https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7 4th Period en-us 2016-09-16 15:16:30 UTC 2025-10-08 22:32:33 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124441873 Score 3
Lacks examples
NEEDS MORE EXAMPLES 

]]> 2016-09-16 17:56:43 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124441873 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124445469 Score 7
Short but thorough analysis, lack of stylistic elements, diction could improve but great intro and conclusion and even though analysis was short I felt he understood what jfk wanted to get across 
Jordan:
Score 7
Elucidating and smooth introduction, used thought-out inference and embedding, very thorough, but the ideas are a little loose/not connected, good analyzing]]> 2016-09-16 18:06:10 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124445469 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124446265 Score 7
Elucidative and smooth introduction. Skilled with embedding and inference. ]]> 2016-09-16 18:08:17 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124446265 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124446997 Score 6
Kai's essay was very well constructed and had various descriptive references but lacked style and finesse and vocabulary was basic at times but overall knew the content  ]]> 2016-09-16 18:09:59 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124446997 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124447460 Score: 7

Has a lot of style and description present. Needs another body paragraph and more added to the conclusion, but besides that, really well done.]]> 2016-09-16 18:10:58 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124447460 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124448398 Score: 5 
Good use of stating he purpose and adding quotes. Just need to add and elaborate on the examples. Adding a little more. 
Darnell: 
Score: 6 
Nice way conclude and reeling how the audience feel. Clear thesis. Add more examples to body and elaborate on it. 
Taybah: 
Score: 7
Good introduction and clear thesis statement. Explain quotes a little more. Good textual examples]]> 2016-09-16 18:12:55 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124448398 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124448431 Score 6 
Needs work on analysis and on the conclusion, but is developing style by using colons and dashes. ]]> 2016-09-16 18:13:01 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124448431 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124448808 Score 8
Very eloquent
Sufficient examples
Thesis statement is clear and topic sentence is present. Body paragraphs provides a thorough understanding of the strategies used]]> 2016-09-16 18:13:37 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124448808 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124449883 Score : ]]> 2016-09-16 18:15:50 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124449883 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124450308 Score : 7
• Good thesis
• quotes and analysis are clear 
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]]> 2016-09-16 18:17:04 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124450308 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124450887 Score: 5
Clear thesis. More analysis is needed. Good examples. Needs to work on conclusion. 
Beatrice
Score: 6+
Good evidence and analysis. Needs to work on grammar. Needs more connection to the purpose.
Hannah
Score:6+
Has good diction. Has a clear and powerful thesis. Good  

]]> 2016-09-16 18:18:40 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124450887 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124451369 Score : 7
• good thesis 
• clear quotes and analysis
• could elaborate more on points]]> 2016-09-16 18:20:01 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124451369 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124451411 Great sense of style.

]]> 2016-09-16 18:20:08 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124451411 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124451839 Score:5
Great explanation but could use more style ]]> 2016-09-16 18:21:27 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124451839 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124451985 Score : 5
• gets point across
• could use more punctuation
• anaylsis is limited 
• good thesis ]]> 2016-09-16 18:21:54 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124451985 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124452058 Great sense of style and his sentences flowed.  But needed to embed the sentences instead of just stating Score : 7 
Zubair 
Good diction. Used mature words and a good analysis of what Kennedys message 
score :7 
Elizabeth
Great use of embedding and used mature words in some paragraphs but needs sentence variety 
Score :7

]]> 2016-09-16 18:22:03 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124452058 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124452300 2016-09-16 18:22:41 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124452300 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124452373 Score: 7+. Gave details throughout her whole essay. Although some paragraphs were detailed more than others. ]]> 2016-09-16 18:22:52 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124452373 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124452434 Score : 5
• good analysis
• good introduction
• be more specific when citing from audiences or making references ]]> 2016-09-16 18:23:00 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124452434 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124452654 Score:6
Clearly stated thesis and Kennedt's purpose is clearly stated as well. Fully supported quotes but could have been more sophisticated and stylish.]]> 2016-09-16 18:23:39 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124452654 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124456664 Conrad: score 7+
Sophisticated argument with text evidence that is appropriate and convincing, but leaves out point Kennedy is making in paragraph one and his conclusion lacks reasoning.
Ronaldo: Score 6 
Deep analysis and use of diction. Needs more evidence and stylistic features.]]> 2016-09-16 18:34:28 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124456664 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124520668 Adji: Score 7
Very well explained essay with multiple examples to back up claims but needs clear thesis
Leilani: Score 8
Very clear thesis with lots of examples to relate to her claims and views


]]> 2016-09-17 15:25:02 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124520668 https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124609680 Adji: 7
Purpose unclearly stated in Thesis, however, it is shown in a great conclusion. Text references and explanations present. Topic sentences lack, choppy sentences.
Michael: 4
Terrific use of syntax and diction. Great structure and explanations. Overall, would have been outstanding essay, except question was misunderstood.]]> 2016-09-19 01:36:06 UTC https://padlet.com/andersonshena/ecutkinwhnj7/wish/124609680