https://padlet.com/26jdunbar/egcccka5ks7y Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 19:28:49 UTC 2019-12-10 19:39:01 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f34d.png 26nlambert https://padlet.com/26jdunbar/egcccka5ks7y/wish/421817519 A strength on your narrative  “Smile’s Shall Win” is how you talk about your character, you use really good action words to describe how your characters feel. For example “Bella’s eyes anxiously darted from the audience directly to the wooden, auditorium floor.” I also like how you really explained the setting. You told the reader what was going on with an explanation. Something you should work on is to tell the reader a little more about the main idea. You are skipping back and forth with the main idea. In my opinion I think you have multiple main ideas. Maybe, next time you could try to stick with 1 main idea.

]]> 2019-12-09 19:28:47 UTC https://padlet.com/26jdunbar/egcccka5ks7y/wish/421817519 26schan https://padlet.com/26jdunbar/egcccka5ks7y/wish/422391056 I liked it when your story started on with she thinks shes not gonna get the part but it turns out she does get the part. Also, I liked the part when Emma was stomping through the halls and Mr. Mitchell commanded for her to stop unless she wants detention in a british accent. But if you go over your story you might find that you have some unfinished sentences. ]]> 2019-12-10 19:38:51 UTC https://padlet.com/26jdunbar/egcccka5ks7y/wish/422391056