Padlet 1 by Bila Alshaar

alshaarbila — 2025-04-16 05:07:54 UTC

Plastic bags are bad and not really good for the earth. Some people in the UAE still use them, but others don’t. There have been some bans, but not everywhere. I will be talking about how maybe they should be banned completely, but also plastic bags can be helpful sometimes. It depends on how you look at it.

2025-04-16 09:13:24 UTC

This is a weak introduction because the authors stance is not clearly stated. And the thesis statement isn’t clear as well. The author could improve their introduction saying something like this: “ plastic bags are good or plastic bags are bad. There have been bans or bans are not implemented everywhere.”

2025-04-16 09:13:38 UTC

The thesis is not clear, the author says in the first sentence that plastic bags are bad, but then they say how they can be helpful sometimes and maybe they should be banned. The author should state which side they are on and stuck with that side

2025-04-16 09:13:42 UTC

One way this introduction can be improved is to start it with a hook.

An introduction is important to introduce the idea of the essay

2025-04-16 09:14:00 UTC

One way I can improve this introduction is by making the thesis clearer, and by giving more background information further more I’d use more advanced vocabulary.

Elements of a introduction are:

Clear thesis statement

Background information

2025-04-16 09:14:12 UTC

One way I would improve the introduction: By using variated word choices and stating clearly what side they’re on. Thesis statement, example more information that improves and grabs the attention.

2025-04-16 09:14:20 UTC

It's a weak introduction because it doesn't have a clear thesis, and the sentences are too vague and simple.

The author should work towards improving their vocabulary, as well as figuring out where they stand and writing a clear thesis statement.

2025-04-16 09:14:40 UTC

One way I would improve it by some parts need to go on the body like how they are ban in some places and add questions at the beginning to grab the reader’s attention

2025-04-16 09:15:46 UTC

Make the thesis clearer and more confident

2025-04-16 09:16:01 UTC

The words are too simple,

Some people use plastic bag and some not,they might use like a fabric tote bag from there local supermarket,there are people in the uae,some of them use them and some not.But some countries actually banned them and that’s okay,so I’m here to recall why plastic bags are bad

2025-04-16 09:16:23 UTC

The thesis lacks clarity. In the opening sentence, the author claims that plastic bags are harmful, but later mentions how they can sometimes be useful and suggests they might be banned. The author should clearly state their position on the issue and remain consistent throughout the essay.

2025-04-16 09:16:26 UTC

I would improve this by stating the thesis and starting with a hook or rhetorical question, as well as enhancing the vocabulary.

2025-04-16 09:17:33 UTC

One way I would improve the introduction is to start it with a hook

2025-04-16 09:20:55 UTC

Making it more clear and starting it with a hook