In these rapidly changing times, the age demographic chart has strongly skewed to the teenager group age 💥 wc: hơi lộn chỗ -> toward the teenage demographic. Proponents believe that this propensity will modernize the society 💥 wc: bỏ "the" cho tự nhiên hơn -> society owing to the growth of the number of young adults 💥 wc -> in the youth population; on the other hand, critics insist that, with this tendency, elder citizen will 💥 gr: số nhiều mà -> elderly citizens will get left behind. Although the later 💥 sp: nhầm từ "muộn hơn" -> latter perspective seems justified, I am more inclined to the former view point 💥 sp: viết liền nhé -> viewpoint.

My practical argument in support of the benefit of more adolescents has to do with the improvement in awareness of technology. Indeed, teenagers already had the access 💥 gr: thừa "the" nhé -> already had access to the modern medium when they were very young; therefore, more teenagers in the society 💥 wc: ko cần "the" -> society will mean more citizens are likely to get accustomed to the contemporary devices 💥 wc: -> modern devices. For instance, most of 💥 wc: bỏ "of" e nhé -> young people nowadays know how to use complex applications such as photo and video editing, online shopping, or even AI, which most of elder people 💥 gr: đảo trật tự từ -> elderly people will struggle with. Essentially, with the rise of young citizen 💥 gr: số nhiều e -> citizens, our community will, surely, be well aware of new technology; thus, it will foster our daily life.

Despite this, opponents argue that, with this trend, elder citizens will get retrogressive 💥 wc: từ này ko hợp lắm -> left behind. When the ratio of old to young people is not relatively balanced, teenagers will probably overlook the old and only focus on their peers. However, this line of reasoning fails to acknowledge that with the force of modern life, most of elder citizens have 💥 gr: sai cấu trúc -> elderly citizens have started to learn how to use that technology properly, partly because social media and apps are now designed to be intuitive; some of them can also talk to those young adults as if they are the same age. That is not to mention that their offspring will probably help them when they cannot catch up with this modern life. Even if the age ratio inclines to teenagers 💥 gr: phải là "toward" -> toward teenagers, every citizen groups 💥 gr: "citizen groups" nghe kỳ -> group of citizens will possibly 💥 wc: ko cần từ này -> likely get along with each other easily.

In conclusion, the increase of young adults offers both positive and negative effects to the community 💥 wc: redundant -> on society. The benefits of it definitely overshadows 💥 gr: subject-verb agreement -> overshadow its drawbacks.

🟥TR: 6.5
Bài viết đạt được sự nhất quán trong việc phát triển lập luận chính về sự gia tăng của giới trẻ, nhưng một số ý vẫn chưa được triển khai rõ ràng. Để tăng điểm, e có thể làm sâu thêm lập luận về những lợi ích công nghệ mà thế hệ trẻ mang lại, bằng cách đề cập đến việc họ không chỉ quen với công nghệ mà còn phát triển nó. Ví dụ, "Beyond using current technology, young people are also leading the way in innovation, creating new tools and apps that shape our future."

🟥CC: 6.5
Cấu trúc bài viết có kết nối nhưng có vài đoạn thiếu sự liền mạch. Phần kết nối giữa hai lập luận nên rõ ràng hơn, ví dụ như "Nevertheless, while young adults excel in technology, this shift in demographics also raises concerns about the elderly being left behind." Ngoài ra, câu kết bài nên được củng cố bằng cách nhấn mạnh sự tương hỗ giữa các thế hệ thay vì chỉ nói về lợi ích của giới trẻ.

🟥VC: 6.0
Từ vựng của bài viết có phần lặp lại và chưa phong phú. Những cụm từ như "elder citizens" lặp lại nhiều lần, thay vào đó e có thể sử dụng "the elderly" hay "older generations" để đa dạng ngôn ngữ. Để tăng tính tranh luận, e có thể sử dụng những từ như "undeniably" hay "unquestionably" trong bài viết để làm nổi bật lập luận của mình. Ví dụ, "Undeniably, the increase in young adults leads to more technological awareness."

🟥GR: 5.5
Ngữ pháp trong bài còn nhiều lỗi cơ bản như số ít số nhiều và giới từ. Những lỗi này thường làm giảm điểm ngữ pháp của bài. E cần chú ý đến cách dùng "elderly" thay vì "elder" và chú ý đến sự hòa hợp giữa chủ ngữ và động từ. Ngoài ra, e có thể thêm các câu phức và đa dạng hóa cấu trúc câu để đạt điểm cao hơn.

The chart provided compares the production levels of coal, natural gas, and petroleum in the UK over the period of nearly two decades from 1981 to 2000. Overall, it is evident that while the production of natural gas and petroleum increased notably over time, the decline in coal production was particularly significant.

Starting at 💥 (gr -> In) 1981, petroleum took the precedence in the energy industry 💥 (wc -> dominated the energy industry), produced 💥 (gr: wrong verb tense – try -> producing) 90 million energy units, then it kept increasing and peaked at 1986 💥 (gr -> then it continued to increase and peaked in 1986) with 140 million energy units. Although it witnessed a considerable drop 💥 (wc -> saw a significant decrease) a few years later, in the next five years, it recovered to the same figure as 1986. Following with this trend 💥 (wc -> Following a similar pattern), natural gas production also experienced a substantial rise in 1991, surpassing coal's production the year after, despite remaining unchanged in the first ten years 💥 (gr -> remaining stable for the first ten years).

Unlike the mentioned trend 💥 (wc -> this upward trend), coal energy production exhibited 💥 (wc -> showed) a sharp fall in 1984, bringing it down to the same level as natural gas. In spite of a slight recovery in 1986, it kept progressively dropping 💥 (g -> continued to decline steadily) after that, falling behind natural gas production in 1992 and continuing to decrease until 2000.

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The chart illustrates the production trends of coal, natural gas, and petroleum in the UK from 1981 to 2000. Overall, natural gas and petroleum production saw marked increases, while coal production faced a steep decline during this period.

In 1981, petroleum dominated the energy sector with a production level of 90 million energy units. This figure steadily climbed and reached a peak of 140 million units in 1986. Although petroleum production experienced a notable drop in the following years, it rebounded within five years, returning to the peak levels of 1986. Similarly, natural gas production remained stable for the first decade but witnessed a significant rise in 1991, surpassing coal production in the subsequent year.

By contrast, coal production showed a sharp decline in 1984, leveling with natural gas output. Despite a brief recovery in 1986, coal production steadily decreased after 1992, falling further behind both petroleum and natural gas, and continued to drop until the year 2000.

The two maps compare the changes which have been taken place 💥 (gr -> that have taken place) in Liverton docks between the year 1980 and today 💥 (wc -> the present). Overall, it appears that the docks have been shifted towards 💥 (wc -> transformed into) a much more vibrant and dynamic area, with more accommodations and more entertaining places 💥 (wc: 'entertaining places' is vague -> recreational facilities).

The area that has been the biggest improvements 💥 (gr: awkward phrasing – try -> seen the most significant improvements) is entertainment. One significant transformative 💥 (wc -> transformation) is that a completely new kid’s playing area 💥 (wc -> children's playground) has been constructed, taking the place of 💥 (wc -> replacing) the old warehouse. The crane between the two old warehouses has also been demolished to erect a sailing club, creating a place for adults to amuse 💥 (wc -> entertain) themselves next to the kid’s 💥 ( informal -> children's) area. Another interesting transformation is that left warehouse 💥 (gr -> the warehouse on the left) has been converted into an educational center, which turns that area to contain both educational and entertaining facilities 💥 (gr: which has added educational functions alongside recreational facilities). If we look at the river, it can be seen that the number of ships has declined to one ship only, which is 💥 (wc namely) the museum ship, favoring 💥 (wc -> supporting the educational function of the center next to it).

As for the other side of the river, another crane has also been pulled down 💥 (wc -> demolished) and replaced by a hotel for tourists to visit this place. Next to the hotel, a warehouse has also been turned into apartments, creating an accommodation 💥 (gr -> accommodation) for people who want to live in that area. A parking lot has also been added, facilitating people to live in the apartments 💥 (gr -> providing convenience for residents). Finally, in order to help people to get to 💥 (wc -> access) the entertainment area, a bridge has been set up 💥 (wc -> constructed) along with the flood barrier, making the place more modernized 💥 (wc -> modernizing the area).

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The two maps illustrate the significant changes that have taken place in Liverton docks between 1980 and the present. Overall, the area has undergone a substantial transformation, evolving into a vibrant and dynamic hub with increased accommodation options and expanded recreational facilities.

The most notable improvements have occurred in the entertainment sector. A remarkable transformation includes the construction of a new children's playground, replacing the former warehouse. In addition, the crane between the two old warehouses has been removed to make way for a sailing club, providing adults with recreational activities adjacent to the children's area. Moreover, the warehouse on the left has been repurposed into an educational center, thus blending educational and entertainment functions in the same vicinity. On the river, the number of ships has reduced to just one, the museum ship, complementing the educational nature of the nearby center.

Across the river, another crane has been replaced by a hotel, catering to tourists. Adjacent to the hotel, a warehouse has been converted into apartments, offering new residential accommodations in the area. A parking lot has also been added, enhancing convenience for residents. Finally, a bridge has been constructed alongside a flood barrier to improve access to the entertainment area, further modernizing the docks.

Given that technology devices is 💥 gr: số nhiều nên phải là -> are democratized these days, the question about whether it negatively affects social rapport dances on edge 💥 wc: sẽ bị trừ điểm nếu em dùng từ hay nhưng ngữ pháp sai nhiều -> at the forefront of many debates. Although supporters insist that it makes us alienate 💥 gr: ngược, phải bị động -> alienates us from each other by lessening face-to-face meetings, I believe that those devices surely foster our connections as we can easily interact with our acquaintances.

One justification in favor of the advantages of contemporary communication methods has to do with its 💥 gr: sai đại từ rồi -> their convenience. Indeed, modern equipment facilitates people to communicate to their 💥 wc: "to communicate with" mới đúng -> people to communicate with their friends or family in case they are far away or they are not entitled to go outside like during the pandemic. We need not look further than the case of zoom, an application helping friends, companies and schools meet many people at one during the covid-19 💥 wc: sắp xếp lộn xộn -> For instance, Zoom, an application that helped friends, companies, and schools meet simultaneously during COVID-19, illustrates this well. Thus, not only does it stifle our social rapport but it also enhances 💥 wc: stifle với enhance ngược nhau -> fail to stifle our social rapport, but it also enhances our connection. In essence, were we not to have those modern devices, it would be much tougher to remain our social rapport 💥 wc: remain cái gì đó ko hợp -> maintain our social rapport with everyone.

Despite this, critics argue that those new communication applications diminish in-real-life 💥 wc: ko tự nhiên, dùng offline/face-to-face -> face-to-face meetings and, as the 💥 gr: bỏ "the" nhé e -> as a result, it hinders our connection. However, this line of reasoning fails to acknowledge that regardless of how modern those applications are, online meetings will not likely to take 💥 gr: "to" sai -> likely take the place of face-to-face ones to 💥 gr: for mới hợp lý -> for most people. This is because offline talks help us see our friends in person and even hang out with them, which online meetings will never have 💥 gr: cấu trúc ngược -> can never provide. Essentially, modern technology also helps us to hold appointments conveniently, so it does not stifle in-real-life 💥 wc: lại đổi thành "face-to-face" nhé -> face-to-face meetings at all.

To conclude, contrary to the belief that modern communication ways 💥 wc: awkward -> methods disturb our social rapport, it actually enhances our relationships if we know how to use it properly.

🟥TR: 6.5
Bài viết đạt được sự nhất quán về ý tưởng và triển khai tốt lập luận chính, nhưng có một số đoạn chưa được phát triển đầy đủ. E cần mở rộng thêm các ví dụ và giải thích sâu hơn về tác động của công nghệ hiện đại đến mối quan hệ xã hội. Ví dụ, chỗ "helps us to hold appointments conveniently" có thể thêm chi tiết về cách thức nó giúp tổ chức cuộc họp, từ đó nhấn mạnh rằng công nghệ có tác động tích cực. Có thể thêm câu "All too often, online meetings bridge the gap for those unable to meet in person, ensuring that relationships remain strong."

🟥CC: 6.5
Cấu trúc bài viết tương đối ổn nhưng vẫn có thể cải thiện bằng cách làm rõ sự liên kết giữa các đoạn. Phần chuyển đoạn từ "advantages of contemporary communication" sang "critics argue that" cần có sự kết nối ngầm tốt hơn, chẳng hạn như "Nevertheless, despite these advantages, some critics..." Cũng nên phát triển phần phản biện với những ví dụ rõ ràng hơn, thay vì chỉ đưa ra ý kiến chung.

🟥VC: 6.0
Từ vựng sử dụng trong bài vẫn còn nhiều chỗ chưa tự nhiên và bị forced. Để tăng cường tính tranh luận, e cũng nên bổ sung thêm một số từ mạnh hơn, như "unquestionably" hoặc "decidedly," ví dụ: "modern technology decidedly enhances our communication abilities."

🟥GR: 5.5
Ngữ pháp trong bài còn nhiều lỗi cơ bản như việc dùng sai thì, số ít số nhiều, và giới từ. Những lỗi này khá phổ biến và làm giảm điểm ngữ pháp đáng kể. Để cải thiện, e cần chú ý đến cách sử dụng từ "are" cho số nhiều và cẩn thận với cách dùng thì trong câu điều kiện. E có thể luyện thêm cấu trúc câu phức để tránh lỗi lặp.

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To be honest I'm not really thrilled with that anymore. I have to admit that, I used to dream of going outer space 💥 gr -> going to outer space in the future. I watched plethora videos 💥 gr -> a plethora of videos abt 💥 sp -> about it and it had never failed 💥 vt -> never failed to entertain me. Fast forward to now, I realize that there are tons of things that I have to cope with, that's why 💥 wc: cụm này hơi thừa, cắt đi cho gọn -> so going to outer space doesn't take my priority anymore.

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Tbh, I'm not really into those movies. Well, I'm a practical person, so I feel kind of futile 💥 wc -> pointless when watching things that might never happen in real life. Meanwhile, most of 💥 gr: -> most things happening in sci-fi movies are out of the questions 💥 gr -> out of the question currently 💥 and possibly in the future. Granted, it has some majestic scenes relating to space, however 💥 gr -> but it does not amuse me at all.

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PART 1: câu hỏi về bản thân (5 câu, khác chủ điểm, mỗi câu hỏi, thí sinh trả lời trong 4 câu)

VD câu hỏi p1: do you work or are you a student? 

PART 2: topic nói liền tù tì trong vòng 2 phút (có đc chuẩn bị 1 phút - take note trên giấy các từ đã học về chủ điểm)

PART 3: câu hỏi về vấn đề xã hội nhưng liên quan tới chủ điểm part 2. 

CÁC BƯỚC CẦN LÀM KHI HỌC SPEAKING:

• làm quen với câu hỏi (đọc hết)

• soạn ý

• cô giúp chuyển ý sang tiếng Anh tốt (spoken language, phrasal V, ghi điểm từ + ngữ pháp)

• em tập bản cô đã chuyển ý

• em tập diễn sao cho tự nhiên ko lộ học thuộc

** lộ học thuộc -1 band điểm

** câu trả lời nhàm -1 band điểm

5 KĨ THUẬT TRIỂN KHAI Ý (speaking part 1 + part 3)

• bây giờ thì -- sau này --

• hồi xưa thì -- nhưng bây giờ --

• tôi là loại người mà -- nhưng tôi --

• mọi người cứ bảo -- nhưng tôi thấy --- = văn hóa VN thì -- nhưng tôi --

• còn tùy... Khi mà A... Khi mà B...

  
  

VÍ DỤ CÂU TRẢ LỜI: Do you like science?

• Well absolutely yes.

• Hồi xưa thì ko đâu nhé, tôi luôn nghĩ sciecne là khô khan, nặng lý thuyết. Mà đúng là thế thật, học sciecne ở trg pt VN ko hay.

• Tuy nhiên từ hồi sv khi tôi đi làm thêm, dịch nhiều phim tài liệu khoa học, trái đất, môi trường, -> yêu khoa học hơn, nó là nhg thứ xung quanh ta.

Oh, absolutely yes! 

Back in the day, though? No way! I always thought science was super dry and way too theoretical. And honestly, it was exactly like that—science classes in Vietnamese schools were pretty dull. But things changed when I started freelancing during college. I ended up translating tons of science documentaries about Earth and the environment, and that’s when I really started to get into it. I realized science is all around us, and it's way more fascinating than I’d ever imagined.

Do you often visit your hometown?

Hải: mọi người bảo

Hạnh: tôi loại người

Duy: văn hóa Vn

• Sharing things: Do you often share things with other people? What kinds of things do you usually share?

• Pens and pencils: Do you prefer using pens or pencils? Why?

• News: How often do you read or watch the news? What kind of news interests you?

• Science: Did you enjoy science lessons at school? Why or why not?

• Libraries: Do you think libraries are still important in the digital age? Why?

• Languages: How many languages can you speak? Which one is the most difficult for you?

• Art: Have you ever tried creating any form of art yourself? What kind?

• Weekends: What do you usually do on the weekend? Do you prefer to relax or be active?

• Staying up: Do you often stay up late? What do you usually do when you stay up late?

• Music and musical instruments: Can you play any musical instruments? How long have you been playing it?

• Films: Do you prefer watching films at home or in the cinema? Why?

Thức muộn học lại gần như từ đầu kì 2 môn hóa trong sách vì hầu hết các tiết hóa thì lại đi làm những môn chuyên của khối mình như là toán, anh, lý. Ban đầu thì cũng định chỉ kiếm đủ điểm qua môn này thôi, nhưng mà vài ngày trc đấy nghe tin là có 1 số trường đh xét học bạ, nên là muốn có học bạ đẹp.

Hôm đấy thì chỉ có tôi ở nhà nên là tôi có lễ đã phải thi riêng lại môn này nếu như ko có sự giúp đỡ của bạn tôi, cậu ấy đã xin cô đi vs ngay trc khi phát đề để và gọi cho tôi để đi thi. Thật may là khi tôi đến thì chỉ bị mất có 15p thôi và giáo viên cũng chấp nhận tôi vào thi, cộng với đó, là đề cũng cơ bản nên tôi cũng đc 9 điểm

Qua lần đó, thì tôi thấy là tốt nhất thì tôi nên chuẩn bị kĩ một kế hoạch nhất định thay vì tùy cơ ứng biến với những thứ xung quanh

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When it comes to my end-of-term chemistry exam (kiểm tra môn hóa cuối kì 2) back in 11th grade, that was a wild ride.

I had to stay up late (thức khuya) and basically cram from scratch (học lại gần như từ đầu) for chemistry because I’d spent most of the semester focusing on my core subjects like math, English, and physics. At first, I was just aiming to scrape by (kiếm đủ điểm qua môn), but a few days before the exam, I heard that some universities were actually considering grades from the whole year, so I figured, "Why not shoot for a better transcript (làm đẹp học bạ)?"

That day, I was the only one at home, and honestly, I would’ve had to resit the exam (thi lại môn này) if it hadn’t been for my friend. He pulled off this genius move—right before the test started, he asked to go to the bathroom, then quickly called me to get my act together (chuẩn bị nhanh) and head over. Luckily, when I arrived, I’d only missed about 15 minutes, and the teacher was cool enough to let me in. To top it off, the test was pretty basic, so I managed to snag (được luôn) 9 points.

That experience taught me a solid lesson—it's way better to have a plan in place (chuẩn bị kĩ lưỡng) than just wing it (tùy cơ ứng biến) and hope for the best!

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To be honest, don't usually share my stuffs with other people 💥 gr: chủ ngữ đâu rồi e? 😅 thiếu động từ -> I don’t usually share my stuff with other people, even if they are my friends. Normally, we are taught to be generous because it helps us build our personalities and it mutually benefit both side 💥 gr -> it mutually benefits both sides. That being said, I think people are likely to take advantage of us if we keep being too kind to them.

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Well I'd say pens take my preference. I'm a convenience-oriented person, so I want things in my life don't be too cumbersome 💥 gr: chưa chia động từ đúng -> things in my life not to be too cumbersome and pens meet my requirement 💥 wf: -> requirements. Granted, It will be out of ink eventually 💥 sp: => it, but it takes longer to happen than pencil nibs being deformed 💥 wc -> wearing down. So I have less thing 💥 gr: -> fewer things to do if I use pens rather than pencils.

Honestly, I don't watch or read news that much. Actually, gen z like us don't do it in our daily basis 💥 gr: -> Gen Z like us don't do it on a daily basis, i think it is because our attention spans have plummeted 💥 -> I think it's because our attention spans have been decreasing. Having said that, there are some news lingering me like football transferring news or celebrity scandal 💥 gr: lingering sai nghĩa em ạ, kiểu như linger là dai dẳng ko phù hợp với tin tức -> there is some news that catches my attention like football transfer news or celebrity scandals. Those football news 💥 gr -> That football news is related to my hobbies, and scandals are always amusing as you can also see people reactions 💥 gr: cần sở hữu cách e ạ -> people's reactions in the comment section. So I don't see any reasons to not watch it 💥 gr: -> not to watch it.

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Frankly speaking, I really detest science lessons, especially chemistry. Back in the day I was just starting out with chemistry, I used to expect being taught abt 💥 gr -> expect to be taught about practicing making cool substances. But it barely has anything like that in our curriculum 💥 gr: đây là kiểu như vật lý hóa học hả? Ko rõ ràng lắm e ạ -> barely includes anything like that in our curriculum. Fast forward to now, in my senior year, we still have to learn tons of theory rather than practicing 💥 wf -> practice, and on top of that, i'm 💥 -> I'm struggling to grasp those knowledge 💥 gr: knowledge ko đếm đc mà phải dùng this/that em ạ -> this knowledge and might get bad grades in the subject.

My parents checked in on me, but I reassured them I was doing just fine. Luckily (may mắn thay), my mom had left some food in the fridge and told me to go ahead and use it, which meant I had a little stash to cook from. During the holiday, I cooked for myself, washed my own dishes, and even did my laundry – things I didn’t do much when everyone was around. It’s kind of ironic (khá nực cười) because I ended up doing way more chores during the break than on a regular day. When the lockdown lifted, so did the holiday, meaning I didn’t get to make bánh chưng, celebrate New Year's Eve, or most importantly, score any lucky money.

Still, that whole experience taught me a lot about being more responsible and how to get by on my own. I did miss out on (đánh đổi cả) the whole traditional Tết thing, but I honestly feel like it was worth it in the end. It might sound silly, but (nghe có vẻ ngớ ngẩn nhưng) I think that first solo Tết helped me grow up a bit faster.

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Honestly, I still think libraries are super important, even in this modern age. Sure, most of the books you find in libraries are also available online, but there’s something about libraries that online reading just can’t offer. For one, reading in a library lets you meet people who share the same hobby—something you’ll never get reading online. Plus, libraries give you a quiet space and the right atmosphere to read, whereas reading online makes it way too easy to get distracted.

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Well, I can only speak two languages—English and Vietnamese. Vietnamese is obviously my first language, but honestly, I don’t think speaking English is any harder, if not a bit easier, than speaking Vietnamese. Actually, I got into English about three years ago because it has a ton of adjectives to describe things and some pretty cool idioms. Since then, I switched all my social media to English, started watching English-speaking channels, and binging movies with English subtitles. That’s why now I have no problem speaking English

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Honestly, no, I haven't. Granted, I'm really keen on music, but to create one 💥 wc: -> to create it is a different story. The best thing I could do with art is like covering 💥 wc: 'like' ko hợp ngữ cảnh -> something like covering famous songs, but I don't really thing 💥 sp: từ này là 'think' mà ko phải 'thing' nha e -> think it counts as creating an art 💥 gr: 'art' ko đếm đc -> creating art because it is just simply reciting the lyrics, not devising a lyrics 💥 gr: 'lyrics' số nhiều mà e dùng sai form rồi -> devising lyrics.

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Honestly, no, I haven’t. Granted, I’m really into music, but actually creating something is a whole different story. The best I can do with art is covering famous songs, but I don’t really think that counts as creating art, since it’s just repeating the lyrics, not coming up with them.

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Well, recently, I'd go for being productive 💥 gr: ko hợp thì quá khứ đơn ở đây -> I've started being productive in the weekends 💥 gr: giới từ phải là 'on' -> on the weekends. Back in the day when I was like 12 or 13, when I was aimless for my future 💥 -> about my future, all I did in the weekends 💥 gr: lại sai giới từ rồi -> on the weekends were pretty much sleeping or playing video games. Fast forward to now, my senior year, weekends are precious opportunities to learn and improve my IELTS, as most of the remaining days of the week, I have to preoccupy abt 💥 wc + sp: 'preoccupied with' chứ ko phải 'preoccupy' -> I'm preoccupied with high school s 💥 sp -> high school assignments.

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Well, lately, I’ve started being productive on the weekends. Back to the day when I was 12 or 13, totally clueless about my future, all I did on weekends was pretty much sleep or play video games. Fast forward to now, in my senior year, weekends have become golden opportunities to work on my IELTS, since most weekdays I’m caught up with high school assignments

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Honestly, I stay up late every night these days. Back when I first started high school two years ago, I always hit the sack (đi ngủ) before 11 pm because I didn’t have much to do at night—just some school assignments. Fast forward to now, my last year, and I’ve got IELTS to tackle as well. One night, I stayed up until 2 am and woke up at 11 am, and since then, my sleep schedule has been totally messed up. Now, I can’t fall asleep before 2 am, and while waiting for that time, I mostly study IELTS since it feels like a waste to do anything else.

I) đặc điểm đề:

• gồm có các cột đứng riêng hoặc xếp theo nhóm diễn tả độ cao thấp của số liệu

• đề cũng có thể đc kết hợp vs table và pie

• cần gọi ra sự khác biệt

II) loại bar chart có trục time mở gồm 2 câu tên đồ thị + xu hướng chung

thân gồm 2 đoạn 3 đến 4 câu

Đoạn 2 tả điểm thời gian cuối cùng, cũng đi từ cao nhất đến thấp nhất, cũng dùng ngôn ngữ xếp hạng + sử dụng ngôn ngữ tăng giảm theo thời gian để diễn đạt số liệu

Thân 1: Xếp hạng các cộ trong nhóm, nhóm các pattern với nhau

Thân 2: còn lại

1) Table có trục thời gian: tưởng tượng số liệu theo line graph, dùng ngôn ngữ của trend tăng giảm để diễn đạt số liệu

2) Table ko có trục thời gian: thao tác phân tích số liệu giống bar chart

Ngôn ngữ điển hình là so sánh và xếp hạng

Mở: 2 câu: tên đồ thị - nhận xét chung (gọi ra cột lớn nhật ở tất cả các nhóm)

Thân (2 đoạn) mỗi đoạn 3 câu. cơ xở là xếp hạng số liệu trc và từ đó tìm ra pattern

Đoạn 1: chuyên nhất bét hoặc nhất nhì ba (ngôn ngữ so sánh và xếp hạng) tả yếu tố sau phải quàng vào yếu tố trước. chỉ gọi ra số liệu nổi trội nhất để trích dẫn thôi

Đoạn 2: tả còn lại

Nếu có cột tổng thì chỉ phân tích tổng, cộ con tóm vào xu hướng overall

In England, for example, more young people (50% of the sample) play Computer Games than any other activity with 20% of young people participating in Reading, 25% in Board Games and 30% in Watching TV. A similar pattern is repeated in Ireland, but here the percentage of those playing Computer Games is higher than in England at 60% with Reading the lowest at 10%, Board Games at 20% and Watching TV at 30%.

Computer Games come top in Scotland as well with a 40 per cent participation rate, but, unlike England and Ireland, the percentage involved in Reading is greater at 25% as opposed to 20% and 10% respectively. In Wales, Computing Games comes out first at 50%, but involvement in Reading is the lowest of the four countries at under 10% with Watching TV and Board Games equal at 30%

The most important sector was Manufacturing, where profits nearly doubled from 1986 to 1989 to peak as $8.6 billion, followed by Mining, where profits reached almost $5 billion in 1989-90, after fluctuating just below $4 billion for the previous three years. Profits in Retail Trade also grew strongly during the four-year period, doubling to just below $1.4 billion. In other industries, there was a steady growth in profits for three years from $1.2 billion to almost $1.7 billion, followed by a crash to below $0.4 billion in 1989-90.

The table indicates that the year 1989 was a turning point for the Australian economy. After consistent rises from 1986 to 1989, profits in Retail Trade levelled off in 1989-90, (4 - adbc). Only Mining, where profits had been steady during 1986-89, showed a significant rise in profits in 1989-90.

The bar chart demonstrates the information about the proportions 💥 wc: demonstrate dùng cho đề có hình vẽ em ạ. VẼ. -> shows the proportion of spending for five primary types in the United States, the United Kingdom, Canada, and Japan in 2009. As is evident, most of their expenditures were allocated to housing, while the opposite was true for healthcare.

In the United States, for example, more money (26%) was spent on accommodations than any other aspects, with 18% of their spending was on transporting 💥 gr: "with" dùng sai cấu trúc -> spent on transportation, 14% on food, and half of that on healthcare and clothing, with the lowest at 4%. A fairly similar pattern was repeated in Canada, but here the percentage of spending on accommodations was lower than in the United States at 21%. Second and third places were also transportation, at 20%, and food, at 15%. However, clothing tool 💥 sp-> took fourth place, accounting for 6% of their expenditure, meaning healthcare was the most overlooked aspect in Canada, at a mere 4%.

Accommodation also topped in the United Kingdom with a 24% spending rate, but unlike the upward pattern in other countries, the percentage of spending on food was 20%, which was greater than its 15% transportation allocation. Meanwhile, clothing and healthcare accounted for 6% and 1%, respectively, of UK people's spending. In contrast to the other countries, food took priority for Japanese people, with 23% of spending. They also allocated 22% of their money to accommodations, 10% to transportation, 4% to clothing, and the lowest spending was on healthcare at 4%.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportions of expenditure on five primary categories across four countries: the United States, the United Kingdom, Canada, and Japan in 2009. Overall, housing consistently represented the largest portion of spending, except in Japan where food dominated. Healthcare was the least prioritized category across all countries.

In the United States, 26% of spending went to housing, the highest among all categories. Transportation followed at 18%, while 14% was spent on food. Healthcare and clothing shared the lowest percentage at 7% combined, with clothing accounting for just 4%. Similarly, in Canada, housing represented 21% of total spending, though transportation and food were closely behind at 20% and 15%, respectively. Clothing took 6%, while healthcare received minimal attention with just 4%.

In the United Kingdom, housing topped expenditures at 24%, but food was a significant outlier, taking up 20%—higher than transportation at 15%. Clothing and healthcare comprised smaller portions, at 6% and 1%, respectively. Japan presented a different trend, where food accounted for 23% of spending, surpassing housing at 22%. Transportation, clothing, and healthcare followed, with the latter two receiving the least attention at 4% each.

Em rất thông minh, tiếp thu bài nhanh. Vậy em chịu khó CHÉP TAY bản improved để học từ tốt của nó nhé. Em sẽ lên trình nhanh.

The table displays the cost expense 💥 of water in five selected cities in Australia. Overall, it is evident that all of the average bills in the cities are above over 💥 309 dollars, except for Melbourne.

Perth city obtained the top ranking in average bills with 332 dollars. The same applies 💥 is also true dùng cho lập luận, chứng minh, luận -> applies to their price of water over 125KL at 1.50 dollars per kiloliter. However, the city's price for water under 125KL is 💥 the lowest in the category. In stark contrast, Melbourne ranked the lowest in terms of average bill as well as the cost for water over 125KL, with 253 dollars for the average bill and 0.78 dollars per kiloliter. Its cost for water up to 125KL is 💥 the same as that for over 125KL.

Sydney, Adelaide, and Brisbane demonstrate comparable indicators, with Sydney emerging as the leader in both the average bill and water expense up to 125KL among the trio. It is noteworthy that Sydney also has the same water cost for over 125KL, which is higher than Brisbane and Melbourne, but slightly lower than Adelaide's by 2 cents.

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The table shows the water costs in five cities in Australia, focusing on both average bills and water usage prices above and below 125KL. Overall, the data reveals that Perth has the highest water bills, while Melbourne consistently ranks the lowest across all categories.

In Perth, the average water bill stands at 332 dollars, the highest among the cities. Additionally, its water cost over 125KL is 1.50 dollars per kiloliter. Interestingly, despite having the highest average bill, Perth's price for water below 125KL is the lowest across all cities. On the other hand, Melbourne exhibits the lowest figures, with an average bill of just 253 dollars and a water cost of 0.78 dollars per kiloliter for both under and over 125KL usage.

Sydney, Adelaide, and Brisbane have more comparable costs. Sydney leads the trio with the highest average bill and water cost for up to 125KL, while its cost for water over 125KL is the same as Adelaide’s but still higher than Brisbane and Melbourne. Adelaide's water cost over 125KL is slightly higher by 2 cents, making it more expensive in this category.

"The table shows the quantity of temporary emigrant 💥 wc: đúng ra phải là 'immigrant' em nhé, vì đang nói về người nhập cư workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of the 💥 gr: bỏ 'the' vì không cần thiết workers per 1000 resident 💥 gr: phải là 'residents' vì số nhiều in these countries in 2006 only. Overall, these countries had more of the 💥 redundant: bỏ 'of the' để câu gọn hơn workers over three 💥 wc: nên dùng 'the three' hoặc 'these' years.

The United States attracted the most migrant workers in 2003, outnumbering the rest in that time 💥 phrasing: 'during that period' nghe tự nhiên hơn. The closest one behind the US was Australia with 152000 💥 spelling: nên viết '152,000' cho rõ ràng workers in that time 💥 redundant: bỏ cụm này vì không cần thiết. The United Kingdom followed with 15000 worker less 💥 gr: phải là '15,000 fewer workers' vì 'fewer' đi với danh từ đếm được số nhiều than Australia. On the other hand, New Zealand exhibits 💥 vt: nên dùng thì quá khứ 'exhibited' vì đang nói về năm 2003 the lowest figure with only 65000 💥 spelling: '65,000' migrant workers in 2003, which is less than half of the workers in the UK 💥 phrasing: 'the number of workers in the UK' thì rõ ràng hơn.

2006 showcased a growth of emigrant labors 💥 wc: 'immigrant workers' sẽ phù hợp hơn in all countries. The US kept the lead after a significant increase of 💥 prep: nên dùng 'in' thay vì 'of' foreign labors 💥 spelling: 'labor' là danh từ không đếm được, không cần số nhiều; however, it only accounted for a small fraction in 💥 prep: phải là 'of' its residents, with one in 500 people being the workers 💥 gr: bỏ 'the' vì không cần thiết. Notably, the number of foreign workers in the UK surpassed Australia’ 💥 gr: thiếu sở hữu cách, phải là 'Australia's', but it merely distributed 💥 wc: 'constituted' hoặc 'comprised' hợp lý hơn one in 250 UK residents. While 💥 gr: câu này thiếu chủ ngữ, nên dùng 'Although' hoặc tách câu Australia, despite being passed by the UK, its migrant workers appeared one in 100 people 💥 phrasing: 'had one migrant worker per 100 people', this, however, was not the greatest fraction in 2006. New Zealand, experiencing a slight growth in foreign workers, had the greatest rate of these workers in the society 💥 redundant: bỏ cụm này vì không cần thiết, with 1 foreign worker in every 50 people.

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The table provides useful insights into the number of temporary immigrant workers in four countries—the United States, Australia, the United Kingdom, and New Zealand—in 2003 and 2006, along with the number of these workers per 1,000 residents in 2006 only. Overall, the trend is clear among these nations: they all experienced an increase in foreign labor over the three-year period, with New Zealand having the highest proportion relative to its population.

In 2003, the United States attracted by far the most migrant workers, totaling 250,000, thereby outnumbering the other countries by a wide margin. Australia followed suit with 152,000 workers, just 15,000 more than the United Kingdom, which reported 137,000 workers. New Zealand had the lowest figure, with only 65,000 migrant workers, less than half the number in the UK.

By 2006, the dynamics shifted slightly. The US maintained its lead, with the number of foreign workers increasing to 280,000. However, when considering the demographic trends, this was a mere one in 500 residents. Notably, the UK surpassed Australia's total, boasting 170,000 foreign workers compared to Australia's 160,000. Yet, Australia's migrant workforce was much more pronounced, with one in 100 people being a foreign worker. New Zealand, although having the smallest total number at 70,000, had the highest share relative to its population, with one foreign worker in every 50 people, indicating a fast-growing demographic shift.

Given the increase in people morality 💥 wc: nghe ko tự nhiên e ạ, phải là 'people's awareness of morality' hoặc 'public morality' , many tourists have tried their best to be ethical travelers by preserving both environment and culture of tourist areas. Despite this, some people still insist that being a responsible tourist is not probable 💥 wc: 'probable' nghĩa là 'có thể xảy ra', nhưng ở đây nên dùng 'possible' để hợp hơn e . Although I do see some inevitable problems regarding 💥 wc: dùng 'associated with' nghe hay hơn e tourists, I am convinced that with some practical activities protecting and promoting those places 💥 wc: dài dòng quá e, có thể dùng 'measures to protect and promote those places' cho gọn , being a responsible tourist is feasible.

My practical argument in support of the feasibility of responsible tourist 💥 wf: phải là 'tourism' chứ e, 'tourist' là người du lịch has to do with ecotourism. Basically, ecotourism is a form of nature-oriented tourism where travelers can immerge 💥 sp: 'immerse' chứ ko phải 'immerge' e ạ in the nature of local places. Not only this form of travel ties to protecting places’ environment 💥 gr: câu này đảo ngữ 'Not only does this form of travel tie to...' mới đúng e by using eco-friendly lodgings and minimizing carbon footprint, which will curb environmental degradation, but it also retains customers’ satisfaction, helping them to adopt this kind of green initiative. To see this, we need not look further than the case of Japan, where travelers enjoy visiting its rain forests or indulge 💥 gr: phải là 'indulge in' e ạ hot springs and tourists have preserved its nature as well as its culture for decades without any complains 💥 sp: 'complaints' mới đúng e ạ . In essence, ecological tourism plays an indispensable role in the possibility of responsible tourism owing to its unique traveling 💥 wf: 'travel experiences' nghe hợp hơn e and its needlessness of carbon releasing accommodations 💥 wc: nghe kỳ quá e, có thể nói 'lack of need for carbon-emitting accommodations' .

Despite this, opponents argue that over tourism 💥 wf: 'overtourism' là một từ e ạ is an inevitable issue of 💥 prep: 'in' hay 'with' hợp hơn e traveling, so we should fully enjoy what we paid 💥 vt: 'have paid' đúng thì hiện tại hoàn thành for. Indeed, in peak seasons, overcrowding is prone to occur engendering pollution. However, this line of reasoning fails to acknowledge that if travelers are trying to be responsible about traveling, environmental deterioration will hardly happen. As long as everyone has the mindset of protecting places they are visiting, problems regarding overcrowding will not be a big deal to the tourism 💥 gr: 'to tourism' thôi e, bỏ 'the' đi . Even if thousands of people are traveling every years 💥 gr: 'year' số ít thôi e , cultural or environmental aggravation 💥 wc: 'degradation' phù hợp hơn e ạ is not a main concern provided that responsibility is what travelers are striving for.

In conclusion, question 💥 gr: thiếu mạo từ 'the' trước 'question' e ạ about whether it is possible for tourists to preserve indigenous culture and nature is still the center 💥 gr: 'at the center' mới đúng e of debates about traveling. However, traveling innovations 💥 wf: 'innovations in tourism' nghe tự nhiên hơn e , like ecotourism, can justify the possibility of moral travelers.

🟥 TR (Task Response):

Bài viết có lập luận khá tốt khi nêu ra vai trò của ecotourism trong việc thúc đẩy du lịch có trách nhiệm. Tuy nhiên, để sâu sắc hơn, e nên mở rộng thêm về cách ecotourism tác động cụ thể đến môi trường và văn hóa địa phương. Thay vì chỉ đề cập đến việc sử dụng chỗ ở thân thiện với môi trường, e có thể nói về việc hỗ trợ cộng đồng địa phương và bảo tồn đa dạng sinh học.

Ví dụ:

"Ecotourism not only minimizes environmental impact by using sustainable accommodations but also promotes cultural preservation by engaging local communities in tourism activities."

🟥 CC (Coherence and Cohesion):

Bài viết mạch lạc, nhưng e có thể sử dụng thêm các từ nối và cụm từ liên kết để tăng tính liên kết giữa các ý tưởng. Ví dụ, khi chuyển từ quan điểm của đối thủ sang phản biện của mình, e có thể dùng cụm từ như "At odds with this perspective" để nhấn mạnh sự đối lập.

Ví dụ:

"At odds with this perspective, I believe that responsible tourism is not only possible but also essential for sustainable development."

Ngoài ra, e nên đảm bảo mỗi đoạn văn có câu chủ đề rõ ràng và các câu hỗ trợ liên quan chặt chẽ.

🟥 VC (Vocabulary):

Từ vựng của e tốt nhưng một số chỗ chưa chính xác hoặc chưa tự nhiên. Thay vì "needlessness of carbon releasing accommodations," dùng "without the need for carbon-emitting accommodations" sẽ tự nhiên hơn.

Gợi ý từ vựng tốt:

• "In light of" (trong bối cảnh)

• "Beyond question" (không còn nghi ngờ gì)

• "Indispensable" (không thể thiếu)

• "Environmental degradation" (suy thoái môi trường)

Câu ví dụ:

"In light of global environmental concerns, adopting responsible tourism practices is beyond question indispensable."

🟥 GR (Grammar):

Ngữ pháp của e khá ổn, có một số lỗi nhỏ về từ loại và cấu trúc câu. Em nên chú ý đến việc dùng đúng dạng từ và cấu trúc đảo ngữ để làm bài viết phong phú hơn.

Ví dụ:

"Not only does this form of travel protect the environment, but it also enhances tourists' satisfaction."

Other feedback:

🟦 Hook and Engagement: Có thể mở bài bằng một câu gây chú ý: "It goes without saying that tourism can harm the environment, but responsible travel is anything but unattainable."

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1. Are there any big rivers in your city?

   • There’s a pretty big river around my city—massive, actually—the Red River. It’s not just there for looks either, it really helps people with their farming, especially those who live nearby.

2. Do you consider rivers to be a place for picnics?

   • To be honest, I’ve never been on a picnic myself, but I’d imagine hanging out by a river could be pretty chill. You could fish with your buddies or just doze off while the breeze hits you. But the river better be clean, otherwise, it’s a no-go.

3. Are the rivers near where you live clean?

   • Honestly? Not at all. It’s gross. Too many people live around it, so lately, some folks have turned it into a dumping ground. Now, it just stinks, which is really annoying when I have to pass by.

4. Is the river a popular destination for young people in your city?

   • Well, the Red River is kind of iconic in my city. It splits the city in half, so yeah, everyone knows it, whether they’re young or old.

Weather

1. What kind of weather do you like the most?

   • I’m all about cloudy weather these days. A few months ago, I was into sunny days just so I could blast the AC, but now that I’ve overused it and it’s broken, I’m sticking with cloudy. It’s not too hot, not too cold—just perfect.

2. Does the weather affect your emotions?

   • It depends. If I’m home all day, it doesn’t bother me. But if I have to drag myself to school in pouring rain or under a blazing sun, I’m in a bad mood all day, no question.

3. What do you usually do when it is raining?

   • I’m usually home, so if it rains, I just keep doing whatever—homework, watching movies, reading, or maybe just napping. Nothing too exciting.

4. What kind of weather is suitable for a gathering?

   • Depends on what we’re doing. If it’s outdoors, cloudy weather would be perfect. If we’re hitting up the mall or arcade, anything but rain will do, since getting there in the rain is just a hassle.

Reading

1. Are you an intensive or extensive reader?

   • These days, I’m more of an intensive reader. Back when I first got into light novels, I’d skim through just to know what happens next. But now, since I’m in my senior year, I’ve changed my reading style to prep for IELTS.

2. Have you ever read self-help books?

   • Nah, I stick to light novels, comics, and IELTS stuff. Not to brag, but I’m pretty good at solving problems on my own. I’ve winged a few math tests without learning the formulas, just from memory.

3. Are there any kinds of books that are not worth reading?

   • Honestly, I think all books have some value, whether they’re for fun or education. They’ve been published for a reason, so there’s always something to get out of them.

4. Do you think a good book has to have a good plot twist?

   • Plot twists are great and can definitely boost a book’s popularity. But not every good book needs one. Some are just really well-written with strong characters, and they’re still amazing even without a twist.

Photography

1. Do you like taking photos of yourself?

   • Not at all. I hate taking selfies. My phone doesn’t even have one picture of me. In fact, I can’t stand looking at any photo with my face in it—family pics, class photos—you name it. It’s just cringe to me.

2. Would you prefer using a camera or a mobile phone to take a photo?

   • I’d stick with my phone. Most of the photos I take are for study notes anyway, so there’s no need for a fancy camera.

3. Do you have a favorite photo?

   • Actually, yeah. I’ve got one photo that’s special to me—it’s Messi holding the World Cup trophy. He worked his whole life for that moment, and seeing it captured like that is priceless.

4. Are you better at taking photos of landscapes or people?

   • I don’t take many photos, but I think I’m better at landscapes. With people, you need to know about lighting and angles, but with landscapes, it’s more about snapping the moment.

Job competition is a growing concern, and it is no longer the case that only young adults suffer from 💥wc: unfinished sentence, “suffer from” needs an object -> suffer from it. The impact of job competition between the old and the young workers 💥wc: old/young sounds too informal for this context, rephrase -> older and younger workers is disproportionately large and can be detrimental to the balance of job’s positions 💥gr: unnatural phrasing, job positions and the finances of corporations. If left unaddressed, job competition between the experienced and the young can lead to serious financial problems, so immediate and coordinated action is necessary.

The consequences of that competition are severe, with affected companies with higher risk 💥gr: sentence structure awkward -> at a higher risk of financial burden, due to the demand for higher wages of experienced staffs 💥wc: “staff” is uncountable -> from experienced staff. Therefore, corporations hesitate to hire old employees 💥wc: replace "old" -> older employees because of their requirements. In addition to companies’ issues, older people competing with younger workers can also lead to the unbalance in job’s hierarchy 💥gr: awkward -> imbalance in job hierarchies. For example, in Japan, experienced employees dominate management roles, leaving younger ones frustrated due to limited promotion chances. Unfortunately, this can extend to companies’ problems 💥wc: too vague -> the company’s overall stability, because if young workers cannot promote in their job 💥gr: incorrect verb use -> advance in their careers, they will potentially leave the job, leaving the company in crisis. Without urgent intervention to create a more accepting and inclusive environment that benefits both age groups, the consequences could be dire.

At the heart of the combat 💥wc: too aggressive -> struggle against the strife between these groups of workers is the need to encourage mentoring programs where older employees teach younger ones. Companies like General Electric have implemented mentoring systems to balance the strengths of both age groups. Additionally, the government can provide tax incentives for hiring older workers to ensure that both companies and old staffs 💥gr: incorrect form -> older staff benefit. To see this, we need not look further than the case of South Korea, which introduced tax benefits to encourage businesses to employ older workers, thus reducing the employment gap. Investing in such programs can make a significant difference to the economy and to both groups of workers.

In conclusion, the conflict between young and old workers is a growing problem that affects most nations. It requires a collective effort from policymakers, companies, and governments to make a meaningful impact. Therefore, the need to transition to a more mutually beneficial workplace is critical, and the stakeholders must work together to promote that ideal working environment.

🟥 TR (Task Response): Bài viết có lập luận rõ ràng về sự cạnh tranh giữa người lao động trẻ và già. Tuy nhiên, để sâu sắc hơn, em nên mở rộng về những tác động tích cực tiềm ẩn khi cả hai nhóm hợp tác, thay vì chỉ tập trung vào mặt tiêu cực. Ví dụ, thay vì chỉ nói về khó khăn trong thăng tiến, có thể thêm: "Across the spectrum of industries, collaboration between the generations can lead to enhanced innovation and productivity."

🟥 CC (Coherence and Cohesion): Cấu trúc bài viết ổn nhưng liên kết giữa các ý có thể chặt chẽ hơn. Thay vì tách biệt hoàn toàn phần về vấn đề và giải pháp, có thể sử dụng câu chuyển ý để liên kết như: "In light of these challenges, companies must embrace mentoring programs as a solution that not only benefits younger workers but also allows older employees to pass on invaluable experience."

🟥 VC (Vocabulary): Từ vựng sử dụng đa dạng, nhưng có thể thêm nhiều thuật ngữ chuyên ngành hơn để tăng tính chuyên nghiệp. Một số từ có thể thay bằng: "job hierarchy imbalance" -> "organizational hierarchy disruption"; "employment gap" -> "workforce disparity."

🟥 GR (Grammar): Ngữ pháp của em tương đối ổn nhưng cần chú ý đến các lỗi nhỏ về cấu trúc câu và việc sử dụng từ. Để cải thiện, em có thể sử dụng câu ghép phức tạp hơn với mệnh đề phụ thuộc, chẳng hạn: "The Greek government, which was already facing economic hardship, invested heavily in infrastructure."

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2) chợp mắt 1 chút: take a nap

3) ô nhiễm bẩn: gross

4) mù thối: stink

5) ko nóng, ko lạnh: neither too hot nor cold

6) tụt mood: my mood goes downhill fast

7) trừ khi trời mưa: except rain

8) hơi phiên một chút: a bit annoying

9) ko phải khoe đâu: not to brag

10) tùy hứng: it depends

11) ko chiụ nổi: can't stand

12) từ chối lời mời: turn down the invite

13) gắn vs cái gì: stick with

14) bt cách dùng: get the hang of it

15) ko muốn bỏ lỡ cái gì: don't want to miss anything

16) tình cờ thấy cái gì: come across

17) nếu phải chọn, tôi sẽ chọn: if I have to choose, I'll go for

18) thà chết đói còn hơn là ăn nó: rather starve than eat it again

19) để chuẩn bị cho cái gì đó, đã phải thức cả đêm: pull an all-nighter

20) lên kế hoạch kĩ lưỡng: make a solid plan

21) ko bị phạt: get away with it

23) chuyển tiền qua mạng thì tiện hơn mang tiền: banking transfer is more flexible

24) một cuộc hội thoại thú vị hay: it's an engaging conversation

25) dù vậy: that being said

26) nghe nhiều quá thì ko chịu mổi: more than enough for me

27) khi nhớ lại chuyện đó: think back to

28) bắt buộc phải có trên giường: a must-have on my bed

29) đi xem phim: watch movie

30) tôi rất mê: I'm all about

mua cái gì với giá rẻ

tố cho cả hai

trong chớp mắt

2) để đc 6.5, cần 2 yếu tố:

• chuẩn âm

• ko ngập ngừng

2) rung người

3) cử động miệng chưa chòn, linh hoạt

4) ngữ điệu bị ngang => phải tập 1 số chỗ có giọng cao, có cảm xúc

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The provided chart gives useful insights into the preference of people in 💥 wc: tự nhiên hơn -> people's preferences among five social platforms: Facebook, Twitter, LinkedIn, Google, and Pinterest. Overall, it is evident that Facebook was invariably people's favorite platform, while the opposite was true with 💥 prep: phải là "of" em nhé -> of Pinterest.

In 2011, Facebook took the precedence in people's priority 💥 wc: cụm này không tự nhiên -> was the top choice among users, accounting for 59%, outweighing the runner-up in that year 💥, Twitter, with a significant margin of 38%. Meanwhile, LinkedIn took the third place, distributing 💥 wc: "distributing" không phù hợp, nên dùng "garnering", thu thaapjp được -> garnering half of Twitter's. While 💥 gr: không bắt đầu câu với "While" mà không có mệnh đề chính, While SV, V mà -> Additionally, both Google and Pinterest both 💥 repetition: lặp từ "both" -> (loại bỏ một "both") shared the last place with mere 💥 missing article: phải là "a mere" -> a mere 5%.

After a two years 💥 gr: tính từ ghép phải dùng số ít, có gạch ngang giữa -> two-year interval, the pie did not exhibit a significant shift in its order. Facebook still dominated the social media industry, even after notable 💥 missing article: phải là "a notable" -> a notable decline to 38%, which meant Twitter, experiencing a light 💥 wc: nên dùng "slight" -> slight increase, has reduced 💥 vt: sai thì, phải là "had reduced" -> had reduced the margin with 💥 prep: phải là "between" -> between Facebook to only 13%. Following a similar pattern, Linkedln 💥 sp: LinkedIn, Google, and Pinterest all have undergone a minimal rise, and Pinterest eventually 💥 wc: không cần "eventually" ở đây -> (loại bỏ) was the least preferred social media despite of 💥 prep: "despite" không đi với "of" -> despite the growth.

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The provided chart offers useful insights into people's preferences among five social media platforms—Facebook, Twitter, LinkedIn, Google, and Pinterest—over the years 2011 and 2013. Overall, the trend is clear among these platforms: Facebook remained the most favored, albeit with a declining share, while Pinterest consistently lagged by a substantial margin.

In 2011, Facebook dominated the landscape, accounting for 59% of user preferences, outweighing the runner-up Twitter by a whopping margin of 38%. Twitter held a substantial share of 21%, while LinkedIn shuffled in at number three in the ranking, garnering approximately 10.5%, which is half of Twitter's share. Both Google and Pinterest shared the last place, each with a mere 5%, indicating their flagging popularity by comparison.

By 2013, the dynamics shifted slightly, though the order remained unchanged. Facebook's share shrank to 38%, losing momentum yet still leading by a significant margin. Twitter gained momentum, increasing its share to 25%, thus reducing the gap to 13%. This suggests that Twitter was racing to catch up with Facebook. LinkedIn, Google, and Pinterest all reported similar trends, each experiencing a minimal rise in preference. Despite its growth, Pinterest remained the least preferred platform, bucking the trend of the leading platforms.

✨TR: 6.5; CC: 6.5; VC: 7; GR: 6.5✨

Given the importance of travel in today’s freedom-oriented society, the question of whether the price of traveling should be affordable for everyone dances on edge of many debates 💥 wc em chuyển về cụm này cho bớt trang trọng, phù hợp với tone bài viết em hơn -> is at the center of many debates. While it is a common assumption that low-cost travelling price 💥 wc -> travel offers freedom for everyone to go everywhere 💥 wc -> anywhere in the world, passionate supporters of high -cost travelling price 💥 wc -> travel costs argue that expensive flights can partly protect the environment. This essay will analyze these views before giving my opinion, which posits the key lies not in favoring one side over the other, but rather the decision on 💥 wc -> in making decisions based on holistic social needs.

Advocates of affordable flights often emphasize the right to go to everywhere of every residents that low-cost flights can bring 💥 gr: cấu trúc câu không đúng -> of every resident to travel anywhere that low-cost flights enable. They argue that in today’s world, every country are 💥 gr: chủ ngữ số ít -> is striving for an equal world, where the margin between the rich and the poor are 💥 gr: số ít -> is closed; every aspects 💥 gr: số ít -> aspect of people’s life 💥 gr: số nhiều -> lives, including travelling, therefore, should be democratized. This is evidenced by the case of the 💥 gr: không cần mạo từ -> Japan, where most of its residents can book a flight, even a middle class 💥 wc: diễn đạt không rõ -> those in the middle class. By doing so, Japan has invariably been one of the best country 💥 gr: số nhiều -> countries in term 💥 gr: số nhiều -> terms of living satisfaction. Many point to this example to claim that decreasing cost 💥 gr: số nhiều -> costs of flights is hardly unjustified, even if it poses little 💥 wc: nên dùng "some" -> some challenges to flight firms.

On the flip side, proponents of higher cost 💥 gr: số nhiều -> costs of travel maintain that cheap travelling price 💥 wc: nên dùng "travel prices" -> travel prices will engender environmental concerns. In essence, more flights can be likened to more carbondioxide 💥 sp: viết sai chính tả -> carbon dioxide in the environment, which is anything but bringing a toll on our planet 💥 wc: diễn đạt không rõ -> which undoubtedly takes a toll on our planet. In the 💥 gr: không cần mạo từ -> light of environmental priority, few would go against environmental protection and even fewer would do anything to emit more carbon into our planet. These realities highlight that low-cost travelling price 💥 wc -> travel prices, despite the freedom it offers to everyone, probably will not happen in the future.

In conclusion, while cheap travelling cost 💥 wc -> travel costs can make our society more balanced, it is not a very good choice, especially when the world is endeavoring to protect their 💥 gr -> its planet. We must find a way to strike a balance that does justice to both residents’ life quality 💥 wc -> quality of life as well as the environment.

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Given the importance of travel in today’s freedom-oriented society, the question of whether traveling should be affordable for everyone is anything but simple. While some argue that low-cost travel democratizes mobility and allows everyone to explore the world, others contend that expensive flights are necessary to curb environmental degradation. This essay will analyze these views before presenting my opinion, which posits that the key lies not in favoring one side over the other, but rather in balancing societal needs with environmental sustainability.

Advocates of affordable flights often emphasize that making travel accessible is in accordance with the ideals of an equitable world. They argue that in an era where the gap between the rich and the poor should be narrowing, all aspects of life, including travel, must be democratized. For instance, in the context of Japan, a country where even those in the middle class can easily book flights, overall life satisfaction is notably high. By all accounts, decreasing the costs of flights enhances social equality and personal fulfillment.

Conversely, opponents maintain that low-cost travel comes at the expense of the environment. In the wake of increasing environmental concerns, more flights mean more carbon dioxide emissions, contributing significantly to global warming. Evidently, few would dispute the necessity of environmental protection, and even fewer would support actions that exacerbate climate change. In light of these challenges, maintaining higher travel costs may be a necessary measure to reduce carbon footprints.

In the final analysis, while affordable travel can promote social equality, it stands to reason that environmental sustainability must also be prioritized. Therefore, it is essential to find a balanced approach that addresses both the desire for accessible travel and the urgent need to protect our planet.

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🟥 TR (Task Response): Bài viết có luận điểm khá rõ ràng khi đã đưa ra hai quan điểm về giá cả du lịch và tác động của nó. Tuy nhiên, để sâu sắc hơn, em nên phân tích kỹ hơn về cách mà giá vé máy bay ảnh hưởng đến môi trường hoặc xã hội. Ví dụ, thay vì chỉ nói chung chung về tác động môi trường, em có thể cụ thể hóa: "Hosting an increasing number of flights, airlines contribute substantially to greenhouse gas emissions, which, beyond question, accelerates climate change."

🟥 CC (Coherence and Cohesion): Cấu trúc bài viết khá tốt, nhưng em có thể sử dụng các cụm từ nối để tăng sự liên kết giữa các đoạn văn. Ví dụ, khi chuyển từ ý kiến ủng hộ sang phản đối, em có thể dùng: "At the crossroads of accessibility and sustainability, opponents argue that..."

🟥 VC (Vocabulary): Từ vựng của em khá tốt, nhưng cần chú ý sử dụng các thuật ngữ chính xác và tránh lặp từ. Thay vì "cheap travel costs," em có thể dùng "affordable airfare" hoặc "low-cost travel options." Một số buzzwords có thể sử dụng: "democratize mobility," "environmental degradation," "carbon footprint," "global warming," "environmental sustainability."

🟥 GR (Grammar): Em cần chú ý đến lỗi ngữ pháp như số ít số nhiều và cấu trúc câu. Ví dụ, "every country are striving" nên là "every country is striving." Ngoài ra, chú ý sử dụng đại từ sở hữu phù hợp, như "the world is endeavoring to protect its planet."

The initial step is when used paper is transported into substance containing water and chemicals by a conveyor belt, dissolving the paper, making raw pulp. From here, unfiltered pulp is then moved to a container, filtering the substance

To disinfect the pulp, first of all, it is put in vessel, encompassing mixture of water and soap. Next, in order to segregate ink from the pulp, an air pump is used to seethe the mixture, separating ink from the pulp, the ink is then moved away by a pipe. After the clean pulp has been made, it is then channeled to heated rollers, compressing the pulp to flatten paper.  In order to cool down the merely heated paper, water is placed next to the rollers. Finally, the paper is then wrapped around columns to make the final product.

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✨TR: 6.5; CC: 6.0; VC: 6.5; GR: 5.5✨

Given is the diagram illustrating how recycled paper is made. All in all, this linear process comprises eight fundamental steps, from making pulp to making recycled paper.

The initial step is when used paper is transported into substance 💥 gr: thiếu mạo từ 'a' và 'substance' chưa phù hợp, em nên dùng 'a mixture' hoặc 'a vat' containing water and chemicals by a conveyor belt, dissolving the paper, making raw pulp. From here, unfiltered 💥 wc: 'unfiltered' chưa chính xác -> unprocessed pulp is then moved to a container, filtering the substance 💥 gr -> where the substance is filtered' hoặc 'for filtering the substance'.

To disinfect the pulp, first of all, it is put in vessel, encompassing mixture of water and soap 💥 gr & wc: thiếu mạo từ 'a' trước 'vessel', 'encompassing' nghĩa là bao gồm quy trình, ko dùng cho hợp chất, nên viết 'it is put into a vessel containing a mixture of water and soap'. Next, in order to segregate 💥 wc: 'segregate' ít dùng trong ngữ cảnh này, em nên dùng 'separate' ink from the pulp, an air pump is used to seethe 💥 wc: 'seethe' không phù hợp, nên dùng 'agitate' hoặc 'bubble' the mixture, separating ink from the pulp~ , the ink is then moved away by a pipe~ 💥 gr nên tách thành hai câu hoặc dùng liên từ 'and'. After the clean pulp has been made, it is then channeled to heated rollers, compressing the pulp to flatten paper 💥 wc -> to form flat sheets of paper. In order to cool down the merely 💥 wc: 'merely' không phù hợp ở đây, chắc em nhầm với từ 'newly' hoặc bỏ đi heated paper, water is placed next to 💥 wc: 'placed next to' không chính xác, nên viết 'applied to' hoặc 'sprayed onto' the rollers. Finally, the paper is then wrapped around columns 💥 wc: 'columns' không phù hợp, dùng 'cylinders' hoặc 'reels' to make the final product.

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The diagram illustrates the linear process of recycling paper, involving eight fundamental steps from collecting used paper to producing recycled paper. Overall, the process transforms discarded paper into reusable material through a series of treatments, collectively contributing to sustainable resource management.

Initially, used paper is transported via a conveyor belt into a vat containing water and chemicals, where it is dissolved to create raw pulp. This unprocessed pulp is then moved to a container for filtering, where impurities are removed, resulting in cleaner pulp. To further purify the pulp, it is placed into a vessel containing a mixture of water and soap. An air pump is then used to agitate the mixture, causing ink to separate from the pulp and rise to the surface as froth.

The separated ink is then removed by a pipe, leaving behind clean pulp. Subsequently, the purified pulp is channeled to heated rollers, which compress it to form flat sheets of paper. To cool down the heated paper, water is applied to the rollers, ensuring the paper solidifies properly. Finally, the paper is wrapped around cylinders, forming rolls of recycled paper ready for use.

✨TR: 6.5; CC: 6.0; VC: 6.5; GR: 5.5✨

Given is the diagram illustrating the linear process of how oil is expected 💥 wc: 'expected' không phù hợp ở đây, hình như em nhầm với 'extracted' (được chiết xuất) hoặc 'used' in use of 💥 wc: 'in use of' không đúng, em nên viết 'in the production of' perfume, involving a number of intricating 💥 wc: 'intricating' không phải là tính từ ->'intricate' (phức tạp) steps, from boiling water to channeling hydrolat. Overall, the process transform 💥 gr 'transforms' water to 💥 gr 'transform into' aromatic water through a series of treatments, unintentionally contributing to essential oil 💥 wc: diễn đạt chưa rõ ràng, em có thể viết 'resulting in the production of essential oil'.

Initially, the fire 💥 gr: không cần mạo từ 'the', fire is used to heat up water to its boiling temperature, where a portion of the water gets evaporated 💥 wc -> the water evaporates. The steam is then moved to the bottom of a tank, which has aromatic plants above the steam 💥 wc: không cần lặp 'the steam', có thể bỏ. From here, the steam flows through the plants, dragging 💥 wc drag là lôi đi mà, e đừng tra từ nhé, cứ để tiếng Việt nếu ko biết, cô sẽ dịch hộ sang tiếng Anh -> carrying oil vapor, generated by the steam going through those plants, to the top of the tank.

The mixture of air 💥 wc -> mixture of steam and oil vapor is then channeled through a spiral-shaped pipe placed in a container with a pipe connected to its bottom leading the 💥 gr cold water in, which condense 💥 gr: chủ ngữ 'cold water', động từ phải là 'condenses' the mixture of air 💥 wc: như trên, nên dùng 'vapor mixture' to water with essential oil. As the water gets heated, it goes 💥 wc: 'rises' hoặc 'moves' sẽ phù hợp hơn to the top to get channeled away 💥 wc: diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên -> be channeled away. While the liquid is leaded to another vessel with a smaller orifice than its bottom in order to separate the water from the oil because oil invariably goes to the top, meanwhile the hydrolat is then directed to the next process. 💥 gr: câu dài và lộn xộn, em nên tách câu hoặc viết lại cho rõ ràng hơn. Có thể viết: 'The liquid is then led to another vessel with a smaller orifice at the bottom to separate the water from the oil, as oil invariably rises to the top. The hydrolat is then directed to the next process.'

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The diagram illustrates the linear process of extracting essential oil for perfume production, involving a series of intricate steps from boiling water to collecting hydrolat. Overall, the process transforms water into aromatic substances through a series of treatments, ultimately yielding essential oil.

Initially, fire is used to heat water in a boiler until it reaches boiling point, producing steam. This steam is then directed to the bottom of a tank containing aromatic plants. As the steam passes through the plants, it carries the oil vapors extracted from them to the top of the tank.

Subsequently, the mixture of steam and oil vapor is channeled through a spiral-shaped condenser pipe, which is immersed in a container of cold water. The cold water, continuously supplied through an inlet pipe at the bottom and exiting at the top as it warms, condenses the vapor mixture into a liquid form containing essential oil.

The condensed liquid then enters a separator vessel designed with a smaller orifice at the bottom. Due to the difference in density, the essential oil rises to the top, while the water, known as hydrolat, remains below. The essential oil is collected from the top of the separator, becoming the final product used in perfume production, while the hydrolat is directed to the next process or used separately.

✨TR: 7; CC: 7; VC: 7; GR: 7✨

In an era of rapid changes, some universities have gradually shifted to online courses, taking the place of classes on their campus. Although I do see some problems about 💥 wf: with online courses like concentration deficiency 💥 wc: cụm này không tự nhiên -> such as lack of concentration, I am fully convinced that this change can bring positive results, given its convenience and the rooms it gives to the universities 💥 awk: không rõ nghĩa -> space it frees up for universities.

My practical argument in favor of online classes has to do with the flexibility it offers to the 💥 redundant students. Indeed, pupils attending in those courses 💥 gr -> students attending those courses can literally learn everywhere 💥 wc they want, which will surely foster their productivity, and pupils definitely will not have to spend time going from home to school and vice versa 💥 awk -> they will not have to spend time commuting , saving them energy to focus on their study. Nowhere this is more evidenced than in the case of Zoom 💥 gr -> This is evidenced nowhere more than in the case of Zoom , which has significantly helped numerous of students, schools and university in the pandemic 💥 gr -> numerous students, schools, and universities during the pandemic . Essentially, studying online not only tied to 💥 gr -> is tied to helping learners but it 💥 also benefits colleges by saving rooms for subjects that actually need to meet pupils face-to-face 💥 -> freeing up rooms for subjects that actually require face-to-face interaction , like practice lessons or PE lessons. Were online lessons not to exist, students and collages 💥 sp: "colleges" would be so miserable to initiate classes to catch up with current learning requirements.

At odds with this perspective, critics argue that these new classes' efficiency is not equivalent to offline ones 💥 the efficiency of these new classes is not equivalent to that of offline ones . In essence, learners from 💥 gr -> "in" online classes can barely have the same concentration as they are in real classes considering that they can be with their friends of 💥 gr -> or families, which can possibly derail them from their studies. However, this line of reasoning fails to acknowledge that those learners are collegians 💥 wc: "college students", not high school below ones 💥 -> or below students, which means they are well aware of what they have to do to study effectively. As long as they have the mindset of studying, they will find a quiet place to maximize their learning. Therefore, even if online classes cannot be as favorable as face-to-face ones, pupils will surely find the way to get the most of it 💥 gr -> students will surely find a way to get the most out of it.

To conclude, granted, online courses are less practical than the 💥 redundant traditional classes, the perks of it can obviously overshadow its downsides 💥 gr: -> "but their perks can obviously overshadow the downsides". Even though 💥 wc -> "so" hoặc "thus", students' determination about study 💥 gr: nên dùng "to study" is still a decisive element to address its drawbacks and make this development a positive change.

The two maps compare the changes which have been taken place 💥 gr: sai thể -> which have taken place in the inside and the outside 💥 wc -> interior and exterior of a small local museum. Overall, it appears that the museum has evolved from a small and nature-friendly area towards a more practical place for museum 💥 wc: sửa lại cho chính xác -> museum space, with significant change 💥 wc: từ đúng phải là "changes" (số nhiều) from its façade as well as a complete overhaul of the building, allowing opportunities for visitors to fully enjoy the museum.

The area surrounding of 💥 -> surrounding the museum has undergone the most significant shift. The most notable change is the removal of trees, freeing up a massive space to expand to building 💥 wc -> to expand the building. Beside 💥 có chữ s em nhé "Besides" the museum’s expansion, the given area 💥 wc -> surrounding area is also utilized to set up a parking lot, benefiting distanced 💥 wc -> distant visitors. Another change is that the curved path way 💥 sp -> pathway leading to the entrance has also been knocked down 💥 wc -> been removed, making a modern-looking façade for the place. Despite the removal, two trees have been kept to make a balance 💥 wc -> maintain a balance between nature and modernization.

As for the inside of the museum, most of the former rooms have been either replaced or pulled down 💥 wc -> demolished. Taking advantage of the given space 💥 wc -> available space, museum shop 💥 gr: thiếu mạo từ -> a museum shop has been built on the left of the building 💥 wc -> on the left side of the building, connecting the entrance to the reception. In the main are 💥 sp -> area, the room which was the local history room got destroyed 💥 wc -> was demolished and replaced by the reception, while the local history room took the place of the national history exhibition, which no longer existed in 2007. In order to make the museum more practical, two rooms have been built behind the main building with special exhibitions to the left and an education center to the right.

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The two maps compare the changes that have taken place in the interior and exterior of a small local museum. Overall, it appears that the museum has evolved from a small and nature-friendly area towards a more practical museum space, with significant changes to its façade as well as a complete overhaul of the building, allowing visitors to fully enjoy the museum.

The area surrounding the museum has undergone the most significant shift. The most notable change is the removal of trees, freeing up a massive space to expand the building. Besides the museum’s expansion, the surrounding area is also utilized to set up a parking lot, benefiting distant visitors. Another change is that the curved pathway leading to the entrance has been removed, creating a modern-looking façade for the place. Despite the removal, two trees have been kept to maintain a balance between nature and modernization.

As for the inside of the museum, most of the former rooms have been either replaced or demolished. Taking advantage of the available space, a museum shop has been built on the left side of the building, connecting the entrance to the reception. In the main area, the room which was the local history room was demolished and replaced by the reception, while the local history room took the place of the national history exhibition, which no longer existed in 2007. In order to make the museum more practical, two rooms have been built behind the main building with special exhibitions to the left and an education center to the right.

The provided chart compares the vehicle producing rate of 4 car firms General Motors, Ford, Toyota, and Honda at their factories located in the US from 1998 to 2005. Overall, it can be observed that the average hours to produce a car for every brand has declined 💥 gr: thì sai -> declined but the order had not changed 💥 gr: thì không nhất quán -> did not change after the period of 8 years.

Starting at 💥 gr: sai giới từ -> in 1998, General Motors took the longest time to produce a car, with 32 hours on average, outnumbering 💥 wc -> exceeding the runner-up at that time, Ford, by 4 hours. Despite the start, General Motors had boosted their producing rate 💥 wc -> improved their production rate, making their average hours for a car gradually decrease over time, got 💥 gr -> becoming lower than Ford in 2000, kept the momentum and declined to 💥 wc -> and continuing to decline until reaching 22 hours with no additional rise. The average time to produce a vehicle for Ford, in spite of a rise in the first 3 years which surpassed General Motor’s 💥 wc -> where it surpassed General Motors’ rate, had followed the trend and also went down 💥 gr -> followed the trend and also decreased to the same time as General Motors in 2005.

The average time to make a car for Toyota and Honda shared a fluctuating trend 💥 wc: cần từ chính xác hơn -> exhibited fluctuations. Both of them spent the same amount of time to make a car in 1998 but experienced different changes in 1999, with Toyota went up 💥 gr -> increasing and Honda went down 💥 gr -> decreasing. Despite the changes, their average hours were the same in 2001. They also experienced the same increase to 24 hours in 2002 and a drop to 20 hours by the end of the period, making them the companies that had the fastest production rate in 2005, producing cars two hours faster than General Motors and Ford.

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The provided chart compares the vehicle production rate of four car firms—General Motors, Ford, Toyota, and Honda—at their factories located in the US from 1998 to 2005. Overall, it can be observed that the average hours to produce a car for every brand declined, but the ranking of the firms remained unchanged after the 8-year period.

In 1998, General Motors took the longest time to produce a car, averaging 32 hours, exceeding the runner-up, Ford, by 4 hours. Despite this, General Motors improved their production rate, gradually decreasing the average time per car, becoming lower than Ford’s by 2000 and continuing to decline to 22 hours by the end of the period, without any further increase. Ford, despite a rise in the first three years, where it surpassed General Motors' time, followed the downward trend and also reduced its production time to match General Motors by 2005.

Toyota and Honda exhibited fluctuations in their average production times. Both companies started at the same rate in 1998, but Toyota’s time increased while Honda’s decreased in 1999. Despite these shifts, their average hours aligned once again in 2001. Both companies saw a shared rise to 24 hours in 2002 before dropping to 20 hours by the end of the period. This made them the fastest producers in 2005, finishing two hours faster than General Motors and Ford.

Given the importance of residents’ safety, the question about whether government 💥 gr: -> the government should forbid hazardous sports is in the center of many debates 💥 wc has sparked considerable debate. While it is a common assumption that banning those 💥 wc: -> these ^{(này, dùng cho từ xuất hiện ngay câu trc, those: đó dùng cho dtu xuất hiện xa rồi)} sports can foster people 💥 wc -> public safety, passionate supporters of risky sports argue that they should have the right to choose. This essay will analyze these dispute views 💥 gr -> these opposing views before giving my opinion, which posits the key lies not in favoring one over the other, but rather the decision made based on holistic societal need.

Advocates of risky sports often emphasize the experience that those 💥 wc: these sports can bring. They argue that risky sports are more of giving people experience than threating their life 💥 gr -> risky sports tend to offer experience rather than posing a threat to life, given that participants are all trained in advance 💥 gr:miễn ng chơi đc hướng dẫn cẩn thận -> thoroughly trained beforehand. This is evidenced in the case of skydiving, where SV in order to play the sport 💥 wc: awkward -> everyone must be trained in a skydiving simulation before participating in the activity, ensuring the 💥 safety. Many point to this example to claim that ^SV the experiences that 💥 experiences these sports offer are hardly unjustified 💥 -> ARE justifiable. Admittedly, hazardous sports might seem risky, but with appropriate training lessons 💥 -> programs, people should have the freedom to choose those 💥 wc -> such sports.

At the crossroads of experience and safety 💥 wc KHI CÂN NHẮC GIỮA A VÀ B, proponents of forbidding dangerous sports maintain that no matter how well-trained people are, the chances of accidents to happen 💥 gr CHANCE OF STH VING -> happening are still large compared to regular sports. We need not look further than in the case of off-road motor racing 💥 wc: awkward -> WE NEED NOT LOOK FURTHER THAN THE CASE OF off-road motor racing where participants are all 💥 -> are trained beforehand and even use safety equipment, but incidents are constantly happening 💥 -> still occur frequently (thường). These realities highlight that despite the experiences the sports 💥 t -> these sports can bring, for the sake of safety, dangerous sports should be banned regardless 💥 wc: cấm ngay -> outright.

To conclude 💥 -> In conclusion, while risky sports are hazardous, banning them is not the optimal solution. We must find a way to strike a balance that promotes both people’s 💥 wc: public experience and safety. In the end, banning them will just triggers 💥 gr: -> merely trigger supporters of those , leading to collateral implications.

Nhiều người chỉ vào vd này để nói là những trải nghiệm these sport mang lại là hợp lý (justifiable)

Many (people) ^subject point to ^verb this example ^object

to claim that SV

the experiences ^subject that offer

are hardly unjustified (ko hẳn là ko đúng).