love, Catherine Earnshaw, undergoes a manipulating period with her ghostly existence, that has haunted his remaining journey of life. Brontë establishes the epitome of a cursed realm where every future event is yet to be executed in the absence of time.

Wonderful development, Kiana.  Take a look at your final sentence.  It seems you are missing a word before the conjunction, "yet]]> 2017-03-27 17:36:13 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162903696 Mirela Dontu - Missing the meaning of the work as a whole (for score) -- also strengthen context...describe the family with an adjective, describe her interactions with an adjective (what kind of interactions?) https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162903771 In Rick Moody's The Ice Storm, Moody characterized Wendy's manic behavior through her distant relationship from her family and the way she interacts with others. The rapid change of social and cultural norms explains why Wendy's environment is subtly more open to adult hey and finding ones self. Her complex view of the world also gives way to her rubbing off on her friends. ]]> 2017-03-27 17:36:26 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162903771 Yasmine Rhodes - Missing the "meaning of the work as a whole" https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162903880 The approaching blizzard in Rick Moody's, The Ice Storm, based in the 70's sheds light on the Hood's, a family obsessed with sex and drugs. Benjamin Hood, the head of the dysfunctional family, has had multiple affairs with his neighbor, Janet Williams. Benjamin's on going act of adultery only further to sever his relationship with Elena, his wife, and his daughter Wendy.]]> 2017-03-27 17:36:44 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162903880 Jacqui Endozo 🐼 - 6 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904058 In Rick Moody's, The Ice Storm, Ben Hood is not contempt with his uneventful life. Ben takes the initiative to create change, and proceeds to have an affair with his neighbors wife, Janie Williams.The assimilation culture of the 70s in the Hood's hometown contribute to his manic behavior. Well aware of his actions and pretending not to care, Ben's unfaithfulness effects​ his household family, Elena and Wendy. Ben's wife, Elena questions what she did wrong in her marriage and then cause of Ben's unfaithfulness. Ben's daughter, Wendy looks up to her only role models in her life, her parents whose relationship is falling apart in front of her eyes.

"contempt" = content
You could clarify what you mean by "assimilation culture"]]> 2017-03-27 17:37:09 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904058 Jonah Genge - 8 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904071 In Rick Moody's, The Ice Storm, a family is dealing with the societal shift of sex and drugs that the 1970s lauched into effect. An experimental teenage girl named Wendy Hood, the main protagonist's daughter, is akin to a crash test dummy being thrown around by every influence that her family, friends, and hormones can possible conjure. Her romps between her, her neighbors, and her friends have shaken the trust that her family have granted her despite the Hoods as a whole each being guilty of one sin or another. Her drive comes from her defiance towards her mother and her desire to be accepted by virtually everyone else, so weed,alcohol, and sex is greatly explored with very little care for another's conserned opinions.

replace "another's" with "anyone else's" ]]> 2017-03-27 17:37:11 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904071 Tariq McAllister - incomplete https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904109 Within the pre modern novel, The Ice Storm, author Rick Moody crafts the lifestyles of a deconstructed family plagued with adultery and narcotic]]> 2017-03-27 17:37:17 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904109 Haley Gray ☺️- 7 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904138 The 1970's began the time of counterculture, a shift from traditional, conservative times to one of liberalism and the idea of 'anything goes'. Rick Moody's The Ice Storm embodies the free spirited society that became common in suburban life in the 1970's. The protagonist of this novel, Benjamin Hood, is a father and husband of a family of four. However, Ben Hood is portrayed to not be focused on the family he has, for he is focused on himself, demonstrating the individualistic culture that also began in the 1970's. Benjamin Hood is an adulterer. He has an affair with his neighbor Janey Williams. Ben Hood explains his affair by stating how it gives him a new breath of life because he is no longer satisfied or happy with the life he made for himself. He is numb to the effect his infidelity has on his family, having no outlandish reaction when his wife Elena exposes him for cheating. Ben Hood does not care that he has been caught because he knows he will not face condemnation for his actions, from his family nor society. Adultery and inexcusable acts have become acceptable and Benjamin Hood is just following the norm. Through Benjamin Hood, Rick Moody reveals how backwards 70's culture was and how some of those ideals have remained norms in present day.

"Benjamin Hood is portrayed to not be focused" -- rephrase. I combined a sentence for you "family, having no outlandish..."
Delete in present day and replace with "those ideals result in..."

]]> 2017-03-27 17:37:22 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904138 Nana Awere - 7 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904141 Rick Moody's "The Ice Storm" takes place in early 70's America, a period of major cultural and social shifts. Through predominantly following the Hood's, Rick Moody presents a family where each members emotional solace is contained through indulging in acts of promiscuity and the guilty pleasures of the world. Fornication throughout the novel assumes the role of the only stimuli to motivate any emotion within the members of the Hood family. Especially from Paul, the son of Ben and Elena Hood; his estrangement from his family and his peers while attending a boarding school for the privliged forces him to succumb to certain sexual urges through pitiful attempts to try to assuage his loneliness.

Avoid punctuating titles.  You offered strong context and detail for your chosen character. I would suggest including an example of the cultural and social shifts of the 70s, since it is not mentioned until nearly the end where you introduce Paul. And it is not only Paul's recklessness pertaining to sex that Paul uses to "assuage his lonliness" so I would leave this at "pitiful attempts to assauge his lonliness" to keep the door open for other behaviors. ]]> 2017-03-27 17:37:23 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904141 MarshyMarsh and the Funky Bunch - 8 - You lost control after "guidelines" your sentence lost fluency, but this is exceptional convergence of craft and commentary! https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904269 A typical suburb in the 70's experiences extreme climate and social changes in Rick Moody's The Ice Storm, and the combination of these two changes causes the majority of the characters to display manic behavior. Wendy, the daughter of Benjamin and Elena Hood, shows a plethora of manic traits, developed mostly due to her poor role models and lack of guidelines, have serious reprocussions for herself and everyone in her life., most notably young Mike Willams, who lost his life after trying to avoid Wendy in the snowstorm. Overall, Wendy's behavior serves as a symbol for the overall lifestyle of "normal" life in the 70's, making a clear statement about this kind of dreary and immoral living can affect even children, in most cases even more than the adults.]]> 2017-03-27 17:37:44 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904269 Renette Holmes🍫 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904306 Incomplete]]> 2017-03-27 17:37:50 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904306 Italia ☹️ - 6 - See feedback at the bottom https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904470 American Pyscho, a novel written by Bret Easton Ellis, is about a wealthy pyschopathic man named Bateman, who works on wall street, with no remorse or human empathy. The novel characterizes his narcissistic personality ,through the barbaric murders he commits if people he considers less than himself, while also illuminating how society empathizes for people even with obvious signs and triggers of toxic abnormalities. If Batemans friends could've better listened to the grotesque statements that he would often express , instead of ignoring them , Owen, the homeless man and his dog, the little boy at the zoo, the two prostitutes and the musician on the street would be alive. It's evident that Bateman was ditached from the norms that society encompasses , yet still, unfortunately time after time, Bateman is still gone unnoticed.

"If Bateman's friends..."--you can omit the detail, including WHO he murdered, from your introduction. Edit for conventions. You have a couple of missing and mispelled words.  ]]> 2017-03-27 17:38:15 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904470 Michael Hosein - 5 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904607 Time is interpreted in various ways, whether it be a restriction or a blessing. In Wuthering Heights, Emily Bronte utilizes characters such as Heathcliff who are driven by irresistible passion from lust, ambition, and even envy. The emphasis is seen on the desire to overcome the limitations presented by time. He yearns to escape the shackles inherent to life and finds that the only escape is death. Looking at Heathcliff, his longings can not be satisfied prior to death. From his arrival at Earnshaw's home as an orphan, he was seen as an evil inflicted upon the house. But with time, that began to alter into a restrained acceptance.

What "limitations"? What "shackles"? Need to strengthen context there, but more importantly, what is Bronte's message about time?]]> 2017-03-27 17:38:38 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162904607 Andres Branchet - 7 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162905164 In the peak of the sexual revolution of the 1970s, Rick Moody's The Ice Storm includes prominent satire acting as a medium of criticism, especially through the main character's behavior behind closed doors, his own imprudence keeping his comportment in check, and its sphere of influence. Benjamin Hood's desire for adultery and experimentation fueled by dissatisfaction with himself and his family through lack of fulfillment is within the sphere of Moody's criticism of oblivion towards dignity and respect towards others' commitment, and imprudence caught by imprudence by inadvertently exposing his affair with his neighbor and only feeling the dread and consequences when they begin to impact him directly through his children.

"...Moody's criticism of oblivion..."--too many "towards" and "others'" needs clarifying]]> 2017-03-27 17:40:05 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162905164 Naya Pearce - Update post by 4:45??? https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162906608
Often times I find myself gazing through the looking glass at my actual self. I am better than this. I am more, and I refuse to be constrained. My thoughts consume me and I, like Wendy, am finding myself
Will update post before 4:45
]]> 2017-03-27 17:43:58 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162906608 Cody Reid - Finish it... https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162908789 In Rick Moody's novel, The Ice Storm, ]]> 2017-03-27 17:50:59 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162908789 Kennedy Baker- 5 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162909482 Chronology is key to developing a proper understanding. In Emily Brontë's tragedy novel Wuthering Heights, Brontë deconstructs the chronological timeline within the story. The interwoven narrators from Lockwood reveal his own misunderstanding of the characters while Nelly Dean provides the accurate information from growing up with Heathcliff and Catherine. Within both narrators viewpoints, other characters point of views are also exposed. The complicated process of acquiring the correct information about the truth in the estate reflects the complicated process of being introduced to a group of people. Even though the group of friends all know each other, each person has their individualized point of view on the actual true events.

First sentence is unclear, needs rephrasing. Change the form of the word "tragedy"; it is not an adjective. Don't include too many characters in your opening because you will need to explain them using context from your novel.  "The complicated process..." is too wordy, imprecise references. ]]> 2017-03-27 17:53:16 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162909482 Ballin Colin - 6 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162910793 Evident even from the onset of Rick Moody's The Ice Storm, Benjamin Hood displays a spontaneous nature and several habits born of manic behavior due to the fact that he has never been able to achieve his personal goals through any conventional means. Because of his manic behavior and lack of success, Hood is quick to assimilate into his hometown's culture of blatant drug use and sexual debauchery at the expense of his familial relationships simply for the sake of alleviating his boredom with his own marriage and to distract himself from his jealousy felt towards his neighbors, who are all seemingly better off than him.]]> 2017-03-27 17:56:42 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162910793 Sydney Johnson https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162913081 As Pip goes through transformation from childhood to manhood, he experiences a cultural collision once entering London and he inserts himself into a class that he does not belong to, so that he may gain the affection of a girl who is above his social ranking.]]> 2017-03-27 18:02:46 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/fexsou125iol/wish/162913081