Video Response by https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy What is your main takeaway from the videos? en-us 2021-10-26 11:51:04 UTC 2026-01-04 10:46:10 UTC hello@padlet.com Takeaway https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844682596 My main takeaway is to make sure to actually describe what I’m saying and to be detailed as opposed to vague ]]> 2021-10-26 11:53:15 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844682596 Hayden Sims https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844682930 Writing one good, complete, thorough paragraph is more important than filling the paper with ideas. ]]> 2021-10-26 11:53:25 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844682930 ANDJELA https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844683912 1 piece of evidence and 2 strong reasoning!!!!!!]]> 2021-10-26 11:53:55 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844683912 https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844684404 Be very in depth and clear about your paragraphs to show the reader you know whats going on Noah French]]> 2021-10-26 11:54:09 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844684404 Wes https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844688493 Write under the assumption that the person reading your essay has read the text. Respond to the prompt and connect the reading to the prompt.]]> 2021-10-26 11:56:08 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844688493 Enis Ljikovic https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844800836 Your evidence and commentary must tie back to the thesis. Make sure that commentary is not general and specific to the piece of evidence it is talking about ]]> 2021-10-26 12:43:39 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844800836 roxy https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844806598 My main takeaway was to support all evidence with well developed ideas and commentary. Make sure you have a clear idea of the rhetorical situation and that it is shown with your explanation.]]> 2021-10-26 12:45:48 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844806598 Jackie https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844824089 avoid ambiguous wording in order to make stronger sentences. avoid using the word “pathos” in order to make the essay more sophisticated ]]> 2021-10-26 12:51:42 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844824089 Alex Morrow https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844824734 I learned that the essay does not have to be perfect to get a good score. It should only be a rough draft]]> 2021-10-26 12:51:52 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844824734 Austin https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844834823 I learned that I need to avoid long quotes and too much summary, have transitions between paragraphs, try to not get repetitive when talking about the author's purpose, try to combine appeals into one paragraph, and to avoid words such as "uses," "utilizes," or "employs."]]> 2021-10-26 12:55:13 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844834823 Lucas wowzersnozzer https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844868707 I learned that the essay doesn't have to be perfect. You can still get a 6.]]> 2021-10-26 13:05:50 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844868707 Briana Urbina https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844906646 I learned that you don't need to have a lot of evidence because your commentary is more important. Your commentary should be specific and logical. The essay doesn't have to be perfect, but it should have strong sentences and at least 1 very well written paragraph. ]]> 2021-10-26 13:16:50 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844906646 Allyson Horst https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844977499 My key takeaway from the video is that there should be a 2:1 ratio of evidence to commentary. More specifically, there should be 2 sentences of commentary for a single piece of evidence. Also mentioned in the video was the purpose of commentary which is to analyze evidence and how it relates to the rhetorical situation. Something else I took away from the video, is to not use diction without saying the specific use of it.  ]]> 2021-10-26 13:36:11 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1844977499 Meghan Wilbrett https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845065608 Avoid repetitive and boring words in commentary to make your writing more engaging and consistent.]]> 2021-10-26 13:58:56 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845065608 Ian Roy ianroy0205 https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845360467 there is not a specific number of paragraphs, avoid fancy terms, apply relevant knowledge, writers use repetition to emphasize their message,]]> 2021-10-26 15:18:08 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845360467 Mario Medina https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845441619 My main takeaway from the videos is that to get a good or passing score on the rhetorical analysis essay, your commentary should explain you evidence which should be connected to the thesis. To do this your commentary should work with your evidence, you should avoid long quote or too much summary, make an "even" analysis by layering evidence and commentary, and finally create effective transitions between paragraphs. With this knowledge you should be able to pass the rhetorical analysis essay.]]> 2021-10-26 15:39:42 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845441619 Keira Kruk https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845629979 What I took away most was that when commenting on a piece of evidence there should be a 1:2 ration of evidence to comments and there should be little to no summarizing.]]> 2021-10-26 16:35:10 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845629979 Nicole Dzurnak https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845673510 My main takeaway from the video was that from the emphasis on commentary, quality of essays can get you higher points than if you finish the essay completely with mediocre paragraphs. Another thing that I took from the video was that strong sentences = strong paragraphs = strong essays, and to that, I think I see the process of making essays a bit more clearer.]]> 2021-10-26 16:49:18 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845673510 Giulia Nelson-period 6 https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845723874 Video Notes

Evidence- specific reference to text
Commentary- analysis of that evidence
Rhetorical Situation- writer, audience, occasion, message
Line of Reasoning- logical argument/expression of ides.

Evidence + Commentary work together to prove thesis(1:2 ratio).
Avoid using long quotes/too much summary.
Layer evidence and commentary.
Create effective transitions within and between paragraphs to build line of reasoning.

4-provide well developed commentary that consistently and explicitly explains the evidence and the thesis.

Stay grounded in the prompt, don't rush through that prompt.
Transliterate in order to understand the passage before you interpret the passage.
Don't rush your ideas.

TIP: Focus on correcting ambiguous wording at the sentence level. Strong sentences make strong paragraphs, and strong paragraphs, make strong essays.

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Ask what the writer is "doing."
Avoid "fancy" terms or Latins names.
Don't "project" onto passage.
Avoid "uses," "utilizes," and "employs."

Examine the language/diction.
Make sure to specify the type of diction used and the tone it creates.
Work the appeals into the analysis to strengthen analysis of another choice.]]> 2021-10-26 17:05:42 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845723874 Angela Yu 6 https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845727740 - Evidence- specific reference to text.
- Commentary- analysis of the evidence and how it relates to the rhetorical situation.
- Rhetorical situation- writer, audience, context, purpose, message, etc.
Line of reasoning- a logical argument.

TIPS:
- Commentary should explain evidence.
- Evidence and commentary should work together to support thesis.
- Avoid long quotes or too much evidence.
- Layers of evidence and commentary within a body paragraph to balance it. Commentary should make up a good part of paragraph.
- Effective transitions to build your line of reasoning.
- Good commentary is well developed and consistently explains relationship between evidence and thesis.
- Don't be repetitive/limited with ideas and commentary.
- Figure out what the writer is saying first, then figure out what they are doing.
- Focus on removing ambiguous wording.
- Use "evoke.../generate...create..." instead of "appeal to...".
- Don't say "ethos, pathos logos". Instead, include them subtly. 

RHETORICAL/WORD CHOICES:
- What is the writer doing?
- Avoid fancy words for rhetoric.
- Explain how choices work together.
- If you can't name the choice, just describe it.
   - Consider diction and tone to convey a message.
- Diction:
   - How would you describe or classify the language used?
   - What tone does it create?
   - What does the tone suggest about the author's attitude towards the subject?
   - Is there a shift in tone? What does it shift to and from?
- Appeals can be incorporated into other rhetoric choices.
- Logos:
   -"Logically conveys"
   - Why is the author using logic?
- Pathos:
   - Why does the writer use emotion?
   - Effect of the emotion
- Repetition emphasizes a point, creates rhythm, or creates cohesion.
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]]> 2021-10-26 17:06:59 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845727740 Meg Brooks https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845801739 I took a lot of notes, but the thing I figure will be most helpful to me when writing was that your evidence and commentary should be at a 1:2 ratio.]]> 2021-10-26 17:31:44 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845801739 Tina Tran https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845817806 keys items
examine the audience: what are you trying to do with the audience ? what are the audience looking for?
Examine the context: context is both inside the prompt and the passage. Make sure you really understand what is going on in the passage.
Exigent: The occasion when the speaker speaks or the writer writes is important. 
Making connections

]]> 2021-10-26 17:37:11 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845817806 Zach Sullivan P7 https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845868386 -Commentary- the analysis or interpretation of the text, including the choices and devices the author made/used
-In many cases, there is more commentary then evidence...hence it is a rhetorical analysis essay. Not informational or argumentative
-Purpose, message, choices, etc
-Very precise verbs (conveys, demonstrates, depicts, exemplifies)  to convey the ideas to the readers
-More analysis is going to boost a score on the AP test
-One big example of how to use commentary is talking about why the author used a specific phrase and what devices they used the best
-Do not use things that group everybody into a category...this is not specific enough and will hurt the flow and credibility of the analysis essay
-remember the message that the original writer is using
-as long as the analysis is good, then only 2 body paragraphs are sufficient
-students need to ask themselves...what is the writer doing?
-Talk about how the tone can change or is kept the same to follow the author's narrative
-Do not separate ethos, logos, pathos...and incorporate them in other choices instead ]]> 2021-10-26 17:55:01 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845868386 Rocco LaTour latourrocco https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845869879 Evidence- specific reference to text
Commentary- analysis of the evidence and how it relates to the rhetorical situation
Rhetorical situation- writer, audience, occasion, purpose, message
Line of Reasoning- logical argument of ideas

Tips:
-Helpful verbs instead of "use" or "say"
-Analysis is the most important part about the essay and will boost the exam score
-Evidence and Commentary work together to prove thesis.
Avoid using long quotes
-Be specific in evidence
- Explain the reason or purpose of the author
- Be specific with rhetorical devices such as diction

]]> 2021-10-26 17:55:36 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845869879 Fred Terezi https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845947068 -Commentary: analysis of the evidence and how it relates to the rhetorical situation  
-Commentary should explain your evidence and work with the evidence to prove your thesis 
-Create effective transitions within and between paragraphs to build your line of reasoning  
-Layer evidence and commentary to create an even analysis  
-To earn full points on commentary a student must provide a well-developed commentary that consistently and explicitly explains the relationship between the evidence and the thesis 
- Ask yourself, "Why is it significant?"  
-4 out of 4 will examine relationship between choices, more commentary that is not repetitive than evidence 
-Don't say use pathos, say evokes an emotional appeal  
]]> 2021-10-26 18:24:35 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1845947068 Abigail Kozlow period 2 https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846225740 evidence and commentary 
evidence- specific reference from the text
commentary- the reader's interpretation of the rhetorical situation; analysis of evidence
rhetorical situation- writer, audience, context, exigence, purpose, message/argument
Tips:
Commentary should explain evidence
The writer should have more commentary than evidence
Ratio: 1:2 (1 piece of evidence to 2 pieces of commentary)
Avoid long quotes or a long summary
Layer evidence and commentary to create an even analysis 
Commentary is Key:
provide well-developed commentary that consistently and explicitly explains the relationship between the evidence and thesis
tip: strong sentences make strong paragraph make strong essays 

Rhetorical Strategies/Devices/Choices
Which ones do you really need to know??
Convey the writers' message
Achieve the writers' purpose
Develop the writers' argument]]> 2021-10-26 20:32:37 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846225740 Mason Martinez https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846327348 Do: Explain Evidence, refer to the text, use well developed commentary, explain choices

Do not: Restate what was stated in the text, just rely on Ethos, Pathos, and Logos, and dont repeat yourself ]]> 2021-10-26 21:30:07 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846327348 Anselle anselleaikin https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846354825 - Commentary needs to explain your evidence
- Evidence and commentary need to work together to prove thesis
- Explain the relationship between evidence and thesis
- Make sure you understand what is being read before your try to analyze the text
- 2:1 ratio of one piece of evidence and 2 strong reasonings behind it that connect evidence to thesis.
- Say specific use of diction not just that it was there]]> 2021-10-26 21:48:35 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846354825 Evelyn Mendez https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846372732 Reminder: Strong sentences make strong paragraphs, strong paragraphs make a strong essay.

-More does not equal better. Ex) more paragraphs or more rhetorical devides does not equal a better score
*when choosing types of rhetorical choices/devices ask yourself “What is the writer doing with that device or how is he/she using it?”

Commentary: 
-avoid repetitive info or limited info by using the same ideas about the rhetorical info.
-do not make an argument that is unconvincing and not supported by the passage.
- have specific evidence with well explained commentary.

Score 3
-student has uniform evidence, focusing on specific words or details to help build author’s argument
-student develops insight and developed analysis, but has some inaccuracies.

]]> 2021-10-26 22:01:00 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846372732 https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846544725 My main takeaway from these two videos is to be specific when I am writing and if I am unable to think of the name of the diction used I should describe the diction. ]]> 2021-10-27 00:04:03 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846544725 Zoe https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846615956 I took note of the advice that said not to go on a scavenger hunt looking for a specific rhetorical device, but instead read the passage and use the ones you find from there. I think if you were to force a rhetorical device that does not fit as well, your essay may seem weaker. I also thought the whole commentary, evidence, and thesis connection seems cool, and I want to dig deeper into that.]]> 2021-10-27 00:37:30 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846615956 Joaquin Vicuna https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846672357 - Have a 1:2 ratio for evidence:commentary 
- Don't rely only on ethos, pathos, or logos.
- Don't need a specific number of paragraphs, take quality over quantity
-Avoid long quotes, evidence shouldn't take up most of your paragraphs. 
-Evidence and commentary should work together to support the thesis. 
- line of reasoning: logical argument/progression of ideas.


]]> 2021-10-27 00:59:22 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846672357 Rett Kelley (p2) https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846849962 -Have a 1:2 ratio between evidence and commentary
- Quality over quantity, a specific number of paragraphs isn't required.
-Don't use run on quotes, be concise.
- If you can't think of rhetorical devices, use tone and diction to focus on.
-Make sure you understand the passage before you try to analyze the text.
-Ask yourself, "Why is it significant?"
-Make sure to utilize quality transition words.
-Layer evidence and commentary to create an even analysis.

]]> 2021-10-27 02:09:19 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846849962 Mollie Powell p2 https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846894160 One of my main takeaways from the videos today was that your commentary should match the rest of your essay. It has to match your evidence and your evidence has to match your these. If these do not match up then your essay will not make any sense. I also learned that you do not need to talk about fancy rhetorical devices, just talk about the ones you know the most about.]]> 2021-10-27 02:27:32 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846894160 Reid Schwartz https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846943938 One main takeaway is to piece the essay paragraph by paragraph, because that way you can attack the rubric more strategically and achieve easier points without distracting yourself or worrying about weaker points. When you piece it like this, and are sure that you have just one strong paragraph, the rest of the essay will follow from the foundation you’ve built, and this way even if the rest of the essay is poor, you have guaranteed yourself some points just from the foundation. ]]> 2021-10-27 02:47:40 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1846943938 Jenaya https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1848063270 My main takeaway from the video was to use sufficient evidence. To provide well-developed commentary that explains the correlation between the thesis and evidence. To write one very good paragraph, and that the amount of paragraphs written does not matter. And to always double check your writing. ]]> 2021-10-27 12:49:34 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1848063270 Luciana Benfenati Lucianabenfenati https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1864330140 My takeaway from the videos is that I should make sure that I am using enough evidence in my essay and to be specific in my writing]]> 2021-11-03 11:35:01 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1864330140 Annika (absent) https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1869803170 One of my main takeaways from the videos is to make sure to use strong and sufficient evidence in my essay, and to not get caught up on the number of paragraphs in your essay. Since there is not a specific amount of paragraphs needed for the essay, you should focus on quality over quantity. Do not over elaborate with minor details and things that are off topic. This will negatively affect the strength of your essay. ]]> 2021-11-05 12:24:33 UTC https://padlet.com/waltoa/f72id9kl28sdr0uy/wish/1869803170