https://padlet.com/26ramberg/ekvqnte36je8 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 18:36:42 UTC 2019-12-14 22:44:06 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/2764.png 26vvirga https://padlet.com/26ramberg/ekvqnte36je8/wish/420865330 Your story was very descriptive. I especially loved the part when Rose states in parenthesis that her siblings are amazing. It describes her relationship with her siblings which is really nice. I also loved the part when  Rose states, “My beloved aqua backpack!!” I personally find this very funny because it seems like she really likes her aqua backpack. I think this part shows how she is feeling. One thing that you could do better with is describing her surroundings, especially in the beginning. ]]> 2019-12-06 16:57:18 UTC https://padlet.com/26ramberg/ekvqnte36je8/wish/420865330 26cabadir https://padlet.com/26ramberg/ekvqnte36je8/wish/420936918 My first star to give to you Reilly is that in the whole story I wasn’t confused one single time, because you did such a great job with all of the description!  I really liked how I could picture every scene in my mind because everything was so clear!  My second star to give you is that the story had such a great moral, I love the whole idea.  I loved how Rose and Lexi had different popularity levels, but the same feelings and family problems!  Finally my wish for you is that you would write more stories and make them just as good as that one!]]> 2019-12-06 18:48:51 UTC https://padlet.com/26ramberg/ekvqnte36je8/wish/420936918 26ryaney https://padlet.com/26ramberg/ekvqnte36je8/wish/421676829 I think that your story is amazing I love the beginning, when you talked about how “The sky was like a black hole that just poured out water and light.” it grabbed my attention very quickly.  I also like how you made TJ a bully because it truly is true, and I also like the sentence when you said, “I hesitated when trying to open my front door....” because I think that the ... was very clever. One thing that didn’t make sense to me was some of your beginning, because when you were talking about the slish slosh noise, and when you were describing you and your raincoat it didn’t really make sense, I think that you worded it, confusingly.  Here’s an example of how you can make it better: I put my raincoat on, my boots made this slish slosh noise, the dirt sunk into my boots. My feet were all wrinkly from the wet ground. The sloshing noise didn’t stop as I got closer and closer to the dreadful school I was to attend.

]]> 2019-12-09 16:06:20 UTC https://padlet.com/26ramberg/ekvqnte36je8/wish/421676829 26abarbosa https://padlet.com/26ramberg/ekvqnte36je8/wish/421699836 your title is very deep ]]> 2019-12-09 16:40:30 UTC https://padlet.com/26ramberg/ekvqnte36je8/wish/421699836 26gbrown https://padlet.com/26ramberg/ekvqnte36je8/wish/421785768 Reilly, I think that “A True Friendship” is brilliant! Even from the very first sentence, you immediately had me hooked on your story. I adored the descriptive detail that you put into the setting/environment! It made me feel like I was practically in your narrative! I also took a great liking in the way you described the bullies’ hatred for Rose! It encouraged me to keep reading!  The one wish I have for you is to try not to use “....” as much. Instead of using them, you could use slight transitions/expressions. This will help with your sentence structure, as well as your varied word choice. By doing this, your readers will become even more hooked on your narrative then they already are because reading the same type of sentence could make them lose all interest. Great job!

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