https://padlet.com/23efang/f29bwptfkvy4 Hello! Welcome to my padlet, and thank you for reading my pieces. I look forward to your feedback. :) en-us 2017-06-22 14:04:37 UTC 2026-01-14 16:02:27 UTC hello@padlet.com 23egoldstein https://padlet.com/23efang/f29bwptfkvy4/wish/236951207 I like how at the beginning of your essay you started off by explaining how two words relate. While this was the hook you also almost meshed it into the bridge. This hooked me in, but at the same time, you gave me lots of background detail since I don't know a lot about the topic. I really think you did a good job and creating this part of your essay and how well it was explained. Another thing I was impressed by was your usage of GUMS. In my personal experience, I find this skill a challenge so I liked how much time you put into making sure all of the edits were correct. This is something I have a challenge with, but it makes your writing piece especially good because of how well written it looks. One comment for future suggestions would be to next time try not to repeat yourself as much. I saw that in your body paragraph, there was a lot of the same thing being said. I know this can be hard and you overall did a really amazing job, I think that for next time this would be a helpful comment to keep in mind. 
-Ella Goldstein]]> 2018-03-01 15:12:27 UTC https://padlet.com/23efang/f29bwptfkvy4/wish/236951207 23idelgadoarvelo https://padlet.com/23efang/f29bwptfkvy4/wish/237447673 Hi Emma! Your suspense narrative was beyond excellent! I couldn't stop reading it! First, I really enjoyed how your word choice fit into the story. Your word choice was advanced and sophisticated. Something else I really liked was the way you developed the characters. I thought Monica changed as a person throughout the story. You did this by including her thoughts all the time, so the reader would know what she's thinking. I could picture your story in my head while reading it! Something I suggest working on for the future is varying your sentence lengths. Using the complex, compound, etc sentences we learned, you can take your writing to the next level. Overall, I thought you narrative was spectacular and I can really see this as being a book or a movie later on!
-Ivana Delgado-Arvelo]]> 2018-03-02 15:36:04 UTC https://padlet.com/23efang/f29bwptfkvy4/wish/237447673