Hour 3 Fractured Fairy Tale TAG Feedback by Melissa Long

wills

2020-12-11 16:53:28 UTC

MISSING A PARTNER NO MORE

Izzy

2020-12-11 16:54:29 UTC

Long's Brainstorm

mlong15 — 2020-12-11 16:54:30 UTC

McKenna Varner

2020-12-11 16:54:32 UTC

Mya Wenger

2020-12-11 16:54:32 UTC

Madison Dawson

2020-12-11 16:54:37 UTC

Graecie smith

2020-12-11 16:54:54 UTC

Jonathan Ritz

2020-12-11 16:54:55 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hp8K1vOgIQDzTiShNS4k1aw9hZ-ekPgyQG_0G716WDo/edit?usp=sharing

Sofi Grundhofer

sofiagrundhofer — 2020-12-11 16:55:05 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1F5nvd8ahLPUSnAIoctX_8gO0OIFCnNrKiEebpXbzQa0/edit?usp=sharing

Dylan

2020-12-11 16:55:11 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1fTWlgMrw-E4NhhDdaS5Mb2r5mVvXZhlq_CbLonlKupo/edit?usp=sharing

Abby Siefker

2020-12-11 16:55:16 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/15fUoIG3U8bplPsSQTCc5wkhcDhzEuiTWzAzI0uX0b5Y/edit?usp=sharing

Isaac Smith

2020-12-11 16:55:19 UTC

mackayla l

2020-12-11 16:55:22 UTC

Paige Hardy

2020-12-11 16:55:23 UTC

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Aleksander Volkov

aleksandervolkov — 2020-12-11 16:55:38 UTC

Caden Soderholm

2020-12-11 16:55:44 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1wnufX3vblV1UGefMuK3UF5ydYBiKCetch28lYQDHCH4/edit?usp=sharing

Parker Nelson

2020-12-11 16:56:20 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/10T9wHNZ3Jl7wEGEL8K41_OZEybQZnOOrAURNaH7eXGE/edit?usp=sharing

ALeksander

2020-12-11 16:56:25 UTC

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Chloe Schultz

2020-12-11 16:57:03 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hzy4yTIBpYMinDkysMSxKGkhUyKPVTD9ud2miiDpBEY/edit

Sofi Grundhofer

sofiagrundhofer — 2020-12-11 16:57:04 UTC

sofiagrundhofer — 2020-12-11 16:57:10 UTC

addy hawley

2020-12-11 16:57:30 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vEcx3lT9Tu42uEejVbLC6tsZV_XV50yVzRDjpS3rv6I/edit?usp=sharing

Andrew B

2020-12-11 16:57:36 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1aGL2eMLdkhHbmpBQXiSSYg6fDXAXeIXSKeN_cREJucI/edit?usp=sharing

2020-12-11 16:57:44 UTC

Beau cruser

2020-12-11 16:58:04 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/15aCtWpCrDP7iWAhlcDss8l9szRDJVd_6lVLYtcne8s4/edit

Maxwell Nego

2020-12-11 16:58:32 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1byI3R523JV5qM7tEX3qP6QqpY0XmS1NpxlxfsKPbwa8/edit?usp=sharing

Pedro Medina

2020-12-11 16:58:40 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Vig1wJThGGi6IH6Rm6uFLrgqfQbMBTJ2UD1g9tA_kxU/edit?usp=sharing

Molly

2020-12-11 16:58:44 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oZ0Paf6_Cg2LA1RsqJwAtLgI5JOGV6xtMhLTTT6AolM/edit?usp=sharing

2020-12-11 16:59:20 UTC

Jessica Stockmann

2020-12-11 16:59:20 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1gV0vsOCe2zzDDcsLnCJA66rjVGuXoj7FXNdkvk0-bA8/edit?usp=sharing

Feedback to Long

mlong15 — 2020-12-11 17:02:13 UTC

1. Tell
2. Ask
3. Give

Abby's Feedback to Sofi:

2020-12-11 17:05:56 UTC

T- I liked the way you wrote the story so it would be from the step sisters pov.
A- A question I have is why Cinderella is mean to her step sisters.
G- Don't think there is anything you need to improve on, your story sounds good.

Jackson Bremer

2020-12-11 17:06:09 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1a1YuhjzYbPUUSEPz7GcfpIXtoPr35jolS96dIPTYiOY/edit?usp=sharing

2020-12-11 17:06:13 UTC

Sofi Feedback to Abby

sofiagrundhofer — 2020-12-11 17:06:14 UTC

1. I like your writing because it made me laugh when you changed Flynn Ryder's name to Ryhne Flyder.
2. What do you mean by long hair? Is that a character?
3. I do not think you need to change anything , the story sounds funny and sounds like a good story too.

Feedback to Caden

2020-12-11 17:06:39 UTC

T. I like how much change is in the story from the original and the amazing creativity that you put in to this remake of little red riding hood.
A. How did you come up with the setting of a highway and a new charater of a hippo???
G. I would pay to listen to this story but one thing you could change is maybe the theme because I do not see how it matches the story completly

izzy feedback

2020-12-11 17:06:57 UTC

T- I like how you described Goldilocks
A- Is the little bear sometimes nice to people?
G- i think you shoudl add more charector traits to your charectors.

feedback for pedro

2020-12-11 17:06:57 UTC

T) i really liked the idea of switching the characters
A) i don't have any questions and everything is written really good
G) there is no suggestion to improve needed this is written very well

GOOD JOB!

Feedback to Isaac

2020-12-11 17:07:18 UTC

T - I liked the way you had the story from the troll pov and the same plot.
A - I don't get your falling action it doesn't make sense?
G - I really liked the twist of your story.

feedback for Mya

2020-12-11 17:07:30 UTC

T) I liked that you put the grandma as a character
A) I dont have any questions it is good
G) i dont have any suggestions it is good the way it is

Maddie's feedback to jessica

2020-12-11 17:08:09 UTC

T- I enjoined your writing because you added more parts of papa bear in your story because the original version doesn't have much lines with him in there. A- One question i have is why did you choose the story Goldilocks and the three bears. G- You should include stronger details on the characters.

feedback for Molly

2020-12-11 17:09:12 UTC

T - I really like that you changed the characters from people to animals.
A - What if Brooke ends up going back to the ball with Cinderella, and they each meet someone?
G - What if the other sisters were more engaged with the story?

feedback for Addy H by Graecie S.

2020-12-11 17:09:52 UTC

1. I like the moral. That you should never give up on love and that your story is beauty and the beast.
2. What are some traits or description for Beats and Gaston?
3. I would make sure that you write who fall in love because in you outline in part 4 you don't have who falls in love.

Feedback for Jonny

2020-12-11 17:10:40 UTC

T- I Really like your idea to change the pigs into mice and the wolf into a cat
A- I'm wondering what is going to be the resolution of your story
G- I think you should give more details on your characters and more detail

Molly's feed back to McKenna

2020-12-11 17:10:42 UTC

1. I enjoyed your writing because i like how it changed but still followed the same path as the original.
2.One question i have is why did you choose the age 20?
3. One thing to improve on is answering the setting question.

Feedback to Jackson from Aleks:

aleksandervolkov — 2020-12-11 17:10:56 UTC

T- I like the way that you added action and changed the story up.

A- A question I have is why didn't Aladdin have a source of income?

3- I only think you can change up some of your grammar otherwise everything is good.

Feed back to Paige

2020-12-11 17:11:07 UTC

T - I liked how you changed the were the story took place but used the same plot
A - my question is why did the crabs just let here go?
G - I think the story was really well written and has a good twist.

feedback for graecie

2020-12-11 17:13:25 UTC

is that finish your work but i do like the plot of your story and the idea

Feedback to dylan

2020-12-11 17:13:29 UTC

I enjoyed your writing because it wasn't confusing and it was a good plot. Did you consider maybe changing the way the pigs houses get destroyed. You should maybe change the way the pigs houses get destroyed by the wolf.

Jessica Feedback to Maddie

2020-12-11 17:13:39 UTC

T-I like the way you changed the names of the pigs and changed the wolf to a spider to add more detail's to the pigs and spider.
A-Did you consider putting a little bit more about the 2nd pig?
G-You should include what happened to the other pig, because you didn't really explain much about him.

Jackson Bremer

2020-12-11 17:14:45 UTC

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1a1YuhjzYbPUUSEPz7GcfpIXtoPr35jolS96dIPTYiOY/edit?usp=sharing

2020-12-11 17:14:52 UTC

Mya's feed back for Izzy

2020-12-11 17:16:23 UTC

T- I like how you have good descriptions for the characters
A- What POV is yours story going to be
G-I also like how you put Goldilocks running threw the forest like Little Red Riding Hood

Feedback for Mya Wenger

2020-12-11 17:16:35 UTC

T- I love the way you switched up the story and described everything.
A- Are the bears ever nice to anyone at all? or are they always mean?
G - I think you could explain a little more what the moral is and how it is played into the story. But overall it is amazing and theres not really anything i think you need to change

Feedback for Aleksander

2020-12-11 17:16:42 UTC

T- I really liked how you managed to switch up the story so creatively A- What gave you the idea to change it up like you did G- You should be a little more specific when it comes to the antagonist