Remake of Grigorie M. Peer Feedback 2022 - 2023 by Grigorie Milea https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 15:31:42 UTC 2026-01-08 13:44:32 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f5a5.png 29wchen https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2355621924 Hi Greg, nice background]]> 2022-10-25 15:03:46 UTC https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2355621924 Russell colville https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2355715159 Hi Greg great story i liked how you described baseball as your life and how you were very sad that you screwed up the game and lost letting your whole team down]]> 2022-10-25 15:54:11 UTC https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2355715159 Jacob Dankin https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2404076529
Hi Greg, I really liked it when you included the mom being dragged by Charles and how Charles was evil. I also liked the detail of your main character walking down the stairs. One wish I had was that you revised more and filled in some blanks with words.]]> 2022-11-30 19:02:02 UTC https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2404076529 Jacob Dankin https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2524031808 Hey Greg! a part of your piece I really like is your explanation where you really portrayed it as Piper was growing more and finding solutions to combat her fears. Another star I had was your second life lesson on your second explanation part. I liked how you said that Piper had to keep taking risks and now, I wish I had thought of that because I think it could have helped out with some parts I was uncertain on and I think the incorporation of it was spotless nothing to change, maybe even in that paragraph. One revision I would offer is that you could have made it all into 
One paragraph and eliminate the numbers sticking out of the middle in your paragraph. I also think you could have highlighted the transitions and the name of the story in purple with italicization. Great job!
]]> 2023-03-20 17:49:04 UTC https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2524031808 2 stars and a wish :) 29dsmeltzer https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2525639727 I believe in your piece, “Pipers Way”, had a strong theme analysis and was very powerful, And that it had many possibilities. I think it defines what happens nicely and gives out the theme a nice and entertaining way, and that in your next writing piece should have the same setup. though I think you should hopefully fix some grammar mistakes. Such as “in the Pixar shortPiper-..” where there is no space between short and Piper. Another example of this is “For instance, the Pixar short “shows that” Piper-..” where the quotation marks are in the wrong place. Perhaps change it to “For instance, the Pixar short, “Piper” shows that-..” This would help make the story more readable to the reader so they can  more easily understand your statement and the position your claim is in. It would just help in general. (My opinion of coarse)]]> 2023-03-21 15:46:50 UTC https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2525639727 timed Theme analisys 29wchen https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2530564190 Greg, the claim needs a theme. Not what the birds should’ve done. the theme. You should also make you paragraph longer. It was tiny. But good effort.]]> 2023-03-24 15:04:39 UTC https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2530564190 https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2534170305 Hi Grigorie. I thought that some of your transition words were really good. I specifically liked the transition words “Certainly” and “In addition.” I liked those two because it really sounded good with the next thing you wrote. In addition I liked the theme because it made sense with the Pixar short. I also liked the theme because I liked how you said “don't be mean because something mean will happen to you.” But I do think you should’ve definitely read over it a couple more times because a couple things didn’t make sense. The claim also needs a theme.]]> 2023-03-28 01:36:53 UTC https://padlet.com/29gmilea/eg3smnfdqnccu9j7/wish/2534170305