·       What was the promise?

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·       What happened in the end?

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at home,

nearing PSLE exam

~ Cozy living room

~ Moss Burger Restraunt

~ On Friday after school

a windy afternoon at home

Nearing WA exam

comfortable,cozy and charming home

Whitesands Shopping Mall

Tommy and Johnny

Treating Tommy to a meal at Burger King restaurant

Characters: Belle(the girl), Ms Limy(Belle's teacher), Belle's parents.

Place: home, school(Rainbow Trees' Primary School)

Time: EYE is round the corner

Setting : "Her smile was as bright as the morning sun".nicolette was working hard as it was nearing PSLE

At home studying for Eliza's PSLE exam.

Time: one week before PSLE exam

-Scorching hot day at home

-nearing end year exam.

~at home

~near Weighted Assessment period

~mother promised to get me a brand new watch as a reward for doing well in the WA test

~ Amy spent a lot of time studying to complete her homework

Golden beams filtered through the curtain,painting the room in an ethereal glow as I groggily rubbed my eyes, slowly shuffling to the kitchen. Warm, buttery aroma of the mouth watering pancakes filled my mouth.

-A tidy room

-Tom treated Elise to McDonalds

- Pasir Ris Mall

• at a birthday party

• it was a warm, sunny afternoon

• Characters: Lucy and her parents

• Parents promising Lucy to get her a pet cat

~ She was completely unaware of the time and forgot about the date

It was a sunny afternoon at home before wa test

Tommy went to White Sands shopping mall

and waited for Johnny to come over

Sofie was eating a hot burgers

-Atlas thinking hard to find the answer on her worksheet.

-Spend a lot of time doing school homework

-Ignoring all the text messages Tom sent to Elise to remind her to go McDonalds

Nicolette worked tirelessly, juggling tasks like a circus performer mastering a complex routine".

One hour had past

Johnny had not come yet

Tommy was worried and felt like an ant in a pot of boiling water

Sun hung high in the cloudless sky,casting a warm, golden glow through her window.

Eliane

Home and Examination room

PSLE exam

~I diligently studied all day

~ I slept very late

~ exams were next week

Sofie spent alot of time to finish her homework

Was studiying for a WA exam

• Lucy invited her friends to her party

• Lucy was hoping to open her present

  
  

The sun was seeping inside the bedroom, casting bright patches on the mat.Dust motes floated lazily in the golden afternoon, settling on a stack of unopened letters and a forgotten journal.

-June holidays

-I was at home

-Did not want to do homework

Good examples:

None, Google won't give me show not tell examples for refusing to do homework :(

~ time was ticking , she was completely unaware of the day she had to meet her friends

~ friends called her and finally she realised that she had to meet up to aet

Atlas was unaware of the time and was still on the first question.

"Nicolettes mind was a garden,with thoughts as vibrant as blooming flowers".

I was buried under a mountain of English homework given by Missers Yap.

Gave Johnny a call

Did not answer

Tommy's heart sank as Johnny did not answer

Emelia was studying for her wa

Time was taking she started her work

• Her friends arrived to the party

~Eliza studied hard for her PSLE exam as she was very determined to pass her exam.

~Her mother promised her daughter, "Sweetheart, after you finish your work, I'll take you to your favorite restaurant, just like you always wanted." She smiled warmly, her eyes twinkling

with affection, and added,"And we can have your favourite dish, of course!"

~ Meet up and apologise deeply realising how absent- minded she was

~she had a mind like a sieve

-Elise finally picked up her phone to see twenty-five unread messages from Tom

-tom texted"you promised "

Belle was about to take her EYE, her teacher, Ms Limy, promised Class 5-A sweet rewards if they done well in their upcoming exams. When Belle heard about it, she jumped up and down mirthfully. From that day on, she revised hard daily.

Asked Johnny in school why he did not come

Johnny told everything to Tommy

Aaric Yu Han

~I got full marks

~my mother was proud

~but she forgot the promise

:(

• the time to open the presents was now!

• Lucy was as happy as a clam when opening the present as she saw a white cat with green eyes lying in the box

• Squealed in delight

• Named the cat, Snowy

Vicky was getting bored at home so he wanted to go play with his friend Ricky

Was sitting down for an exam

~I felt depressed

~my heart sank as I heard my mother confess to her mistake.

-time was flying away,Elise was unware of the time when she had to meet Tom

-Elise was glued to her homework as hours passed by

-Tom called Elise disappointedly and Elise answered realising she was late to go McDonalds.

The WA test was a bit challanging to study

• Smooth silk swallowed nicolette in the bed

• Her eyes wide darting from side to side

• her trembling hands wringing together

• Muscles stiffening

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~my mother apologised profusely,knowing the pain she caused.

Vicky called Ricky to go play basketball at the nearby basketball court

The father adjusted his cufflinks, then he nodded towards the gleaming watch resting in the velvet box,"It's yours, soon enough."

Her eyes widened, watching the silver face catch the light, the promise still hanging in the air like a secret yet to be told.

Was in the middle of a WA exam and Aryan and Zayn was thinking that they are going to fail

• thanked her parents profusely

• " Thanks mum and dad for the cute cat as a present!" Lucy exclaimed, " I promise to take good care of it!"

• Continued to enjoy and had lots of fun

• It truly was a promising day, Lucy now is happy for her pet cat.

Story mountain:

-Parents promised me that if i finish homework, I would get McDonald's

-Wanted McDonald's

-Started doing homework

Show not tell examples:

When my parents promised me McDonald's if i finished my homework, the crisp, golden colour of the fries danced in my mind, making me crave the familiar taste.

After I got marvelous marks for my psle.Father said that he will bring me to mcdonalds.But father did not bring me to MCDONALDS.

Place:school,home

Time:evening

Lucas Dhishaan

-she quickly went to meet Tom in McDonalds and apologised profusely to Tom

-Had a whale of a time hanging out

-Atlas mother walked into the room she was nervous because Atlas had promised mother that she had finished

-Atlas mother found put she was still on the first question

-Atlas avoided her mother's eyes as she asked,the words catching in her throat before she offered a hollow excuse.

Pin drop silence, desks were in neat rows. Eliane's hands turned clammy. She felt like she had a hundred butterflies in her stomach. The clicking of the invigilator's high heel shoe added on to her nervousness.

~Grandma was feeling unwell, with a fever and coughing, while Mother had a very demanding schedule at work, barely having time to eat, let alone take care of grandma.

~her mother did have time to go to the restaurant with her daughter.

I was dissapointed that I had a lot of homework. I stuffed my defeated face in my pillow as I groan in agony. 'Why do I need to do so much of homework…?' Just then, mother entered my room. "Vinay, if you finish your homework by five pm, I will take you to a fast food restaurant for dinner!" mother said with hope. I grinned like a Cheshire cat lapping a bowl of milk. I did my homework in a flash!

I was so angry because he broke his promise.My words hung heavily in the air,like a door slamed shut whithout a second.My eyes searched his face but all I found was a promise lost.
I clenched my fists, feeling the sting of disappointment tighten around my chest.

I turned away slowly, the weight of his broken promise pressing down on my shoulders.

• The silence between us grew thick, louder than any argument could be

• nicolette eyes sparking with glee

• Dimples denting cheeks as her score was good and she was very excited to go into a good secondary school

Story mountain:

-Was tired

-Remembered why I was there

-Continued doing homework because I wanted McDonald's

Show not tell:

I fought the urge to fall asleep right there, my brain protesting each attempt to focus. All of a sudden, the crisp, golden colour of the fries danced in my mind again.

Lucas & Dhishaan

Finnish the exam and got their WA test paper then Zayn and Aryan past their WA exam they were so happy and wanted tell their mother

Belle revised, revised, and revised, she flipped through her textbooks again and again. She studied hard. //Soon, the great day arrived, Belle's clammy hands turned sweaty as beads of perspiration trickled down her forehead. The already-stuffy grand hall could not be properly ventalized as hundreds of students were sitting for their EYE.

They spent more than two hours playing basketball. Vicky's parents called him and said"come home and study for your WA exam" . But Vicky wanted to play so he hung up and continued playing for another one hour until he was tired

-Atlas guilty conscience hit her

-Atlas admited that she lied and that she broke her mother's promise.

-Atlas mother was furious that atlas lied and broke her promise

-The silence between them until Atlas finally exhaled,"I should've told u sooner. I failed you."

~ Eliza understands that her mother is likely working hard or has a lot on her plate.

The room was soon filled with scribbling of pens and the flipping of pages. Students were seated quietly at their desks, focusing on the examination paper.

(Good phrases) homework slipped through the cracks of her busy ,curious mind.

She promised to do her homework , but distraction had other plans.

Lucas&dhishaan

Soon after, my mother and I went to a fast food restaraunt.I could not wait to gobble down the finger-licking chicken wings sitting

in front of me.

Story mountain:

-Finally finished doing homework

-We went to McDonald's

-While enjoying my Big Mac, my mother surprised me with a watch

-I was so happy

Show not tell:

I jumped with joy when I saw the watch.

His eyes softened, and he reached out

hesitantly, as if afraid I might pull away.

The weight of regret settled in his voice, quiet but sincere as he said, “I’m sorry.”

He ran a hand through his hair, searching for the right words, then promised, “I’ll make it right, I swear.”

He ran a hand through his hair, searching for the right words, then promised, “I’ll make it right, I swear."

His voice cracked slightly, but there was determination behind the apology.

The tension in his face eased as he promised, “Give me a chance to show you I mean it.”

He swallowed hard, then whispered, “I’ll make it up to you, no matter what it takes.”

His eyes met mine, steady and earnest, carrying the weight of a promise he intended to keep.

The next day, the sharp clang of the bell sliced through the morning hush,pencils freezing mid-doodle as every head snapped foward.

Knuckles whitened aroung every pencil, the only sound now the soft rustle of the paper and the distant tick of the clock.

Her brows knitted together as her eyes darted across the page, tracing each question with silent determination.

A strand of hair slipped loose, but she did not notice-her gaze remained locked on the maze of numbers and words before her.

~ Eliza's mother finally had a window of opportunity to take her daughter to her favorite restaurant.

~ the restaurant buzzed with the lovely chatter of diners, a sound track to our burger feast

After eating all of those juicy fried chicken, my stomach was as big as a elephant. Walking on air, we walked home elated.

A week later, the exam results were out. Eliane was jumping up and down when she saw that she got full marks. Her parents promised to get her a burger as celebration.

Vicky decided to go home study for a while but Ricky who already studied for the exam exclaimed,"No! I want to play." . So he promised to Ricky to pley later.

Story mountain:

-I thanked parents

-It was worth doing homework

Show not tell:

I hugged my parents tightly as I thanked them repeatedly.

With a sigh ,she approached the teacher ,ready to explain and accept the consequences.

Lucas&dhishaan

Shortly afterwards, the director(?) called an end to the answering and asked everyone's booklets to be handed up. Belle prayed hard that she would get a good score at least as she had a few unanswered question in the total of thirty-five questions.

But Vicky did not come to play later, he was studying Ricky was upset as Vicky did not come to play

A soft smile crept across her lips, her eyes fluttering closed for a brief moment as if savouring the quiet after the storm.

She burst through the