Abby - Poetry Exercise Map by https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl Feedback, response, and springboarding en-us 2022-02-03 17:26:00 UTC 2022-02-10 21:38:46 UTC hello@padlet.com Poetry Exercise avoss91 https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028387158 We thought it was a bear track, a dent in the feeble sand under our feet
Walking down the trail with the no trespassing sign at the entrance.


The thought of the bear frightened me, but I felt protected by the pine
And the sand
And my big brother,
And you. 


The sun lightly glazed the branches revealing a break in the trail, a sphere of peace, home of the bear. 
A life of young love, with cubs by her side. 
Perhaps she had a rough childhood, no luck from the start. 
Battered, bruised, pushed down, but her fault.
Her fault. 


A dynasty that will be passed onto her cubs, if they do not venture far from her.
Stay close, but know you are protected by the peace of the branches
The pine
The sand
The sun. 
]]> 2022-02-03 20:59:17 UTC https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028387158 reflection mbearden2 https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028422100 I really like the bear imagery. It's loving and angry. I think it's used well in the piece. In that, we get the allusion to an overbearing (lol) parent. I really liked "A dynasty of cubs." We can feel both the love and a maybe a cycle of anger there.
I really like it. But I think thought at the beginning takes away some ot the tension]]> 2022-02-03 21:29:22 UTC https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028422100 My Own Freewrite avoss91 https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028422733 We thought it was a bear track
But we were wrong.
It was the mark of a beast, what was yet to come in the lives of the young ones.
Bundle up, cover your skin, protect yourself.]]> 2022-02-03 21:29:52 UTC https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028422733 creation mbearden2 https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028424204 A dynasty that 
will be passed on to her cubs.
echos of anger.]]> 2022-02-03 21:31:15 UTC https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028424204 Sondra’s Reflection chick_panther https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028424219 I really love this poem, how it starts with a landscape but reflects the nature of the narrator, their thoughts, through the anthopomorphism of the bear.  The line “Battered, bruised, pushed down, but her fault.  Her fault” was absolutely striking and the echo was incredible and kind of drove home the internalization.  My main question is about the first line- “we thought it was a bear track” suggests it’s not?  I love the mystery implied though.

]]> 2022-02-03 21:31:16 UTC https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028424219 Reflection stephanieapaine https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028424423 I like how the focus switched from you to the bear, talking about how you feel frightened but protected and then switching to what you need to be protected from. My interpretation is that it was about a parent who had kids young, " A life of young love, with cubs by her side." ]]> 2022-02-03 21:31:28 UTC https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028424423 Sondra’s freewrite chick_panther https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028425649 But I felt protected by the pine
And the sand
And you.

But then you left,
The pines burned
And I was left amisdt the ash and sand
Poor protection for such a cruel world. ]]> 2022-02-03 21:32:44 UTC https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028425649 A dynasty that will be passed onto her cubs, if they do not venture far from her. stephanieapaine https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028426866 I really like this line because I think it drives home the main reason to be scared of the bear, and that is through fear of becoming like the bear and entering into a continuous cycle. ]]> 2022-02-03 21:33:56 UTC https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2028426866 Freewrite 2.0 avoss91 https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2041233460 I was left amisdt the ash and sand
Poor protection for such a cruel world. 
Grains of rock exfoliate my skin leaving droplets of blood on the wet dirt.
I leak before myself and it makes me sick.
And it is your fault. ]]> 2022-02-10 21:38:41 UTC https://padlet.com/jgard12/dn7sk3tw27sqqrl/wish/2041233460