Danny S. Peer Feedback 2022 - 2023 by Daniel Smeltzer https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 15:49:07 UTC 2025-09-30 14:50:10 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f54a.png Alexa Pereira https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4/wish/2405439925 A strength of your narrative, “A shining tear” is all of the creative speaker tags you used. It was awesome how you came up with all these different and unique speaker tags and how you avoid it the same word again and again. It really lied  as a reader to understand there emotions. For example, I like when you used the speaker tag he declared.
In addition I also think you did an amazing job on describing your setting, for example “they dragged me across the dark rotten floor….” I liked that one part because I exactly new what was happening. Truly I did see anything that you can work on 
]]> 2022-12-01 16:49:43 UTC https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4/wish/2405439925 Edward Marques 29emarques https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4/wish/2434866902 I liked how you used data and statistics to show the reader how many snakes are hostile. I also liked how you made an example relating to you getting thrown out of your house because you were big. My wish: Lowercase I count: 2

WORK ON DA GRAMMAR]]> 2023-01-05 16:33:23 UTC https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4/wish/2434866902 Mia brown 29mbrown https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4/wish/2491069145 Hi Danny! the strengths in your essay were the way you told your scenarios, you made them really relatable and you told the scenario like I could really see it. The next strength was your underlined part of your conclusion, the way you made it so us readers could look on the bright side was amazing! This makes your essay 10x stronger now that you have something great to conclude with. The one wish that I have for you was that adding that transitions word every new paragraph though, overall great job!]]> 2023-02-22 12:14:46 UTC https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4/wish/2491069145 Alana https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4/wish/2525874897 Hi,Daniel! A strength in your essay is your evidence. Your evidence includes a time stamp, title of pixar, transition words, and a quote, which are all componients of evidence that make it stronger. In addition, I like your theme because it is very clear to understand. Although, I found some areas in your piece that you may want to correct. First, you should have taken the words outside of the boxes. You also should have made your first part of your explanation more clear, so that the reader could better understand what you're trying to say. Lastly, you should have changed some of your sum up, to make it more unique instead of basically repeating the theme. Other then that great job!]]> 2023-03-21 18:12:54 UTC https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4/wish/2525874897 https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4/wish/2526290417 Hi,Daniel! A strength in your essay was your evidence. I really liked your evidence because it included a time stamp, title of pixar, transition words, and a quote, which made your evidence stronger. In addition, I like your theme because it is very easy to understand. I did find some spots in your piece that you may want to correct. First, You should have made your first part of your explanation a bit more clear, so that the reader could understand a bit more of what you're trying to say. Lastly, you should have changed some of your sum up, to make it more unique instead because you kind of repeated the same thing as your claim. Other than that great job!


]]> 2023-03-22 01:00:50 UTC https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4/wish/2526290417 timed theme 29wchen https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4/wish/2530570945 You have a good, long essay. But you evidence are to long! You only have 1 evidence per evidence! But overall a good, long essay.]]> 2023-03-24 15:09:38 UTC https://padlet.com/29dsmeltzer/dp99pdayadvih7b4/wish/2530570945