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Rewrite the counterclaim

2024-12-20 14:19:05 UTC

Kamilla Moshenskaya

moshenskayakamilla — 2024-12-20 14:19:33 UTC

I’ll revise my second body paragraph by adding more thinking implications. This will make the picture of my argument connection to reason stronger.

2024-12-20 14:19:48 UTC

I am going to use stronger evidence to support both the counterclaim and rebuttal to make it better

Second body paragraph

2024-12-20 14:20:30 UTC

Sarunova Darina

sarunovadarina — 2024-12-20 14:20:54 UTC

I plan to revise this paragraph by adding more in-depth analysis in the justification sections to provide a deeper understanding of the evidence. This will help strengthen the connection between the evidence, its implications, and the overall argument.

Maria Jose Cajamarca

2024-12-20 14:21:13 UTC

2024-12-20 14:21:24 UTC

Samia Mungabusi

My plan for fix the paragraph is first find the strong piece of evidence and explain in different way.

artigalopezsilviamaria — 2024-12-20 14:21:53 UTC

I'm planed to revise my counterclaim and rebuttal paragraph depending in my feedback from the teacher and my analysis that I didn't use a strong quote(evidence). In addition I will focus in inprove the connection with the rest of my essay.

2024-12-20 14:22:18 UTC

I plan to revise my counterclaim paragraph by finding better evidence for the rebuttal part. I think that I could find even better, more relevant evidence for the rebuttal.

Rewriting essay

muinelson — 2024-12-20 14:23:51 UTC

Jesús Cashabamba

2024-12-20 14:24:22 UTC

This is my second body paragraph, I will focus on improving this paragraph because it was incomplete, it need more information, precise evidences, and give specific examples of why the use of the internet becomes an addition that causes us to wast our time without realizing it.

Alina Mondrunova

2024-12-20 14:24:30 UTC

I will revise my Cc&R to draw the connection between them even more clearly by using the same key words

Sandzhieva Alina

2024-12-20 18:09:43 UTC

I am planning to add another evidence. I will

make sure that evidences are connected and have a clear transition between them.

2024-12-20 18:13:30 UTC

I would change my first paragraph. I And I will change my evidence for stronger.

Kesthin castillo

2024-12-20 18:14:51 UTC

I will revise this paragraph by adding more detail information and try to understand the quote more better at what I said

Jimena

2024-12-20 18:15:07 UTC

I'll revise my second body paragraph because I choose a weaker reason on this paragraph and I'll make it more stronger.

YuQing Weng

2024-12-20 18:15:11 UTC

2024-12-20 18:15:18 UTC

I want to add one more evidence into my 2nd body paragraph. I want to focus on explanation of my new evidence and transition between it.

Rewrite counterclaim/rebuttal

cevalloszunigamellcamila — 2024-12-20 18:15:49 UTC

I'm going to choose a better evidence that address the counterclaim

Bhoye Bah

2024-12-20 18:16:12 UTC

I plan to find another quote that is connected to the internet. Then I will focus on paraphrasing my sentences so it doesn’t plagiarize the texts.

Revise

2024-12-20 18:16:42 UTC

I’m gonna revise my body paragraph #1, because I have to use the better evidence. And the main point is to make it clear for readers, so they will understand what I mean.

Fares Musleh

2024-12-20 18:16:46 UTC

I would expend my paragraph analyzing and add one more strong evidence to it🙂

2024-12-20 18:17:18 UTC

I would change my first body, I would change my evidence !

Mell Cevallos

cevalloszunigamellcamila — 2024-12-20 18:17:42 UTC

I'm going to choose a better evidence for the rebuttal

Revision of second body paragraph

2024-12-20 18:27:35 UTC

I would like to fix my second body paragraph by explaining the quote successfully and selecting a better quote to support my reason

2024-12-20 18:30:42 UTC

I would change the justification to be more clear and detailed.