https://padlet.com/29msekyere/cxe8jc57evij7mtq Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 13:57:07 UTC 2023-02-24 15:16:59 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f98a.png https://padlet.com/29msekyere/cxe8jc57evij7mtq/wish/2355522313 Hi! I read your piece and I loved it a lot! My favorite was the ending. I really liked it because it reminded me of my dog that i got in February. I also liked how descriptive you were, I was able to envision the setting easily because of that. Something you could try is using more metaphors! I feel like it makes any story better! ]]> 2022-10-25 14:10:34 UTC https://padlet.com/29msekyere/cxe8jc57evij7mtq/wish/2355522313 29ansandhu https://padlet.com/29msekyere/cxe8jc57evij7mtq/wish/2355636241 Hi Mercy! I loved your piece! One thing I loved about your piece was how you set a feeling of uneasiness, and expressed how you thought it was all a prank. That creates a little bit of suspense and really hooks the reader. Another thing I liked about you story was how you ended with that sentence about you cat being your whole world. It really summed up your emotions for Shilo and expressed the importance of the story. One thing I think you could improve on is including more description to your hook, but otherwise…Great Job!!!!]]> 2022-10-25 15:11:19 UTC https://padlet.com/29msekyere/cxe8jc57evij7mtq/wish/2355636241 29ansandhu https://padlet.com/29msekyere/cxe8jc57evij7mtq/wish/2405368384 Hi Mercy!!! I loved your piece!!! The first star I have for your piece is that I love how you used dialogue to convey emotions. When Howie spoke, I could really tell that he was angry and the powerful dialogue used just helped me visualize the moment. The second star I have for your piece is that I love how you used inner thought to convey emotion. I could really feel how angry Kevin was when you used inner thinking. A wish I have for your piece is to maybe vary your speaker tags, so instead of using “yelled” so much maybe use “exclaimed” or “cried.” Other than that, great job!!! 🤩]]> 2022-12-01 16:01:15 UTC https://padlet.com/29msekyere/cxe8jc57evij7mtq/wish/2405368384 https://padlet.com/29msekyere/cxe8jc57evij7mtq/wish/2493999989 Hi Mercy! Something about your timed essay I like was your anecdote. I loved the way you described the seen. Something else I like were the claims you made because I totally agreed, 100%! Something you could do is be more descriptive with the anecdote. I thought that it was hard to envision. Other then that, it was great. ]]> 2023-02-24 15:16:59 UTC https://padlet.com/29msekyere/cxe8jc57evij7mtq/wish/2493999989