https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm Made with ♥ en-us 2018-07-18 07:46:49 UTC 2025-04-24 07:02:09 UTC hello@padlet.com caring44u1 https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270498824 Suggestions for a better ending:]]> 2018-07-18 07:47:21 UTC https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270498824 https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584548 Add more good words and phrases, the man was not talking at the start of the video, check for grammar errors, there was no owner in the story. Good job though:))))))))]]> 2018-07-19 03:56:05 UTC https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584548 https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584606 - maybe make it clearer at the end
- add more detail 
- add more gruesomeness to leave the reader an impact in their mind
- make it more dramatic
- use more good words and phrases ]]> 2018-07-19 03:56:52 UTC https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584606 https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584617 More good words and phrases 
Improve by making sure that there are lesser spelling errors.
More exciting endings to make the reader excited
Add more dialogue.]]> 2018-07-19 03:57:01 UTC https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584617 https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584627 Putting In more good words and phrases
Should use a better plot and story
Need to be more specific and descriptive 
Sentences are too long 
Overuse of the word ‘and ‘
The words must be more accurate]]> 2018-07-19 03:57:08 UTC https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584627 https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584686 add more good phrases and words . State everything more clearly and better grammar . More intense and more feelings ]]> 2018-07-19 03:57:46 UTC https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584686 https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584697 “Ahh”the man screamed and the tiger realised that he was the man who saved him from pain. The lion started to walk around him and went forward ,purred and licked him . The guy also realised that it was the tiger that he saved. The villager saw  this action done by the tiger and boo  at them , and chased them out of the village and never to come back.sinced then the tiger lived happily ever after .]]> 2018-07-19 03:57:51 UTC https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584697 https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584783 Add more idioms and improve on your description and grammar.]]> 2018-07-19 03:59:18 UTC https://padlet.com/caring44u1/eslz5ohxurkm/wish/270584783