https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0 Reflect on Sample Intro 1 by writing 1 glow and 1 grow! en-us 2021-02-02 20:50:43 UTC 2021-02-05 16:01:07 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f973.png jasonr411 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159451175 It has a good hook, allows the reader to connect to the essay.]]> 2021-02-03 15:58:44 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159451175 brandonm738 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159453483 I had some more words to add and more thoughts to add to the senctences

]]> 2021-02-03 15:59:08 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159453483 jasonr411 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159454856 Subject/thesis isn't very clear, hard to know what the essay is about]]> 2021-02-03 15:59:24 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159454856 brandonm738 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159462622 Take out all the run ons and replace them with more different and strong wording

]]> 2021-02-03 16:00:40 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159462622 aidanm85 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159478435 The hook was good started of the intro strong.]]> 2021-02-03 16:03:12 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159478435 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159480231 they went on and on a lot 
-harper]]> 2021-02-03 16:03:30 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159480231 aidanm85 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159485144 The thesis was a bit unclear needs to be a little more specific ]]> 2021-02-03 16:04:20 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159485144 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159486204 they had a good hook
-harper]]> 2021-02-03 16:04:31 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159486204 melanied73 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159501710 They had a good hook that made me want to read the body paragraphs.]]> 2021-02-03 16:07:09 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159501710 melanied73 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159509372 Add more transition words to Make the intro a little bit more clear.]]> 2021-02-03 16:08:25 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159509372 camilao11 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159531975 Their hook was very descriptive, and provided background info. ]]> 2021-02-03 16:12:06 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159531975 camilao11 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159537152 Their thesis statement was a little too specific, it should've been more general.]]> 2021-02-03 16:12:58 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1159537152 christophero187 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1160858213 Great hook, provides background info and catches the readers eye. ]]> 2021-02-03 20:08:44 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1160858213 christophero187 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1160880198 They could be less specific, could be clearer on the thesis statement.]]> 2021-02-03 20:14:19 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1160880198 jasonr411 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164415630 Body paragraph was too short and didn't really give any background info.]]> 2021-02-04 15:50:16 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164415630 jasonr411 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164421118 evidence is good and clear, gets the message across clear]]> 2021-02-04 15:51:13 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164421118 brandonm738 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164421900 The evidence is good all it needs is more details to make it more of getting the reader to read it ]]> 2021-02-04 15:51:21 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164421900 camilao11 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164423357 The evidence is strong and clear.]]> 2021-02-04 15:51:36 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164423357 camilao11 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164426295 The topic sentence was short, and didn't provide too much background info. The first elaboration could've been stronger.]]> 2021-02-04 15:52:07 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164426295 brandonm738 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164427167 The body paragraph  is ok could use more of the suportting  reason but over all everything is good]]> 2021-02-04 15:52:16 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164427167 melanied73 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164428049 Good evidence, Vocabulary words are strong.]]> 2021-02-04 15:52:26 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164428049 melanied73 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164433116 They could add more to their elaborations]]> 2021-02-04 15:53:14 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164433116 aidanm85 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164434493 The evidence was good for the body paragraph ]]> 2021-02-04 15:53:28 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164434493 aidanm85 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164436663 The evidence needs more elaboration.]]> 2021-02-04 15:53:50 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164436663 anthonys930 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164437205 2021-02-04 15:53:55 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164437205 anthonys930 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164440534 2021-02-04 15:54:29 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164440534 josephr568 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164459754 needs a bit more detail on the elaboration ]]> 2021-02-04 15:57:36 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164459754 megang43 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164481472 Good transitions, good explanations ]]> 2021-02-04 16:01:26 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164481472 megang43 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164487675 Quote was repetitive ... it was saying the same thing ... instead of saying “this is bad” she could of said something else... went straight to the quotes .]]> 2021-02-04 16:02:29 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164487675 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164490489 Uses information to hook the reader so they stay interested
-Evie]]> 2021-02-04 16:02:57 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1164490489 anthonys930 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168789726 2021-02-05 15:43:09 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168789726 brandonm738 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168790235 The glows of the conclusion is that it has good. It also kinda linked to what happens right now in the world ]]> 2021-02-05 15:43:15 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168790235 anthonys930 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168795570 2021-02-05 15:44:16 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168795570 brandonm738 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168801713 What can be worked on is that they could add just a tat more to what is going on in the world right now and could end it off a better way but over all it was ok.

]]> 2021-02-05 15:45:25 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168801713 jasonr411 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168812204 Good topic sentence that connects back to todays society.]]> 2021-02-05 15:47:28 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168812204 jasonr411 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168819285 could've elaborated on the quote so that it left a greater impact on the reader.]]> 2021-02-05 15:48:50 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168819285 aidanm85 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168821176 Great topic sentence relates to present society]]> 2021-02-05 15:49:10 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168821176 aidanm85 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168830605 The conclusion wasn’t summed up well the 2 stated reason transitioned to off topic questions.]]> 2021-02-05 15:50:51 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168830605 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168838026 good transitions
-harper]]> 2021-02-05 15:52:17 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168838026 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168840653 needed more information
-harper]]> 2021-02-05 15:52:46 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168840653 megang43 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168850051 She has a punctuation error. She dosent restate her main thesis,
which is bland.and should have explained the quote. ]]> 2021-02-05 15:54:36 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168850051 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168852053 connected to present day
-harper]]> 2021-02-05 15:55:01 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168852053 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168856158 they didnt sum it up well
-harper]]> 2021-02-05 15:55:48 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168856158 megang43 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168859881 Restates her reasons in her first sentence. Great quote. Conclusion connects to nowadays experience.]]> 2021-02-05 15:56:32 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168859881 melanied73 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168873017 She connects to what is happening today in life which is good]]> 2021-02-05 15:58:59 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168873017 melanied73 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168877406 They should add more strong vocabulary and explain the quote that she added.]]> 2021-02-05 15:59:48 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168877406 camilao11 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168878761 They should add transitions so the conclusion could flow better. ]]> 2021-02-05 16:00:04 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168878761 camilao11 https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168881542 Their quote is good, and they related it to todays society which was good.]]> 2021-02-05 16:00:34 UTC https://padlet.com/jpierce52/e11jbd03palfohc0/wish/1168881542