2016 104 AAReview by Rachel Oh

2016 104 AAReview by Rachel Oh https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview What I like about my short story; A challenge/issue/problem/difficulty? Something I want to work on.... en-us 2016-02-02 02:38:02 UTC 2016-02-02 10:39:23 UTC hello@padlet.com Chin Zhi Khang (8) chin_zhi_khang https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493040 -I am proud to have made up such a story since I am not very fond of writing.
-The difficulty was to come up with a plot for the story and to keep within 500 words.
-The story was about an accidental trip to Venus. Two boys who met in Secondary School had a crazy dream to experience the temperature in Mars. On the way, their spaceship

]]> 2016-02-02 04:14:51 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493040 Alya Rasyiqah alya_rasyiqah_binte_rudy https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493043 I like my plot of my story and the idea. I took quite long to come out with an idea so I am happy. To me the plot is quite interesting and I managed to add in some word images, dialogues and feelings.

My challenge was writing less than 500 words as I ]]> 2016-02-02 04:14:51 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493043 Rae kuanzhuoen_rae https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493046 I like my story because it has something that got to do with the future, when spacecrafts were invented, and i think it was exciting when the main character accidentally travels to Mars. I think that it is very challenging that we had to keep our stories in 500 words, when ew had to use descriptive word and have a science concept.]]> 2016-02-02 04:14:55 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493046 Kamal Sawlani kamal_sawlani_govindani https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493062 I like my essay's beginning as it is very mysterious and intriguing. It also hooks the reader into the story. I have to work on the ending of the story while making sure that it keeps within the 500-word limit. I also like the fact that the science concept is very accurate.

]]> 2016-02-02 04:15:10 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493062 Yew Chin Siang yew_chin_siang https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493066 I like the plot of my story as I love Science and have a great interest towards it, so writing a Science fiction story was very fun and exciting.The story was about a mutation that could not possibly happen but it was cool, albeit a little difficult to write and develop the climax.In my opinion, the most challenging part of the entire writing process was that the word limit was only 500, so I couldn't really write too many phrases and I ould also need to write about science concepts throughout the story also increasing the difficulty of writing it.Overall, writing the story was very fun and I hope there would be more of such tests and compositions in the future that hopefully would allow us to write more words.]]> 2016-02-02 04:15:11 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493066 Joshua joshua_lee_jing_loong https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493067
I like the setting of my story along with the climax of my story. I think I could have had a better falling action and resolution. I like the possible and realistic scientific concepts of my short story. In my opinion, the hardest part of writing it was not coming up with the plot but keeping within the 500 word limit.]]> 2016-02-02 04:15:12 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493067 Ray Wehn goh_ray_wehn https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493069 What I like about my story is the plot about how the astronauts went missing, and no one knew where they went and what happened to them. I want to work on the phrases I use in my short story, and the biggest challenge I the number of words I had to limit myself to.]]> 2016-02-02 04:15:12 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493069 Goh Cheng Yang - S1-04 goh_cheng_yang https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493078 I like the scientific explanation behind my story and the resolution. I want to work on the word images that are too scarce in my story. It needs a more obvious climax and a better rising action too. One of the challenges I faced is to find a good scientific concept to write about. At first, I wanted to write about time travel or wormholes or some other random stuff but soon realised that time travelling is too complicated, and is absolutely impossible. Then about the wormholes, I have trouble trying to understand it good enough to let others understand when they read my story too. So I decided to write about mutation, with inspiration from Deadpool.]]> 2016-02-02 04:15:18 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493078 Chloe Wong chloe_wong https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493083 I like the part of the story where my character enters Earth and discovers a whole new world. I think that there was no strong science concept in the story as I wasn't very elaborative on the science concept in my story. I think the biggest challenge was to keep the words under 500. I am still very satisfied with my story.]]> 2016-02-02 04:15:21 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493083 Raena Low low_ying_sui_raena https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493123 I like the plot and the ending of my story. I think a challenge was trying to unfold the story fully so that it makes sense while keeping it to 500 words. It was also a challenge to elaborate the science concept in the story. ]]> 2016-02-02 04:15:55 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493123 Muhammad Faqih Akmal, S1-04 muhammad_faqih_akmal https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493124 I like my scientific concept about the sun because I think, the idea is pretty decent. It is the only idea I could think of. I need to improve in my vocabulary and the control of the length of the story. The word images that I recently learnt in my English lesson is really cool and I love it.]]> 2016-02-02 04:15:58 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493124 Gabriel gabriel_yap_yong_kang https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493126 I like the plot in my story as I could add in the Science concepts successfully. I also like my use of good words.I think that my conclusion is too abrupt.]]> 2016-02-02 04:16:00 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493126 Sim Hng Kang sim_hng_kang https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493133 I like the story where the part when the aliens came into the naval base and cause trouble and the way I described the alien. The problem with the story is on how do I end it. The problem seemed impossible to solve and I thought of a way to solve it a very long time.]]> 2016-02-02 04:16:08 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493133 Lucas Tan tan_jing_zhi_lucas https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493139 I like the part about the story where the two main characters discover different things that happen when they come out of hiding after many years. The adventure that they go on, trying to cure the virus is very exciting I feel. Something I would like to work on is the ending as I hope that it will not be so abrupt and the story will have a proper ending.]]> 2016-02-02 04:16:10 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493139 Hong Wei lim_hong_wei https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493144 I like my short story as it really makes me want to find out more about that certain subject, it also shares some history about the world it was. Something I want to change about my story is that I should not focus about the smaller details, but with the words I used so that I can paint that picture I want with lesser words. That way I can be more detailed and I can write more about it, not cutting the story short in a very sudden way. As the word limit was 500, I had difficulty fitting what I really wanted in that short story.]]> 2016-02-02 04:16:13 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493144 Adib Hairie (7) adib_hairie_b_noorazman https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493146 I like my story because it shows extensive information about the human eye and foreshadowing. However, the story had gone over 500 words and compressing it would be nearly impossible.]]> 2016-02-02 04:16:15 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493146 Reiner Goh reiner_goh_yee_heng https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493149 I like the way that I started the story with a flashback.i think one thing I could improve was to add word images and character feelings]]> 2016-02-02 04:16:18 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493149 David david_sun_qi_yao https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493173 I like about my ending; it has given the reader a shock to it

I don't like about the climax; it does not show the impact I want to show

i have difficulty to decide the character feeling

]]> 2016-02-02 04:16:35 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493173 Yeo Jia Hao Calvin yeo_jia_hao_calvin https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493207 I love my story because it has an unsuspected twist at the end and how small arguments can lead to a devastating disaster. I think that my story ends very abruptly as the word limit is only 500 and for science fiction the word limit should be more.]]> 2016-02-02 04:16:58 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493207 Rishi sivakumar_rishikarthik https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493217 I like my story as it allows me to be engrossed in it as there are many twists that takes place and the scientific concept in it is very interesting and makes go find out more about it.The biggest challenge in it was to keep it under 500 words as the scientific theory is a bit long to explain.]]> 2016-02-02 04:17:04 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493217 Tan Chuan Jie tan_chuan_jie https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493237 I like my plot and how scientific concepts are used in the story. My biggest challenge is keeping the words of the story in less than 500. I want to work on the grammar and the structure of the story so that it sounds better to the readers ]]> 2016-02-02 04:17:27 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493237 Roshan (18) premkumar_roshan_alagar https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493238 I like my story as i am not very fond at writing stories or compositions]]> 2016-02-02 04:17:29 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493238 Nandanaa Raju (6) nandanaa_raju https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493266 I like my story's excitement. The plot used in it and the question marks and suspense my climax develops is nice. I want to develop more ideas and new ways to shorten my story to 500 words but to still put in all my phrases and my detailed description.

]]> 2016-02-02 04:17:49 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493266 Khrisha Mayilsamy khrisha_mayilsamy https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493280 I love my story because of the developed problem. I want to work on shortening the story and stop myself from adding details which are not needed in the story.]]> 2016-02-02 04:18:01 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493280 Goh Chin Ray (12 goh_chin_ray https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493326 I like my story as I manage to put up scientific concepts and put in word images to further describe about what was happening and the climax. However, despite those, I am not satisfied with my story as I deleted alot of sentences, which honestly hurts my heart to do so. The difficulty was the keep the story within less than 500 words.]]> 2016-02-02 04:18:38 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493326 Roshan premkumar_roshan_alagar https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493536 I am happy with my story as i am not very fond in writing comp]]> 2016-02-02 04:21:19 UTC https://padlet.com/rachel_oh1/104AAReview/wish/92493536