G9B Peer Feedback by Katie Sheffield

Peer feedback station duties

ksheffield14 — 2015-08-27 04:00:37 UTC

Joaquin

18jsuarez — 2015-08-27 04:35:53 UTC

I think that Yunsoo's was the most striking because I was unable to find errors in his. His essay sticks close to the topic which is very difficult to do

Chloe

2015-08-27 04:36:39 UTC

The most striking essay was SEWONS because i liked how she explained everything and how she explained each quotes she put. I think i need to improve on my repetition of words and my introduction (according to sewons awesome feedback) overall the activity was really helpful to me and maybe to the others

Lexie

2015-08-27 04:36:53 UTC

I think that Sewons essay was the most striking because it explained how the author foreshadows and created tension in the story well. I need to improve on my introduction because I didn't really add in background information . An aspect of this activity that needs to be improved for me is explaining/talking to the person who's paper you are checking the feedback you have come up with.

Tim－Tam

2015-08-27 04:38:13 UTC

I think that raphy did well in his essay because of his quotations and his explanations.

Adding quotes would help ,adding key aspects and clearing up my statements with the writer's name would make my essay better.

I think this activity was good yo M8.

Andre

2015-08-27 04:38:14 UTC

I think Yunsoo's essay was truly a striking masterpiece. He was able to demonstrate great skill by giving good information and using good quotes. I think that for my own writing I need to add more quotes from the story. I think that for this activity there should be police badges as they make the person checking feel better. Other from that I do quite like this activity.

Sewon

2015-08-27 04:39:01 UTC

Even though I only checked the introduction, I think Raphy's essay was the most striking. Although he had some grammar mistakes just like other people, he included everything that was supposed to be in the introduction. He thoroughly, yet briefly, described the background information and the characters. He also described the author and the story, using varied vocabularies. I need to improve in not repeating the same words and following the correct essay format. I think the activity would have been better if the people were more serious about checking other people's work.

Raphy

2015-08-27 04:39:40 UTC

The most striking essay would be Sewon Sohn because although she did make a few mistakes like the hook and some parts need fixing, her thesis was clear. Sewon's introduction may need some fixing especially in hook but the points were all hit. I would really like if the editors would be more serious so this activity would be really beneficial.

Phoebe

2015-08-27 04:40:56 UTC

Although I did not read through everyones essay, I think Raphy did a really good job. Everything was clearly written and all related back to the topic sentence. Raphy supported his quotations with evidence and used a different variety of words that made his essay not seem too "basic". This exercise helped us find the errors in our work that we, ourselves could not seem to correct.

Andy Park

2015-08-27 04:42:19 UTC

I think Yunsoo's essay is the most striking essay. Because he wrote it down with reasons what he want to say something.

Yunsoo Park

2015-08-27 04:43:43 UTC

I think that André's essay was the most striking one because he used various sentences with different styles and the structure was clear.

Mica

2015-08-27 04:44:21 UTC

I think Raphy's essay is the most striking one. He provided a strong thesis and has explained every paragraph with supporting evidence on how the short story is an act of foreshadowing.

Nina

2015-08-27 04:44:44 UTC

I think the most striking essay that i've read so far was Sewons because she had good suporting details and thesis. I need to improve on the hook, and conclusion.

Ace

2015-08-27 04:45:22 UTC

I think the most striking essay was Raphy's because most clear. Also he did make a few mistakes.

Ally

2015-08-27 04:50:01 UTC

I think Andre's essay was the most striking essay because he had quotes for each paragraphs and he was able to support his ideas well. I think this exercise helped us because we got to learn from our own mistakes and also from other people's mistakes.

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