P4 EXIT TICKET: Sentence Fluency Padlet by Hussey, Lauren https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771 You'll revise a piece of text Ms. Hussey gives you for rhythm and other mechanical errors (spelling, grammar, punctuation). Make sure your name is with your post so that you can receive credit. en-us 2021-03-17 02:30:53 UTC 2021-04-11 21:03:45 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/270f.png Original Text --> Copy and paste this into your post and revise for rhythm and other mechanical errors (spelling, grammar, punctuation). laurenhussey https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1318691523 BANG it was so loud I screamed what was it I had no idea I ran downstairs but it was dark I tried to flick the switch but the power was out this was my house I knew it from memory but I was scared to wander beyond the where i felt safe suddenly something ran quickly by it made a crackling sound and it was then that I knew it was the same thing that same creature from  the last time suddenly i wasnt scared i was determined id get him this time if it was the last thing i did]]> 2021-03-17 02:31:49 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1318691523 Jeamy Lopez https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322097284 BANG, it was so loud I screamed "what was it!" I had no idea that I ran downstairs because it was so dark. I tried to flick the switch but the power was out. It was my house, I knew it like the palm of my hand but I was scared to wander beyond where i felt safe. Suddenly something ran quickly by, it made a crackling sound and it was then that I knew it was the same thing that same creature from  the last time. Suddenly i wasn't scared i was determined i'd get him this time if it was the last thing i did. I went after it and captured it but my heart was racing.]]> 2021-03-17 18:05:44 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322097284 Yajayra Paz https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322098732 BANG it was so loud that I screamed what was it. I had no idea so I ran downstairs but it was dark, I tried to flick the switch but the power was out this was my house I knew it from memory but I was frightened to wander beyond the where i felt safe suddenly something ran quickly by it made a crackling sound and it was then that I knew it was the same creature from the last time suddenly I was not scared I became determined id get him this time if it was the last thing I do]]> 2021-03-17 18:06:01 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322098732 Cesar Saravia https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322102746  BANG, it was so loud I screamed what was it! I had no idea, I ran downstairs but it was dark. I tried to flick the switch but the power was out. It was my house, I knew it from memory but I was scared to wander beyond the where I felt safe. Suddenly something ran quickly by it made a crackling sound and it was then that I knew it was the same thing that same creature from the last time suddenly i wasnt scared i was determined i did get him this time if it was the last thing I did ]]> 2021-03-17 18:06:51 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322102746 Original Text --> Copy and paste this into your post and revise for rhythm and other mechanical errors (spelling, grammar, punctuation). ngomez0188 https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322106768 BANG! it was so loud. I screamed. I had no idea what was it. I ran downstairs but it was dark, but I tried to flick the switch but the power was out. I know my house as the palm of my hand, but I was scared to wander beyond it. i felt safe suddenly at one point, but something ran quickly by and it made a crackling sound, and it was then that I knew it was the same thing and the same creature from  the last time. suddenly i wasnt scared, i was determined!, id get him this time if it was the last thing i did]]> 2021-03-17 18:07:32 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322106768 Edgardo vilche evilchea0001 https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322109386 BANG! it was so loud. I screamed. I had no idea. what was it. I ran downstairs but it was dark. I tried to flick the switch but the power was out this was my house. I knew it from memory but I was scared to wander beyond the where I felt safe suddenly something ran quickly by it made a crackling sound and it was then that I knew it was the same thing that same creature from  the last time suddenly I wasn't scared I was determined it. get him this time if it was the last thing I did]]> 2021-03-17 18:08:02 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322109386 Jorge Alburez jalburez0003 https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322114109 BANG! It was so loud, I screamed what was it I had no idea, I ran downstairs but it was dark I tried to flick the switch but the power was out this was my house. I knew it from memory but I was scared to wander beyond the where I felt safe suddenly something ran quickly by it made a crackling sound and it was then that I knew it was the same thing that same creature from  the last time suddenly 
I wasn't scared I was determined i'd get him this time if it was the last thing I did.]]> 2021-03-17 18:08:58 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322114109 Ashley Castillo https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322116062 BANG! it was so loud. I screamed. What was it I ? had no idea. I ran downstairs but it was dark and I tried to flick the switch but the power was out. This was my house I knew it from memory but I was scared to wander beyond where i felt safe but suddenly something ran quickly by it made a crackling sound and it was then that I knew it was the same thing that same creature from the last time. Suddenly i wasn't scared, i was determined i'd get him this time if it was the last thing i did. ]]> 2021-03-17 18:09:22 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322116062 Anferni Jones AnfernJones https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322117883 BANG! It was so loud that I screamed, what was it. I had no idea so I ran downstairs but it was dark, I tried to flick the switch but the power was out this was my house, I knew it from memory but I was scared to wander beyond the where I felt safe suddenly something ran quickly by it made a crackling sound and it was then that I knew it was the same thing that same creature from  the last time suddenly I wasn't scared I was determined id get him this time if it was the last thing i did]]> 2021-03-17 18:09:46 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322117883 jmcguire0003 https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322127416 BANG, it was so loud I screamed. ¨What was it¨ I had no idea I ran downstairs but it was dark. I tried to flick the switch but the power was out this was my house I knew it from memory but I was scared to wander beyond the where i felt safe suddenly something ran quickly by it made a crackling sound and it was then that I knew it was the same thing that same creature from  the last time suddenly i wasn´t scared i was determined id get him this time if it was the last thing i did

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BANG!, it was so loud I screamed ,what was it. I had no idea, i ran downstairs but it was dark, i tried to flick the switch but the power was out. This was my house so  I knew it from memory. I was scared to wonder beyond where i felt safe. suddenly something ran quickly , it made a crackling sound and it was then that I knew it was the same creature from the last time. suddenly i wasnt scared,  i was determined id get him this time if it was the last thing i do.


]]> 2021-03-17 18:12:24 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322130796 BANG it was so loud I screamed! What was it? I had no idea i ran downstairs it was dark. I tried to flick the switch but the power was out, this was my house i knew it from memory. I was scared to wonder beyond where i felt safe but SUDDENLY something ran QUICKLY by ! It made a "CRACKLING" sound and it was then that i knew. It was the same creature from the last time, suddenly i wasn't scared i was determined i'd get him this time if it was the last thing i did ! https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322136882 2021-03-17 18:13:37 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1322136882 mmarquez0074 https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1323529369 BANG! It was so loud I screamed "what is it" I had no idea. I ran downstairs but, it was dark, I tried to flick the switch but the power was out. This was my house I knew from memory but, I was scared to wander beyond. I felt safe, suddenly something quickly ran by, it made a crackling sound and it was then that I knew it was that same creature from the last time. Suddenly I wasn't scared I was determined I'd get him this time if it was the last thing I did.]]> 2021-03-18 02:24:28 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1323529369 Brandon Hernández bhernande0480 https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1328307059 BANG! It was so loud that I screamed "what was it"? I had no idea I ran downstairs but it was dark. I tried to flick the switch but the power was out. This was my house, I knew it from memory but I was scared to wander beyond the where i felt safe. Suddenly something ran quickly by it made a "crackling" sound and it was then that I knew it was the same creature from  the last time. Suddenly i wasn't scared i was determined that I'd get him this time if it was the last thing i did.]]> 2021-03-19 02:12:23 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1328307059 Helizabet Vasquez hvasquez0023 https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1404935960 BANG!!! it was so loud I screamed "what was it?" I had no idea I ran downstairs but it was dark. I tried to flick the switch but the power was out. This was my house I knew it from memory but I was scared to wander beyond the where i felt safe. Suddenly something ran quickly by it made a crackling sound and it was then that I knew it was the same creature from the last time. Suddenly I wasn't scared I was determined id get him this time if it was the last thing i did.]]> 2021-04-11 20:57:35 UTC https://padlet.com/laurenhussey/f8kgc8gpcrauy771/wish/1404935960