On the one hand,childrens sometimes need help with something that the don’t want to reveal because they feel embarrased,but there are necesary to reveal if this things pains you and impeed you for do anything you want because any people tell you that you musn’t do something because they will go to hit you or things like this. (too long a sentence)

On the other hand,childrens needs privacy if they upload a picture with a friend or if they talk with a friend about something that parents shouldn’t have to know.

In mi opinión parents shouldn’t have to look in their children’s Facebook pages because if childrens want to tell something to their parents they do it but if their don’t want that their parents know things they must have privacy.

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Nowadays, people have questioned if the parents should look the social network of their children. There are differents answer about this topic. Then, parents should or shouldn't look the social network of their children?

On the one hand, I think that parents should not look the social network of their children, because they need to trust in them. Furthermore, with a good education, they can use it without danger. Also, parents should respect their children's privacy.

On the other hand, social networks are hazardous, because you don't know who is the person who can see you or speak. Moreover,  bullying and online abuse are more likely to occur with social networks, so if parents check their social networks, they could avoid these problems.

In my opinion, parents should look or supervise the social networks of their children, but always with some control, that is, without going over the limit between the reasonable and the controlling, because teenagers should feel that their parents trust them, and if the parents pass the limit, they are going to lose her confidence. So I agree that parents should look at their children's social network, as long as it is necessary.

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On the other hand, childrens would be more secure surfing on internet if parents look at which childrens saw and in facebook shouldn't upload anything that the parents don't want. Word Order

To sum up,  although parents violate their children's privacy,  in my opinion, parents should look at their children's facebook page to give them more security.

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on the one hand, the fear that children are in danger is one of the most common reasons for doing so.  And there is also the ignorance of parents about the internet, and as parents worry about the safety and welfare of their children.

On the other hand, is an invasion of privacy because they should trust them because if they have educated them well, they wouldn´t have to distrust them.

 

In my opinion, shouldn´t caught in the mobiles or social networks of children.

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photos, videos and also they write messages.

On the other hand, the parents worry by security of the children. The

children are minor should look the Facebook page because there are a lot of

problems, for example, buyilling, social problems… Also the hackers can

steal the identity because the children have been able to give a personal

data to stranger and it is a problem. Facebook isn’t page for minor.

On the other hand, the parents shouldn’t look the Facebook pages from

adults, because, the adults are responsibility. They never give personals

dates, the parents look at their children’s Facebook may get angry for

invading their privacy and reporter them. Always respect the privacy of

teenagers. Furthermore teenagers have to give a good education for they

In my opinion, minor haven’t a social page because they aren´t