7th Grade Writing by https://padlet.com/27jmurray1/eezoz69x2tfymqdm Give me feedback en-us 2022-01-31 14:55:35 UTC 2022-03-10 18:05:46 UTC hello@padlet.com Dillon Lassman. One star that is have is at the end of each paragraph you put down it is easy as 1,2,3 and it’s a peice of cake. I think it really tells the reader how easy and fun it can be to be part of an air soft battle. Another star i have is how you tell the reader how air soft battles can help burn Calories becaouse it is talking about some of the readers.one wish i have i for there to be a bit more grammar in some places i got lost or there was not a capital letter the beginning of a sentence 27dlassman https://padlet.com/27jmurray1/eezoz69x2tfymqdm/wish/2023521727 2022-02-01 15:05:55 UTC https://padlet.com/27jmurray1/eezoz69x2tfymqdm/wish/2023521727 Essay :jack.h https://padlet.com/27jmurray1/eezoz69x2tfymqdm/wish/2023523398 1. My wish is that you worked on the intro more in the beginning because it was kin dove confusing  to me.

Star.2. I’  liked right after the intro in the beginning you talked about all of the benefits and the benefits it has.

Star.3. I liked how you talked about how easy it might be to lose body weight or get heathery ]]> 2022-02-01 15:06:38 UTC https://padlet.com/27jmurray1/eezoz69x2tfymqdm/wish/2023523398 Essay https://padlet.com/27jmurray1/eezoz69x2tfymqdm/wish/2023571897 One wish is that you should look over for citations 

My stars is that your conclusion was very strong i also loved how you used “a piece of cake” and also “easy as 123”]]> 2022-02-01 15:25:52 UTC https://padlet.com/27jmurray1/eezoz69x2tfymqdm/wish/2023571897 Matt K 🅿️🅿️🅿️(product 27mkarp https://padlet.com/27jmurray1/eezoz69x2tfymqdm/wish/2088885747 Wish: I think that you could have set your offer after explaining your product and included a target audience 

Star: I like how you included it was environment friendly

Star: the reason why you are better than your competitors was very clear and effective.]]> 2022-03-10 18:05:46 UTC https://padlet.com/27jmurray1/eezoz69x2tfymqdm/wish/2088885747