9th: Reading Multi-Scene Mentor Texts as Writers by Amy Wagner https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk For each of the three mentor texts you read, add your STRONGEST reading as writers notes under the title below. Next, respond to the ideas of TWO other students. en-us 2022-09-19 15:00:49 UTC 2025-10-20 04:28:52 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/270d.png used personification for "lungs refused to listen." It slowed down the story and it helps the reader feel how the character is feeling, they are not in control of their body and breaths. https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2305338479 2022-09-20 16:45:09 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2305338479 "I'm piloting the beast of a thing" is a metaphor because the "thing" ,which is a plane, is not a beast but comparing the two without using like or as. This slows down the story and lets the reader understand that this person is flying a huge plane and is still slightly in aw of it. https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2305344675 2022-09-20 16:48:39 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2305344675 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2305351868 Using metaphors which add to the tenseness of the story. They also add a lot of characterization on how the main character changes. ]]> 2022-09-20 16:52:38 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2305351868 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2305353746 Used descriptive sentences to show the different magical creatures. There is also a fed-up tone from the main character at the end when they decide to run away.]]> 2022-09-20 16:53:36 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2305353746 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2306034839 The author used craft moves like sensory details for sight and sound. They also used the line ¨...All he could see behind his eyelids was the one thing that stuck with him forever. Red.¨ I think this affects the reader by giving them an idea of how the events the character witnessed stuck with them for such a long time. ]]> 2022-09-21 02:50:27 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2306034839 Mission Blackhawk https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2307276235 “ALPHA-10 clear for takeoff depart straight out.” This line tells me that the author is using something what an ATC (Air Traffic Control) Tower would say to a plane at the airport when it's ready for takeoff.]]> 2022-09-21 17:12:55 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2307276235 Showing not Telling https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2307280664 I noticed a lot of sensory details and they were showing and not telling. It really did feel like I was in the story.]]> 2022-09-21 17:15:44 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2307280664 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2307310781 I noticed that the writer used a lot of precise words, dialogue, flashbacks, metaphors, etc.]]> 2022-09-21 17:33:44 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2307310781 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309064867 Very descriptive and nice dialogue]]> 2022-09-22 16:04:26 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309064867 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309070593 There was a lot of vivid imagery that clearly set the scene and portrayed the author's vision of the story.]]> 2022-09-22 16:07:44 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309070593 The story uses metaphors to describe the different scenes and sensory details. https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309071290 2022-09-22 16:08:08 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309071290 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309071656 Effectively transitions from the battle, to being in a different realm in the story.]]> 2022-09-22 16:08:22 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309071656 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309072120 I noticed that there were a lot of sensory details in this story. When the author uses the line,"The strong chemical smell mixed with the intoxicating scent of a metallic substance," it basically helps you smell the scene.]]> 2022-09-22 16:08:39 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309072120 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309078356 The writer used Internal Dialogue and Dialogue to develop the characters. The author did this to compare what was going on in the characters mind and what was being transpired out loud between the characters. ¨It's not something incredibly important,"' I said, ten different arguments already popping up in my head"(Runaway). This slows down the pacing of the story.]]> 2022-09-22 16:12:24 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309078356 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309081459 The writer used sensory details and descriptive language. The author did this to set the setting and image of the scene in the readers mind. "Crashes and broken glass... the sound of furniture being knocked over became audible"(Little Red). This slows down the pacing of the story.]]> 2022-09-22 16:14:26 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309081459 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309102626 The last time I saw you - Metaphor, inside dialogue. The writer had a lot of dialogue going on in the characters' head and it made the story really good. For example: “I tuned the rest out. Still numb”. She is explaining how she is feeling and ignoring everything else. She also used metaphors many times in the story too. “Then everything hit me like a tidal wave.” This shows that she was numb and in shock but just now everything hit her and her shock went away. These two craft moves helped the story in many ways and overall I enjoyed the story.


]]> 2022-09-22 16:27:34 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309102626 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309113023 The story switches from an ominous, almost scary perspective into a kind and welcoming perspective, and I think it made the story even better and even more eerie, by making it seem like something is being hidden while it is just out of reach.]]> 2022-09-22 16:33:52 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309113023 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309122266 At the start of the story it shows how the charter is nervous for his big game and at the end of the story he is happy after winning. ]]> 2022-09-22 16:39:05 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309122266 Sensory Details https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309125078 This story was especially great and focused on describing the setting with sensory details, which made the story so interesting and fantasy-based.]]> 2022-09-22 16:40:42 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309125078 Dialogue https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309127882 The story took a very unexpected turn with just a line of dialogue, it made the story really thrilling because of how suddenly and quickly everything went by.]]> 2022-09-22 16:42:20 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309127882 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309128024 This story uses effective transitions that help portray the characters well. Also internal dialogue is used very effectively making the story more interesting ]]> 2022-09-22 16:42:26 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309128024 the story started off by creating tension and then took an unexpected turn by the end of the story https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309131046 2022-09-22 16:44:02 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309131046 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309152053 The author uses curricular lead and ending to , in my opinion tie up loose ends and show the stress the character must endure.]]> 2022-09-22 16:57:10 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309152053 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309166734 I really felt extra empathetic in this story because I had a family member endure breast cancer as well. This made me feel very sad for the character but that's what the author was going for with all their metaphors and showing how upset and most of all tired the character was.]]> 2022-09-22 17:05:59 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2309166734 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2310788488 dialogue is a craft move used to effectively speed up the story and thicken the plot. this gets the audience anticipating more and, overall, creates a newer depth to the characters and story.]]> 2022-09-23 16:34:25 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2310788488 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2310792775 "Neither of them got a wink of sleep, for they feared the worst to come for their first day back. Abigail and Audrey both had the same first period, 11th grade English." The author effectively uses this transition to zoom past the unimportant details to quickly get to more of the plot.]]> 2022-09-23 16:37:31 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2310792775 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2310814188 Part A: The Wanmin Restaurant: uses vivid precise words, describes what happens in a scene (slows). The writer uses vivid precise language to help the reader be able to have a better visual on what is happening in the story. Describing what is happening in the scene helps make the story longer and more interesting, it also zooms in on a moment.
Part B: “After a couple minutes of searching the same box he stood up and looked at curious Xiangling.” In this sentence, the author zooms past a span of minutes to speed up the story.
]]> 2022-09-23 16:52:34 UTC https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2310814188 https://padlet.com/awagner138/f7s4xed9sho16nuk/wish/2310815731 Part A: The Last Time I See You: uses vivid precise words, describes what happens in a scene (slows). The writer also includes internal dialogue to slow down the pacing of the story. The author has used this technique to help the reader be able to feel empathy for the narrator and to be more engaged in the story.
Part B: “Months passed, filled with nothing but talk of the future. Without even realizing it, I started to become happier. Talking about these things like they were actually going to happen made me forget that they most likely weren’t.” This sentence shows that the author is zooming past a span of months to speed up the story.


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