https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay Provide a quote from Daisy's essay. Then label it as an example of effective writing, adequate writing, inadequate writing, or as having little success. Explain why. en-us 2017-10-12 15:59:25 UTC 2017-10-12 17:33:32 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196546709 Score: 8
"Kelley speaks with an incendiary tone towards other people with similar interest of making improvements in the lives of workers to encourage unity against the atrocities in action by making them feel remorse."

-This individuals demonstrates great use of vocabulary along with a very good understanding of the text with a great identification of the purpose of the author.]]> 2017-10-12 17:23:44 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196546709 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196546727 Daisy demonstrates  effective writing with high level vocabulary along with precise explanations on each of the rhetorical term used.
" Kelly introduces the idea of how while people are sleeping peacefully, young girls would be in mills and factories, contrasting two distinct things, creating awareness amongst listeners, and they as they would be learning information they would've never thought to consider. Typically, people don't combine the idea of rest and relate it with youth labor, presenting juxtaposition. ]]> 2017-10-12 17:23:46 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196546727 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196546802 Together, Kelley uses poignancy to create pity around the issues at hand, to infuriate the crowd, so that they stand unified for the making of amends for the treatment experienced in industrial facilities.

That's what it got.]]> 2017-10-12 17:23:56 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196546802 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196546891 2017-10-12 17:24:05 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196546891 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196546928 "halfway through kelley's speech she converses presenting irony and rhetorical..."]]> 2017-10-12 17:24:09 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196546928 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196546976 "Kelley introduces the idea of how white are sleeping and peacefully, young girls would be in mills and factories, contrasting two distinct things, creating awareness amongst listeners, and they as they would be learning information they would've never thought to consider." This sentence demonstrates effective writing because this person uses high level vocabulary and it is used appropriately. ]]> 2017-10-12 17:24:15 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196546976 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547083 "Kelley creates range and a desire for change amongst people, especially mothers, explaining how work conditions take the happiness from children." ]]> 2017-10-12 17:24:29 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547083 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547086 2017-10-12 17:24:29 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547086 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547134 "Typically, people don't combine the idea...Then, Kelley also repeats the phrase.....Kelley uses poignancy to create pity."
Writing was above and beyond, not only showing one rhetorical term but demonstrating up to three in one, showing how they are well connected and guided towards one reaction. ]]> 2017-10-12 17:24:32 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547134 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547205 "During the commence of her speech, Kelly uses recent pathos through the utilization of juxtaposition and repetition" Provides a clear statement of what the essay will be about and respond to the prompt clearly. Later the paragraph utilizes effective writing and good use of vocabulary. ]]> 2017-10-12 17:24:42 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547205 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547312 Score: 8
"Kelley introduces the idea of how while people are sleeping peacefully, young girls would be working in mills and factories, contrasting two distinct things, creating awareness amongst listeners, as they would be learning information they would've never thought to consider."]]> 2017-10-12 17:24:54 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547312 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547405 Score 6
"Kelley uses poignancy to create pity around the issues at hand, to infuriate the crowd..." ]]> 2017-10-12 17:25:02 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547405 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547495 Score: 8
" Florence Kelley tackles working conditions during the rise of industries specifically targeting the long hours permitted as well as the absence of limitations on age requirements.
- uses a great vocabulary, creates a strong claim, effective writing, control of language ]]> 2017-10-12 17:25:08 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547495 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547581 Score:8
"As Kelley's speech comes to an end,..."
She uses well intro sentences on every sentence which clearly organizes her writing. The reader now knows what they're going to read at the beginning of the paragraph.

]]> 2017-10-12 17:25:17 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547581 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547584 "Then, Kelley also repeats the phrase "while we sleep," opening the eyes of her audience, bringing light to the events unjustly in process, three times, putting the emphasis on that idea, to truly put those thoughts in the minds of these oblivious." 
This person uses great vocabulary and writes in a sophisticated manner. Their writing is very effective in the sense that their analysis is very clear and their control of writing is outstanding. ]]> 2017-10-12 17:25:17 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547584 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547622 Score: 8
"Halfway through kelly's speech, she converses presenting irony and rhetorical questions to express her message." This shows how she has effective writing...]]> 2017-10-12 17:25:20 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547622 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547710 Score: 8
I would give Daisy a score of an 8. 
"]]> 2017-10-12 17:25:28 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547710 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547868 Based on her choice of words and how coherent her writing is, she deserves a 8. The reason why is because in the rubric, one of the key points to earn this grade is developing their argument w/ evidence. Daisy states]]> 2017-10-12 17:25:42 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547868 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547880 "During the commencement of her speech, Kelly uses recurring pathos through the utilization of juxtaposition and repetition." I would give Daisy a 8 because she breaks down how repetition, juxta]]> 2017-10-12 17:25:43 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547880 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547915 I would give Daisy an 8 because she exceeds the natural goal of controlling the way she writes and and answering the prompt.]]> 2017-10-12 17:25:46 UTC https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196547915 https://padlet.com/BurtonTechMarks/DaisySampleEssay/wish/196548330 Score:8
Daisy would score an 8 because her writing is effective.She meets most of the requirements on the rubric, as well as an immense comprehension of Florence Kelley's passage. She had minimal to no errors in her essay as well.
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