Paragraph Peer Review by Ariel Davids https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4 Post 1 of your 4 paragraphs below and comment on 3 of your classmates' giving them feedback on their paragraphs. Be constructive, help them out, make suggestions, or simply just give them praise. en-us 2020-09-21 16:15:08 UTC 2026-03-21 00:01:39 UTC hello@padlet.com Owen S https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765009909 Exposition:  Baseball can be fun for a lot of people but some kids just aren't into sports.  Baseball is a mental sport. Baseball is really fun to play. One reason its fun is because its very competitive an you play for trophies if your good.This is why baseball is my all time favorite sport.


]]> 2020-09-21 16:36:18 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765009909 Madyson Newburry https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765023223 2020-09-21 16:38:55 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765023223 Kelsey Leik https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765029911 2020-09-21 16:40:15 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765029911 Boden Nye https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765035071 Narration: When I was really little, I was playing outside at a daycare  used to go to. My friend and I were messing around with a basketball and then the mailman drove up to the mailbox. He asked if we wanted candy. My friend started to go back to the daycare, but I walked up to the mailman to get candy. He snatched me up and threw me into the back of the truck and then sped off.]]> 2020-09-21 16:41:15 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765035071 caieya cook https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765038319 Narration 
I recently moved into my new apartment and we're almost done setting it up and i'm super excited to get it done because when i do i get to go get my kitten, toby.i already have everything she needs and i also got her a matching collar with my cat iggy boots. i've already gotten to see her a couple times already and she's super playful and energetic so i got her a bunch of toys to play with. I'm so happy she's gonna live with me soon.

]]> 2020-09-21 16:41:55 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765038319 Brooklynn Heinicke https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765038405 Description: As I was down in my position squatting down, sweaty palms, sweaty everything, I was watching the other teams server intently, trying to watch their every move to see where the ball was going to go. The server tossed the medium weight ball into the air and got ready to swing. As soon as they hit the ball with a mighty force, I ran to my position watching the ball fly high in the air going up and now back down but only on our side.]]> 2020-09-21 16:41:56 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765038405 Eddie Hill https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765044131  Narrative  :A cool september morning there I was up at 5:30 getting out of bed thinking am i going to shoot a big buck today.So after we got everything ready we got out to the blind.After hours of waiting a buck comes up on my left.I wasn’t going to shoot it so I asked my uncle and he said to shoot it so I waited until the right time and bang the deer went down.  ]]> 2020-09-21 16:43:03 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765044131 Aliyah Rodriguez https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765044377 Expository: I love baking. I love it because it's chill and time to yourself. While baking you have to be careful and follow the directions in order. As well as using the correct ingredients and correct measurements. It is important to be exact while you're baking. That is because if you make a mistake the outcome will be different from what you're expecting. 

]]> 2020-09-21 16:43:06 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765044377 Abby Nurenberg https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765048498 Narration: A few months back I saw an ad for a Siamese kitten at an animal shelter. I was not able to save up the money I needed until now. I never used to have so many cats until I saw how nice they are. I never knew how many breeds of cats there are. They are such beautiful animals. 


]]> 2020-09-21 16:43:58 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765048498 Jonah M https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765052116 Narrative: When I get home I go to my room and get my hedgehog named Cookie out to stretch and play with her toys.After that I usually play with her and she runs on her wheel. Then she takes a nap in my blankets and sleeps for a while. Finally I put her in her cage and she runs some more.]]> 2020-09-21 16:44:44 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765052116 Sawyer Maynard - narrative https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765052462 I pulled out my bike and rode out of the garage. I turned the corner and almost got hit by a car. After that I proceeded to go around the block which is a mile round.I went around the block around 2 times. Then I went into town and rode around. I stopped at a gas station and got some snacks.

]]> 2020-09-21 16:44:49 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765052462 M https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765062940 2020-09-21 16:46:55 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765062940 Mikayla Lemire https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765063077 Dogs are a better pet than cats. One reason is because cats don’t live being held and a lot of them don’t just lay down and relax with you, and dogs do. Next dogs will let you give them a bath, however cats scratch and hiss if you put them near the water at all. Also you can get exercise in with a dog by walking them so you can make sure you get your active minutes in. In conclusion dogs are a better pet than cats, and you should get one.]]> 2020-09-21 16:46:57 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765063077 isabell nelson ijnelson https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765093270 2020-09-21 16:52:45 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765093270 Belle Meeker https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765095045 Narrative: It was the first day of band camp, and I knew that it would be hard. I could barely even march while playing, even after a whole summer of practice. I didn’t even know how I would be able to perform, even though we wouldn’t get to perform this year. I was so nervous because I didn’t know what to expect, and i thought that the entire flute section hated me, which wasn’t true. If anything, they were one of the nicest people in the band. We started to warm up, and I could barely even play my flute because I was so nervous. We started learning the drill, which was also really hard. Overall, I knew that I loved marching band.]]> 2020-09-21 16:53:05 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765095045 Juliet Hash https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765098430 I walked into my house after a long day of riding my dirtbike. I set down all the stuff i had brought with me on the kitchen counter. I walked over and opened the fridge and looked for my sweet tea, my sweet tea vanished. I figured it was just lost but after 20 minutes i spent looking for it i came to think someone took my sweet tea. Before i headed back outside I checked the fridge one last time and didnt see it. I picked up my backpack i had set down on the counter and there was my bottle of sweet tea.]]> 2020-09-21 16:53:46 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765098430 Peyton Hoppes https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765110551 Persuasive: My dog is a very good hunter because she chases the rabbits to you and it makes hunting them a lot easier. When I take my dog out hunting I dont have to do much walking she chases the rabbits to me. I have seen alot of good dogs but my dog is my favorite.]]> 2020-09-21 16:56:07 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765110551 https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765137606 Narrative:  Hi I am 14 years old and I love to bake. I live in a small town and my mom works at the bakery here. And today is the day I get to start working with my mom! If you can’t tell I am really excited! So come along with me. Today I am just going to be making something simple but yummy, chocolate chip cookies! So I went in to get all the ingredients and I noticed there were no chocolate chips! So I went to talk to my mom and she said she would go and get more. So that meant I was all alone at the bakery! I was so nervous! But in the end it ended up being fine and I had an amazing day! Thanks for coming along with me on my fun filled day! Bye!


]]> 2020-09-21 17:01:40 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765137606 https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765140337 One day when I was walking home from the bus on a Thursday afternoon, a cat had walked across the road. Once the cat was on the other side it just sat down. I continued on my walk. I looked behind me to see the cat following me. After a while it stopped and quit moving. Eventually I  finished my walk home and told my mom.]]> 2020-09-21 17:02:14 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765140337 https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765140902 Narrative - One day when I was walking home from the bus on a Thursday afternoon, a cat had walked across the road. Once the cat was on the other side it just sat down. I continued on my walk. I looked behind me to see the cat following me. After a while it stopped and quit moving. Eventually I  finished my walk home and told my mom.]]> 2020-09-21 17:02:21 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/765140902 Narrative https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/790243782 I had a very productive day Friday. First i woke up, took a shower, and brushed my teeth. Then i got on and did some of my school work. After that i cleaned my room and made sure that i had made my 10,000 step goal. Finally, i brushed my teeth and went to bed.]]> 2020-09-30 04:46:24 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/790243782 Narrative by Arieona Mesa https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/805018896 After a time, tired by his dancing apparently, he settled on the window ledge in the sun, and, the queer spectacle being at an end, I forgot about him. Then, looking up, my eye was caught by him. He was trying to resume his dancing, but seemed either so stiff or so awkward that he could only flutter to the bottom of the window pane and when he tried to fly across it he failed. Being intent on other matters I watched these futile attempts for a time without thinking, unconsciously waiting for him to resume his flight, as one waits for a machine, that has stopped momentarily, to start again without considering the reason of its failure. After perhaps a seventh attempt he slipped from the wooden ledge and fell, fluttering his wings, on to his back on the window sill. ]]> 2020-10-05 23:46:31 UTC https://padlet.com/adavids8/dyz0irt6294nysn4/wish/805018896