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         <title>Original Fact No. 1 (for Group 2)</title>
         <author>MLEYoda</author>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div><strong><mark>1.They did the exact same thing to the previous maid</mark></strong><br><br></div><div>Before we begin, we have to ask this burning question: <mark>how did they manage to get another maid when the previous domestic helper complained about not having enough food and rest</mark>?<br><br></div><div>This fact was uncovered from the testimony of maid agent Toh Ah Choon as he testified yesterday (16 Dec).<br><br></div><div>Since the agency was already in the know about the first maid abuse case, why did they still allow the <mark>unrepentant pair</mark> to inflict <mark>suffering </mark>in another human being? Secondly, <mark>why didn’t the agency do a house visit after losing contact with the maid for a total of 18 months</mark>?<br><br></div><div>For covering their rear, the award of #notmybusiness goes to…<br><br></div><div><br></div><div><br></div>]]></description>
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         <title>Original Fact No. 4 and Closing (for Group 4)</title>
         <author>MLEYoda</author>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div><strong>4. The ex-employers have 3 children.</strong><del><br></del><br></div><div>On a human to human level, we would expect the children of the accused to stop their parents from inflicting such harm on their maid.<br><br></div><div><mark>Or were they also mistreated? Maybe not.</mark><mark><del><br></del></mark><br></div><div>According to Gawidan, on their trip to Hong Kong, she had to eat instant noodles and bread, while the couple and their three kids ordered hotel meals for dinner.<br><br></div><div>They should testify on how<mark> it feels like to see someone nearly starve to death right in front of their eyes.</mark><br><br><em>The other side of the story</em><br><br></div><div>The accused have responded and are <mark>starting to make excuses for their actions.</mark><br><br></div><div>The trial would enter its second tranche on 30 Dec.</div>]]></description>
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         <title>Group 2&#39;s Rewritten Fact No. 1</title>
         <author>MLEYoda</author>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div>[1. <em>The previous maid testified a similar experience</em><br><br>Before we begin, we have to ask this burning question: <em>why were the previous allegations not reviewed - allowing for a similar situation to possibly reoccur.</em><br><br>The fact was uncovered from the testimony of maid agent Toh An Choon as he testified yesterday (16 Dec).<br><br>Since the agency was already in the know about the first maid abuse case, why did they still allow the <em>couple</em> to inflict <em>alleged suffering</em> in another human being? Secondly, why why was there no follow-up with the helper after losing contact with the maid for a total of 18 months?<br><br></div><div>For covering their rear, the award of #notmybusiness goes to…</div><div><br>]<br><br><em>[ The previous maid testified a similar experience - we do not know if they did the EXACT same thing<br>]</em><br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <title>Group 1&#39;s Rewritten Intro</title>
         <author>MLEYoda</author>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div>Here’s what the Mainstream Media didn’t highlight about the <mark>alleged </mark>maid starvation incident. Most people’s hearts have gone out to the maid after hearing <mark>her story</mark>.<br><br></div><div>For the uninitiated, a couple <mark>allegedly deprived</mark> her of food and did not allow her to speak to anyone. The trial has been going on since 14 Dec.<br><br></div><div>Thelma Oyasan Gawidan, the victim of this maid abuse case was <mark>allegedly given only bread and instant noodles twice a day</mark>, throughout her employment, causing her weight to plummet from 49kg to 29kg. The domestic worker claimed that her employers observed her round the clock and she only managed to <mark>leave</mark> when they left her alone to clean the area outside their Orchard Road condominium.<br><br></div><div>With the help of a fellow Filipina, Gawidan managed to get to a shelter run by the Humanitarian Organisation for Migration Economics (Home).<br><br></div><div><mark>Her employers</mark>, Lim Choon Hong and his wife Chong Sui Foon, both 47, have claimed trial for one offence under the Employment of Foreign Manpower Act — which is punishable by up to 12 months in jail and/or a $10 000 fine.<br><br></div><div>MustShareNews also found out 10 things that the couple has allegedly done.<br><br></div><ul><li><em>We included the word allegedly so as to not objectively blame the couple stated&nbsp;</em></li><li><em>We removed the emotive words used to describe Gawidan's experience and replaced them with vague adjectives instead</em></li></ul>]]></description>
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         <title>Group 4&#39;s Rewritten Fact No. 4 and Closing</title>
         <author>MLEYoda</author>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div>On a human to human level, we would expect the children of the accused to stop their parents from inflicting such harm on their maid.<br><br><mark>But we have to consider how it may also be intimidating for the children to stand up against their parents.</mark><br><br>According to Gawidan, on their trip to Hong Kong, she had to eat instant noodles and bread, while the couple and their three kids ordered hotel meals for dinner.<br><br><mark>It would be best if the children could share their perspectives of the situation.</mark><br><br>The other side of the story<br><br>The accused have responded and are <mark>defending themselves in court.</mark><br><br>The trial would enter its second tranche on 30 Dec.<br><br><br><em>More objective and balanced, with no suggestive terms.</em><br><br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <title>Group 3&#39;s Rewritten Fact No. 5</title>
         <author>MLEYoda</author>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div>[<mark>Okay, this might be an exaggeration.</mark><br><br>However, if she was unable to escape until recently, it is can be justified. <mark>Doesn't their behaviour seem extreme?</mark><br><br>Firstly, the<mark> </mark>couple kept their domestic worker captive and did not let her out. Secondly, they kept watch on her most of the time — even when she was taking a shower at the<em> public toilet</em> in their condo<em>.</em> Further, they gave her only bread and instant noodles. Lastly, they kept her in the storeroom and cut off her contact with the rest of the world by taking away her phone and forbidding her to talk to anybody.</div><div><br></div><div>Gawidan said:<br><br></div><blockquote>I had no communication to my family, and I hadn’t sent any money — as if I just disappeared from them.<em><br></em><br></blockquote><div><mark>This seems to be a case of ill-treatment.</mark>]<br><br><em>[Because in the original article, they are insinuating that the defendant kidnapped the domestic worker, which is false, as she was hired not kidnapped.<br><br>The "what does this reminds you of..." also insinuates that the defendants are kidnappers, which we are not able to prove. Hence, we edited that portion.<br><br>We removed the word "errant" as it is unnecessary.<br><br>In the end, we removed the word "kidnap" because similarly, we cannot accuse them of being kidnappers.]</em><br><strong><br></strong><br></div>]]></description>
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         <title>Original Fact No. 5 (for Group 3)</title>
         <author>MLEYoda</author>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div><strong>5. The maid claimed that her employers watched her every move</strong><br><br></div><div><mark>Okay, this might be an overstatement.</mark><br><br></div><div>However, if she was unable to escape until recently, it is partially justified. <mark>Anyway, what does this remind you of?</mark> <mark>Doesn’t their behaviour appear to be that of kidnappers?</mark><br><br>Firstly, the <mark>errant </mark>couple kept their domestic worker captive and did not let her out. Secondly, they kept watch on her most of the time — even when she was taking a shower at the<em> public toilet</em> in their condo<em>.</em> Further, they gave her only bread and instant noodles. Lastly, they kept her in the storeroom and cut off her contact with the rest of the world by taking away her phone and forbidding her to talk to anybody.</div><div><br></div><div>Gawidan said:<br><br></div><blockquote>I had no communication to my family, and I hadn’t sent any money — as if I just disappeared from them.<em><br></em><br></blockquote><div><mark>This appears to be a classic case of kidnap</mark>.<br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <title>Original Intro (for Group 1)</title>
         <author>MLEYoda</author>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div><br>Here's what the Mainstream Media didn't highlight about the maid starvation incident</div><div>Most people's hearts have gone out to the maid after hearing her tragic abuse story.<br><br></div><div>For the uninitiated, a couple <mark>starved</mark> their maid, deprived her of food and did not allow her to speak to anyone. The trial has been going on since 14 Dec.<br><br></div><div>Thelma Oyasan Gawidan, the victim of this maid abuse case survived on bread and instant noodles throughout her <mark>torture period employment</mark>, causing her weight to plummet from 49kg to 29kg. The domestic worker claimed that her employers kept surveillance of her round the clock and she only managed to escape when they left her alone to clean the area outside their Orchard Road condominium.&nbsp;<br><br></div><div>With the help of a fellow Filipina, Gawidan managed to get to a shelter run by the Humanitarian Organisation for Migration Economics (Home).<br><br></div><div>Her <mark>tormentors</mark>, Lim Choon Hong and his wife Chong Sui Foon, both 47, have claimed trial to one offence under the Employment of Foreign Manpower Act - which is punishable to up to 12 months jail and/or $10 000 fine.&nbsp;<br><br></div><div>MustShareNews also found out 10 things that this <mark>pair of cold-hearted employers</mark> has done.<br><br><br></div>]]></description>
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         <title>What to do?</title>
         <author>MLEYoda</author>
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         <description><![CDATA[<div>In your CA1 groups: Each group is assigned to rewrite one part of the article "<strong><em>10 Shocking Facts About The Maid Abuse Case That You Should Know</em></strong>". <br><br>Scroll down to find your group's assigned part.<br><br><em>Step 1. </em><strong><mark>Highlight</mark></strong> phrases/words in your assigned part of the article that may be <strong><mark>defamatory</mark></strong>.<br><em>Step&nbsp; 2.</em> Re-write in the <strong>GREEN BOXES</strong> the part assigned to your group. <strong><mark>Highlight</mark></strong> the phrase/words that you chose to reduce likelihood of defamation.<br><em>Step&nbsp; 3.</em> At the end of your article, <em>briefly write down in italics 2-3 reasons why your group made those re-writes</em>, especially if there were any concerns about defamation. <br><br><strong>Your group will present the re-write and reasons during Lesson 3B. </strong>Eg: "The original sentence could be potentially defamatory, because it lowered XX's reputation by... It was not fair comment because...."<br><br><em>Assume you are writing this article in Dec 2015, while the </em><strong><em>trial was ongoing, but before the verdict</em></strong><em>.</em></div>]]></description>
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         <title>TODAY Article</title>
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         <title>TNP Article</title>
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         <title>Must Share News Article</title>
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