F-23 Professional Practice by Loyola Department of Design

8.23 SCD Postcard v1

2023-08-23 01:58:08 UTC

8.23 SCD Postcard

jrgunner — 2023-08-23 03:10:22 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-08-23 03:14:50 UTC

[8/23] Postcards v1

jgdonova — 2023-08-23 06:22:37 UTC

POSTCARDS

mmgarcia13 — 2023-08-23 07:19:45 UTC

POSTCARDS

mmgarcia13 — 2023-08-23 07:20:19 UTC

BACK

mjtucker1 — 2023-08-23 08:29:30 UTC

Design Postcards First Draft

ammcconn — 2023-08-23 14:38:26 UTC

Postcard First Draft

memitche1 — 2023-08-23 14:38:39 UTC

postcards 1.0

krcabrer — 2023-08-23 14:43:06 UTC

MoMI logos 1.0

krcabrer — 2023-08-23 14:46:14 UTC

8.23 Postcard v1

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8.24 Museum Logo

jrgunner — 2023-08-24 22:19:16 UTC

Museum Logo

2023-08-25 19:45:20 UTC

You show exciting potential in your layouts.
Do you mean to use the logo inside a gray or red square each time it is used? That would be very limiting for the client. The letter 'O" in the top design reads as a "D" perhaps?
Hard to comment on each of your layouts in this limited space, but happy to do so in class.
Overall, this is ambitious work. Bring it all to class Monday. and keep it up.

postcard draft 2, top

tom575 — 2023-08-27 14:31:58 UTC

This is an excellent concept.
Should the second question be about making great DESIGN?
Be sure you line up the words probably not and probably correctly: baseline line up with
large cap words. probably looks lower. Okay? and why did you change the background color on the back side? Nice to see probably on the back side. Not sure about how you set the body copy, but this is a very goo design. You listened to the critique! Good idea to use a QR code also.

post card

2023-08-27 16:22:40 UTC

this is an exciting approach. Think about using all caps for the title or an odd combination of caps and lowercase...to make your case for "weirdness."
THE BACK: I think you can have more fun here. The only hint of the art from the front is inside the stamp rectangle...which will disappear if a stamp is put there. Think about color in the word DESIGN in your header on the back. AND, read the text, and consider using color for some letters or words, so the body copy is not boring. Maybe even make some letters caps? Have more fun.

postcard

2023-08-27 16:28:35 UTC

I wrote you inside canvas email. But here is more.
The second one in your layout list in Padlet is the one we critiqued in class last week. So, this is a very good concept that is wonderfully tricky to answer as a viewer.
Keep your layout/design for tomorrow. But try also adding thumb prints and maybe a fake tear in a corner? Rough it up a bit.
UGLY is a subjective description, so that can be better pursued on the back side, right? You don't need a provocation header there. Maybe just ask WHAT IS UGLY ANYWAY?
Read the text and maybe you can have more fun with that by adding a word here and there? If your goal is to suggest that entering the design program can better prepare you for knowing not only what is ugly but also knowing how to solve creative problems, then think about that more. And please remember how to design the back so that it can be mailed. What you have here could not.

Musuem Logo

2023-08-27 16:30:57 UTC

Overlapping transparent letterforms can suggest movement, so you have done that in one of your solutions. But you should try for more contemporary methods. And you can explore making just one word or letter "move." And...it is possible for a branding to include more than one way for one letter or word to "move." Just make sure you understand how to use the design in many iterations for the client.

post card

2023-08-27 16:34:51 UTC

"Pretty Cool" is just silly enough to work on the front. Delete the logos. The back should be more in keeping with your sense of humor. Read the text, and maybe there is something in there you can use? A word, phrase, sentence that can be handled with YOUR sense of humor? I have an old mouse pad that says Design is a Good Idea. Your card front reminds me of that kind of deadpan sense of PLAY.

postcard

2023-08-27 16:41:35 UTC

The FRONT we criqieud in class:
Think about what it means for the word "DESIGN" to intrude or be a part of two other words that mean something relevent to the concept. The word "HOME" is powerful for obvious reasons. Think about Design Home.
Can you make Design seem very complicated yet readable so the viewer sees that the program can be challenging yet rewarding simultaneously? Decide how mush contrast you want in the main design on front. And remember to read the text for the back and see if there are words or phrases that can help you with the back design. If HOME is what resonates best, then maybe that word lies beneath or behind the text?
Or maybe DESIGN HOME...etc. This is not a corporate post card. Good luck. Have fun.

post card

2023-08-27 16:48:00 UTC

The labyrinth concept: It's a good idea.
Are you saying that no matter the question, DESIGN is the ANSWER?
If so, then maybe that statement can be used somewhere. In your words:
DESIGN IS THE SOLUTION, but the word "solution" sounds a bit cold to me, and that's why I questioned using it at all. Most people / freshmen are confused by most things like entering college, and certainly what the design department will offer and what is expected of them. It can all seem to be a maze or labyrinth. Design can help you get where you want to be. Directional signage, language, concept, typography, logical thinking, presentation practice, etc etc.

post card

2023-08-27 16:52:13 UTC

Summarizing critique from last week:
Try setting a wide variety of words as "wallpapper" in rows that bleeds off all sides with some words just silly or surprising but somehow relevant to entering a new world of design. And it would be a new adventure, right?
Make sure your back is mailable. Remember the critique about stamp and text, etc.
Read the text. There might be words in there you can use on the front. Don't be boring. have fun.

post card

2023-08-27 16:55:51 UTC

FRONT
The Doodling with the face sketch is very good. The colors don't work as well as the one directly above it. The concept/message is a good one. It would be even more powerful if you had a follow up on the back side. What is the conclusion to first doodling?
Read the text. See if there are words or phrases that can help you reach a conclusion for the back side. You could DRAW a few letters, for instance. Think about the back. Make sure you position the text, the stamp, the address portion where they below.
Have fun.

post card

2023-08-27 17:00:32 UTC

Two show promise, as discussed in class. If you want to continue with the "se-through" CREATE effect, what we see in those letters should be more surprising. You are offering a NEW WORLD to incoming students.
The puzzle concept can also work if you push that much farther. Delete those logos on the front. Think about what words can play off each other to make the viewer want to turn it over. read the text for the back. There could be great words to pull out. Have fun.

postcard

2023-08-27 17:02:22 UTC

I think "essentials" is always a great word to use...but there should be an obvious sense of play or humor to make it your own.
Needs to have a surprise element.
Rememnber to make sure the post card can be mailed. And read the text. There could well be words or phrases that can help you better develop a design.

post card

2023-08-27 17:07:28 UTC

I still think a quick two sentences on the front would work. Many parents don't understand what a design degree can do.
I think many incoming students can identify with a parent's skepticism.
If you want to pursue the taped on word over another word, make sure there is a very good reason the two words work together...in harmony or opposition. There needs to be contrast, I think. Make sure the back has text and stamp and address area correct. read the text so that you may see words or phrases that can help continue your concept to the back side.

post card

2023-08-27 17:11:36 UTC

The contrast of the typesetting and hand-drawn art can work usually, but in your version, it is not exciting enough... as we stated in class. Perhaps more contrast?
DESIGN IS is a bold beginning to a continuing statement and frame of mind.
Your design makes it seem minor. But the possibilities are endless, in reality, right?
If you want to use a rough or hand-drawn effect on the cover, try to use that same concept on the back. read the text. See if there are words that can help you/

Postcards V2

mjtucker1 — 2023-08-27 20:31:27 UTC

8.27 MoMI Logos v1

2023-08-27 20:33:55 UTC

Museum Logos V1

mjtucker1 — 2023-08-27 20:46:02 UTC

8.27 SCD Postcard v2

2023-08-27 20:51:29 UTC

Museum Logo A

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Post Card A (Original)

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Post Card A (Flipped)

2023-08-27 21:32:41 UTC

After realizing that the post stamp needs to be at the top right, I had to flip the entire piece to try and make that work. This was destructive to my typography on the front. You can see the original version below.

Post Card B

2023-08-27 21:38:10 UTC

Postcard Draft 2

memitche1 — 2023-08-27 21:40:32 UTC

Museum Logo

memitche1 — 2023-08-27 21:43:09 UTC

MoMI 08/28

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POSTCARDS 08/28

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8.28 Post Card

jrgunner — 2023-08-28 02:20:16 UTC

[8/27] MotMI Logo v1

jgdonova — 2023-08-28 02:23:08 UTC

postcards 2.0

krcabrer — 2023-08-28 02:40:10 UTC

MoMI

krcabrer — 2023-08-28 02:40:48 UTC

MoMI

krcabrer — 2023-08-28 02:49:36 UTC

Logo Concepts First Draft

ammcconn — 2023-08-28 03:19:38 UTC

MOMI Logos Crit 2

egporter1 — 2023-08-28 03:46:00 UTC

Postcards Draft II

egporter1 — 2023-08-28 04:39:31 UTC

8.28 MoMI v1

2023-08-28 04:42:46 UTC

MOMI 8/28

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POSTCARDS 8/28

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[8/27] Postcards v2

jgdonova — 2023-08-28 07:27:08 UTC

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8.28 Postcards v2

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Postcards 8-28

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MOMI Sketches + Ideas

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Design Post Cards Second Draft

ammcconn — 2023-08-28 14:15:28 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-08-28 14:30:46 UTC

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More Versions + MOMI Logo

mmgarcia13 — 2023-08-28 16:22:20 UTC

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postcard Tom

tom575 — 2023-08-29 18:29:06 UTC

seeing your solution up close and backlit, i like it much better. that dot for the "i" could just be a design element of its own. You could try the word DESIGN in all caps, which might give you more3 room to place your designs inside. I don't think you need the word LOYOLA on the front. Remember to re-set your body copy. And try to make the back side echo what you've created on the front...as we discussed many times kin class.

postcard...tom

tom575 — 2023-08-29 18:33:41 UTC

the word ESSENTIAL reads a lot better in the version that has you are, but, as we said in class, I think it works better with just YOU embedded inside ESSENTIAL or the DESIGN IS version you showed. Can you work on both versions for tomorrow. Be sure people can read ESSENTIAL. I really think YOU inside vibrating could be used around campus for visitors...giant banner, etc.
and of course make sure the back plays with the front...echos it. Read the text. Good luck

museum logo/image...tom

tom575 — 2023-08-29 18:36:36 UTC

that top layout has promise. the perspective is exciting. be careful that the "screen" image at right does not read as a letter form. the "i" does not quite work yet, but the idea of a large screen-like image is worth exploring more.

postcard...tom

tom575 — 2023-08-29 18:39:54 UTC

the more i think about this the more i think the books should look like real books. Take a photo of various book spines, then PhotoShop your fake titles on the spines. You could photograph a wall out of focus for background. the bag can sit on a bench. on a chair, etc. same for the bag. and please try making ESSENTIALS look like it is stamped or printed in the fabric of the bag. the realer this looks, the funnier. make sure the back works with it.

museum. tom

tom575 — 2023-08-29 18:42:45 UTC

the top 3 have the most promise, with the top one pretty close to being the solution. need to make sure people (the client) can read the letter "i." and not sure you need to use that box-like perspective that is its environment. But it might work out. try color after tomorrow?

8.30 SCD Postcard Final

2023-08-29 21:24:19 UTC

Postcard Final

mjtucker1 — 2023-08-29 23:43:37 UTC

Postcards Final

egporter1 — 2023-08-29 23:44:53 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-08-30 00:27:32 UTC

final postcard...tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 00:50:18 UTC

great texture and fun to read. i wish your words you had fun with in the body copy resembled more your title on the back, but this is a vast improvement. your address lines on back have to be below the stamp, remember? remove the "to" and those short ruled lines. it would not get mailed.
and please be sure you bring in your original front design also tomorrow. thanks. nice work

maze postcard...tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 00:53:03 UTC

I really like the note you made to yourself...the body copy on the front of the card with that rectangle maze. i think that is funny. "i don't know where i'm going" might be a good headline?

new postcard...tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 00:54:25 UTC

new front looks a bit nightmarish but fun. back is still a bit boring, right?

new doodle card...tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 00:56:56 UTC

the new front is much better. and funnier. i thought you were going to let one of your doodles overlap to the back so the text could actually wrap around it? the back is not as well thought out as it should be, but this is a nice card

8.30 Postcards (2 Finals)

2023-08-30 01:39:39 UTC

Postcard I would use if it wasn't copyright...

mmgarcia13 — 2023-08-30 02:59:04 UTC

8.30 Final Postcard

jrgunner — 2023-08-30 03:11:02 UTC

Design Post Cards Final Draft

ammcconn — 2023-08-30 03:35:54 UTC

FINAL POSTCARDS 08/30

2023-08-30 03:48:39 UTC

[8/30] Postcard Final

jgdonova — 2023-08-30 06:28:12 UTC

Final postcards

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MOMI_logos

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postcard. tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 12:35:46 UTC

you cannot use other peoples' original art.
remember that in your "weird" version, you don't need to do anything to the word
"weird." just keep it as a typeface. the weird part is already obvious in your artwork.

new postcard...tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 12:38:07 UTC

new version is better. might think about red or orange for "design." have to make sure people can read the punchline.
the back is much better.

postcards tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 12:38:54 UTC

make sure you post your revisions here before class. make sure the back is technically correct.

Final Postcard!

mmgarcia13 — 2023-08-30 12:40:55 UTC

postcard. tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 12:41:00 UTC

exciting concept. i still think that you can explore different color schemes.
and we can discuss whether "probably not" should be the bottom option. but nice job

new postcard. tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 12:42:21 UTC

this is a good idea. maybe not everyone will get it.
not sure of your type selection yet.

postcard tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 12:45:36 UTC

the second version is best. give Mr. Rand credit please. does not matter if people don't know him. they can look him up. i think you can be much crazier on front with placement of color swatches. the back is really nice.

imposter card tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 12:46:37 UTC

okay the new one works. nicely done.

death card tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 12:49:21 UTC

always a life or death situation really, right?
you either succeed or fail. at least that's the fatalist approach you are taking here?
i still like the contrast of the "sparkles" and the skeleton...always a ray of hope etc etc

WHY tom

tom575 — 2023-08-30 12:51:23 UTC

color palette might need refining, but the large WHY concept has promise. the WHY might be too opaque as it stands?
backside: will it be able to mail with the color on the right side?

Post Card Final (Back)

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Postcard Final

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Post Card Front (Final)

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mlsanche — 2023-08-30 14:11:11 UTC

Postcards Final

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krcabrer — 2023-08-30 14:28:44 UTC

Final Postcards

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font alternative final

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8.31_ Museum Logo

jrgunner — 2023-08-31 16:55:41 UTC

museum. tom

2023-08-31 20:44:01 UTC

the third sheet with your "eyes" rreference works best.
The others look like other people's solutions or are too abstract.
Keep working on that third page. You have two designs on that page that can work.

final post card. tom

2023-08-31 20:45:39 UTC

why did you delete the word DESIGN on the one card concept (2 versions)
you handed in? the backs need help.

9.1. Postcards

jrgunner — 2023-09-01 18:38:31 UTC

Bonus 9.1 Postcard

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jrgunner — 2023-09-01 22:26:22 UTC

museum tom

tom575 — 2023-09-01 23:53:47 UTC

top left and top right both have promise. top left...the eyes concept...makes the museum accessible, which is good. you don't want the museum to look silly or for kids alone, so how you use the eyes is very important. not being literal is probably best. and you don't want to depend on a color environment (the yellow background) for your logo to live.
the top right has more of a stronger institutional feel...longer lasting maybe? the two black underline bars could be used for information, etc. so i think both approaches can be pursued.

postcard revisions. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-01 23:57:17 UTC

MUCH BETTER with the word DESIGN back in. you should delete your name and mine from the front. it is distracting. put credits on back. and the back probably should have the PINK color and not that other color (red-orange?) Pink will make it easier to address and is more of a surprise.
PRINT THE NEW VERSIONS for Wednesday, please. Trimmed correctly to size. thanks.

9.2 MoMI Logos v2

2023-09-02 19:40:45 UTC

museum. tom

2023-09-02 20:35:57 UTC

your edited or tailored version, the smaller layout sheet— third and fifth rows. your letter 'o" is clearly your star in the 3rd row, so that is what will move, i assume? make sure your letter spacing is consistent...looks like too much space between your first M and the O. And the 5th row, i think the normal letter "I" might work best for longevity. And it makes sense to have the four letters be the movement stars? you might want to try this same concept but tilt the black rectangle that holds the 4 letters, so there is a slight perspective? you can start doing storyboards based on these two concepts i think. next wednesday, just have better than roughs to review. if you want to send me something first, that's fine.

museum. tom

2023-09-02 20:37:39 UTC

you did not say this in class, but if you mean the letter "O" to be the letter that defines the movement, then you need to say that. i think it could work for you, but you need to show how that "O" can change while the other letters remain the same.

postcard. tom

2023-09-02 20:41:14 UTC

i showed your card to a couple designers, and they did not warm to it. it is a bit scary or gloomy, and it does not feel "real," since you are not using photography. You could actually photograph actual spines and thenplavce the new titles on the real book spines. in a real bag. if you want to stay with your illustration style, then think about one hand reaching out to grab the bag. also think about how you can use the titles on the back side.

car. tom

2023-09-02 20:43:00 UTC

nice that you used photography, but it does not stand out graphically. and your punctataion is wrong on the front...and the statement does not line up with your continuation statement on back, so the concept is lost to most, i think. not sure the joke is strong enough, anyawy?

card. tom

2023-09-02 20:44:26 UTC

why didn't you keep the black background in the cards you handed in? it is much weaker now. also, try a better word? WORK. or even YOU, so that you can fill the letters with perhaps more interesting objects.

card. tom

2023-09-02 21:14:01 UTC

the black & white color palette is perhaps not exciting enough...and maybe think about other words instead of the usual ones to describe the programs? If you want to use DESIGN, maybe it is the last word we read at bottom? and it would stand out, of course. try different background colors. needs to look livelier. and the back needs to echo your concept.

latest card. tom

2023-09-02 21:15:50 UTC

couple designers had a hard time reading it quickly and thought it was not interesting enough. i still think YOU can work in serted inside ESSENTIAL. or maybe just DESIGN?
think about it. needs to really pop.

new front card. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-03 21:12:31 UTC

much better. colors pop now. but maybe the word "welcome" needs to be on the front...or "come in" maybe at an angle on the door, or somewhere, since yu have a follow-up on the back to make yourself at comfortable...which does not relate to anything if you don't have something on the front, right? "make yourself at home" is a nice statement, since you want the viewer to feel at "home" in the design department.

card. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-03 21:16:59 UTC

try adding texture / depth to the card to make it more interesting. it still has a generic feel to it. like a computer finished it for you? maybe an overall texture...or background texture for depth? or place texture to some words? think about some words emerging while others fade a little. DEPTH.
the back: if you want to play with the word DESIGN, maybe each letter needs to be a different typeface?

card. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-03 21:20:57 UTC

Please think about a new, more dynamic color palette so your design POPS more. This is a nice concept, but the colors are drab.
Just try bright colors. You don't have to use the exact two colors at 100% on the back, if you want to split the panel as before. You can use a tint, for instance.
Try reversing the statements, as we discussed in class, so "probably not" is the bottom one. Ace suggested it.

final card again. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-03 21:31:16 UTC

after reading what you wrote as your "wallpaper" or background info/texture, I see you are giving yourself pep talks.
maybe your word should be YES instead of WHY. If you keep WHY, the back can say WHY NOT with no punctuation.
But try YES...and make sure your color for that word is lively and transparent enough to play with your background words.
NOT OPAQUE at all. If you use YES, maybe ALWAYS is on the back? Think about what can follow such an affirmative statement.

card back. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-03 21:32:14 UTC

make sure you can mail the card. right side dark color where stamp is may not work

card again. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-03 21:37:24 UTC

the word DESIGN really needs to be special...please try warm color(s).
be more daring. maybe add a shadow?
Think also how design has changed. it is no longer analog, right?
think about that DUNE logo again. what is the future, etc.

MOMI logo 2.0

krcabrer — 2023-09-04 18:56:06 UTC

MOMI logo 2.1

krcabrer — 2023-09-04 18:56:32 UTC

book cover 1.0

krcabrer — 2023-09-05 02:56:13 UTC

book cover 1.1

krcabrer — 2023-09-05 02:56:38 UTC

momi. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-05 12:20:28 UTC

the 2.0 top right MOMI looks like it could work on its own. It feels the most sophisticated. The O has a nice echo effect.

the other "O" versions don't work. One of them even looks like a hurricane? Please try different M shapes. The M with the Batman ears looks xomical and old fashion.

looking down. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-05 12:23:08 UTC

your 1.0 has the better type treatment, but is that your original photo?
Did you read the eaasy i placed in Canvas?
Your 1.1 has very odd and dated type selection, but it is a more pleasing visual.
Remember the photo has to be yours. and i askedd that you all consoder using at least part of the essay as part of your solution. and remember to design the spine

MOMI. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-05 12:26:22 UTC

draft 3.
the top row works best, but that cocnept has been used many many times, so please reconsider. the others just do not read when reduced. the bottom row feels like it is for a childrens' museum.

postcard.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-05 12:32:41 UTC

i showed the cards to 7 people of different age groups. no one selected yours as being effective. that doesn't necessarily mean anything, but no one "understood" the drawing on the front or turned it over.
i think the best part of the artwork is the snout. try to reconsider where the snout is...maybe forget the teeth, which i don't think work as well as they should anyway...they seem non-threatening.

9.5 Postcard Prints

jrgunner — 2023-09-05 17:32:42 UTC

9.6 Looking Down v1

2023-09-05 20:24:51 UTC

*Now realizing I accidentally swapped the "ue" in the authors lastname. Will fix that.

looking down. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-05 20:55:39 UTC

number 2 and 4 work best.
Be sure to spell his name correctly!

number 4 is nice, but think about not stacked and centered type. and you can just use ESSAYS if that works better for you.

the one with the coins would work much better if the coins were on a dirty street...street with character, etc. in fact, it could be the best one, depending upon the environment for the money.

krcabrer — 2023-09-05 22:07:49 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-05 22:09:57 UTC

momi. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-05 22:32:20 UTC

that very bold top design comes closest to being a logo that has mystery and excitement. not sure about the weight but the idea is very good. the whole positive / negative feel is always a nice way to explore.
can you slim down the type a bit? if you can do that, and make it look like a contemporary design, you have something.
that second sheet does not work. very awkward looking shapes.
and remember to use good type setting for the name.

book cover & spine.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 00:44:13 UTC

the spine is on the LEFT of the cover...the cover opens at right.

the title: Looking Down
Essays ( or And Other Essays)
John Biguenet

Once you use a large word like EXIT on the cover, it can diminish the importance of the title, which includes the word: ESSAYS or
AND OTHER ESSAYS

Hope that was clear?

And when you do something like "drip" your title, it implies something, right? We can discuss in class.

9.6 MoMI Logo

2023-09-06 01:55:05 UTC

storyboards. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 03:04:34 UTC

be sure to bring all your storyboards to class to pin up. i think there is at least one of your frames that could be the actual logo.

Essay Book drafts Sept. 6

egporter1 — 2023-09-06 04:04:54 UTC

Museum Logos- Sept 6

egporter1 — 2023-09-06 04:39:46 UTC

Logos V2

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-06 04:59:03 UTC

Looking Down V1

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-06 04:59:54 UTC

MOMI Animation storyboards

egporter1 — 2023-09-06 05:01:59 UTC

Book Cover A

ravassil — 2023-09-06 05:53:55 UTC

Book Cover B

ravassil — 2023-09-06 05:54:19 UTC

Cover C

ravassil — 2023-09-06 05:54:29 UTC

Cover D

ravassil — 2023-09-06 05:54:59 UTC

Cover E

ravassil — 2023-09-06 05:55:23 UTC

[9/6] Book Covers v1

jgdonova — 2023-09-06 07:28:46 UTC

first round book cover

2023-09-06 07:54:09 UTC

[9/6] MoMI Logo v2

jgdonova — 2023-09-06 08:01:20 UTC

9.6 Book Covers

jrgunner — 2023-09-06 08:43:52 UTC

Logo and storyboard

2023-09-06 10:21:30 UTC

book cover. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 11:58:47 UTC

all three are good. but the bird cover with the black bar really pops. the spine is clever. his name should be more prominent, i think.
discuss in class. the third cover is dramatic. if you use an arrow on spine, why not on cover? nice work

museum. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 11:59:58 UTC

all 3 new versions are good. probably the middle and bottom ones can work together.
do a storyboard based on using both versions?

book covers. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 12:03:02 UTC

these are all worth a discussion in class.
the photo ones probably work best but the experimental type treatment ones are exciting. distorting the type is less effective...looks more like student work. but overall, nice work

post card. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 12:03:42 UTC

please print out your revised card trimmed correctly for class today

book cover. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 12:06:52 UTC

the first one has the most promise, but can you try to see how you can explore your title type more? and is this your original photo?

museum. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 12:09:21 UTC

in what i assume is your storyboard, the final iteration of your logo looks like show biz lights?
try turning the "O" sideways, so that it resembles a screen. it already takes all the attention, anyway, so play with it? and maybe it has a thirds set of "lights'?

book cover. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 12:12:11 UTC

your cover D looks promising.
the spine is at LEFT of the cover. the cover opens to our right.

covers. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 12:15:03 UTC

nice that you read the instructions!
these have a distinct feel to them, which is good. worth discussion in class. they feel experimental and surprising. the author might have an issue with your title type. but we will see. nice explorations.

museum. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 12:16:32 UTC

number 1 has no intimations of movement yet. can you play more with those geometric shapes? instaed of shades, try line art?

museum. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 12:18:16 UTC

version number 6 shows promise. not sure people will read the letters correctly, but it implies movement

BOOK COVER 09/06

2023-09-06 12:34:09 UTC

MOMI 09/06

2023-09-06 12:34:51 UTC

9.06 Logos Revised

2023-09-06 13:05:31 UTC

museum. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 13:08:59 UTC

wish we had reviewed these earlier. pages 2 and 3 hold most promise. need to discuss in class.

covers. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 13:10:19 UTC

nice experimental...explorations.
a combination of a couple of these might work well. i think the author will always want his name spelled in full. don't forget the spine.

museum. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 13:11:44 UTC

page one, the second one...and maybe even that odd third row...but the middle/second one shows promise. wish i had seen these last week.

museum again. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-06 13:15:14 UTC

why not two lowercase "m" on that middle one?

Book Covers First Draft

ammcconn — 2023-09-06 14:11:29 UTC

rwshaffe — 2023-09-06 14:27:19 UTC

MoMi Logos II

mmgarcia13 — 2023-09-06 14:27:32 UTC

MOMI Final Logos

2023-09-06 14:31:06 UTC

storyboards

2023-09-06 14:35:21 UTC

Book covers_round 1

2023-09-06 14:38:06 UTC

2023-09-06 14:38:18 UTC

2023-09-06 14:39:00 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-09-06 14:44:34 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-09-06 14:46:21 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-09-06 14:46:28 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-09-06 14:46:39 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-09-06 14:46:51 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-06 15:22:04 UTC

Museum Logo draft 2

memitche1 — 2023-09-06 19:19:23 UTC

museum. tom

2023-09-06 19:29:04 UTC

i think your newest version works well enough to create a storyboard and then the animation. what about the official name typography? please show how that will work with the logo. thanks

museum logo A. tom

2023-09-06 19:30:50 UTC

i think latest one works well enough to create a storyboard...what about the name typography?

museum. tom

2023-09-06 19:33:02 UTC

if you want tp pursue the stencil approach, try all four letters horizontally, and run a straight horizontal white bar through the letters...then try a few more white bars, different widths. Just start exploring.

Book Cover draft 1

memitche1 — 2023-09-06 20:18:16 UTC

museum logo. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-07 12:34:50 UTC

sorry if i confused you yesterday with suggesting various versions of your storyboard frames for a final logo.
if you are sold on a particular logo, go with the one or two you like most and animate that one or those two. you have a few to choose from, which is a goodd place to be.

museum. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-07 12:49:42 UTC

I answered your email this morning.
Did you get it?

book covers. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-07 12:52:07 UTC

None of your covers are strong enough yet. Did you read the author's essay? That might give you a good idea for what you could see by "looking down." That said, it is nice to see hand-drawn type...just needs a better reason for it.

museum draft one. Tom

tom575 — 2023-09-07 12:53:26 UTC

Your draft 1 shows more promise than your latest version. Go bold.

post card doodling.tom

2023-09-08 19:29:43 UTC

maybe place the two eys and smile from the front onto the back?
and you just need Doodling IS Design, and delete that second sentence?
You can then start the text by saying
DESIGN is also...etc.
Be careful how you break your body copy sentences.

9.11 Looking Down v2

2023-09-09 21:11:31 UTC

not sure if my scribbly handwriting fits?
a combo of the coins from v1 and new coins shot in direct sunlight

looking down coins. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-09 22:02:06 UTC

try typewriter typeface, like he had started writing his essay title, and then crumpled it up and threw it away, along with his name...and there the 2 pieces of paper are in the street with the coins. has to look authentic. OR, typewriter type for the title crumpled paper and his signature for his name. have a couple folks write his name out? I think the typewriter type treatment might work. try it. the street surface works better.
the spine would work better if it looked like at least one coin bled over to the spine...if you can do that. this has a lot of potential.

[9/9] Book Covers v2

jgdonova — 2023-09-10 01:10:24 UTC

where are your book covers?

tom575 — 2023-09-10 01:49:15 UTC

book covers?

tom575 — 2023-09-10 01:52:06 UTC

shadow book cover. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-10 01:59:36 UTC

the concept is nice. the photo is good.
the slight slant has a mysterious feel.
your type decisions need your attention.
if you want to place your title along that slanted shadow line, think about a more powerful/effective typeface instead of a standard (weak) font — a thin serif. if you want a descender like that lowercase "g," than it should not be above the shadow line. try all caps sans serif so the title sits right on the shadow. and your subtitle and author name is not very readable.

revised book covers. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-10 02:04:37 UTC

bird cover: nice and dramatic.
good black bar on spine.
author name is a bit hidden, right?
try it above LOOKING and other spots so his name can be seen better.

staircase cover: nice arrow on front cover. i think this is the more interesting concept.
maybe his name is too small...maybe.
not sure you need "and other essays."
Try ESSAYS only just to see. but this cover does work. bring them both in monday.

Museum Logo draft 3

memitche1 — 2023-09-10 21:42:30 UTC

bookecovers 2.0

krcabrer — 2023-09-10 23:00:41 UTC

9.11 MoMI Animation v1

2023-09-10 23:46:43 UTC

having a small bug with one of the M's - going to see if I can get help to fix in it Motion 2

museum logo. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 00:27:33 UTC

be sure you include the full name as your final ID for museum. and in tghe motion final frame?

book cover.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 00:30:22 UTC

the top one i guess works best.
but not sure there is any reason for the torn pieces of paper?
good that you used parts of the actual essay as wall papeer, but those do not work well.
try being bolder I think. Remember you can actually show the viewpoint of looking down.

museum. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 00:36:03 UTC

your new ones for the most part look a bit like cartoon versions...bubble gum?
except for tghe bottom right one which could develop into a good logo.
your first draft, 2 of 4 also has a chance if it is developed better.this is a logo for a museum that honors the history of FILM in all its glory. it also would want to be conemporary.

museum logo. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 00:38:29 UTC

logo looks good. be sure you are very happy with it

MoMi Logos III

mmgarcia13 — 2023-09-11 01:24:36 UTC

Final Postcard

egporter1 — 2023-09-11 01:36:13 UTC

BOOK COVER 09/11

2023-09-11 01:37:49 UTC

MOMI LOGO 09/11

2023-09-11 01:51:57 UTC

Looking Down Cover A

ravassil — 2023-09-11 02:04:29 UTC

I like this one

Looking Down Cover B

ravassil — 2023-09-11 02:04:41 UTC

MOMI Story Board Rough

ravassil — 2023-09-11 02:07:19 UTC

Looking Down V2

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-11 05:10:52 UTC

9.11 Final Logo

jrgunner — 2023-09-11 05:16:50 UTC

9.11 Book Covers

jrgunner — 2023-09-11 05:27:39 UTC

2023-09-11 05:58:37 UTC

2023-09-11 06:08:42 UTC

9.11 Book Cover 1

2023-09-11 06:17:42 UTC

9.11 Book Cover 2

2023-09-11 06:18:46 UTC

9.11 Book Cover 3

2023-09-11 06:19:23 UTC

[9/11] Postcard Front Revision

jgdonova — 2023-09-11 06:23:17 UTC

[9/11] MoMI Storyboard

jgdonova — 2023-09-11 06:24:57 UTC

9.11 Final Logo Options

2023-09-11 07:05:49 UTC

BOOK COVER 1 V1

mmgarcia13 — 2023-09-11 12:48:33 UTC

final logos

egporter1 — 2023-09-11 12:51:04 UTC

BOOK COVER 1 V2

mmgarcia13 — 2023-09-11 12:58:07 UTC

BOOK COVER 1 V3

mmgarcia13 — 2023-09-11 13:01:54 UTC

museum logos 3. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 13:05:22 UTC

the far right one (nice and minimal) and the top left (more traditional but powerful) are the best ones. be sure to include the full name in your presentation...and animation. do them both if you can.

looking down. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 13:06:23 UTC

i lean towards the darker veersion. remember to add ESSAYS. and the spine

card and museum logo. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 13:09:58 UTC

new card is easier to read when it is small. but it is a better version than before. more dramatic. i thiunk it will look better in an online portfolio than in printed form.

museum motion. storyboard i think works. not sure the period is needed but it works best in animation anyway. add the full name, please

museum logo. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 13:13:15 UTC

i think the right side versions work well...show promise.
lowercase is friendly. that "dash" is for a screen, right? that can be nice in motion pice for obvious reasons. your motion can start with full screen black, camera pulls back to reveal a smaller screemn shape...that then fits into the O etc etcd. please add full museum name

book covers. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 13:17:15 UTC

all three new ones are good. i lean towards number 2. for that one, think about all lowercase for the excerpts from the essay you quote, since you don't have periods at the ends anyway. ok? nice work

book cover. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 13:18:48 UTC

not sure what the image is...science fiction cover? it is interesting, however.

Museum Animation V1

jrgunner — 2023-09-11 13:19:59 UTC

animation. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 13:23:22 UTC

yes it works and is fun. the client would want the full name to appear at end.

logo. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 13:28:39 UTC

your nice bold logo is very good. add full name of museum please

POSTCARD 09/11

2023-09-11 13:53:39 UTC

BOOK COVER 2

mmgarcia13 — 2023-09-11 14:01:11 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-09-11 14:03:58 UTC

2023-09-11 14:04:43 UTC

Book cover , momi, postcard . Tom

Cover is much better. Nice work.
New museum logo: the taller “I” works.
Postcard. YES is a good word but why is it not more transparent so we can read your words?

2023-09-11 14:07:59 UTC

Book covers.
All three new ones are nice to look at.
The outline of the ampersand needs to be slightly bolder?
And your line up of the title in the top one is off.

2023-09-11 14:27:08 UTC

2023-09-11 14:31:28 UTC

BOOK COVERS

mmgarcia13 — 2023-09-11 14:31:56 UTC

Book Covers Second Draft

ammcconn — 2023-09-11 14:31:57 UTC

Revised MOMI Logo

ammcconn — 2023-09-11 14:37:17 UTC

2023-09-11 15:24:08 UTC

LOGOS

mmgarcia13 — 2023-09-11 16:18:20 UTC

MOMI Animation V1

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-11 16:20:03 UTC

BOOK COVER 2. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-11 18:27:03 UTC

type choice is good. but try to have the image continue onto the spine.
and remember no punctuation on those pullquotes, so no cap letter at beginning of each quote either. ok?

momi 9.11.2023

egporter1 — 2023-09-12 01:11:10 UTC

9.11 MoMI Print Arrangement

2023-09-12 01:32:49 UTC

MOMI animation

krcabrer — 2023-09-12 01:43:53 UTC

museum animation.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-12 01:51:54 UTC

latest version is much better. nice work

new post card. museum logo. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-12 02:02:00 UTC

the back of post card now is much better. nice work on the card. so far, your post card is your most successful design.

museum logo: i was hoping showing those alphabets today would lead you to a new concept. these new ones do not work, sorry. if you want to chose one to go with at this late date, try 2 of 2 bottom row right, i think.
at least it is clean. work on your book covers also. you are close with that cleaner version— 2 of 3 version.

MOMI Final Logo Presentation

2023-09-12 06:30:22 UTC

NEW yes post card. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-12 11:28:41 UTC

your latest revision works well i hope you agree. the back: not sure if it would mail, but it looks good. Not sure of your statement, but consider:
Yes is better than the alternative.

museum full name placement. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-12 11:32:57 UTC

try moving the name closer to your logo. it looks adrift right now. maybe make it slightly larger? you want it to feel it belongs there.
but do you see that bring it in rom the left to fill that space works? and it also camn be the last move in your motion piece.
you have created a very effective logo.

museum final logo. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-12 11:37:02 UTC

very nice. hand in both tomorrow.

book cover. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-12 11:39:27 UTC

your 3 of 3 ...the one on the right...is well done. it is moody, contemplative and a bit mysterious. you can hand that one in if you are having a hard time.

mlsanche — 2023-09-12 11:44:13 UTC

mlsanche — 2023-09-12 11:44:45 UTC

final logo

mlsanche — 2023-09-12 12:12:47 UTC

MOMI FINAL ANIMATION

2023-09-12 13:32:15 UTC

museum animation. tom

2023-09-12 14:02:18 UTC

remember you have to use the full name. and you don't need those double "blinks" at the end of the animation. not sure why you want to draw or color inside your logo either, but at least it is intriguing. sorry you missed yesterday. important that you keep up.
hand in the logo properly as described in earlier email.

latest card. tom

2023-09-12 14:03:28 UTC

new card reads well, at least in Padlet. it's your best solution so far for the card. don't forget the back.

book cover 2 tom

2023-09-12 14:10:40 UTC

this is very good photo and type treatment, but do not forget the word ESSAYS

book cover. tom

2023-09-12 14:13:22 UTC

bring in that first one we looked at together of your knees with the blacked out type...just work on author's
name and ESSAYS so they show up better.
then if you want to re-take that photo the way we discussed, do that as well. ok?

latest cover. tom

2023-09-12 14:15:28 UTC

image is very intriguing. you left out the word ESSAYS, and the type doe not line up and is probably to close to the trim. but this would be looked at on a shelf.

9.13 Final Logo

2023-09-12 18:43:11 UTC

final museum logo. tom

2023-09-12 19:13:26 UTC

final one looks good. have fun animating

almyers1 — 2023-09-12 20:41:20 UTC

9.13 Looking Down v3

2023-09-12 21:01:08 UTC

Final Logo

memitche1 — 2023-09-12 21:30:11 UTC

[9/12] Book Covers v3

jgdonova — 2023-09-12 21:35:08 UTC

[EDIT] I added one more new cover to my original v3 round.

FINAL BOOK COVER

2023-09-12 22:38:13 UTC

9.13 Final Book Cover?

2023-09-12 23:00:02 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-09-12 23:04:12 UTC

momi logo

krcabrer — 2023-09-12 23:28:48 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-12 23:33:43 UTC

[9/12] MoMI Logo Final

jgdonova — 2023-09-12 23:44:50 UTC

final book cover. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-13 00:18:58 UTC

looks good. we can discuss minor details in class (remind me)...but this works.

covers. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-13 00:22:31 UTC

3 of 3 seems to work best. love that you include a torn version of the essay.
i think the paper still look pretty clean.
Please remind me to discuss this with you in class.

mlsanche — 2023-09-13 00:22:47 UTC

museum and covers

tom575 — 2023-09-13 00:24:45 UTC

logo looks good. animation next.

both covers work. remind me to chat about it in class with you.

museum logo. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-13 00:27:42 UTC

you picked the right one to submit, but remember we discussed the "echo" effect on the letter O could be a thinner weight? and that thin lined M is odd since you don't use it elsewhere?

book cover & museum logo. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-13 00:37:03 UTC

I wish you had explored more, but your latest is fun and well done. the odd photo choice adds to the vintage vibe.

muzseum logo full name position: use the all caps below the logo.

cover

tom575 — 2023-09-13 00:38:23 UTC

remember to add the word ESSAYS to spine

9.13 MoMI Animation Color

2023-09-13 00:41:55 UTC

(nothing new, just fixing a small bug)

9.13 MoMI Animation Black & White

2023-09-13 00:42:25 UTC

Revised Book Covers

ammcconn — 2023-09-13 00:45:50 UTC

ANIMATION MOMI

2023-09-13 01:20:27 UTC

W/ ESSAYS

2023-09-13 01:33:06 UTC

9.13 JALC Sketches

2023-09-13 01:45:23 UTC

MOMIFINALLOGO

2023-09-13 01:58:14 UTC

MOMI Animation

ravassil — 2023-09-13 02:01:06 UTC

Looking Down Cover Final (A)

ravassil — 2023-09-13 02:02:18 UTC

Looking Down Cover Final (B)

ravassil — 2023-09-13 02:02:58 UTC

MOMI Final Logo

ravassil — 2023-09-13 02:03:35 UTC

both covers. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-13 02:04:50 UTC

on both covers, you left off the word ESSAYS.
The airplane wing version looks better, because the wing is clearer now, but the word DOWN is so overpowering.
can you calm that word down some? that's all anyone will read. The other cover is the one i commented on before. you need to understand the spine better and the info that needs to be on it.
It can butt up against the cover.

museum animation. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-13 02:06:25 UTC

not sure it is interesting enough. you have a really good logo. why start with that "O" as a vertical? it can start as a horizontal...like a screen...and then change to be the vertical to fit into place. Let's talk about your full name placement tomorrow...ask me.

museum animation

tom575 — 2023-09-13 02:10:28 UTC

Nice beginning with the 2 Ms touching, but then it gets a bit dull with no real dramatic purpose. Just changing background colors does not make it exciting.
what are you trying to say with this logo...where is its heart?
and you need to add the full name, as we discussed in class.

museum logo

tom575 — 2023-09-13 02:12:27 UTC

a very strong logo. nice.
now that that "o" has that black dot, I think you could add the dot to the "i"... but up for discussion.

animation: think about how important those two little letters are to this design.

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-13 02:13:32 UTC

nice that you at least sketched but get much bolder to start

museum animation and book cover

tom575 — 2023-09-13 02:17:18 UTC

Both concepts are good. Nice work.
We can chat more in class about the cover in particular, but just "cleaning it up" and concentrating on a focused approach made that cover pop.

the animation is nice as well. many ways to go with it, but this works.

book cover

tom575 — 2023-09-13 02:18:14 UTC

I mean version A of the new versions.

with full name

2023-09-13 02:58:11 UTC

motion logo

egporter1 — 2023-09-13 03:05:17 UTC

Final Logo Animation

memitche1 — 2023-09-13 03:09:37 UTC

9.13 Book Covers

jrgunner — 2023-09-13 03:10:37 UTC

Final Logo

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-13 03:15:07 UTC

9.13 Final Museum Logo

jrgunner — 2023-09-13 03:16:25 UTC

Final iterations MOMI

2023-09-13 03:22:22 UTC

[9/12] Book Covers Final

jgdonova — 2023-09-13 03:33:08 UTC

SKETCHES

2023-09-13 03:43:07 UTC

2023-09-13 03:43:37 UTC

FINAL BOOK COVER & SPINE

2023-09-13 03:47:05 UTC

9.13 Possible New Postcard

jrgunner — 2023-09-13 04:03:01 UTC

MOMI Animated Logo

ammcconn — 2023-09-13 04:46:40 UTC

Final postcard

2023-09-13 04:56:44 UTC

book cover final

egporter1 — 2023-09-13 05:14:03 UTC

Final_MOMI_logo

2023-09-13 05:15:41 UTC

momi final logo

egporter1 — 2023-09-13 05:16:50 UTC

2023-09-13 05:29:22 UTC

9.13 Momi Animation

2023-09-13 05:46:35 UTC

I couldn't figure out how to export it full size.

9.13 Museum Motion

jrgunner — 2023-09-13 06:46:52 UTC

Made an animation with that completed M

Final_Looking Down_book cover

2023-09-13 08:05:48 UTC

[9/13] MoMI Logo Animation

jgdonova — 2023-09-13 08:43:56 UTC

Final Logo

rwshaffe — 2023-09-13 08:47:30 UTC

9.13 Jazz Logo V1

jrgunner — 2023-09-13 09:47:46 UTC

I'm still in the sketching phase, but I thought it would be better to start experimenting early

museum animation.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-13 12:04:41 UTC

you keeping improving. nice to see.
i still think you don't need the change of backgrounds, since you have shown the point of your concept— the four letters, etc., but your latest animation works. we can discuss in class.
keep working. it is paying off

animation. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-13 12:07:01 UTC

that "ball" that rolls through doesn't really have anything to do with your final resolve, right? it's not your "O" — so i'm not sure why you use that.
but it is nice to see the ending...nice that it is short also.

latest animation. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-13 12:08:16 UTC

exciting and fun. seems like you should stop on he logo and let it stay on the screen, but this is a nice job

final logo. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-13 12:10:20 UTC

more elegant, but those thin lines disappear when reduced.
can you simply make sure they don't?
try all caps sans serif for the full name?

animation

tom575 — 2023-09-13 12:11:04 UTC

animation works better than the static logo.

looking down

tom575 — 2023-09-13 12:11:44 UTC

not sure why you have the title twice?

2nd book final cover

egporter1 — 2023-09-13 12:48:51 UTC

latest cover. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-13 12:56:26 UTC

better. but now that ESSAYS is above the author's name, try just his name in all caps the same width as ESSAYS.
and why is the spine just that one color?
why not parts of the clouds and another color?

momi 2

egporter1 — 2023-09-13 12:58:00 UTC

cover again

tom575 — 2023-09-13 12:58:29 UTC

just think about ESSAYS and just his name: JOHN BIGUENET in all caps, so it echoes the title. spine we can discuss

MoMI Animation

rwshaffe — 2023-09-13 13:31:12 UTC

Book Cover

rwshaffe — 2023-09-13 13:41:15 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-09-13 13:49:21 UTC

i dont know why the color is showing up like that in the preview

jazz rough sketches

egporter1 — 2023-09-13 13:56:43 UTC

Jazz

2023-09-13 14:04:04 UTC

These look like very beginning sketches.
Glad you at least started but get bolder now — this is the time to take chances

9.13 JALC Pt. 2

2023-09-13 14:13:09 UTC

MOMI Final Animation

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-13 14:25:20 UTC

2023-09-13 14:57:26 UTC

2023-09-13 16:32:47 UTC

MoMi Animation Logo 1

mmgarcia13 — 2023-09-14 03:11:21 UTC

New animation

2023-09-14 11:38:58 UTC

You don’t need that music… but your new logo is nice — as is the animation.

jazz.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-14 17:04:33 UTC

of ckurse, the other 2 read and look better. the bottom one reads best so far.
the other one has god movement from the A through the two Zs, but the J not quite.
try to use AT LINCOLN CENTER if you can.
i think you left off the AT? Just tyr. sorry you mikssed class yesterday. Need to visit your museum logo again very briefly for position of the full name: needs to. move to our right more.

post card again again...tom

tom575 — 2023-09-14 17:06:10 UTC

if yu are going to take a photo, make the objects inside more interesting and unexpected. and remember punctuation!

POST CARD. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-15 21:23:20 UTC

Please give me your final post card Monday before class. I didn't get it last wednesday.
thanks

jazz @

tom575 — 2023-09-15 21:25:57 UTC

think about using @ instead of AT and also try placing AT in a circle, so it is friendlier.
Try different weights in your horizontal versions...also with the letter Z.

book covers

tom575 — 2023-09-15 21:30:01 UTC

your type treatments are holding your designs back.
All you see in that "suicide" one is the word DDOWN, and you do not see any depth in the photo...where is the danger?

That staircase photo? Your type deflects from the nervous energy of the image. the placement of LOOKING DOWN seems non-professional...it is a gimmick in this case, because your photo is interesting on its own.
it doesn't need digital interference either.

post card

tom575 — 2023-09-15 21:32:39 UTC

we can chat about your concept again.
it is not funny or exciting enough.
i think you can write down many words that could describe how one might feel lost or confused when about to enter a new
world — the design department...or DESIGN WORLD itself.

book cover

tom575 — 2023-09-16 15:29:31 UTC

latest one not in Padlet?

BOK COVERS revisit. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-16 15:43:29 UTC

your 2 of 2: the very dark one, is good.

New_MOMI_logo

2023-09-17 01:12:05 UTC

LATEST MUSEUM LOGO. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-17 13:23:11 UTC

this is your best logo and has potential to be in your portfolio.
Please reset the full name in a sans serif that is not so condensed and please LETTER SPACE the full name...and make sure the full name is the same exact width as the logo.
I hope this is clear?

card, museum logo, book cover.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-17 13:26:38 UTC

Your post card is better. it still could use a more playful touch. let's talk.

museum logo is better. but let's look at your storyboard and process.

book cover is confusing and could be more dramatic. the author was confused as well.

book cover. card. museum logo. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-17 13:30:03 UTC

all 3 projects need more help.
cover: maybe re-visit your the one with the far away city lights?
museum: this project solution comes close but is till confusing.
card: after showing you examples of what the photo could look like, can you try another approach?

book cover: tom

tom575 — 2023-09-17 13:31:20 UTC

try ESSAYS in green and just his name below in pink, the sam width, so his name shows up more.

9.17 Looking Down

2023-09-17 14:27:32 UTC

Revised with tattered & scuffed paper

new cover.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-17 14:40:42 UTC

new one is better.
great that you keep improving...keep working like this. print this one please for monday if you can. thanks

Book Cover Final

memitche1 — 2023-09-17 17:17:56 UTC

9.18 JALC (Ella+Jada)

2023-09-17 17:29:49 UTC

Collaborating w/ Jada.
For 9.18, we're each combining our concepts + continuing to develop some of our own.

Jazz logo draft

memitche1 — 2023-09-17 20:51:10 UTC

jazz. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-17 21:10:05 UTC

at the last class, i mentioned that it would be wise to avoid the obvious choices, like a sax for the J. it looks very dated. try first thinking abstractly...think progressive jazz, etc.
the typeface you chose for LINCOLN CENTER: looks like the L and I form to. ake a U. so re-think the type choices , please.

looking down. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-17 21:12:12 UTC

after so many critiques, i'm surprised y your new book cover. we can chat about it in class, if you like, but doing that distorted DOWN seems dated and more like student work. try going very simple just to get your layout(s) on a grid. Don't try to ov er-design it for now.

jazz. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-17 21:24:26 UTC

stacking the word JAZZ does not read well as is. JAZZ at an angle could work.

the third row, just the word JAZZ, try a lowercase a for that first one, so the top horizontal of the first Z can kind of "protect" the small a from above.
overall, you need to explore more. remember that the Center is home to very progressive jazz, as well as a. variety of performances.

Jazz Logos V1

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-17 22:14:42 UTC

9.17 (Jada/Ella) Jazz Logo

jrgunner — 2023-09-17 23:35:51 UTC

Collab w/ Ella, I developed some ideas we got from our logos, and continued with our previous ideas.

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-17 23:51:43 UTC

connecting the top of the J with the first Z could work, but make sure the J does not look like a U.
also make sure your letter a does not resemble their existing letter a.

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-17 23:54:11 UTC

3 and 7 look like the best chances for success...right now.
the overlaps in 7 start to make sense.

i know these are "sketches" but stay away from cartoon solutions.

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-17 23:58:25 UTC

the second row. make sure your J does not look like ma U.
and your A could look like your J, since they have the same shapes. just not a U.
stacked so far does not work.

nice that you are working in abstract shapes...move on into bold recognizable shapes that are still dynamic. if you are inlining, for instance, etc.?
your lowercase a shapes do not work well yet. and i agree with the one you don't like.

9.18 JALC 2 (Ella&Jada)

2023-09-18 02:40:35 UTC

Revisions/more exploration based on today's earlier feedback

MOMI_logo_animation

2023-09-18 02:50:21 UTC

Looking Down Final 1

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-18 03:11:12 UTC

JAZZ

2023-09-18 03:35:07 UTC

JAZZ FIRST ITERATIONS

2023-09-18 04:18:41 UTC

9.18 Logos (Maggie and Ace)

2023-09-18 04:48:03 UTC

[9/18] Jazz Logo v1

jgdonova — 2023-09-18 05:15:13 UTC

MJL_digital sketches

2023-09-18 07:19:45 UTC

2023-09-18 07:22:31 UTC

jazz.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-18 12:01:38 UTC

these look like you listened to my comments in class and maybe listened to jazz?
there is promise in 1 or 2 ...the second row of stenciled versions, but try to bring the letters closer together. the circular shapes from the backgrounds in the first row...maybe those can wlork with the stencil shape type? talk in class. a good start.

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-18 12:03:30 UTC

first two on second row could work out.
you do not want he @ symbol to overpower your design, but making it stand in for the letter "a" and "at" is a nice idea to pursue.

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-18 12:04:22 UTC

so far, these look too weak as is. try on a horizontal. bolder?

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-18 12:07:11 UTC

all good starts...good explorations.
I like your experiments with the shapes of the "a." and you are not afraid to go bold.
too many things to discuss in the "comments" space.
discuss in class...

JAZZ LOGO Sketches

mmgarcia13 — 2023-09-18 12:07:23 UTC

museum animation

tom575 — 2023-09-18 12:09:42 UTC

nice fun version. there are many ways for he dot to arrive, but your version is fun.
we can discuss in class.
think in terms of color now for your logo.
two colors maybe?
just think about it.

Logo Experimentation JAZZ

mmgarcia13 — 2023-09-18 13:07:44 UTC

jazz experimentation sheet

tom575 — 2023-09-18 13:15:59 UTC

the third one down at right. nice that you tried reversing out the "a" but maybe not that typeface? but that idea is worth exploring more.
that top one? ornate or historical type choices usually do not work.

domino cover.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-18 18:19:29 UTC

I know this is like piling on, however, I forgot to mention my other suggestion:
try with a typeface with round letter "O" so it resembles the Domino "O" or zero.
I would even try blocking out the "O" at least in the word DOWN...or maybe in LOOKING also. AND...if you only block out the "O" in DOWN, that "O" could be soft edged, like the zero on the lead Domino. hope that is clear?

almyers1 — 2023-09-18 20:57:54 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-19 00:57:42 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-19 00:58:19 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-19 00:58:36 UTC

jazz catz?

tom575 — 2023-09-19 01:44:15 UTC

don't understand your designs. looks like they are humorous illustrations for an old album or an invitation for a fund raiser.
You are designing new identity for a famous venue and institution.
please read my group email to class from earlier. since you missed today's class, can you ask about it from a classmate?
hope to see you wednesday.
did you see my reply to your medical excuse email?

jazz.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-19 01:52:42 UTC

first spell LINCOLN correctly.
the bottom right one has best chance to work.

as major signage, you might have to figure how to enlarge AT LINCOLN CENTER.
as a logo, it still seems small? but right now it's okay. can you try type treatments that are not so condensed? i would like o see a few options.

Jazz logo

mlsanche — 2023-09-19 02:35:33 UTC

mlsanche — 2023-09-19 02:40:46 UTC

9.20 Book Cover Updated

2023-09-19 16:13:03 UTC

book cover revision

tom575 — 2023-09-19 16:23:03 UTC

yes, the type placement is better. please print this out for tomorrow.

jazz latest

2023-09-19 21:26:47 UTC

can you please do a few variations on this latest one? and try all caps for location type. the location is very important to this branding identity.

9.19 Book Covers

jrgunner — 2023-09-20 00:08:50 UTC

9.19 Logo Jada/Ella

jrgunner — 2023-09-20 00:35:29 UTC

Jazz Logos V2

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-20 01:04:44 UTC

9.19 JALC (Ella&Jada)

2023-09-20 01:49:37 UTC

Jazz Logo Take 2 Variations

ravassil — 2023-09-20 02:51:40 UTC

jazz lates two

tom575 — 2023-09-20 02:59:33 UTC

both look good. not sure client would be ok without the"at" but bring it into class

jazz continued

tom575 — 2023-09-20 03:03:36 UTC

bring them into class. not sure you are trying different versions enough yet. you can try not quite touching, for instance. your "a" is heavy and the star. is it interesting enough yet?

jazz versions

tom575 — 2023-09-20 03:05:50 UTC

3 and 4 work best, that's the best JAZZ version...location type can be tweaked...in class

group w/madison

egporter1 — 2023-09-20 03:55:33 UTC

final book cover

egporter1 — 2023-09-20 04:08:50 UTC

09.20 JAZZ

2023-09-20 04:13:16 UTC

Jazz Logo Draft 2

memitche1 — 2023-09-20 04:19:14 UTC

[9/20] Jazz Logo v2

jgdonova — 2023-09-20 04:34:02 UTC

JAZZ LOGOS 2

2023-09-20 05:50:35 UTC

Round2_Jazz_logo

2023-09-20 07:10:29 UTC

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-20 12:57:05 UTC

Number 1 is okay, but presented like this in black and grays looks dull. if you mean to use color, then present it in color. I think those dark gray shapes need color badly to evoke movement nd excitement, but your all caps for location works best.
Number 3 I think has a chance to work best, it has potential energy—
but the letters are drifting apart. tighten all letters and use caps for location...Lincoln reads easier in all caps, because the lowercase"l" is too weak.

new book cover

tom575 — 2023-09-20 12:58:13 UTC

better, but just use his name. you don't need the word "by"

jazz so far

tom575 — 2023-09-20 12:59:47 UTC

None of your new ones work yet.
Try handwriting first, then tracing over the sketches and then place in illustrator?
Need to loosen up maybe?

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-20 13:04:26 UTC

second row, right works best. Nice unit.
nice place for location type, although there is a gap after "CENTER."
I think it's possible to add a dot above the "J" in that one, however, and maybe even at the end of JAZZ. Please remind me of this in class. This could be really good solution.
The point of the "A" and the tension you created between that and the "Z" and the "J" is nice. Talk in class

jazz again

tom575 — 2023-09-20 13:06:44 UTC

I think you need to find a way to use "AT"

That second one still looks like it can work. I think you still need to move LINCOLN over a bit closer ans maybe all three words move down a hair. remind me in class?

egporter1 — 2023-09-20 13:11:42 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-09-20 13:12:27 UTC

latest jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-20 13:18:02 UTC

do you need that diamond shape at beginning of location?

JAZZ is better, but you can create more fun tension: your "A" is the star. It is directional.
The middle diagonal bar points to the Z and points down to location— smart design, however, I think the diagonal can move closer to the first Z. you should also try to see if touching the two Zs at bottom could work, and maybe the short descender of the A cold touch the J? and just maybe you don't need the diamond dot at all?

Jazz digitized logos

ammcconn — 2023-09-20 14:52:35 UTC

mlsanche — 2023-09-20 19:51:49 UTC

final jazztom

2023-09-20 20:39:51 UTC

i know we discussed it after class...i just want you two to be aware of every little space when you shift a letter. right now, there is too much space to our right of the A — before the first Z. good luck

latest JAZZ.tom

2023-09-20 20:48:02 UTC

the one with the location running up the side of the big Z... that one can work, BUT, please open the space between the top of the J and the top of that same econd Z. It will close up when reduced. Make it the same width as the small spaces you use below it. OK?

and hand in the location below the logo as well for insurance.

krcabrer — 2023-09-21 02:37:29 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-21 02:37:40 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-21 02:37:54 UTC

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-21 12:34:37 UTC

great to look at but difficult to read.
can you please try to simplify.
Why all that scaffolding in the top one?
This is not for an architect.
the second one has nice J and Z but spacing between J and A is very tight compared to A and ZZ.
Simplify the third one so it reads faster, especially the J. The location info is crushed.
It is so much better if you had these in class yesterday instead of working on them while we are doing critiques.
Basically, make them more readable.
I like that you explore and experiment, but remember who and what this project is for.
Keep these and we can talk in class.

9.20 Logo Iterations (Maggie and Ace)

2023-09-21 14:33:23 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-09-21 23:40:00 UTC

latest jazz.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-22 01:49:33 UTC

the horn elements seem more distinct, which is good, however, i don't understand the blunt ending of the A at bottom or the bottom line of Z next to the "at."
Also, the bottom curve of the J should extend just a bit more to the left.
and try making the dot maybe 10% larger?
Hope i'm being clear. Keep working...you are very close

9.22 JALC (Ella&Jada)

2023-09-22 14:10:16 UTC

Made 'J' thicker and more prominent. Made "At Lincoln Center" smaller and pushed it inward towards "Jazz" more

jazz latest

tom575 — 2023-09-22 14:48:11 UTC

the fist one at left and third one at right work best. you have created a couple nice directional arrow shapes inside this.
why is the top of the A rounded off? or is it?

but you two should be working as a team...
collaborating, not just handing in separate designs.

9.22 JALC (Ella&Jada)

2023-09-22 15:06:38 UTC

Was just feeling out the potential design, and then we’re choosing between the latest one and the abstract shapes one to animate!

jazz again

tom575 — 2023-09-22 15:10:25 UTC

the good news is they both work, so present both. the abstract one has potential because of the geometric shapes "playing" inside the letters... a lot can happen with them, obviously. just in the future, make it look like you both worked on all designs.

Round 3_ Jazz logo

2023-09-24 01:44:46 UTC

jazz round 3. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-24 02:12:22 UTC

Second row right is nice, but
the third row, left is most unusual,
but add the dot above the J so there is balance with that tall second Z.
and make the location bolder so it feels important...not an afterthought.

Jazz logo draft 3

memitche1 — 2023-09-24 17:36:46 UTC

[9/24] Jazz Logo v3

jgdonova — 2023-09-24 19:25:38 UTC

True Crime V1

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-24 21:17:16 UTC

9.24 Jazz Logo- Jada G. / Ella B.

jrgunner — 2023-09-24 21:55:37 UTC

Ella and I wanted to include versions of signage we thought of as well as the final logo/signage we thought looked best.

jazz signs

2023-09-24 22:17:42 UTC

looking quickly, but i don't think any work for location type. the shape at end looks like a letter D.
the others under the word JAZZ look weak...why under AZZ only? Make the location type under JAZZ mean something if you place it there.
Also, I may be wrong, but it seems the letters are too letter spaced? color will help, of course...and applications.

crime

tom575 — 2023-09-24 23:34:43 UTC

number 1 and maybe 6 work best so far.
not sure numb er 1 says "twist," but it reads easily when reduced. nice that you worked on this project.

9.24 Jazz Logo V2 (Jada/Ella)

jrgunner — 2023-09-25 00:07:11 UTC

Maggie and Ace Jazz Logos Draft 3

ammcconn — 2023-09-25 01:07:54 UTC

9.25 Ace and Maggie Logos Updated

2023-09-25 01:07:58 UTC

latest jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-25 01:59:58 UTC

yes they both work better.
you notice that your two Z shapes are heavier than the J and A?
not much you can do right now, but just be aware of it in the future. once you add color things change.

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-25 02:06:37 UTC

Ace sent something a bit different? and there was another version he presented in class similar to your bottom row, but easier to read?

9.24 Twist v1

2023-09-25 02:07:40 UTC

jazz again

tom575 — 2023-09-25 02:07:50 UTC

why did you two not work more on the ones presented in class...bottom row right? just asking

twist

tom575 — 2023-09-25 02:10:07 UTC

4th row bottom right but italic might work. it is simple but fun and memorable. easy to read. might want to play a bit more with it?

9.25 Ace and Maggie other logos

2023-09-25 03:02:50 UTC

9.25 Radius Logo Sketches

2023-09-25 03:07:02 UTC

Some new Jazz ideas

ravassil — 2023-09-25 03:41:05 UTC

I don't like any off these... But out of them, Top left and Bottom right are the least off putting.

Round 4_logo

2023-09-25 04:20:53 UTC

TRUE CRIME SKETCHES

2023-09-25 04:31:23 UTC

Jazz Logo Mockups- Jada/Ella

jrgunner — 2023-09-25 04:37:52 UTC

[9/24] Jazz v4

jgdonova — 2023-09-25 05:53:27 UTC

[9/24] True Crime Logo v1 (RADIUS)

jgdonova — 2023-09-25 05:59:04 UTC

9.25 True Crime Logo v1

jrgunner — 2023-09-25 07:55:45 UTC

twist

tom575 — 2023-09-25 11:33:55 UTC

on second viewing, that top one is working better

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-25 11:35:32 UTC

i agree but really none read well. you need to consider the location type with your concept.
and if you are not well, get an excuse, please.

signage

tom575 — 2023-09-25 11:37:54 UTC

please pin up all in class. your last outdoor signage is nice, but it needs color maybe to pop more? the location line seems like it is off. but this is good to show

twist

tom575 — 2023-09-25 11:41:50 UTC

third row left, but you don't need two reflections under TWIST. try just one.
same row, far right one can work as well. i like the slight abbreviation idea. not sure client would approve. second row far right might be better, but bring them in.
remember this has to read easily.

radius

tom575 — 2023-09-25 11:43:46 UTC

third one down has best chance. try slightly lighter weight? why did you not include the U in the split idea? but it is nice start

JAZZ 09.25

2023-09-25 12:18:05 UTC

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-25 12:35:09 UTC

looking quickly...
page one the bottom one looks most promising, and i see how it can work for signage, but letter spacing is erratic,
and if you added color to some, that can change how a viewer sees and feels.

jazz

tom575 — 2023-09-25 12:36:39 UTC

the two color versions are better now, but you seem lost as to where to place the location type? and what size to make it.

true crime first round sketches

egporter1 — 2023-09-25 13:05:23 UTC

twist

tom575 — 2023-09-25 13:10:28 UTC

quick look...
the "dead" lowercase "i" might be fun in an animation, but seems likely not to be bought by the client. page 3 seems best bet for now. but there needs to be a clever "twist" to make it work better.

JAZZ LOGO FINAL ITERATIONS

2023-09-25 13:36:15 UTC

Round four

2023-09-25 14:06:50 UTC

Now you have a logo to apply. Have fun

Latest jazz

2023-09-25 14:09:22 UTC

Why do these seem so timid? You have extra spaces to tighten up. Your concept makes sense just work the letters

krcabrer — 2023-09-25 14:18:05 UTC

2023-09-25 14:26:49 UTC

Jazz V3

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-25 14:49:14 UTC

refined 2

2023-09-25 19:07:31 UTC

go with this one. apply and have fun. remember color.

refined final?

mlsanche — 2023-09-26 00:55:12 UTC

MOMI 09.25 -- too many dots?

2023-09-26 04:24:09 UTC

New Jazz Logos

ravassil — 2023-09-26 23:05:06 UTC

Either Bottom or Top Right?

Twist And Radius

ravassil — 2023-09-26 23:54:33 UTC

[9/26] Jazz logo v5

jgdonova — 2023-09-26 23:57:58 UTC

newest version looks workable. can you try color? and applications?

9.27 True Crime Logo

jrgunner — 2023-09-26 23:59:14 UTC

radius

tom575 — 2023-09-27 00:00:25 UTC

third row but lighter weight

RADIUS

tom575 — 2023-09-27 00:04:16 UTC

Based on our conversation in class about placing vertical lines between each letter...make sure that it does not get too busy

2023-09-27 00:04:17 UTC

TWST

tom575 — 2023-09-27 00:08:39 UTC

The bottom right. TWST.
think I could make a case for eliminating the letter "i." It just looks better and more contemporary. You coukld try a couple versions of line-ups, but this idea is good

2023-09-27 00:09:47 UTC

essays

tom575 — 2023-09-27 00:10:18 UTC

i wish you picked a darker background for your book cover so your cover would stand out more. I want to post it on the big monitors in the hall

book cover

tom575 — 2023-09-27 00:12:17 UTC

Please have your book cover with spine displayed the way I showed in class. see sam's version... so I can have it displayed on one of the hall monitors...soon

book c over

tom575 — 2023-09-27 00:12:58 UTC

please have your book cover with spine printed properly tomorrow.

book cover

tom575 — 2023-09-27 00:13:34 UTC

have your cover with spine displayed properly as shown in class....tomorrow

book cover

tom575 — 2023-09-27 00:14:33 UTC

have your "arrow" cover ready to display on a monitor tomorrow.

9.27 Twist v2

2023-09-27 00:16:09 UTC

jazz applications

tom575 — 2023-09-27 00:17:06 UTC

ask me about that please in class. needs to be more colorful.

The Lincoln Center Jazz Orchestra, Directed. by Winton Marsalis, Novemer 12 - 18.
Tickets at licolncenterboxoffice,com

9.27 Mock-Ups/Print Arrangements

2023-09-27 00:24:21 UTC

9.27 Logos Refined (Maggie and Ace)

2023-09-27 00:35:01 UTC

9.27 Logos Refined 2 (Maggie and Ace)

2023-09-27 00:35:58 UTC

9.26 Maggie and Ace Refined Logos 1

ammcconn — 2023-09-27 00:39:39 UTC

9.26 Maggie and Ace Refined Logos 2

ammcconn — 2023-09-27 00:40:00 UTC

2023-09-27 01:19:30 UTC

9.27 Jazz Logo Storyboards (Ella/Jada)

jrgunner — 2023-09-27 01:23:08 UTC

jazz logo

2023-09-27 01:40:27 UTC

Final Logo Iterations

memitche1 — 2023-09-27 01:44:22 UTC

true crime v2

egporter1 — 2023-09-27 01:45:26 UTC

True Crime V2

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-27 01:47:02 UTC

book covers and museum logos

tom575 — 2023-09-27 01:48:27 UTC

thanks. please print these out for class.

new jazz logos

tom575 — 2023-09-27 01:52:05 UTC

best Jazz versions.
top left and bottom right work best with location type.

book mockup

tom575 — 2023-09-27 01:53:33 UTC

better to see spine and cover in one shot as i displayed in class. this way okay for hall monitor, but please revise for pinup in hall

Jazz V4

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-27 02:01:11 UTC

Final Jazz Logo

memitche1 — 2023-09-27 02:02:40 UTC

9.27 JALC Storyboards pt2 (Ella/Jada)

2023-09-27 02:09:37 UTC

Jazz Mockup

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-27 02:12:33 UTC

[9/26] Book Cover Mockup

jgdonova — 2023-09-27 02:13:05 UTC

Book Mockup

ammcconn — 2023-09-27 02:28:07 UTC

Changed the type based on suggestion, also refined the spine to be less busy so that the title and author are more visible.

9.27 Book Cover Mockup

2023-09-27 02:59:05 UTC

True crime draft 1

memitche1 — 2023-09-27 03:00:29 UTC

jazz latest

tom575 — 2023-09-27 03:27:06 UTC

this is still viable, but you need to study closely your spaces and weights.
the J is too thin, and there are very narrow openings that will close up when reduced. hard to get too particular here. can talk tomorrow

jazz motion

tom575 — 2023-09-27 03:28:25 UTC

this is the time to use color

twist

tom575 — 2023-09-27 03:30:54 UTC

each one can work but they each need more thinking. hard to get into it here.

refined logos ONE

tom575 — 2023-09-27 03:32:40 UTC

book m ockup

tom575 — 2023-09-27 03:34:25 UTC

better type. wish your spine had more to do with the cover.

twist

tom575 — 2023-09-27 03:35:59 UTC

other students have already handed in similar solutions like your bottom left one, which looks best here. Please try again...and maybe RADIUS?

jazz underground

tom575 — 2023-09-27 03:39:40 UTC

you have a great opportunity to use COLOR so why not?
this type of signage can be backlit, so it can really pop.
why not an image behind the type?
and try to think what other info you can add to this signage: location; special concert, etc.
and location type is very weak.

v1 mockup jazz underground emma +madison

egporter1 — 2023-09-27 04:05:38 UTC

final book cover mockup

egporter1 — 2023-09-27 04:16:46 UTC

9.27 Radius Logos

2023-09-27 04:27:17 UTC

signage pt 1

2023-09-27 04:27:46 UTC

9.26 maggie and ace jazz logo animation storyboard

ammcconn — 2023-09-27 04:47:34 UTC

Final_jazz logo

2023-09-27 04:54:15 UTC

New_MOMI logo

2023-09-27 04:54:39 UTC

New_postcard

2023-09-27 04:55:07 UTC

colors look less bright on printed version

LATEST COVER

2023-09-27 05:37:57 UTC

[9/26] True Crime Logo v2 (RADIUS)

jgdonova — 2023-09-27 05:39:17 UTC

2023-09-27 05:41:07 UTC

[9/26] Jazz Logo V6 (colors)

jgdonova — 2023-09-27 05:51:38 UTC

LATEST MOMI

2023-09-27 05:59:27 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-27 06:37:30 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-27 06:37:48 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-27 06:38:00 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-27 06:38:15 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-27 06:38:31 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-27 06:39:02 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-27 06:39:15 UTC

[9/26] Jazz Mockups v1

jgdonova — 2023-09-27 06:39:48 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-27 06:40:23 UTC

Final_book cover

2023-09-27 09:59:16 UTC

jazz animation?

tom575 — 2023-09-27 12:41:10 UTC

when you have a curved line of type like yours, it can move in an animation. think about that. and please consider color as an accent if not in the type for JAZZ in signage

jazz sign

tom575 — 2023-09-27 12:42:48 UTC

it works well as a bold statement in front of. building. think about color, please.
you can change the color of the awning also. you need to consider it anyway

underground mockup.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-27 12:44:40 UTC

very nice idea. consider bolder colors using your same design. make people notice as they walk to trains

radius. jazz. museum animation

tom575 — 2023-09-27 12:49:52 UTC

third and fourth ones seem to work best.
nice work all round.
be sure to post your work on Padlet. all your work, please

maybe jazz project needs more bold approach to color? not sure where you are going with applications.

museum logo. please re-do your first animation

radius

2023-09-27 14:04:32 UTC

signage pt 2

2023-09-27 14:22:06 UTC

TRUE CRIME

2023-09-27 14:39:57 UTC

Jazz signage emma + madison

egporter1 — 2023-09-27 14:55:17 UTC

merobert1 — 2023-09-27 15:01:43 UTC

JAZZ StoryBoard

2023-09-27 15:06:24 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-09-27 15:54:04 UTC

radius

tom575 — 2023-09-27 19:28:55 UTC

the top right one for sure
and maybe the third row left?

book cover

tom575 — 2023-09-27 19:33:40 UTC

compelling image and better all round.
try placing parts of that image inside the title, or at least inside DOWN. For depth and texture.
where is Publisher logo?
Author's name needs to be more prominent on spine.

9.27 Book Cover Mockup

jrgunner — 2023-09-28 00:25:05 UTC

9.27 Book Cover Mockup

jrgunner — 2023-09-28 00:25:53 UTC

book covers

tom575 — 2023-09-28 02:11:38 UTC

remember today i held up a cover and asked that students place their name with name of the class at bottom left not top part.
you want your credit line not to take away from your design. thanks

cover

tom575 — 2023-09-28 02:15:38 UTC

while you did a nice job designing the new cover, it does not solve the issue of LOOKING DOWN, as we discussed in class.

radius sketches

tom575 — 2023-09-28 12:11:22 UTC

don't get too clever with this. it has to read easily for all the viewers to this crime channel. it is not a logo for an arts company.
if you want to use the uppercase R to "swoop" under the "i" that can work, but keep the letters on the same baseline.

Looking Down Final 9.28

mjtucker1 — 2023-09-28 17:21:10 UTC

new book cover

tom575 — 2023-09-28 17:35:42 UTC

i hope you like it. i think it's your best design this semester...
and I think Twist is good, as is Jazz. work on colors for Jazz.
And, try to get your motion for museum to work faster with a variety of images, please. Needs to feel more professional.

sketches 2

tom575 — 2023-09-28 17:45:05 UTC

Unfortunately, I cannot draw it for you, so please try to apply the same clever thinking. you used for your museum logo...and the interesting conceptual thinking from your post card...to this project. place all letters on same horizontal baseline. try curving one of the letters under, like ytou have done with your lowercase "d." Try that same trick with an uppercase R. That way, a letter you have selected can serve as a sort of underline / radius effect for the next letter or letters.

The version you have here that has a disappeared I does not read fast enough.
But, maybe if you leave the I in there, it will work okay anyway? OR, maybe just a dot above the X height for the deleted I?

post cards

tom575 — 2023-09-28 17:55:20 UTC

latest ones do not read. i don't remember what i said last, but if you can make the two words read and still be embedded inside each other, that is the goal, right?
if you cannot read it, it doesn't work. that example i gave you was to inspire you to try it again. you are creating a sort of pop art solution, and your concept is saying we cannot have one without the other.
DESIGN IS ESSENTIAL. etc

latest cover.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-30 12:45:40 UTC

the cover is your best effirt so far this semester. As for the spine, ideally, you should incorporate something from the cover into your spine design, but nonetheless, this cover works well.

motion.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-30 12:48:52 UTC

this is your opportunity to use color.
the A shape can point to the two Z shapes and turn around to point o the J, as an example. As we discussed in class, if you are going to use the concept of instruments, everyone knows what an instrument looks like, so you could use just a part or suggestion of various instruments to get your point across. Assume that your audience for this is very sophisticated...you do not have to be literal

motion.

tom575 — 2023-09-30 12:50:16 UTC

this is a great opportunity to use color.
your abstract shapes beg to be used in inventive ways. your audience is very sophisticated.

9.30 Book Cover Mockup

2023-09-30 14:34:08 UTC

9.30 Radius Logos Iterations

2023-09-30 14:58:36 UTC

cover.tom

tom575 — 2023-09-30 18:07:29 UTC

this cover is your best design so far this semester. you can add LOOKING DOWN BOOK COVER to your credit line.

RADIUS. tom

tom575 — 2023-09-30 18:15:02 UTC

these are good.
LEFT row, second one down i think works best. it reduces well.
start applying it to your series : KEY ART, ad, poster, etc....motion. It can show up at the end of your promo motion video promoting the series. right?

almyers1 — 2023-09-30 23:53:58 UTC

book cover.post card?

tom575 — 2023-10-01 00:27:25 UTC

You really need to reconsider your cover, please. I thought i had adressed it in what I wrote behind your layout when i handed the layouts back.
The title is hard to read the way you have it set. Your image is not clear. Can you use another image? Read the essay again, maybe?
Post Card: Please try to figure out a new solution. You have good observations of other sudents' work, so try to be objective about your own designs.

[9/30] Jazz logo v7 (with colors)

jgdonova — 2023-10-01 00:37:55 UTC

More involved color options. Right column based on screen printed jazz show posters.

RADIUS

tom575 — 2023-10-01 01:39:04 UTC

Just noticed that you and Maggie have similar logotype solutions working...

radius

tom575 — 2023-10-01 01:39:45 UTC

just noticed that you and Joseph have similar solutions...

jazz colors?

tom575 — 2023-10-01 01:42:31 UTC

not sure i understand your poster reference?
with the colors you have chosen, your design actually loses some impact.
not sure why yet. maybe if you use multiple color versions when you apply it underground and in motion?

museum latest.

tom575 — 2023-10-01 14:50:51 UTC

I think the bottom two show real promise. try moving your letter "I" just a bit higher so it does not look like it will fall off.
I think you could use both versions in some way throughout the museum.
Remember you need to show the full name of the museum in final logo lockup version.
Then try to do a quick animation/motion.
You could start with the outlined version then it could fill in...as a suggestion.

[10/1] Radius Logo v3

jgdonova — 2023-10-01 20:32:13 UTC

[10/1] Book Cover Final Mockup

jgdonova — 2023-10-01 20:49:11 UTC

JAZZ latest.tom

2023-10-01 22:01:56 UTC

Okay, upon further review, use the BLUE JAZZ with that warm color for AT.

book cover mockup

2023-10-01 22:02:56 UTC

your mockup diminishes the beauty of your cover. can you please use same version that others have used in class that I held up?

NEW new radius

2023-10-01 22:05:18 UTC

I guess the bottom right one works best now. That concept, at least.
You have a way of making your work seem extra industrial, if you know what I mean?
Bold type that looks typeset and not created by hand?

10.1 JALC Signage v2

2023-10-01 22:54:33 UTC

more colorful options!

[10/1] Jazz logo v8 (final)

jgdonova — 2023-10-01 23:30:08 UTC

New Radius Logos

ravassil — 2023-10-02 00:06:58 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-10-02 00:29:07 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-10-02 00:29:17 UTC

10.1 Twist v3

2023-10-02 00:56:37 UTC

Book cover_ mockup

2023-10-02 01:01:43 UTC

10.1 Final Crime Logos

jrgunner — 2023-10-02 01:23:13 UTC

Page 1: I opened the spaces in the W's so no matter what top or bottom, there's a W that reads.
Page 2: I think that W puts an awkward space in the logo, I don't think it will work but I thought I'd include it

egporter1 — 2023-10-02 02:16:21 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-10-02 02:17:15 UTC

Book Mockup

memitche1 — 2023-10-02 02:17:42 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-10-02 02:18:23 UTC

millennium murders moodboard/insp

krcabrer — 2023-10-02 02:31:23 UTC

Jazz_mockup_1

2023-10-02 02:38:22 UTC

Jazz_mockup_2

2023-10-02 02:38:52 UTC

RECOLORED

2023-10-02 02:46:23 UTC

Jazz logo_animation storyboard_colored ver

2023-10-02 02:55:42 UTC

10.01 RADIUS

2023-10-02 03:02:04 UTC

COLOR FINAL

2023-10-02 03:23:34 UTC

REDO

2023-10-02 03:41:24 UTC

Looking Down Cover Final

ravassil — 2023-10-02 03:51:17 UTC

[10/1] Jazz Logo Mockups v2

jgdonova — 2023-10-02 05:03:47 UTC

True Crime_round 3

2023-10-02 06:24:41 UTC

Jazz

2023-10-02 14:01:57 UTC

Please try a variety of color combinations— maybe warm colors would make sense since it is music?

Twst

2023-10-02 14:04:25 UTC

I agree first one works best.
Description:
Professional Practice
True Crime Channel logotype

Big sign

2023-10-02 14:06:27 UTC

Works well I think. On my phone… so let’s look in class. Underground sign looking good so far. Please read my comments about your book mock-up. Make sure your cover is easy to see

10.2 M+A Jazz Logo Animated ROUGH

ammcconn — 2023-10-02 14:14:29 UTC

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Jazz Animation V1

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-02 14:33:52 UTC

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2023-10-02 14:40:22 UTC

Jazz Storyboard

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-02 14:41:42 UTC

jazz mockup1

2023-10-02 15:19:59 UTC

jazz mockup2

2023-10-02 15:20:41 UTC

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almyers1 — 2023-10-02 15:57:43 UTC

radius logos rough draft 10.2

ammcconn — 2023-10-02 15:58:41 UTC

TWIST LOGO ROUND 2

2023-10-02 16:13:11 UTC

TWIST REWORKED

2023-10-02 19:33:11 UTC

jazz 10.02

2023-10-03 02:07:54 UTC

radius 10.02

2023-10-03 02:08:54 UTC

radius lowercase

tom575 — 2023-10-03 02:44:08 UTC

i think it will be hard for most people to read it quickly as your lowercase solution.
the r and a are the main issues, i think.
i showed it to two people, who had a hard time with it...but you can try it on a few people yourself. or...try a different approach for the r and a? and try one of your other solutions with all caps?

CAPS

2023-10-03 12:37:58 UTC

latest RADIUS.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-03 12:56:40 UTC

YES. Use this solution.
One suggestion only: try swapping the brackets...move the left one to the right, and vice versa. That way, the viewer sees an "ending" of sorts.

preparing your work to post

tom575 — 2023-10-03 12:58:45 UTC

Please ask a classmate how to prepare your Museum logo and book cover for tomorrow so we can pin all of those in the hallways.
ALSO: please print a new copy of your post card for tomorrow. and please show up on time.

jazz underground

tom575 — 2023-10-03 13:03:08 UTC

keep trying to make the A work, but make sure everyone can read the A as the start of a sentence or phrase. maybe place the A phrase in a background that is not busy?
then find a space for your visuals?
try finding rteviews of jazz at lincoln center or articles about the place to get an idea of what language to use?

latest TWIST

tom575 — 2023-10-03 13:06:28 UTC

YES this one works best. much more original.
just be aware of the sides that the black areas don't disappear when reduced.
Maybe add slightly more black to first T on the left of the T? Just a hair? and just a suggestion.
but this looks good to apply.

work

tom575 — 2023-10-03 13:07:17 UTC

You need to start showing / sharing some work

museum motion

tom575 — 2023-10-03 13:10:09 UTC

Please try to get that museum logo motion to work better soon. add a few very different images to what you have so you show a wide variety of films available at the museum. very fast cuts, etc.

LOOKING DOWN

mmgarcia13 — 2023-10-03 16:01:20 UTC

Book cover

2023-10-03 16:18:49 UTC

Can’t remember exactly what my comments were, and haven’t talk to you lately. But please set it up to display the way I mentioned in class yesterday.
And— can you try to think in terms of actually looking down so it’s not just a mass of legos — give it some context.

almyers1 — 2023-10-03 20:20:27 UTC

[10/3] Book Cover FINAL Mockup

jgdonova — 2023-10-03 22:47:04 UTC

Fixed credit copy.

book cover description copy

tom575 — 2023-10-03 22:56:40 UTC

your name
Professional Practice
Looking Down Book Cover

book cover mockup

tom575 — 2023-10-03 22:58:01 UTC

please prepare the cover the way i showed in class. ask a classmate.

credit:
your name
Professional Practice
Looking Down Book Cover

jazz colors etc

tom575 — 2023-10-03 22:59:15 UTC

remember what i suggested and what we talked about in class.
circles different sizes. etc etc

TWIST??

tom575 — 2023-10-03 23:02:05 UTC

none of your new versions for TWIST work well. Maybe try RADIUS?

After so many critiques, and so many astute observations by you, I hope you can come up with something...?

almyers1 — 2023-10-03 23:13:14 UTC

latest book cover.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-03 23:28:29 UTC

Okay this latest one works well. Please design the spine.
spine needs to have all same info from cover.
and please prepare the cover the way I showed in class yesterday.
Credit:
YOUR NAME
Professional Practice
Looking Down Book Cover

jazz logotype

tom575 — 2023-10-03 23:30:00 UTC

please keep that logotype treatment with the A reversed out.

jazz colors etc

tom575 — 2023-10-03 23:32:49 UTC

can you bioth try colors that are more sophisticated...you have a bit of a cartoon color palette?
cannot tell if you are jusing black in some or a dark blue.

and make sure that curve works as a real curve or circular shape for the location/identity type line.

jazz signage

tom575 — 2023-10-03 23:34:47 UTC

as i said in class, the white shape gets lost in the buildings beyond. just try different color or colors for JAZZ. the concept and design can work. please have more fun with animation

almyers1 — 2023-10-03 23:35:27 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-10-03 23:45:25 UTC

jazz motion. post card?

tom575 — 2023-10-03 23:45:45 UTC

yes it is better. we can discuss tweaks, but it has improved. elegant beginning and okay ending. logo might be a bit small as an ending...maybe

SPINE?

tom575 — 2023-10-03 23:47:30 UTC

the word ESSAYS has to be on the spine

almyers1 — 2023-10-03 23:51:26 UTC

museum logo, etc

tom575 — 2023-10-03 23:54:03 UTC

Please read my comments carefully.
Credit line:
YOUR NAME
Professional Practice
Museum of the
Moving Image Logo

New Book Mockup

memitche1 — 2023-10-04 00:00:14 UTC

10.3 Twist/Millennium Murders

2023-10-04 00:34:21 UTC

Jazz Colors

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-04 00:49:05 UTC

Jazz Subway Mockups

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-04 01:02:54 UTC

2023-10-04 01:41:28 UTC

Final Jazz Logo (revised)

memitche1 — 2023-10-04 01:51:16 UTC

book

tom575 — 2023-10-04 02:19:45 UTC

Ky turned his photo upside down, as i thi nk i mentioned, so can you do something a bit different? if you use this image, mabe you can cut it up...part collage, etc., so it feels like a bad dream? that way, ylou could possibly still use it upside down.

museum

tom575 — 2023-10-04 02:22:32 UTC

better. but remember you need to use the full name of the museum in the final presentation. and your credit line;

YOUR NAME
Professional Practice
Museum of the Moving Image
Logo Re-Design

book cover

tom575 — 2023-10-04 02:24:15 UTC

colors are better, but the flower "looking down" worked better.
and please refewr to notes or ask a classmate about how to use your credit line.

true crime

tom575 — 2023-10-04 02:27:56 UTC

please make sure you print this and pin up for class...larger than 8 1/2 x 11 if you can.
as for the image, it would work better if it were darker ... maybe a vignette? it looks a bit too "clean."
Same for your main title type, I think, but your concept for the image is a good one. to discuss.

book cover

tom575 — 2023-10-04 02:30:47 UTC

ESSAYS should be on spine. idedally, something from the cover design should be echoed on spine.
nice that you tried a different image on cover.

jazz signs

tom575 — 2023-10-04 02:35:53 UTC

better color combinations.
you have created a fun logo with many ;possibilities.
not sure about the stark white background.
or the size of the logo on that background?
you can play with moving it around, having it bleed off one side then come around to the other. it can be a pattern, since it is so compact. why not explore more?
and the black location type?
do you not want to announce on your signage /ad that there is a concert coming...etc.?

8 jazz logo colors

tom575 — 2023-10-04 02:40:30 UTC

nice to see so many.
top left is nice, but there are a few that can work. i can see how you could use a variety of color combinations in a campaign...remember that for your
animation?

10.04 Jazz Mockup 1 (Maggie and Ace)

2023-10-04 02:54:06 UTC

10.04 Jazz Logo Mockup 2 (Maggie and Ace)

2023-10-04 02:55:12 UTC

10.04 Jazz Logo Mockup 3 (Maggie and Ace)

2023-10-04 02:56:02 UTC

Looking Down Mockup

ravassil — 2023-10-04 03:39:19 UTC

New New Radius Logos

ravassil — 2023-10-04 03:41:05 UTC

Jazz_logo_animation

2023-10-04 04:08:15 UTC

[10/3] Radius Logo v4

jgdonova — 2023-10-04 04:09:32 UTC

10.3 JALC Logo Animation V1

jrgunner — 2023-10-04 04:50:33 UTC

logo_color_iterations

2023-10-04 07:24:17 UTC

[10/3] Jazz Animation v1

jgdonova — 2023-10-04 07:26:59 UTC

jazz signs

tom575 — 2023-10-04 12:18:08 UTC

Nice jazz image...but, why are you not using colors in your logo so the colors echo the colors in the musician image?
and you don't need the word PRESENTS...just add dates to the guy's name. and probably the client would want their logo (that includes the location) to be a bit larger, since it is so small in your logo lockup...just think about it.

jazz anmation

tom575 — 2023-10-04 12:21:30 UTC

nice and quick. we can discuss briefly how this can have maybe a more dramatic effect, but it is smooth as is.

The DOT is your central disruptor, right?
so maybe an animation can start with that idea. we can chat

true crime poster?

tom575 — 2023-10-04 12:23:15 UTC

not sure i understand what you are trying to convey with the 2000 distortions?
if you are presenting your giant subway poster, include the sentence that describes the series. This looks too much like a type exercise

season to remember

tom575 — 2023-10-04 12:25:52 UTC

pink one works best i guess.
but your giant A coulkd be white...might read better as the start of your sentence?
you could add a black outllne to it.
but these are improvements

jazz animation

tom575 — 2023-10-04 12:27:19 UTC

fun and fast, so that's good.
i think you could use all your odd shapes to start it off, then resolve it. but this is good for now. we can chat

RADIUS new ones

tom575 — 2023-10-04 12:29:16 UTC

LOGO v4
top left works well.
will be exciting to see it applied.
your circle motif can work in your favor as well

season to rem v2

egporter1 — 2023-10-04 13:09:18 UTC

TWIST FINAL ITERATIONS

2023-10-04 13:41:57 UTC

10.04 Jazz Logo Animation (Maggie and Ace)

2023-10-04 13:46:13 UTC

Big A sign

2023-10-04 13:49:07 UTC

The A in white reads much better.
I hope you agree.
Not sure why you kept those swiggly lines inside the letter?
They just look like they were added to suggest movement, but they are old school.
I do think your sign would be noticed underground

Trust finals

2023-10-04 13:51:51 UTC

Second row left looks like best bet.
On my phone it holds up small.
Have fun applying it. Keep in mind your ragged edge treatment for how you can treat your image borders for giant poster and digital ad.

Jazz thoughts

2023-10-04 13:54:19 UTC

You can use words or phrases from reviews of musicians to gain attention to your signage.
“Unique Experience “
“One Of A Kind”
“The Beat Goes On”
Etc etc etc

Jazz thoughts

2023-10-04 13:56:20 UTC

You can use parts of reviews to add attention and texture to signage.
“Still the Best”
“One Of A Kind”
Etc.

Jazz thoughts

2023-10-04 13:57:58 UTC

You can use parts of rave reviews to add attention to signage.
“Still the Best”
“uniquely New York”
Etc etc

final mockup oct 4

egporter1 — 2023-10-04 13:59:49 UTC

Logo color iterations. Jazz

2023-10-04 14:04:01 UTC

Top right works well.
Need to work on animation.
You pop in those nice colored circles but then the logo just pops in. No transitions?

M&A Jazz Mockup Revised 1

ammcconn — 2023-10-04 14:25:53 UTC

M&A Jazz Mockup Revised 2

ammcconn — 2023-10-04 14:28:42 UTC

M&A Jazz Mockup Revised 3

ammcconn — 2023-10-04 14:29:58 UTC

Price Tag Killer Key Art Concept 1

ammcconn — 2023-10-04 14:32:34 UTC

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krcabrer — 2023-10-04 15:10:48 UTC

LOOKING DOWN LATEST

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krcabrer — 2023-10-04 15:29:06 UTC

Revised Radius Logo Variants

ammcconn — 2023-10-04 16:08:13 UTC

tom pls give me feedback i forgot what u said in class

krcabrer — 2023-10-04 16:44:08 UTC

jazz animation.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-05 12:19:06 UTC

IT IS GOOD the way it is. Don't change ir.
can you please send it to Cali Blume soon to post on the hall monitor?

RADIUS / TWIST

mmgarcia13 — 2023-10-05 18:09:46 UTC

latest jazz

tom575 — 2023-10-05 19:38:12 UTC

this concept is still appealing.
but your first Z is hidden inside the black.
make each letter pop, so maybe that first Z is a ligh blue...same hue as the other letters?
and maybe...your thins are a hair too thin?

RADIUS

tom575 — 2023-10-05 19:41:48 UTC

the third from the top seems to m ake the most conceptual sense.
it reduces well.

book cover type, etc.

tom575 — 2023-10-05 19:44:46 UTC

this is a very good concept.
very beguiling and appealing.
for a photo that suggests lightness and happiness, there is an undercurrent of wistfulness?
HOWEVER< remind me about the type treatment.
using such diverse faces, you need to be in full control of placement. your "wedding" script is too detached from the word DOWN.

tWIST.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-05 19:49:47 UTC

TWIST seems to work better than radius, right?
I think the third version from top of TWIST reduces well, so i THINK it will work.
The top one has an "I" that is too destroyed as is. Looks like two letters.
The second one just looks like a type exercise.
So, the one that actually twists seems to be the one. It has the most elegant , simple movement.

RADIIUS revisited

tom575 — 2023-10-05 19:52:08 UTC

upon further review, the one you showed in class reduces better than i thought. maybe the two brackets are a hair too close to the letters? Maybe the letters are a hair too close to each other, but it is appealing.

museum logo

tom575 — 2023-10-05 19:56:27 UTC

it is fun to look at and inspect.
Maybe too m,an y dots but fun to animate.
please try sans serif all caps letterspaced for the full name underneath...and please make sure you have it centered exactly under your logo.

your credit line info:
Samantha Amos
Professional Design Practice
Re-design of logo for
Museum of the Moving Image

book cover presentation.

tom575 — 2023-10-05 19:57:38 UTC

please be sure to have ESSAYS plus author's name and the title on the spine.

TWIST logo.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-07 03:09:26 UTC

the second one from the top seems to make the most sense, conceptually.
colors will depend upon how you use it in your applications.

poster/key art

tom575 — 2023-10-07 03:12:35 UTC

sorry but i do not understand what your concept is.
you are showing a bunch of price tags?
it looms like an ad for a super market.
this is true crime. where is the danger?
and i commented on your TWIST logos previously.

Book Mockup Revised

2023-10-07 17:27:30 UTC

MOMI logo.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-07 20:16:32 UTC

Your actual logo of MOMI is nice,
but your placement of the full name is overpowering the logo.
i spoke to you about placement in class.
the full name needs to be a lot smaller.
try in one line that ends where the bottom of the I starts.
it is important to take notes.
when you present final on Wednesday, place as was shown in class:
the whole logo lockup 3 inches wide on top, then half that size below along with your credit as has been described several times.

full name under MOMI

tom575 — 2023-10-07 22:19:00 UTC

move your full name line over to the other side of the I so it ENDS right before the I. Try it. Then try stacking it in two lines where
The Museum Of is the first line.
Try also setting the full name in sans serif
regular, not condensed, all caps.
You can try just setting the line centered under your logo.
The important thing is not to diminish your logo as you did previously. I hope you see that. Hard to get to everything in a comments section like this.

Final_jazz_animation

2023-10-07 22:44:13 UTC

sound included

postcard.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-08 11:58:28 UTC

i agree your backlit post card looks a lot better than the printed one.
Try to think of how you can add color to the text on the back: pick certain words and make them sans serif, for instance, like
catalyst, critical thinkers, etc.
ask me in class if you don't get around to doing that before wednesday

jazz animation.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-08 12:03:38 UTC

this looks like a first stab at it.
your concept is good, however.
the beats and visuals don't land at the same time. you introduce the dots but they don't seem to have any connection with your logo.
and check how you place your letter "a" on your letter "J" in the color version. do you want the "a" to leave any of the "J" showing?
right now it looks like a mistake?

MOMI animation

tom575 — 2023-10-08 12:04:49 UTC

can you please consider adding color so it feels more substantial? you can start with color and then go to black if you want, but it seems too brief right now.

jazz underground poster

tom575 — 2023-10-08 12:10:34 UTC

this feels like a first try. it wants to get more exciting.

and your "tagline" would work better if it was:
ENTERTAINING. ENRICHING., etc. and not ENRICH, so it would imply a continuing purpose. It looks and feels weak.
if you want to use different size dots, that's fine, but make it look intentional...and maybe there is a bar of color and the tagline is reversed out of it? Make this look BOLD. you improved your post card by being bolder.

murders, etc. mood.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-08 12:13:03 UTC

make sure your final type treatment does not look like a video game.

MOMI.presentation.tom

2023-10-09 18:40:41 UTC

If you want to center the full name below the logo, try making MOVING IMAGE the sane width as MUSERM OF THE.
And just place the filled in logos on the
8 1/2 x 11 sheet.
You can use another sheet for the outlines logo. The outlined one has a unique look.
Keep in mind you can use the outlined version to start your motion, if you want, and then it can fill in (pop in) with color(s) and then go to final black...as a suggestion. Then in the last few frames, add the full name.

pricetagkiller.tom

2023-10-09 19:50:42 UTC

good idea to make the channel info look like it has been cut out from a newspaper ad.
and your title type treatment is interesting.
your visual is very busy and therefore confusing.
you want passers-by to stop in their tracks to read this. the skeleton is hidden.
this needs to connote more danger.
darkness, red, contrast, etc.

[10/9] Radius Logo v5

jgdonova — 2023-10-09 21:27:43 UTC

Tried thick to thin as recommended in crit. Did not work so well on type, but fits circle well.

Jazz Outside Mockup

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Jazz_mockup

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jazz_mockup_2

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wider spacing radius

2023-10-10 17:44:45 UTC

[10/10] Jazz Animation V2

jgdonova — 2023-10-10 19:00:43 UTC

Did more with the dot as discussed in crit, it now reveals "Lincoln center." All timings tweaked and slowed a little to accentuate the reveals while keeping it short.

10.11 JLC Final Logo (Maggie and Ace)

2023-10-10 21:55:27 UTC

MOMI 10.10

2023-10-10 22:06:39 UTC

JAZZ Motion Piece

2023-10-11 00:39:45 UTC

Would love a comment on what to adjust before the final is due in the morning. Audio will be added

Jazz Logo

ravassil — 2023-10-11 00:49:33 UTC

Jazz Billboard A

ravassil — 2023-10-11 00:50:00 UTC

Jazz Billboard B

ravassil — 2023-10-11 00:50:17 UTC

Jazz Billboard C

ravassil — 2023-10-11 00:50:31 UTC

10.11 Twist/Millenium Murders v2

2023-10-11 01:28:08 UTC

not sure how gruesome to go with the blood?
also tried hand-lettered type to match the carved "2000"

10.11 Twist Final Logo

2023-10-11 01:31:36 UTC

jazz animation.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-11 01:54:46 UTC

i think (maybe) we talked about using actual instruments instead of more abstract shapes to represent instruments?
This feels like Saturday morning animation and a bit vintage? maybe the vintage part works, but the color does not...seems more dated. and if you introduce several cololrs in the heart of your "story" — no matter what the images might be— then it seems that you could have a lot more fun with the final logo...why that one, subdued color? seems a let down. Once you introduce several colors at the beginning, throughout, you can then change the background color as you change the JAZZ letters before you settle on a color. But really, in an animation that promises surprising color, you can change each letter in JAZZ and let the animation just end with colors changing.
sorry if this is so long. hope it is not confusing. wish we could have discussed before.

jazz outside signage

tom575 — 2023-10-11 01:58:08 UTC

Very good idea to soften the image.
ands this would pop at night.
maybe AT LINCOLN CENTER could be another color like pink/orange, etc. you have a chance to do somethng really nice.

underground poster.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-11 02:01:06 UTC

that is a clever headline and the poster looks good.
but putting it on such a busy, graffiti wall with no context — where is it? that is not a good idea. can you please re-locate your poster inside Manhattan subway station?

final_colored_jazz ver

2023-10-11 02:06:22 UTC

Final_MOMI_logo

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Final_book cover

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Final_twist_logo

2023-10-11 02:39:31 UTC

10.11 JLC Final Logo v2 (Maggie and Ace)

2023-10-11 03:17:52 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-10-11 03:41:34 UTC

KEY ART P 1

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P 2

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P 3

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New Mockup 1

ammcconn — 2023-10-11 04:32:10 UTC

New Mockup 2

ammcconn — 2023-10-11 04:32:45 UTC

New Mockup 3

ammcconn — 2023-10-11 04:33:07 UTC

New Mockup 4

ammcconn — 2023-10-11 04:33:25 UTC

Final Radius Logo

ammcconn — 2023-10-11 04:43:43 UTC

10.11 True Crime Logo

jrgunner — 2023-10-11 05:06:32 UTC

FINAL JAZZ ANIMATION

2023-10-11 06:22:48 UTC

Jazz Logo Animation

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-11 07:38:58 UTC

jazz animation

tom575 — 2023-10-11 12:09:39 UTC

much better.

price tag killer. P.1

tom575 — 2023-10-11 12:19:28 UTC

the top one is very compelling/interesting/creepy.

deleting the word "THE" from title is okay, I think. Could be argued about with client, but it works best of your solutions.

Think how your title type treatment can echo how the type is on that price tag.
The small paragraph is nicely placed so the hand leads us there. Could maybe be even closer to hand? can discuss further in class, but nice job overall.

price tag again.

tom575 — 2023-10-11 12:20:51 UTC

RADIUS logo: the left bracket almost disappears?

jazz NEW containment

tom575 — 2023-10-11 12:25:14 UTC

your new version makes sense. It has more strength.
now you can add color to JAZZ and another color to location type. This treatment also can dictate how you design signage, right?

underground jazz sign

tom575 — 2023-10-11 12:29:46 UTC

better. but, if you outlined
SEASON TO REMEMBER so it resembled the "A" I think it would read better?
I wish that your musician with the sax did not have that black area, but maybe you can find something that works better...and the pant leg of the guitarist could be darker so it works more like a framing device, since there is so much black on lower left? your logo still is too weak. easy fix.
but this is a sign that would stand out.

10.11 Jazz Signage Final (Jada/Ella)

2023-10-11 13:34:10 UTC

We went back and forth a lot on the colors for the shapes, Jazz, and "At Lincoln Center", but we decided that shapes in one color fit best and white "At Lincoln Center" didn't overpower Jazz.

krcabrer — 2023-10-11 13:40:22 UTC

Jazz billboards

2023-10-11 14:01:28 UTC

B and C work best. The added color brightens the concept.
And your “attitude” works because of the slanted “laid back” design of Jazz.
I think this concept can be a good portfolio piece.

Twist poster revised

2023-10-11 14:04:36 UTC

No need to “ twist” Murders like that.
But you can think how to insinuate a better hint of danger in your bold sans serif title.
Nice image

JAZZ AT LINCOLN CENTER LOGO

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krcabrer — 2023-10-11 14:25:25 UTC

Jazz Storyboard

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-11 14:26:40 UTC

New Radius Logos

ravassil — 2023-10-11 14:28:43 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-10-11 14:39:51 UTC

Jazz Finals 1

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Jazz Finals 2

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almyers1 — 2023-10-11 15:57:41 UTC

Jazz Final Logo

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-11 16:13:03 UTC

True Crime Final

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-11 16:15:19 UTC

RADIUS NEW

tom575 — 2023-10-11 18:20:38 UTC

The second from the top works best of the new ones. juist enoiugh missing from three letters to get the ;point of mystery but still readable.

jazz motion

tom575 — 2023-10-11 18:22:02 UTC

It works well. Not sure why you swipe it out at end just to bring it back?
Can you just land on the finalk logo and that be it?

latest jazz poster?

tom575 — 2023-10-11 18:37:28 UTC

there is no context, so i don't know where it will live. Underground in subway system?
and is it meant to be a motion video poster? it gives no information. Think about what you want the passers-by to get out of this.
Information? Our New Season Starts Sunday, October 9. ETC.

jazz animation

2023-10-12 01:48:27 UTC

syncing and timing could definitely be fine-tuned, but this is the general direction

jazz animation

tom575 — 2023-10-12 02:27:24 UTC

you are moving closer to having a good motion piece.
to state the obvious, when you move into the opening in the "A" it looks very lo-rez.
the more serious conceptual question is
why are you basically doing a black & white animation?
i think with your design concept, you can venture into color territory. take chances.
your "arrow" shapes A can point to incoming shapes, for instance.
you can stick to your circle shapes, just remember color.

Jazz Ad 2

2023-10-13 18:24:32 UTC

Jazz Ad 1

2023-10-13 18:24:42 UTC

Jazz Outside Mockup Video

2023-10-13 19:19:52 UTC

jazz poster and large sign.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-13 20:31:08 UTC

Nice work making your large sign literally light up with different colors.
I hope you see that adding a second color changes everything?
Please also do a short animation to introduce the new logo.
It can be short.

The "electric' poster: this is nice. I think it could have added effects to the word ELECTRIC and maybe even to the musicians, so it has more vibration...but this is nice.
Your re-working of the other one is better also. I menioned in class that your pink shape behind the main headline stops at the "r." It seems, based on your "electric" concept, that that pink shape could less predictable...maybe it extends past the "r"
to touch the J? Just think about it.
You have written good, unusual headlines.

Jazz logo applied.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-13 20:36:04 UTC

yours definitely works better the larger it gets.
your colors are very good.
but if you are presenting a musician, maybe you want to show that person a bit? You have laid type on top of the image.
but the colors are good.
Please fix your main logo so all four letters show up. before you present them.
i have not seen your animation, but with those panels, you have a great opportunity to have fun with those. they can start with just panels of various colors, moving from different starting points, then they can go to black and then the four letters move, various colors before they settle on the final 4 colors...then the full name slides in from the right. ...only one suggestion.

jazz animation/applications

tom575 — 2023-10-13 20:42:13 UTC

If you cannot see how to end the animation
a bit more subtly / elegantly, can you send this version to Cali soon?

Your applications: once you decide to keep a white background, you might be very limited when doing signage or ads for the underground, unless you add language as I suggested earlier... Please consider that soon
as this project is past due.

twist with texture attempts

tom575 — 2023-10-14 00:49:38 UTC

none of these work yet.

Therese and Malu

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Radius

tom575 — 2023-10-14 23:37:06 UTC

this is too distressed and looks like a type face, and some letters will practically disappear when reduced: the letter A, for instance. there is no concept here

radius

tom575 — 2023-10-14 23:41:36 UTC

the white on black version might work if it is opened up so the letter "a" won't close up when reduced. same with the "s."
and what is the point with the "i"?
Just making your logotype "bloated" doesn't mean you have a concept.

the black version with might work if you can decide what you are trying to convey.
clarify the letters better...keep thinking

twist poster

tom575 — 2023-10-14 23:44:15 UTC

sorry, but i don't understand your concept.
it looks like a cartoon version of a chalk marking.
it seems to not take the subject matter seriously enough.

Key Art_1

2023-10-14 23:49:35 UTC

Key Art_2

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Key art_3

2023-10-15 02:28:53 UTC

10.15 JALC Logo Animation

jrgunner — 2023-10-15 07:49:47 UTC

museum animation

tom575 — 2023-10-15 13:14:29 UTC

it is very good. i think it could be just a bit more complicated. I like seeing those shapes a lot...wish you could show more of the abstracts before they line up in final form.
but hold this, so we can look together tomorrow. nice job.

the knife.true crime

tom575 — 2023-10-15 13:18:14 UTC

a bit more horror film than true crime series?
had to read the red type on that background.
nice idea for the main title, but this concept is all about the knife. viewer might miss the real idea— the price tag?

jazz animation final

tom575 — 2023-10-15 13:20:59 UTC

i wrote to you in Canvas email.
make sure the name is aligned perfectly under JAZZ.
It looks off on right side? Just make sure.
This is very good work. Great that you revised the ending.

the knife. number 2.

tom575 — 2023-10-15 13:24:20 UTC

sorry, i did not see you had 3 versions. hard to read the red type on each.
the image should be more suggestive instead of so obvious?
bring in revised versions if you can for review in class.

post card

tom575 — 2023-10-15 13:27:20 UTC

can you please try to get that image on your card to be clearer?
it needs a stronger YES?
maybe add the question mark?
bolder. make the image inside stand out more. it is so close to being professional

Final Jazz Animation

memitche1 — 2023-10-15 18:24:51 UTC

jazz animation.tom

2023-10-15 18:58:34 UTC

the opening with the moving panels looks great, but your ending with JAZZ in colors on white panels looks very weak.
why end on white when you can end on a variety of color panels with JAZZ in white, OR...make the panels turn black on a white background and JAZZ in four STRONG colors?

Jazz Final Mockup

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-15 20:00:40 UTC

radius tom

tom575 — 2023-10-15 21:12:50 UTC

change your credit line to read:
True Crime Channel Logotype
This version can work I think, but we need to see it applied, of course

10.15 JALC Logo Animation

jrgunner — 2023-10-15 21:15:34 UTC

*Fixed the type

jazz one more time

tom575 — 2023-10-15 21:18:11 UTC

it looks good.
but ask me to look at it with you tomorrow before sending it to Cali. thanks

almyers1 — 2023-10-15 22:02:07 UTC

10.16 Final Radius Logo

2023-10-15 22:19:18 UTC

Jazz Video

2023-10-16 00:59:21 UTC

Key Art V1

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-16 02:13:21 UTC

10.16 Jazz Signage Post-Edits (Jada/Ella)

2023-10-16 02:32:02 UTC

Integrated the look of the animation + moved up the main physical sign, so the side signage didn't overpower it

adjustments 10.15

2023-10-16 02:39:17 UTC

new idk if improved logo pls help

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almyers1 — 2023-10-16 03:03:05 UTC

10.15 True Crime Key Art

jrgunner — 2023-10-16 03:21:11 UTC

10.15 True Crime Key Art (2)

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Radius Logo Final (Take 2)

ravassil — 2023-10-16 04:36:50 UTC

Jazz Animation

ravassil — 2023-10-16 04:50:02 UTC

[10/15] Radius Logo (final)

jgdonova — 2023-10-16 06:29:24 UTC

[10/15] True crime key art v1

jgdonova — 2023-10-16 08:13:28 UTC

jazz signage

tom575 — 2023-10-16 12:40:12 UTC

works much better. print this out, please

true crime posters?

tom575 — 2023-10-16 12:41:31 UTC

please print them all out.
this is true crime, so remember that crimes have been committed.
not sure your concepts work, but...
please explain your concept to class. thanks

true crime

tom575 — 2023-10-16 12:42:36 UTC

not sure what your concepts are?
please print out to explain in class. thanks

true crime boots.

tom575 — 2023-10-16 12:50:19 UTC

Does not connote danger.
hard to read the word CRIME. what is that white area on the boot at right?
if you are sold on this concept, porint it out to defend in class...briefly. thanks

jazz poster. true crime. tom

tom575 — 2023-10-16 12:51:32 UTC

poster is much better. i wish you had made revisions earlier.
not sure true crime is where it needs to be yet. talk in class.

true crime radius & poster. book cover. jazz work. tom

tom575 — 2023-10-16 12:55:30 UTC

not sure your concept reads danger?
your RADIUS logo might not be your best effort. in your list of 4 or 5, look at them again. i think your 4th one down might be best?
book cover image is really good, but your type treatment needs help.
your jazz animation is very good.
you just need to concentrate on getting all of the assignments better. you are close in most. print out true crime

true crime?

tom575 — 2023-10-16 12:57:25 UTC

not there yet. no real danger implied yet.
print out and pin up

10.15 True Crime Key Art (3)

jrgunner — 2023-10-16 14:13:07 UTC

10.16 Twist Keyart

2023-10-16 14:13:50 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-10-16 14:44:16 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-10-16 15:00:12 UTC

Radius logo draft 2

memitche1 — 2023-10-16 15:36:31 UTC

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murders poster

2023-10-16 20:04:36 UTC

body copy. you can make 2000 and TEXAS in white and then the rest of the copy in off-white or light gray or light red (not pink) so the year and location stand out.
also, that bottom left copy has no connection to the channle name. try making it one line so it connect better to TWIST.
oher than that, think about what i said in class. muder weapon, hand, noticable danger, etc etc

RADIUS

2023-10-16 20:16:25 UTC

Try using the top right one.
Make sure it reduces well. but it should.

latest murder poster

2023-10-16 20:19:54 UTC

move your body copy to align with the M or MURDERS

Make that bottom line at left one line so it completes the thought, connecting it to TWIST...they are very far apart for no reason.
your title looks much better

Bar Logos V1

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-18 00:08:13 UTC

Pharmacy

tom575 — 2023-10-18 00:16:25 UTC

The P with the cocktail glass inside is a nice start, but remember that ALE is a type of beer. Not sure that P is distinctive enough?
But the concept might work...try a mug of beer, maybe?

10.17 Corner Bar v1

2023-10-18 00:42:16 UTC

not sure if I'm crazy about any of these...

corner bar.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-18 01:09:40 UTC

i agree with you, but maybe top right? it is a no-nonsense approach that can possibly work.

true crime

tom575 — 2023-10-18 01:14:31 UTC

image can work, i think. maybe. need to see it pinned up. it is deeply muddy and not sure if you are showing the murderer or a victim...but i assume the killer? the image has a very nice feel

try to connect the bottom lines of text, as they form one sentence, right?

the stacked and centered body copy might seem old fashion now. your title is very clean and has no connection with the image behind it ...yet.

crime radius

tom575 — 2023-10-18 01:15:33 UTC

RADIUS is much better. sorry i didn;'t say that before.

v1

egporter1 — 2023-10-18 01:35:41 UTC

changing the type & colors but wanted to see if this image was better/ on right track- ziplocs to represent crime scene evidence bags

true crime

tom575 — 2023-10-18 02:07:42 UTC

sorry but i think it is hard to understand the image. leather i know, boots? but not clear. seems very crowded?
and not sure you would want TWIST way up there. but really, you may be right.
just think about the main image.
quick look seems like two boots.
and it is hard to read the red body copy.

jazz new mockup

tom575 — 2023-10-18 02:09:53 UTC

still don't understand why you two are not using color

10.18 Twist Keyart

2023-10-18 02:27:59 UTC

experimented with texture

krcabrer — 2023-10-18 03:42:46 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-10-18 03:42:55 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-10-18 03:43:17 UTC

v2

egporter1 — 2023-10-18 03:56:34 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-10-18 04:13:08 UTC

10.17 price tag killer

ammcconn — 2023-10-18 04:22:02 UTC

idk why the gradient on the last one got so messed up in exporting...

True crime key art

memitche1 — 2023-10-18 04:49:21 UTC

10.18 Key Art Iterations V2

jrgunner — 2023-10-18 05:03:37 UTC

I was retaking photos, and then I saw your comment about photos from the crime scene and decided to explore that, in my version, he cuts 2000 in his victims with found items...like broken glass

10.18 Key Art Idea

jrgunner — 2023-10-18 05:33:03 UTC

This could be a dud, but I thought it had the possibility to be different from what I typically see

[10/17] True Crime key art v2

jgdonova — 2023-10-18 05:39:42 UTC

V1 was not quite to my liking so I reworked it a lot while keeping a similar direction. This one is still intentionally muddy, but has higher contrast so it seems less flat. Also incorporated more analog methods.

10.18 Key Art Idea V2

jrgunner — 2023-10-18 05:49:22 UTC

10.18 True Crime Poster v1

2023-10-18 07:11:39 UTC

10.18 True Crime Poster v2

2023-10-18 07:12:51 UTC

10.18 Pharmacy Logo

jrgunner — 2023-10-18 08:42:49 UTC

I still think these require more experimenting

latest murders.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-18 12:49:16 UTC

title type looks better.
The texture wotks and the see-through effect really helps.
but why are you not considering that bottom text as ONE message...why the big separation between the two lines of type?
and you have the secondary type aligned with the M of Millennium but the bottom text line is not? these are easy tweaks. just have to be sure you know why you line things up.

murders

tom575 — 2023-10-18 12:52:51 UTC

the image is nicely disturbing, but you have not decided what to do with type.
you can make your title more transparent, for instance. or run a semi-transparent bar behind the title so the type can then be a color. the secondary, descriptive copy block looks like it is set arbitrarily?
it would be interesting to hear reactions to the main image...whether it is too over the top or not.

price tags

tom575 — 2023-10-18 12:56:09 UTC

you need to place the descriptive body copy in the posters.
and the person looks like they are modeling. should there be some indication she is dead?the lighting is nice, but the person is too clean. this is a murder victim, right?

murders/bags/etc

tom575 — 2023-10-18 12:59:18 UTC

Yes, this is clearer, but the cropping is still too crowded...needs to breathe.
the TWIST angle at bottom of the top poster is nicely done. the main issue is for the viewer to see clearly and instantly what your message is. if the camera pulls back a bit, that would help, but placing a whole boot inside a bag is maybe too much, but just try opening up the framing>?

THE CORNER BAR

2023-10-18 13:20:20 UTC

RADIUS logotype and poster

2023-10-18 20:42:22 UTC

I think you have improved your logotype a lot. nice.
Also, please remember what we discussed in class today about your poster...it has a great chance to be very good.
Keep the cowboy hat and image, add parts of thoughts that might come from a serial killer. Make the title work with the main image...try placing it above and part behind his head. Try the descriptive text line above the title at top of poster. Have fun. Do a couple versions.

almyers1 — 2023-10-19 22:51:39 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-10-19 22:52:05 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-10-19 22:52:33 UTC

The "secondary" Type

almyers1 — 2023-10-19 22:53:39 UTC

I can't for the life of me figure it out. I like what I've done with the title but the moment I add his name anywhere it feels very busy. Let me know.

10.19 Price Tag Killer Key Art V2

ammcconn — 2023-10-20 03:46:59 UTC

Phrmcy

2023-10-20 11:19:23 UTC

Clever to abbreviate the name.
Keep in mind it might be primarily a beer joint. But maybe a high end one?
I think you can have fun with just the six letters of the name.

Pharmacy logo

2023-10-20 11:23:31 UTC

Try doing a bold black silhouette of a beer stein, for instance and then place your letter inside that shape maybe in a color?

Radius and book cover

2023-10-20 11:41:47 UTC

Try the second from the bottom for radius.
Book cover: you forgot Essays?
And your title type looks like cotton candy and maybe should look more like clouds… if you were going for that effect?
I thought you were going to try making title more transparent?

True crime key art: more variations

memitche1 — 2023-10-21 20:17:48 UTC

I wasn't sure where to go from my price tag killer posters so I made some versions for millennium murders instead.

Round 2_ Price Tag Killer

2023-10-22 01:11:58 UTC

Round 2_Price Tag Killer

2023-10-22 01:18:56 UTC

Round 2_ Price Tag Killer 3

2023-10-22 01:40:08 UTC

[10/21] True Crime key art v3

jgdonova — 2023-10-22 06:11:38 UTC

Tried title as discussed in class. Refined killer shape. Also created new hand writing that actually says something. Its not entirely legible on purpose, but if you think a less "crazy" treatment would be better I can try that too.

Key Art V2

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-22 19:43:16 UTC

Key Art V3

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-22 21:05:57 UTC

10.23 Twist Keyart

2023-10-22 21:43:19 UTC

10.23 Twist Bus Mockups + Digital Ad

2023-10-22 21:44:25 UTC

300x600 Digital Ad

Key Art V4

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-22 22:56:50 UTC

10.23 Corner Bar

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krcabrer — 2023-10-23 02:10:06 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-10-23 02:12:39 UTC

Round 2_Bar Science

2023-10-23 02:21:47 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-10-23 03:24:00 UTC

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intital variations of corner bar

2023-10-23 03:43:57 UTC

[10/22] Bar logo v1

jgdonova — 2023-10-23 03:51:55 UTC

True Crime Key Art (Model A, Take 2)

ravassil — 2023-10-23 06:12:06 UTC

True Crime Key Art (Model A, Take 3)

ravassil — 2023-10-23 06:12:37 UTC

10.23 True Crime Key Art 1

2023-10-23 06:25:15 UTC

What changes would you suggest I make on these new versions?

10.23 True Crime Key Art v2

2023-10-23 06:26:13 UTC

Do either of these work?

10.23 Key Art

jrgunner — 2023-10-23 06:47:32 UTC

10.23 Pharmacy

jrgunner — 2023-10-23 08:21:07 UTC

Millennium

2023-10-23 12:16:55 UTC

Spell title correctly. Your poster does not solve the problem for the client but it’s fun to look at. There is no reference to Texas or the fact that there is real danger. Probably it could work if advertised as a maniac who stalked the west, etc. That copy probably could be rewritten to service your design… but you see that it is not really appropriate based on the assignment ?

Twist campaign

2023-10-23 12:20:14 UTC

Nice that you placed poster in context.
Can you place it in subway system?
Also, to make the copy work with the theme better, try making Texas and 2000 yellow?

Corner bar

2023-10-23 12:33:18 UTC

Too left one is still working best.
Seems like the tagline could change to more appropriately service your design?
Try to come up with a simple tag.
Or try this: Your know where we are.
I think you could keep it black and white.
Simple and direct. But you can try color.

Murders

2023-10-23 12:43:50 UTC

The heightened color palette has a nice, cheap cheesy 1975 film vibe. This overall is an improvement.
Not sure about the blood drip. Might be too much? Also, I think I understand the year(s) at upper left, but I’m not sure. I think if it did mean something clearly, it could help. Twist could be yellow to draw the viewer’s eye down there.
And your line breaks in that short paragraph could be better— please remind me about that?

Pharmacy

2023-10-23 12:46:24 UTC

None of your new ones work yet.
I still think Phrmcy might work out.
Try outlining the letters and overlapping them? Think about why people go to the same bar always… it’s safe and friends are there and it has the remedy. That is the remedy.

pt 2

2023-10-23 12:47:59 UTC

10.23 First Mockup

2023-10-23 13:06:26 UTC

Jazz mockup

mmgarcia13 — 2023-10-23 13:13:47 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-10-23 13:33:24 UTC

Murders

2023-10-23 13:35:30 UTC

Having trouble with your postings in Padlet.
The whole image does not emerge each time I try. I can only see top half.
Maybe too large a file?
But it sounds like you’re on the right track.
Not sure about setting your title aligned left.

Corner Bar

2023-10-23 13:43:44 UTC

10.17early versions. Middle ones. The black square with white CORNER works best.
It’s a bit of a puzzle and might catch on with “those in the know,” etc.
If you want to create your own tagline, remember you can.
Suggestions only:
Hard to describe but easy to find.
Etc etc have fun try color

Bar science

mlsanche — 2023-10-23 13:46:27 UTC

Bar Science Logos V1

memitche1 — 2023-10-23 15:41:23 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-10-23 16:31:11 UTC

True Crime Key Art V2

memitche1 — 2023-10-23 16:52:11 UTC

I brightened the footprints to give that sense of danger, like your entering a murder scene and the zoomed up photos of the footprints on the side

True Crime Key Art (Model B, Take 2)

ravassil — 2023-10-23 19:39:08 UTC

Pharmacy

2023-10-23 20:34:43 UTC

Remember this is a bar and not a drug store. The client thinks it’s clever to have the bar be associated with a pharmacy: a place where people go to feel better, etc.
Your logotypes so far look like pills or capsules. This bar serves as a metaphor for a pharmacy— a remedy.

10.25 Key Art

jrgunner — 2023-10-23 21:25:05 UTC

Bar Logos V2

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-24 06:12:50 UTC

Mug/pharmacy

tomvarisco — 2023-10-24 07:47:27 UTC

The top two work best so far.
Top left one has a strong personality, but the space between each element can be reduced so it is a tighter unit.
I prefer the top right mug with that foam. Can you try swapping mugs so top left has top right mug?

Murders

tomvarisco — 2023-10-24 07:56:10 UTC

Good title type treatmenT.
Not sure I understand your concept yet but I like looking at it.
Mechanical person?
Maybe we need to rewrite the text?
Same issue with Katrina.
Maybe try lowering the title and make sure its centered?
Start thinking how this concept can be explained...and think about rewriting text...and think about story boarding.
This shows nice explorations.

Murders 2 and 3

tomvarisco — 2023-10-24 08:08:44 UTC

Very good idea using the murder weapon to tell us the state.
And title type on both work well. Your backgrounds on both need more thought. Your body copy also. Not sure about what’s in the bag or your 2000 hand written.
But you have a good concept with that knife

Murders and pharmacy

tomvarisco — 2023-10-24 08:15:34 UTC

The bottom left pharmacy is charming. Reminds one of a simpler time but how can u make a more contemporary statement?
Murders: getting closer. You can use the bag to hold a weapon but maybe remember the year 2000 and the way he left his mark. Maybe ghost back the year behind the bag at least?

egporter1 — 2023-10-24 15:55:09 UTC

Jazz logo and poster

2023-10-24 17:33:50 UTC

I can’t remember if we ever critiqued your Jazz at Lincoln Center branding— logo?

Your logo has a bit of a cartoon style? This is an institution in New York. It should not look like it is too trendy or silly.

Your poster does not really look like it would be a concert of New Orleans music.

Think about New Orleans history, culture, etc. It is good you came up with a new headline but poster does not really represent the client well or the kind of concert it is presenting. You could argue that new orkeans music can be fun and light, I know, but… it should nod towards history at least a bit?

Murder poster update. Tom

2023-10-24 17:38:08 UTC

Your posting does not open totally on my phone for some reason… maybe files too large?

Top part is all I can see. So, it looks better than before. Your colors seem to be “colder” and more appropriate. Sorry but at this time I cannot see your entire image. Hopefully, you revised and improved the whole image?

10.25 Revised Key Art

jrgunner — 2023-10-24 21:30:47 UTC

10.25 MM Mockup

jrgunner — 2023-10-24 22:17:10 UTC

Bar Logos V3

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-24 22:46:04 UTC

10.25 Twist

2023-10-24 22:54:32 UTC

Subway/Underground Mock Up + Horizontal Digital Ad (728x90)

10.25 Corner Bar

2023-10-25 00:58:21 UTC

thought about finalizing it in black and white before trying color - is the font too "corporate"/should I try other styles?

2000

egporter1 — 2023-10-25 01:02:44 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-10-25 01:15:14 UTC

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2023-10-25 01:28:24 UTC

2023-10-25 01:29:13 UTC

Round 2_ Price Tag Killer 4

2023-10-25 02:02:59 UTC

10.25

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2023-10-25 03:14:25 UTC

MOCKUP 3

2023-10-25 03:58:30 UTC

[10/25] Bar Logo v2

jgdonova — 2023-10-25 05:45:01 UTC

Key Art V5

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-25 06:11:19 UTC

10.25 Pharmacy Logo

jrgunner — 2023-10-25 08:47:13 UTC

new type treatment - 3

2023-10-25 12:45:05 UTC

Key Art V6

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-25 15:23:01 UTC

Key Art V7

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-25 16:58:11 UTC

10.25 Restaurant logo

jrgunner — 2023-10-25 17:26:49 UTC

Ales?

2023-10-25 20:27:02 UTC

Your rewriting the tagline does not work well because it dilutes the irony and “ humor” of the okay on the word “ails.”

Maybe the bottom logotype works best?

I think I can do better.

Phrmcy.

2023-10-25 20:38:31 UTC

None of your designs work well enough yet. Try simply setting it in caps and lowercase with a period.

Look up typefaces by Herman Zapf…

try 1950s styles… I think someone on Pinterest used a fifties style — david Boyle?

Look up theatre marquees where letters were joined by oblong shapes or circles?

And of course try it as simple sans serif… with a twist of modern?

Pharmacy

2023-10-25 20:41:44 UTC

The oval seems to work best. Try connecting the bottom of the P and the top left of the y to the over line work?

You need to add your contemporary touch to it. But this one works best. Try odd colors?

Murder underground poster

2023-10-26 15:18:35 UTC

Nice idea to create two side by side.

Let’s discuss details in class Monday, please?

Start on your video soon.

You can open on close up of the price tag then pull back to reveal her and whole image… then wrap it up with text about when it starts; channel logo and tag, etc.

It can be a simple approach so viewer appreciates the narrative you have created.

Jazz animation. Post card.

2023-10-26 15:21:00 UTC

Please remember to revise.

Murder

2023-10-26 15:30:36 UTC

Your idea is clearer and the image is also.

Unfortunately, I cannot view the whole image, so it will have to wait until Sunday or Monday. Can you please revisit your jazz logo and animation and posters? Add colors to logo, make it maybe 10% larger on posters?

Also, please revisit your post card.

Design is… is still an option.

Death in your concept goes nowhere.

There is not enough humor in the idea or execution. And no follow up on back.

Corner bar

2023-10-26 15:39:54 UTC

When all letters are same size it works or when THE and BAR are same size but CORNER is larger it works very well.

It is not corporate.

You can try two colors: words in one, line art in another.

Think about tagline. It is a specific location, you can count on it being there.

Animation can be simple enough.

Like directions using the art etcetc

Bar?

2023-10-26 15:48:36 UTC

None work yet. Need a concept.

Can discuss in class

Work

2023-10-26 15:54:08 UTC

Talk to me about your projects soon.

Monday? You are missing an animation?

Revisit museum animation, post card etc.

Nothing yet for new bar assignment

Bar and murders

2023-10-26 16:04:00 UTC

Bar: can u please get the three elements closer to each other? They are still floating.

The left one with the new mug looks good.

Has humor and works in black on white.

Portfolio piece because the concept and execution feels fresh.

Murders: great looking latest one but the text tells you that he not only killed in a certain year but scrawled that number on or near the victims! The knife tells us something. The last one you did says location visually but no real threat.

The title type, however, looks great.

The darker posters with the knife feel scarier.

almyers1 — 2023-10-26 20:00:18 UTC

ok my concept is " I saw you out of the corner of my eye" for a bar where people are flirty little strangers

Corner Bar

2023-10-26 23:30:32 UTC

Your “ flirty” idea: Bar reads but Corner does not. The problem is Co.

The concept can work I guess witH

a different tagline so revise logotype and think of a new tag.? You need to revisit your postcard and other projects also please.

The Corner Bar

2023-10-27 10:00:51 UTC

The name contains THE, which makes it special.

Please see my earlier comments and revise accordingly. See earlier comments on your other projects.

Your work

2023-10-27 10:02:09 UTC

Please review and revisit all earlier projects and complete soon. Feel free to discuss with me Monday.

Bar Colors

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-28 19:25:17 UTC

Bar Posterboard

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-28 21:08:28 UTC

Bar

2023-10-28 21:18:21 UTC

Ok — Where Ends Meet is pretty funny.

But please try making The and Bar same size. Corner can be larger on one solution.

Missing class

2023-10-28 21:19:07 UTC

Please remind me which day in November you will be absent. Thanks

10.28 Twist Motion v1

2023-10-28 21:57:10 UTC

10.28 Price Tag Killer Mockup 1

ammcconn — 2023-10-29 02:38:05 UTC

10.28 Price Tag Killer Mockup 2

ammcconn — 2023-10-29 02:39:01 UTC

true crime.

tom575 — 2023-10-29 14:32:13 UTC

Finally, Padlet opened up your images for me.

Your main image of the killer is interesting.

Not sure it solves the problem as best it can. Something to discuss in class maybe.

The knife in his left hand puts it far away from the descriptive text.

Why not the right hand?

2000 could probably play a more important part.

In your previous design the Texas flag looks very good.

Your positioning of type needs visiting.

Main title on your latest one: why align left?

And, as i mentioned in class a few times, the title can be more a part of your background.

The bottom line of type has that space before you complete the sentence...why?

killer project.

tom575 — 2023-10-29 14:46:25 UTC

your designs finally opened for me in Padlet.

The lighting is much better... that horizontal design in particular.

IMPORTANT to consider:

The description says he wrote a PRICE on the tag.

Your KILLER word looks old school and should be reconsidered. Hard to read your red words in the description.

MURDERS

tom575 — 2023-10-29 14:47:15 UTC

the look and design are better. why a camera in the bag?

bar. variations

tom575 — 2023-10-29 14:48:35 UTC

Please re-think these designs. They look like type exercises right now. Concept?

MURDERS

tom575 — 2023-10-29 14:55:03 UTC

Your logotype is really good, and so far, that is the best thing about your project.

It should be in your portfolio.

Read the description: TEXAS; 2000.

Those two elements tell you how to proceed.

The pin in her neck is a nice surprise, but does it distract from your portrait of the victim? Did he kill her with a pin, or is this in the evidence room?

Why the lined, writing paper background?

The portrait is better.

Hard to go into any more details here.

I think you have a god idea. DETAILS...

AILS

tom575 — 2023-10-29 15:27:21 UTC

Should be AILS ...not Ail's.

Sorry for any confusion. on my part.

your 10.25 versions: I want to like the odd one in the middle, but it may be too hard to read? The top one in the elaborately designed oval has a sense of humor.

The stacked one in the second row left hurts itself because of the opening between the C and Y. Looks like an arrow shape is formed...but why?

Jazz animation update

tom575 — 2023-10-29 15:28:40 UTC

Much better. I want to review it again, but I think it should be on one of the hallway big screens. Let me look at it again first, but nice revisioin.

almyers1 — 2023-10-29 15:30:55 UTC

BAR

tom575 — 2023-10-29 15:33:05 UTC

Nice concept to change the name of the bar using the B. Not sure the client would approve, but let's go with it for now.

Should be AILS... not AIL'S. Sorry for any confusion on my part.

That said, not sure any of your versions is THE one yet. Maybe all the letters but the H stand out a bit more than the H?

If you want to use an icon or graphic element, you don't want to get too busy with it...don't take away from the clever name change. I want the top row right one to work, but right now, that cross is not quite right. But nice idea.

PRICE TAG

tom575 — 2023-10-29 15:36:12 UTC

1 of 2 title type looks too much like old school horror film. But the eye is a nice idea.

2 of 2 is very intriguing and more successful overall. The big price takes away from the very clever graphic shapes.

Try this for the price: $2.000.

That way, you have the year and price in one.

PRICE TAG again

2023-10-29 16:38:11 UTC

Sorry, I told you to use $2.000 on the price tag. That is wrong. That's the other True Crime series.

You can try $01.00 indicating it is the first victim.

price tag

2023-10-29 16:43:02 UTC

photo is very nice. not sure you need that extra hand with the money.

the victim's arm needs just a little blood and maybe less healthy color?

Great idea using SPECIAL OFFER.

No punctuation at end of sentence??

And where is the rest of the required text at bottom?! You have something here that can be very good. Include all text, etc. DETAILS>

almyers1 — 2023-10-29 17:34:37 UTC

eyes bar etc

2023-10-29 18:10:39 UTC

Looks like you just added THE to add it.

It has no real relationship to the other words.

If you really want to use this logotype / concept.....

Try using this tagline: SEE YOU THERE

true crime.tom

2023-10-29 18:15:25 UTC

overall, this is a bit too obvious, but well done obvious.

details: on your outdoor poster, your body copy is too close to the edge on right side.

why bleed off the left side of the title?

the texture on your title is nice...cocaine?

Color touches are nice also.

Just wish this offered a bit of mystery.

ALES

2023-10-29 18:17:33 UTC

Please correct that word. My mistake. sorry.

This is a portfolio logotype / coaster. Not sure about your small signage, however.

Try to make it an outdoor sign. Can be on the glass or wood entrance door.

Periodic table Bar concept

2023-10-29 18:23:51 UTC

That's the one that works best.

B Sc.

And your tagline is good. Please have that to pin up. Get to work on a menu and other items, please.

work

2023-10-29 18:24:28 UTC

please talk to me about revisiting your work. thanks

Bharmacy

2023-10-29 18:30:15 UTC

The B needs to stand out a little, I think.

The X

at the end is funny. I think the 4th one down?

But try a stencil vesion for the name. read my previous suggestions about the B, etc. This is getting somewhere.

True Crime posters

2023-10-29 18:31:41 UTC

You have True Crime All The Time stacked and centered.

Try making TRUE CRIME same width as ALL THE TIME, so that is is larger but same width.

2023-10-29 19:44:58 UTC

Bar Coaster

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-29 21:30:11 UTC

[10/29] Bar Logo v3

jgdonova — 2023-10-29 22:26:01 UTC

Took a new approach inspired by hand painted signs. Also refined last concept a bit, but it still feels cold/flat.

Final_Twist_logo

2023-10-29 22:33:37 UTC

Round 2_ Bar Science

2023-10-29 22:39:49 UTC

more logo sketches: space concept

Bar Menu Iterations

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-29 23:27:19 UTC

1-3

2023-10-29 23:36:38 UTC

Key Art Revised 10.29

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-29 23:40:58 UTC

Bar Window

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-30 00:00:05 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-10-30 00:21:12 UTC

2023-10-30 00:23:22 UTC

10.30 Key Art

jrgunner — 2023-10-30 00:29:53 UTC

Twist Mockups

mjtucker1 — 2023-10-30 00:30:07 UTC

1-3

10.30 Street Mockup

jrgunner — 2023-10-30 00:43:00 UTC

Round 3_Bar Science

2023-10-30 01:14:12 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-10-30 02:52:26 UTC

10.29 Corner Bar

2023-10-30 03:13:16 UTC

made "The" & "Bar" the same size; menu currently in the works

10.30 Pharmacy

jrgunner — 2023-10-30 06:15:10 UTC

Digital Ads True Crime

2023-10-30 07:47:29 UTC

Millennium Murders Key Art

2023-10-30 07:51:34 UTC

pharmacy ales

tom575 — 2023-10-30 12:50:46 UTC

I agree with you, however, the middle one has nice ideas.

Try using the middle one on a horizontal. I know you would have to adjust the letters,,but that one has a certain elegance and playfulness...and warmth?

I think in an animation, you could start with the correct spelling, and then delete the vowels to display your abbreviated version.

I think, it can be argued, that a bar can get away with abbreviating its name.

BTW: Jada is also exploring the abbreviated version.

murders

tom575 — 2023-10-30 12:52:18 UTC

these are your best versions. we can discuss how much texture is needed, but this is going to work...I think.

murders

tom575 — 2023-10-30 12:54:52 UTC

your horizontal version works best.

It's very good.

the knife disturbs the design in the vertical one. maybe placing the knife vertically and to the left bottom ...maybe even half behind the MI of MILLENNIUM? and the star can go right above it as in your horizontal one?

horizontal ads

tom575 — 2023-10-30 12:56:54 UTC

These are all good.

I lean towards the middle one.

Now it's a matter of how much distressed border you need, because the top left feels empty a bit? Can discuss in class.

bar.

tom575 — 2023-10-30 12:58:34 UTC

think about how you would feel about your favorite bar that happens to be on THE corner you love. Dopes it feel like part of your home? You go there to feel better about everything!

jazz

tom575 — 2023-10-30 13:00:00 UTC

you and Ace need to revisit that project and see my suggestions from before, please. potentially, a really nice portfolio piece.

egporter1 — 2023-10-30 13:35:06 UTC

True crime video

2023-10-30 13:53:31 UTC

Nice but why have all that bottom info throughout? Should that not be at end after logotype reveal?

Killer

2023-10-30 13:55:15 UTC

The type for Killers is “overkill “ in terms of style.

mlsanche — 2023-10-30 14:25:47 UTC

mlsanche — 2023-10-30 14:41:22 UTC

digital ads

egporter1 — 2023-10-30 15:44:21 UTC

mlsanche — 2023-10-30 16:23:06 UTC

mlsanche — 2023-10-30 16:24:27 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-10-30 16:47:52 UTC

2023-10-30 23:25:12 UTC

horizontal ad?

tom575 — 2023-10-31 00:13:56 UTC

i cannot tell what the visual is??

bar thoughts

tom575 — 2023-10-31 00:17:03 UTC

If you go ahead with the skull, it needs to have a touch of humor, as we discussed.

Examples of possible taglines...or similar:

We're here now. And forever.

Here for you now. And after.

Always here. Forever after.

bar and crime

tom575 — 2023-10-31 00:19:34 UTC

did you take notes on both today?

try all caps for SEE YOU THERE

If that tagline seems more for an ad to get people inside, try this:

NICE TO SEE YOU

SEE YOU SOON

ALWAYS GOOD TO SEE YOU

knife.tom

tom575 — 2023-10-31 11:34:18 UTC

nice latest knife, etc.

hard to read TEXAS in red.

and I did like the way we could see the outline of the state inside the knife before.

start applying this to other parts of this project.

Pharmacy Iterations

rwshaffe — 2023-10-31 13:19:35 UTC

PHARMACY

tom575 — 2023-10-31 13:41:10 UTC

1 of 3

THE TOP ONE works best. Nice.

I assume you got my email to you last week?

Please let me know you can get all past work done before Thanksgiving.

Good luck. Tom

REVISED SUBWAY

2023-10-31 14:07:07 UTC

Subway poster

2023-10-31 14:11:59 UTC

The poster on the right: It would be best to use images that are not exactly what the poster on left already shows.

Now that I can see clearly those detail / close-up photos, there’s nothing new to look at. Can you think of what can replace those or at least two or three?

11.1 Crime Key Art

jrgunner — 2023-10-31 20:37:30 UTC

I posted the body copy with yellow on the board in the classroom, the red in person seems to be a little much.

Your work

2023-10-31 20:49:20 UTC

Please remind me to review you’re irk with you. Thanks

Pharmacy

2023-10-31 20:54:27 UTC

Looks like your letter “y” is very crowded.

It does not flow gracefully into the outer shape. And you have not solved the space issue in each side of ales you.

digital ad pt.2

egporter1 — 2023-10-31 21:01:21 UTC

tried to make the camera clearer not sure about the type

Final Ver_Bar Science logo

2023-10-31 21:32:38 UTC

Colored ver_Bar science logo

2023-10-31 21:33:02 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-10-31 22:13:04 UTC

10.31 Corner Bar Menu

2023-10-31 22:14:27 UTC

tried combing high-end style and muted color palettes of dive bars' interiors/neon signs

Final Key Art Design Millennium Murders

2023-10-31 22:21:56 UTC

Corner Bar. Tom

2023-10-31 22:37:04 UTC

First off, it’s great you put so much effort into this, but to my mind, especially after seeing your cheerful color blue, I feel this is a no nonsense black & white concept.

I think you can have fun designing it using just black on white. The idea of a corner can be used creatively for a menu also.

That hint of a directional sign I gave you yesterday can perhaps inspire you for exterior signage. Sorry to go on but you have great potential with this concept.

egporter1 — 2023-10-31 23:05:11 UTC

Final Mockups

2023-10-31 23:06:13 UTC

2023-10-31 23:08:10 UTC

final keyart (v1) ?

egporter1 — 2023-10-31 23:33:23 UTC

not sure about the secondary type

final key art v2

egporter1 — 2023-10-31 23:34:05 UTC

Round 3_Price Tag Killer

2023-11-01 00:21:04 UTC

Round 3_Price Tag Killer ver 2

2023-11-01 00:29:14 UTC

Price Tag Killer_mockup_vertical

2023-11-01 00:38:31 UTC

Price Tag Killer_Subway Mockup

2023-11-01 01:03:14 UTC

Digital Ads

2023-11-01 01:13:43 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-01 01:55:29 UTC

TWIST Key Art

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-01 02:30:13 UTC

Crime Mockup

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-01 02:41:45 UTC

11.1 Subway Key Art

jrgunner — 2023-11-01 02:47:29 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-11-01 02:53:34 UTC

Bar Science_Sign_Mockup

2023-11-01 04:15:25 UTC

[10/31] Bar Logo v4

jgdonova — 2023-11-01 04:48:39 UTC

[10/31] True Crime key art v4

jgdonova — 2023-11-01 05:05:35 UTC

Key Art A Take 2

ravassil — 2023-11-01 05:06:58 UTC

Key Art B Take 2 (Alt)

ravassil — 2023-11-01 05:18:00 UTC

Key Art B Take 2

ravassil — 2023-11-01 05:18:31 UTC

Key Art 11.01

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-01 05:31:46 UTC

True Crime Mockup A

ravassil — 2023-11-01 05:35:58 UTC

True Crime Mockup B

ravassil — 2023-11-01 05:36:18 UTC

11.1 Pharmacy Logo

jrgunner — 2023-11-01 08:22:09 UTC

11.1 Restaurant Menu

jrgunner — 2023-11-01 10:20:13 UTC

Attempted to make the menu look hipster friendly and overly fancy while keeping the names of the drinks lighthearted, like the logo

11.1 Restaurant Menu (2)

jrgunner — 2023-11-01 10:32:53 UTC

digital ad

tom575 — 2023-11-01 13:00:40 UTC

ad looks good visually, but i'm still confused about the camera. you can explain it again in class. how would you explain your concept in your portfolio in one sentence?

pharmacy

tom575 — 2023-11-01 13:01:29 UTC

please revised your logotype per my earlier suggestions/observations

price tag

tom575 — 2023-11-01 13:03:17 UTC

ask me about your idea about special offer.

i think that price tag can play a more major part...especially in a video...up front. larger, etc. it is what sets your concept apart...

a morbid sense of humor

jmjmail28_ — 2023-11-01 14:14:05 UTC

Twist Mockup 11.01

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-01 14:46:13 UTC

2023-11-01 16:22:05 UTC

bar

tom575 — 2023-11-01 20:00:49 UTC

top row third from left.

the first one also, but I feel the icons are less busy in third from left.

and as stencils, they feel part of the "family."

please start applying the logotype. thanks

twist

tom575 — 2023-11-01 20:03:04 UTC

nice looking. the twisting caution tape echoes your logotype.

the small type at bottom is hard to read now.

can you please correct that?

also, maybe maybe the bench needs a bit more blood at left side? maybe?

horizontal poster

tom575 — 2023-11-01 20:04:19 UTC

that's still the best one. i really wish you had used an original image

Bar

2023-11-01 20:22:36 UTC

The bottom one IF you place the BA above the R? Right now it reads as RAB.

Wish you could’ve made class today

Radius

2023-11-01 20:24:06 UTC

Second from bottom could work maybe add little texture?

Momi

2023-11-01 20:24:54 UTC

Your logo is nice. Animation?

11.1 Bar Science Logos

ammcconn — 2023-11-01 21:38:35 UTC

Tom i took your advice and kept working at it, i tried abstracting the martini glass and beaker and focused on the triangles and how the type fits with them and i think im finally getting somewhere good. Here are a few of the iterations i was working on.

bar science

tom575 — 2023-11-02 00:47:08 UTC

I agree you have something here.

Very clever upside down martini glass is a beaker.

That middle one looks good...has substance. Very tight.

Not sure where the tagline would go, however. Do not place it inside the black shapes.

But, you could use the first one for something, and the middle one as a stand alone logo. nice

work

tom575 — 2023-11-02 00:47:29 UTC

please bring in work.

Final Phrmcy Logo

jrgunner — 2023-11-02 02:04:00 UTC

Phrmcy Mock Ad

jrgunner — 2023-11-02 02:05:30 UTC

Not the signage, I just wanted to experiment with texture, but this logo is already doing a lot.

texture in logo?

tom575 — 2023-11-02 12:42:56 UTC

I think you have too much added distressed texture inside your logo lock-up.

Your logotype with the impressions of flower shapes has a nice, light, fanciful feeling on its own.

Adding that kind of distressed texture takes it out of its lightheartedness.

true crime

tom575 — 2023-11-02 12:46:10 UTC

Looking at your newest version yesterday, I think your large X shapes looked better.

If you added just a hint of distressed

000 to each tag, that might be all they need.

Don't overdo it...don't want it to look like eyes.

I think what you showed me yesterday seems a bit too much. But you can try it?

work

tom575 — 2023-11-02 12:47:30 UTC

please replace your old RADIUS in the hallway with your better one before Monday at 9:30.

And you need to finish up earlier work soon.

Book cover, etc.

Did you sends your Jazz animation to Cali?

Please do that.

true crime

tom575 — 2023-11-02 12:48:57 UTC

you have a good campaign.

can you please try to complete it with a video or at least a storyboard soon? Monday? Remember the video needs to promote the series.

work

tom575 — 2023-11-02 12:49:39 UTC

Need to complete your work soon.

Happy to discuss Monday when there is time.

true crime

tom575 — 2023-11-02 12:54:04 UTC

Please re-write your descriptive sentence for your campaign. Include the other pats to it besides the poster.

Example for sentence:

In the year 3000, a maniacal syborg went on a killing spree throughout the territory of Texasland.

Revised ver_Final_Key Art

2023-11-02 17:04:03 UTC

Final_Key Art_Mockup

2023-11-02 17:06:27 UTC

tag killer

tom575 — 2023-11-02 17:53:30 UTC

i think the knife WITH the tags might be better. seeing your poster underground it looks very good...the tags add more drama and negative.

can you remember to talk to me...I'd like to review your work with you soon

murder

tom575 — 2023-11-02 17:56:02 UTC

please have all your posters on hand monday. thanks

work

tom575 — 2023-11-02 18:02:16 UTC

please remind me to review all your work with me. i think if we revisit it, there are parts that can really help you in your portfolio

work

tom575 — 2023-11-02 18:14:43 UTC

in the next few classes, i'd like to see your work with you.

as for true crime, you had a great concept and initial design very early, so can you complete this assignment soon?

menus v1

egporter1 — 2023-11-02 18:39:43 UTC

first few- playing around with the idea of a retro inspired brewery based on logotype

logotype + reduced

egporter1 — 2023-11-02 18:41:35 UTC

pharmacy.tom

2023-11-02 19:01:25 UTC

your logotype looks good now. nice work.

MENU: this concept is valid.

not quite there as a design yet?

also remember that ALE is just a fancy English word for beer, so this would be their specialty.

Maybe list the beers first on the menu?

Maybe the header would be something like:

OUR REMEDY: CRAFT BEERS

Beer Cures All etc etc etc

Just think of REMEDY, since this is a take-off on a pharmacy.

ROSARY

2023-11-02 19:03:24 UTC

if you can, try to get that hand with the rosary in place show it shows up in your mockup underground/above ground.

Hope you can create a quick video as well: you could start on his hand...etc.

11.2 PTK Key Art

ammcconn — 2023-11-03 01:19:08 UTC

added more blood and tied in the secondary type with the title more. pretty pleased with the results!

price tag

2023-11-03 13:12:05 UTC

it works. the description says he left a price written on the tag, but leave it alone for now.

nice work.

please apply to all items in this project...video also. thanks

Bar Logo Iterations

2023-11-03 14:58:09 UTC

MOMI animation

tom575 — 2023-11-03 15:09:27 UTC

I think I asked this before, but can you simply enlarge the image size in your animation?

That way, I think you can send it along to Cali to show on the big screen in hallway. Lemme kn ow

bar science

tom575 — 2023-11-03 15:15:49 UTC

none of them really solve the problem...are they creative and memorable enough?

If you want to take the name as ironic, you could pick a nice typeface or two and add a question mark at the end.

BAR SCIENCE? You can make it one word.

BARscience. barSCIENCE. BarScience.

I like your equal sign.

B+Sc=

Is there an abbreviation for contentment or calmness or happiness, etc.?

True Crime Key Art Final?

2023-11-03 15:34:44 UTC

True crime

2023-11-03 17:14:16 UTC

Much better but if he had scrawled into her chest, it would be messier than indicated. Just get that 2000 to work better and you gave a very good design

True crime again

2023-11-03 17:49:53 UTC

Rethinking my last comment.

If the murderer draws 2000 on a photo of a victim— future victim?— maybe he would just draw the year or sketch it?

Just has to look authentic

11.3 Twist Motion Edits

2023-11-03 21:36:24 UTC

added music + moved the copy around

digital ad

2023-11-04 13:47:05 UTC

resolved subway

2023-11-04 13:48:17 UTC

subway crime poster

tom575 — 2023-11-04 17:34:06 UTC

not sure about the squares with just a color?

you can hint at a location.

part of the front seat of a car.

rearview mirror. steering wheel. etc etc

True Crime Key Art V3

memitche1 — 2023-11-04 18:24:22 UTC

True Crime Key Art

memitche1 — 2023-11-04 18:50:22 UTC

Mag & Ace Jazz Logos (color options & uppercase version)

2023-11-04 19:26:34 UTC

scarecrow

tom575 — 2023-11-04 19:38:12 UTC

you have this figure actually floating on a road?

this has more of a nightmare effect, I guess. not reality.

but you have nice design ability in terms of creating an interesting looking poster or posters. Would it be more interesting or threatening if this figure was real?

does 2000 have anything to do with this concept?

bring this version in Monday anyway.

it is much closer to the correct way to go.

I'm happy to discuss further with you with time.

Crime Subway Poster

memitche1 — 2023-11-04 19:39:40 UTC

jazz new color

tom575 — 2023-11-04 19:41:05 UTC

remember I had suggested you use all caps for the location type?

it will look better if you do.

your colors are still not vibrant enough, but you can argue for it.

add a color version to the elements in that campaign.

Crime Digital Ads

memitche1 — 2023-11-04 20:07:55 UTC

follow up on true crime

tom575 — 2023-11-04 20:25:11 UTC

To be clear er:

I suggested you make your original concept more specific to the creative brief.

The description reads Texas and the year 2000. That year was scrawled on or near the victim, etc.

So, you seemed to ignore the description in your original versions. Your concept was confusing, as we discussed.

I suggested to perhaps use a scare crow in your corn field as a way to make what you had created at least scary. It still does not convey what the description is telling the viewer, but it at least adds a bit of mystery...more like a horror film.

You clearly have design skills (PhotoShop, etc.).

You need to concentrate on narrative concept.

I have prompted all students to add mystery and not be too obvious.

You have heard and seen many critiques.

Don't give up, but try to understand how to lead a potential viewer to want more.

But, again, your latest version is much better than the film strip versions.

tag

tom575 — 2023-11-04 20:27:32 UTC

the top one is the better design, but your type treatment of title is better on the bottom one.

bar

tom575 — 2023-11-04 20:35:10 UTC

a suggestion:

on the top of your bar menu, you could emphasize the word BAR in your name, since the customer is already inside your place and knows the name.

BHARMACY

Think about how that can happen in interior signage maybe?

If you are going to use those icons

+x etc., as part of your logotype lockup, you could also use them to have fun and for emphasis—

MAXX. Just think about what you can do.

Think about maybe more surprising color(s) for your menu as well.

Explore more. Paper options...

Bar Iterations?

2023-11-04 20:37:58 UTC

More Jazz Colors (uppercase location type)

2023-11-04 21:33:53 UTC

True Crime (different placement of 2000)

2023-11-04 21:50:57 UTC

I'm having trouble figuring out where to place the written "2000." Does this work or should I try to place it on the photograph itself?

11.4 Corner Bar Mock Ups

2023-11-04 22:05:12 UTC

going to see if I can find/make a better mock up for the exterior that's more like a building facade (unless you think the one i have currently is adequate)

Corner Bar Logo Design Final Iterations

2023-11-05 02:15:13 UTC

Let me know if you think the logo is working or not. I modified the type faces to end up with these final solutions.

UPDATE

I have decided to work with the second option as I believe it works the best reduced and at full size

POSTCARD REVISED

2023-11-05 15:15:24 UTC

rue crime 2000

2023-11-05 16:29:17 UTC

your latest works best.

leave the scrawled 2000 on that patch covering her eye.

please apply soon to other elements in this campaign. video also.

we can discuss details in class if there is time, but this works.

jazz colors

2023-11-05 16:32:23 UTC

i lean towards the middle top one: blue JAZZ.

But you know you can use a combination of colors whenever you want, depending upon application.

for animation, you can cut to a series of colors...maybe 4 different iterations, before landing on one at end...then fade to black & white for final frame and add location line of type. all caps works better...hope you see that?

BAR (science)

2023-11-05 16:38:36 UTC

Try placing science inside parenthesis.

See above. You placed BAR inside, but I think it might be funnier for science inside there?

SCIENCE seems to me to be the odd word in the name, right? So try

BAR(science) and then please apply soon to other parts of project. Sorry you missed last class.

I showed a logo presentation

for a few restaurants, including Meril.

bar signs, coasters, menus, etc.

2023-11-05 16:45:20 UTC

It is always best to show the front facade with main signage, but if you cannot get to it, what you show is fine for now.

The Patio Area sign does not help your campaign. I would delete that one. Also your coasters? Your logo should be on the coaster along with your tagline. You can try leaving the tag as is with logo.

People will want to take the coaster, which is good.

Your menu looks very good as is presented in mock up. I cannot read it, but I assume you spelled checked. Keep up the good work.

FINAL CORNER BAR

2023-11-05 18:17:15 UTC

Final_Price Tag Killer_ Key Art

2023-11-05 18:37:50 UTC

Final_vertical mockup

2023-11-05 18:41:01 UTC

"T"

2023-11-05 18:58:13 UTC

Not sure if you want to see iterations of our letter forms. Here's what I have going.

[11/5] True Crime key art v5

jgdonova — 2023-11-05 20:12:19 UTC

I'm fairly happy with this version, but I'm unsure if the title is too obscure. Interested to see what you think about the body copy treatment, I feel that its a bit more purposeful than my last attempts.

true crime motion piece

egporter1 — 2023-11-05 21:03:05 UTC

new and improved logo :)

mlsanche — 2023-11-05 21:14:54 UTC

true crime motion v2

egporter1 — 2023-11-05 21:15:23 UTC

like this one better. just unsure about the ending/ if the piece is too confusing in general.

the flashes of photos are meant to represent photographs

[11/5] Bar Logo v5

jgdonova — 2023-11-05 21:34:10 UTC

Tried to fix body copy on stacked logos, also tried to get it working horizontally. I think the horizontal one loses some of its character, but may be the better option here.

Key Art Final

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-05 22:09:11 UTC

Key Art Mockup Final

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-05 22:12:15 UTC

2023-11-06 00:02:37 UTC

Bar Science Logos V2

memitche1 — 2023-11-06 00:13:45 UTC

True Crime Motion

memitche1 — 2023-11-06 00:40:46 UTC

Bar Mockup 11.5

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-06 00:48:27 UTC

Final True Crime Logo

memitche1 — 2023-11-06 00:48:49 UTC

V2 Pharmacy Menus

jrgunner — 2023-11-06 01:06:08 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-06 01:40:00 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-06 01:40:18 UTC

THE CORNER BAR MENU

2023-11-06 01:42:19 UTC

True Crime Key Art A (Re-Write)

ravassil — 2023-11-06 02:31:13 UTC

True Crime Key Art B (Re-Write)

ravassil — 2023-11-06 02:31:56 UTC

True Crime Digital Ad

ravassil — 2023-11-06 02:38:07 UTC

Bar Science_logo animation_ver1

2023-11-06 02:43:22 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-11-06 02:43:58 UTC

2023-11-06 02:44:02 UTC

Corner Bar Logos

ravassil — 2023-11-06 02:44:53 UTC

So I don't really like any of these. What I'm probably gonna do either redraw the logo to include the words (or only the word corner) or I'm gonna take the logo that's center right and fix the typography. For context, I made the typeface myself because just picking a font wont work with the hand draw logo, but the type I made is too goofy I feel. But that's just my opinion.

2023-11-06 02:51:08 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-11-06 02:57:06 UTC

2023-11-06 03:15:06 UTC

11.5 Evermore

2023-11-06 03:15:21 UTC

initial thoughts for "evermore" - going for a playful, magical vibe for a fx studio

price tag killer video

2023-11-06 03:18:01 UTC

True Crime Bus Stop Mockup

2023-11-06 03:30:06 UTC

11.6 Corner Bar Updated MockUps

2023-11-06 03:56:59 UTC

got a building facade + updated coaster

coaster

egporter1 — 2023-11-06 04:11:21 UTC

2023-11-06 04:23:31 UTC

I've decided to push my concept further to be an "amusement park killer." The murderer preys upon exclusively younger victims once they've boarded a rollercoaster cart. Loosely based on Stephen King's, Joyland.

11.6 Pharmacy Bar Signage

jrgunner — 2023-11-06 04:40:32 UTC

11.6 Additional Logo

jrgunner — 2023-11-06 05:03:42 UTC

true crime_animation_key art

2023-11-06 05:46:41 UTC

Film_round1_sketches

2023-11-06 06:39:54 UTC

[11/5] Bar menu v1

jgdonova — 2023-11-06 06:58:35 UTC

[11/5] True Crime Poster Mockup

jgdonova — 2023-11-06 07:11:35 UTC

[11/6] Film Company Logo (sketches)

jgdonova — 2023-11-06 07:53:29 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-11-06 14:17:47 UTC

Bar Mockup 11.6

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-06 15:31:05 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-06 15:48:38 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-06 16:03:06 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-06 16:04:47 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-06 16:35:37 UTC

not gonna lie, I love the eyelashes thinking of going against the grain here.

Bar Science Color Logo Variations

ammcconn — 2023-11-06 16:52:11 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-06 17:06:01 UTC

added some more like clouds around the type itself to get the point of the clouds across more

almyers1 — 2023-11-06 17:07:55 UTC

Renegade Sketches

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-06 17:21:51 UTC

2023-11-06 19:53:28 UTC

T

2023-11-06 20:34:53 UTC

Nice letter T. please include your credit line as we discussed in class.

tag video

2023-11-06 20:37:00 UTC

it works well, but why did you go back to her face with the price tag close up at the end?

it should just go black after the channel and date info, right?

but it is a nice job. can you fix that ending so your video can play on the big screen soon?

murders

2023-11-06 20:39:34 UTC

i agree with you about the title type treatment. maybe a bit much?

But this looks like it could be IT.

and be sure the small red type can be read easily? It feels like the red is too dark on a dark background.

murder video?

2023-11-06 20:39:52 UTC

MURDERS

2023-11-06 20:42:50 UTC

still hard to find where to read first... secondary type is very hard to read.

i thought you would make sure we could read that descriptive sentence better?

title is not interesting enough yet, either.

bar

2023-11-06 20:45:07 UTC

the stacked version reads better.

not sure what personality this place has?

it looks like color should be used.

is it a fun fun fun place with lots of laughs?

you certainly can have fun with garnishes.

bar

2023-11-06 20:48:04 UTC

this has potential. please try what I suggested in class. delete the bottle. try adding a tagline aligned left with the C or corner...above it in that big open space next to the glass, which is really a good drawing.

You can have fun with he tyoe treatment for the tagline as well, so it has the same sort of personality as the name. ok?

you need to get this applied to other materials soon.

bar

2023-11-06 20:50:45 UTC

i think the BOTTOM one works pretty well. it is so weird and silly that it could work well. get a tagline under it? start applying it.

murder video

2023-11-06 20:52:21 UTC

why did you not use your image from Key Art in the video? Isn't that the point of the video...to promote the series?

Bar Science Logotype

2023-11-07 02:06:39 UTC

Bar Science Menu

2023-11-07 02:07:11 UTC

price tag killer final

2023-11-07 02:08:08 UTC

Bar Science_menu

2023-11-07 04:31:24 UTC

Bar Mockups

2023-11-07 04:49:44 UTC

True Crime Key Art Final

2023-11-07 05:21:16 UTC

11.7 Corner Bar Motion

2023-11-07 17:13:07 UTC

back_menu_mockup

2023-11-07 17:24:01 UTC

table_tent_mockup

2023-11-07 17:24:26 UTC

cap_front&side_mockup

2023-11-07 17:25:07 UTC

Bar Science Logo

memitche1 — 2023-11-07 18:10:25 UTC

True Crime Digital Ad

2023-11-07 19:33:41 UTC

True Crime Digital Ads

2023-11-07 19:39:08 UTC

T

2023-11-07 20:43:44 UTC

please bring in your letter 'T" tomorrow...printed of course.

bar

2023-11-07 20:46:39 UTC

i thought you were going to make science a bit bolder than BAR? it reads fine as is, but can you try to see what happens if one word is bolder than the other?

evermore

2023-11-07 21:03:50 UTC

you can try setting it in sans serif, then place a serif treatment inside, so it drops out in places. special effects means just that.

you can try setting it and then print it out, run it through a copier, scan that, set another typeface inside it reversed out, etc etc.

it can call for experimentation.

OR set it in all lowercase and start erasing parts of it until it almost disappears on one end. you can place the word inside a horizonatl rectangle and have it "escape" that grid on one end...the far end. it wants to be free from the screen frame, etc.

video crime

2023-11-07 21:06:37 UTC

if you are going to close in on the price tag at the end, it has to mean something.

if inside that blue area you had the date it runs, then that would be added info.

every second counts to tell your story.

hard to read the descrition also. please look at this again. it can be very good with work. we can chat at class end.

jazz pin up

2023-11-07 21:08:56 UTC

can you please pin up your JAZZ at Lincoln Center in color alongside your black & white one. Be sure that LINCOLN is in one color.

and we need to talk about your work, please. thanks

corner bar

2023-11-07 21:11:45 UTC

talked about this in class: why not make your ruled lines have the edge that the "N" serif has?

true crime

2023-11-07 21:12:08 UTC

video?

true crime

2023-11-07 21:13:46 UTC

can you two please remind me to talk to you in class? 2000 and TEXAS are important aspects of this series.

you can solve the Texas part by adding a star, etc. probably 2000 can be added as well...you seem to be drifting away from a valid concept... and look.

crime and bar

2023-11-07 21:15:13 UTC

remember when true crime was due.

for your bar concept...it is a good one, but you need to finish this off with a professional look. all aspects.

DESIGN / work

2023-11-07 21:15:41 UTC

Please keep me updated tomorrow. thanks

round1 logos

egporter1 — 2023-11-07 21:27:02 UTC

11.7 Bar Menu

ammcconn — 2023-11-07 22:58:21 UTC

prices will be changed!

2023-11-08 00:10:29 UTC

is the credit line just our name?

Pharmacy Finals

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-08 00:47:36 UTC

Bar Mockup

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-08 01:05:33 UTC

mlsanche — 2023-11-08 02:17:26 UTC

11.8 Evermore

2023-11-08 02:39:21 UTC

tried some of the recommendations but I couldn't get them to work 😣

Renegade V2

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-08 03:12:17 UTC

Twist Digital Ad

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-08 03:12:39 UTC

Bar Signage

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-08 03:14:38 UTC

Bar Signage

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-08 03:15:16 UTC

mockup

2023-11-08 03:18:17 UTC

corner menu 11.07

2023-11-08 03:22:04 UTC

bar animation

egporter1 — 2023-11-08 03:35:27 UTC

Bar Science Menu

memitche1 — 2023-11-08 04:04:27 UTC

Bar Science Final Logo Pdf

memitche1 — 2023-11-08 04:15:36 UTC

Hi I updated this and made Bar bolder!

[11/7] Bar Finals

jgdonova — 2023-11-08 04:17:48 UTC

Logo, Menu, Signage, Coasters

Animated Bar Science Logo

ammcconn — 2023-11-08 04:34:58 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-08 05:21:11 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-08 05:21:31 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-08 05:22:03 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-08 05:24:48 UTC

11.8 Exterior Signage

jrgunner — 2023-11-08 05:29:03 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-08 05:41:09 UTC

11.8 Menu

jrgunner — 2023-11-08 05:43:41 UTC

[11/7] Bar Logo Animation

jgdonova — 2023-11-08 06:24:04 UTC

[11/7] Film Corp Logo v1

jgdonova — 2023-11-08 07:06:59 UTC

11.8 Key Art Ads

jrgunner — 2023-11-08 08:26:10 UTC

Film Production Logo Sketches

2023-11-08 09:13:16 UTC

Crime Motion

jrgunner — 2023-11-08 13:06:37 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-11-08 13:47:17 UTC

11.8 Production Logo Vectors (V1)

jrgunner — 2023-11-08 13:49:06 UTC

This need some cleaning up but here is where my mind is going

egporter1 — 2023-11-08 13:51:08 UTC

11.8 Renegade Logos (V1)

jrgunner — 2023-11-08 13:51:40 UTC

These need cleaning up, but this where my mind is going

egporter1 — 2023-11-08 13:53:57 UTC

Corner Bar Animation

2023-11-08 14:11:01 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-11-08 14:15:38 UTC

2023-11-08 14:22:25 UTC

Bar Motion

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-08 14:22:38 UTC

Corner Bar Menu

2023-11-08 14:22:53 UTC

Corner Bar Final Logo

2023-11-08 14:26:35 UTC

mockup 2

2023-11-08 14:27:07 UTC

Sinage

2023-11-08 14:30:55 UTC

Drinkware for The Corner Bar

2023-11-08 14:35:29 UTC

2023-11-08 14:41:06 UTC

Black & White Menu

memitche1 — 2023-11-08 16:32:47 UTC

Bar Menu

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-09 02:56:41 UTC

My concept for the menu is to make it look like a vintage prescription bag.

11.8 Phrmcy Logo Animation

jrgunner — 2023-11-09 05:33:14 UTC

PHRMCY animation

tom575 — 2023-11-09 13:02:44 UTC

can you please send your animation to Cali to post on the big screen? I don't know if Ella has to get it first, but make sure you have a noticeable credit line. Thanks

animation for bar

tom575 — 2023-11-09 13:08:24 UTC

i think a more dramatic way to introduce the cross would be to have it slowly fade in to that spot for it.

but what you did is nice.

bar animation

tom575 — 2023-11-09 13:10:24 UTC

messaging is too abrupt to appreciate. you have a fun logo. it has curls at both ends.

seems you could play with that idea?

bar animation

tom575 — 2023-11-09 13:11:53 UTC

can you send yours and Jada's to cali? thanks

Renegade

2023-11-09 13:46:33 UTC

Actually, the one with the large x across it could work. It has a personality. Just try it. Work on it more of course but the idea??

Bar Motion Final

memitche1 — 2023-11-10 00:31:29 UTC

Bar Signage

memitche1 — 2023-11-10 04:15:07 UTC

memitche1 — 2023-11-10 04:52:03 UTC

memitche1 — 2023-11-10 05:12:47 UTC

Coasters

memitche1 — 2023-11-10 06:12:00 UTC

memitche1 — 2023-11-10 06:17:40 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-10 19:09:49 UTC

bar

2023-11-10 21:08:58 UTC

the "eyelashes" do not read.

please reconsider that element.

look at the example i gave you Wednesday as inspiration for signage.

menu is confusing. but you can explain it all Monday. "All eyes on our specials"???

Film logo V1

memitche1 — 2023-11-11 21:51:18 UTC

evermore

tom575 — 2023-11-12 04:19:42 UTC

don't understand the railroad tracks.

if you want to play with lightweight and heavyweight contrast within the word

evermore, that can make sense, but it needs to be more interesting. maybe the contrast needs to be extreme?

but it has to be more of an original way to present the idea.

true crime

tom575 — 2023-11-12 04:30:48 UTC

need to do the video soon

final bar

2023-11-12 21:07:09 UTC

bar & true crime materials?

tom575 — 2023-11-12 22:20:50 UTC

please complete these assignments soon.

bar menu, etc.

tom575 — 2023-11-12 22:21:52 UTC

your logo is elegant, and your menu fits the branding.

but is this a two-sided menu?

signage?

projects?

tom575 — 2023-11-12 22:24:03 UTC

please complete your late projects very soon. thanks

bar, etc.

tom575 — 2023-11-12 22:26:13 UTC

sound effects on animation sound weird?

if you were mixing a drink, what would that sound like...before you poured it?

your animation could be a lot stronger... and funnier.

and ask me about your type selection again, please.

bar animatioin , etc.

tom575 — 2023-11-12 22:27:49 UTC

i think your logo works better than its applications.

something we chat chat about.

as a stand alone, wioth all the "leaves," it gets distracting.

Renegade V3

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-13 00:18:42 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-13 00:31:50 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-13 00:32:16 UTC

Bar Science Motion

2023-11-13 00:35:54 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-13 01:22:41 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-13 01:46:42 UTC

What If VDMX Vectors

2023-11-13 02:13:57 UTC

2023-11-13 02:14:26 UTC

krcabrer — 2023-11-13 02:20:47 UTC

11.12 Apple Cider Mix

2023-11-13 03:47:03 UTC

some of these are more unexpected than others

11.12 Evermore

2023-11-13 03:48:04 UTC

logos round 2

egporter1 — 2023-11-13 04:00:38 UTC

WhatIf Experimentation Sheet

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-13 04:40:25 UTC

Not sure I like any of these but my concept for this Production Logo is to manipulate letters to portray the endless creativity behind the phrase "what if". Not sure if that makes any sense.

The Corner Bar Menu Front

ravassil — 2023-11-13 04:51:05 UTC

The Corner Bar Menu Back A

ravassil — 2023-11-13 04:51:25 UTC

The Corner Bar Logo

ravassil — 2023-11-13 04:52:01 UTC

Renegade Logo Tests

ravassil — 2023-11-13 04:52:32 UTC

11.12 Renegade

jrgunner — 2023-11-13 05:23:17 UTC

Bar Menu Front

2023-11-13 05:57:03 UTC

back of menu

2023-11-13 06:03:11 UTC

2023-11-13 06:04:25 UTC

2023-11-13 06:06:50 UTC

11.12 Renegade (2)

jrgunner — 2023-11-13 06:32:34 UTC

True Crime Key Art Animation (With Sound)

ravassil — 2023-11-13 06:49:17 UTC

True Crime Motion

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-13 07:13:11 UTC

evermore; apple cider

tom575 — 2023-11-13 13:49:14 UTC

as of now, i think the first column, third one down looks the most promising, but none so far stand out. maybe try cutting straight through the word so the tops of the r and e go a bit farther than their bottoms? we can chat.

bag: bring in the "before" please.

these look good so far. not quite sure about the main title type, but the boldness is nice

what if

tom575 — 2023-11-13 13:51:14 UTC

nice explorations, but so far not really a logotype. can you get bolder?

these look like the start for animations.

if you decide to call your company an animation studio, then i think you can use this technique.

Renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-13 13:53:14 UTC

these are nice explorations.

the large stand alone "R" can work, i think.

also, the third one down that has the reverb effect can work. chat in class.

what if

tom575 — 2023-11-13 13:55:08 UTC

these three look like explorations in search of an answer.

they could be used as part of an animation, but so far, they are not THE logotype...yet.

the middle one comes closest. can you identify the "f" better? that might be all you need. you should present a few more examples.

renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-13 13:56:43 UTC

this is a nice idea. i wish you would come in with a series of explorations.

but the half-hidden letter "e" is the best thing.

and the AD joining is also nice.

bar

tom575 — 2023-11-13 13:58:14 UTC

for presentation purposes, you should show how the client can use a variety of containers. can you please draw a few more. i think this could be a really good portfolio piece. did you change the letters a bit? they seem not as bold?

Renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-13 14:00:51 UTC

this becomes a bit of personal taste maybe, but the top row right is okay.

the bottom row right idea is good but the sketched "R" is not quite professional or surprising enough yet. that it breaks the spot "light" is the right idea.

true crime video

tom575 — 2023-11-13 14:02:22 UTC

will not open

latest renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-13 14:04:12 UTC

hard to read the word, but great to view.

why abandon your "bubblegum" idea?

it's great that you continue to explore.

SCIENCE

tom575 — 2023-11-13 14:04:59 UTC

that word set in that typeface hurts your logotype. let's chat

work

tom575 — 2023-11-13 14:06:06 UTC

please let me know where you are in completing all your projects. thanks

film company

2023-11-13 14:06:46 UTC

renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-13 14:17:44 UTC

several of your new explorations are clever and funny. pin them up to discuss.

i think a few need to be explored further, but this is good layout conceptual work

Renegade Logo Versions

2023-11-13 14:44:19 UTC

More exploring

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-13 15:15:23 UTC

True crime

2023-11-13 19:08:57 UTC

The noose: can you try without the noose; just the buzzards. Have a main buzzard up close, perhaps sitting on the M of

Millennium? And there could also be a cowboy hat cocked on the last R or

MURDER. Ok? Just try it. It’s such a nice image so let’s keep the crime and location as a hint. Thanks

renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-14 02:44:30 UTC

not sure what your logotype represents?

there is no personality...?

after the critiques today, i think you can come up with something more appropriate.

Letter A

2023-11-15 01:13:31 UTC

Renegade Logos

2023-11-15 01:14:02 UTC

renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-15 02:17:01 UTC

not sure where u are going with these.

can you explore the meaning of the word? or move on to one of the other names?

A

tom575 — 2023-11-15 02:19:04 UTC

print it out with your name in the proper position, etc.

renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-15 02:28:59 UTC

pin them all up.

so far, you have the start of a solution.

krcabrer — 2023-11-15 02:54:24 UTC

2023-11-15 03:42:25 UTC

I am going to add more detail to the packaging, i.e. fill it in, edit it better, etc., but wanted to get something rolling. The concept is rooted in the community element - as you can see the redesigned logo has letter forms that are dynamic and conjoined at points. Also, I used topographical map elements and the universal holding hands circle to run home this "community" idea at a larger scale.

2023-11-15 03:43:39 UTC

2023-11-15 04:22:47 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-11-15 04:24:06 UTC

11.14 Renegade

jrgunner — 2023-11-15 04:47:44 UTC

Packaging Layouts

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-15 08:27:24 UTC

1-3

Packaging Mockup

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-15 08:39:34 UTC

11.14 Nongshim

jrgunner — 2023-11-15 09:13:30 UTC

11.14 Nongshim (2)

jrgunner — 2023-11-15 09:15:10 UTC

I believe I still need to develop my ideas more, but this is where my head is at.

letter T

2023-11-15 12:51:36 UTC

evermore

tom575 — 2023-11-15 12:57:53 UTC

our latest still look specific.

please decide what kind of film company yours is, if you want to stay on this track.

the bottom one seems to work best.

is it a specialty company specializing in fairy tales for children? animation for young adults? or just ANIMATION.

Animation Films

corner bar

tom575 — 2023-11-15 13:00:55 UTC

your animation is not very exciting.

needs at least a tagline at end, but it does not evolve well anyway.

logotype is okay but again, not one of your best efforts. why does it look the way it looks? could be any bar anywhere. nice idea for coasters. menu looks nice...colors at least

nongshin

tom575 — 2023-11-15 13:03:43 UTC

nice ideas. bring in the original packaging.

renegade: LATEST looking more ordinary?

Renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-15 14:04:12 UTC

the top left one works well.

most of these can easily work in an animation. and COLORS.

i think you can also stack the word as you have done.

pin them up, and remind me to talk to you about how you could animate...many possibilities. if you are timid about animation, you can do it simply. talk

letter

tom575 — 2023-11-15 14:05:18 UTC

funny stuff. pin it up

Renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-15 14:06:18 UTC

please pin up your solution(s)

it feels strong.

Letter

2023-11-15 15:04:40 UTC

R

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-15 15:33:14 UTC

What If Revised

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-15 15:34:41 UTC

Film Logo V2

memitche1 — 2023-11-15 16:06:26 UTC

memitche1 — 2023-11-15 16:16:15 UTC

Film company_round 2

2023-11-15 16:25:09 UTC

Film company_round 2.2

2023-11-15 16:25:37 UTC

Film company_round 2.3

2023-11-15 16:26:01 UTC

Letter P

2023-11-15 16:26:29 UTC

Film company_round 3

2023-11-15 16:27:04 UTC

2023-11-15 17:51:29 UTC

naturemade logos

egporter1 — 2023-11-16 00:39:34 UTC

redesign for the naturemade vitamin packaging. trying to brand the packaging in a minimalistic, more wellness-based way

true Crime

tom575 — 2023-11-16 14:33:40 UTC

Please do not use a severed wrist or arm.

no blood either.

make your clever tag take center stage more.

and consider using a shadow somehow to suggest a threat.

a suggestion works better usually, instead of using obvious imagery.

naturemade

tom575 — 2023-11-16 14:36:22 UTC

as of now, you have not advanced their brand much from what it is.

i know that using green elevates gthe obvious messaging, but it still looks like similar thinking.

think of a product that has a very bad design image.

bar branding

tom575 — 2023-11-16 14:38:33 UTC

think of how u can use your clever drawings of containers in your menu and signage designs. THAT is what sets your branding apart. of course you should use the same kind of type treatment as well.

please get to the animation the way we discussed yesterday

crime video

tom575 — 2023-11-16 14:41:39 UTC

maybe we need to discuss what the video is for again?

try not to just end by showing the poster.

you can start with a close up of the killer's face, pull back to reveal more of his face.

fade in the description.

cut to title car. cut to channel logo with tagline.

by starting very close to his face, you create a real mystery.

bar animation

tom575 — 2023-11-16 14:42:53 UTC

not working as well as it could.

sound effects? tagline would help it a lot.

what if

tom575 — 2023-11-16 14:48:03 UTC

very nice looking.

colors also.

can you prepare an 8 1/2 x 11 sheet to be pinned up by Monday?

My only slight concern is that the "T" could be moved a very little to the left to read quicker, but it looks good. If you are satisfied, please do a short animation soon.

think about using several color combinations for each letter after introducing it in black & white first.

A descriptive line would really help you also.

what kind of company is this?

Examples:

Animation for Kids

Motion for Children

??????? think about this please.

jazz

tom575 — 2023-11-16 14:49:07 UTC

please re-visit how to present that logo; and the animation. It is a very good idea

almyers1 — 2023-11-16 20:35:23 UTC

bar eyes

2023-11-16 21:54:20 UTC

a colleague next to me says she did not know they were eyes until the very end but found it confusing...and too long.

your "eyes" are capsule shaped, so it is a bit confusing.

I mentioned before that the eyelashes do not read as eyelashes...to a few people who have seen this logotype.

at this late date...and if you are satisfied, think about music?

you need to take notes.

jamcadam — 2023-11-17 21:17:01 UTC

bar container

tom575 — 2023-11-17 23:28:35 UTC

looks a bit antiseptic? the word "fluid"?

does not seem like much fun.

at this late stage, if you are satisfied, please apply your logotype to all elements requested in assignment, including animation.

jamcadam — 2023-11-18 22:15:27 UTC

bar branding

tom575 — 2023-11-18 22:32:13 UTC

your color —or lack thereof —feels a bit cold.

your interior signage is not really signage.

exterior sign could be anywhere.

this is a new orleans bar, so think about that when placing exterior signage.

once you decide to include graphic elements like and X or a plus sign, you can think boldly about how to use those graphic elements, so they become as much of the brand as the clever name.

could there be 3 or 4 different coasters — one with an X on one side; one with a plus sign; and the bar name on the reverse side?

your video/animation i don't quite understand from the storyboard.

again, the glass idea looks clinical and not appetizing. that graphic image? looks like a syringe? i had a couple colleagues view your branding, and they pretty much agreed it need to "warm up" a bit.

bar small sign

tom575 — 2023-11-18 22:36:26 UTC

that is one instance where you used two colors to warm it up. and you are attempting to use humor by using the word "emergency."

but think about what an inside sign could be.

exterior as well.

X marks the spot, etc etc etc.

+ could be used in the menu for adding something to drinks or food...dressing or...?

2023-11-19 04:39:54 UTC

2023-11-19 04:40:43 UTC

2023-11-19 04:41:02 UTC

the noose

tom575 — 2023-11-19 11:15:09 UTC

i had asked you not to include a noose— in my comments from last week. in Canvas.

based on what Cali and Daniela said about suicides, etc. OK?

I think the buzzards and the sign are god enough to tell the story.

ignore my "noose' comments. they were meant for Katrina. sorry

tom575 — 2023-11-19 11:22:25 UTC

NOOSE?

tom575 — 2023-11-19 11:23:34 UTC

I had asked that you not include a noose last week...in Canvas.

remember we discussed suicides, etc.?

the birds and sign are enough.

nose again. sorry.

tom575 — 2023-11-19 11:25:42 UTC

sorry, i saw that you had deleted the noose after i commented.

your digital ad is fine, but i wish the bird was instantly recognizable as a buzzard.

and a video?

drink menu ...syringe?

tom575 — 2023-11-19 11:27:14 UTC

do you mean for your drink icon at top to resemble a syringe?

bar

tom575 — 2023-11-19 11:30:19 UTC

maybe if you treat your tagline the same as your bar name, it will work better?

animation could certainly see the hands of clock turning endlessly?

jazz refined and recolored

2023-11-19 22:29:44 UTC

potential package 11.19

2023-11-19 22:32:54 UTC

jazz revisited

2023-11-19 22:36:40 UTC

the new colors are a bit subdued. did you mean that? i'm curious...

think of why, since you would have to explain to client...and in your portfolio.

YOU post card

2023-11-19 22:37:20 UTC

i can't remember if we discussed but this one works best. can you print out?

NEW coffee

2023-11-19 22:40:11 UTC

much better. but did you try a few ways for the name to read? the secondary type almost takes away from the name...

please explore a little. but this is the way to proceed. being bold is good.

2023-11-19 23:02:16 UTC

Renegade 11.19

2023-11-19 23:41:52 UTC

Food Package V1

memitche1 — 2023-11-20 00:11:42 UTC

memitche1 — 2023-11-20 00:16:29 UTC

renegade 11.20

egporter1 — 2023-11-20 00:59:27 UTC

PACKAGING MOCKUP

mlsanche — 2023-11-20 01:30:55 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-20 01:38:54 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-20 01:39:45 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-20 01:41:23 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-20 01:41:56 UTC

What If Logos

ammcconn — 2023-11-20 03:57:00 UTC

being completely honest ive really been struggling with how to adapt my sketches into a decent digital format. heres what ive been working on, trying different fonts to compare how the f looks versus the ? and also trying to make it using modular shapes. really not sure where to go :(

Package WIPs

ammcconn — 2023-11-20 04:09:54 UTC

im also kind of stumped with this project as well, here are a few of the concepts ive been leaning towards but ive been struggling to adapt the brand in ways that i like. I've gotten some good feedback towards the second one. My idea is to rebrand them as healthy chips because reading the nutrition info theyre so terrible for you, and i thought it would be funny to lie

ta daaaa

mlsanche — 2023-11-20 04:29:21 UTC

Redesign_corn bits

2023-11-20 06:41:41 UTC

mockup_corn bits

2023-11-20 06:42:09 UTC

mockup_corn bits_2

2023-11-20 06:42:31 UTC

Renegade Logo Iterations

2023-11-20 07:45:38 UTC

Packaging V2

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-20 08:43:25 UTC

bar / orange slice?

tom575 — 2023-11-20 12:42:39 UTC

is it now a JUICE BAR? it's okay if it is.

top right one could work.

can you think of a tagline...is it a juice bar?

pin up and prepare to discuss

watt

tom575 — 2023-11-20 12:47:03 UTC

it is clever that you spelled the name WATT.

the simple, 'lighthearted" way you have designed the top one could work, i guess.

it seems a bit like for children or young adults?

maybe the "w" could be stronger?

what? if

tom575 — 2023-11-20 12:50:42 UTC

so far, i agree, it looks like you don't have a clear direction. looks like you're setting type and not deciding what kind of company this is. i still think if you used a pencil and wrote it out a few times, erased parts of it, etc etc.

that kind of exercise would work with evermore...but maybe with what if as well.

package

tom575 — 2023-11-20 12:51:34 UTC

so far i cannot tell what you want to do.

a good exercise sometimes is to enlarge the name or one word and just see how it looks

package

tom575 — 2023-11-20 12:52:42 UTC

pin up your work. looks like you are heading in. the right direction

renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-20 12:56:16 UTC

middle top one. but you can set LIGHTING to same width as RENEGADE. LIGHTING is the whole point, so if it is slightly bigger, that's okay.

the far left ruled line is still too light in weight, but do you even need that thin line?other that those observations, i think this is a good logotype.

please revise and send back.

evermore

tom575 — 2023-11-20 12:58:06 UTC

the third one from top looks the most promising. make sure it can reduce, since your thins are very thin.

the two "loops" are fun.

write a tagline or description.

package?

tom575 — 2023-11-20 12:59:00 UTC

what is the "before" package? or is this the original?

before package

mlsanche — 2023-11-20 13:33:49 UTC

PACKAGING MOCKUP 2

mlsanche — 2023-11-20 14:00:27 UTC

2023-11-20 14:49:19 UTC

Package

2023-11-20 15:02:00 UTC

Show before and after

2023-11-20 15:07:18 UTC

2023-11-20 15:07:29 UTC

11.20 Evermore

2023-11-20 15:40:44 UTC

film logotype

egporter1 — 2023-11-20 17:17:49 UTC

RENEGADE Logo Final

ravassil — 2023-11-20 18:06:17 UTC

Birth Control Mockup

2023-11-20 18:10:15 UTC

renegade

2023-11-20 20:21:15 UTC

YES. can you think about changing your true crime type.

When I see you next, we can discuss exact placement of that descriptive line, but this works. Looks professional, etc.Renegade is the better sample of work for your portfolio. It really should be in your portfolio.

True Crime is not up there yet.

renegade

2023-11-20 20:22:23 UTC

latest one is good. please have it ready to pin up Monday...and in your portfolio.

I hope you have fun doing the animation.

all work, etc.

2023-11-20 20:48:45 UTC

Please confirm that you will have all past due work by November 27.

Thanks. Tom

jamcadam — 2023-11-21 01:38:14 UTC

Please evaluate the treatment for the lines, the tagline, and "watt if" separate if you can

Fieras Mockup 1

ammcconn — 2023-11-21 22:06:32 UTC

working more with the pattern concept, i think I'm starting to get somewhere. I know it's a little lacking right now, but I'm feeling more confident that I'm going in the right direction.

jamcadam — 2023-11-21 22:51:54 UTC

redefined_True Crime_Key Art

2023-11-22 04:20:13 UTC

redefined_Bar Science_Menu

2023-11-22 04:23:40 UTC

I'm not sure why the light green looks so brights on the screen :(

2023-11-22 18:44:18 UTC

jamcadam — 2023-11-22 18:47:12 UTC

[11/20] Film Corp Logo v2

jgdonova — 2023-11-22 18:47:49 UTC

More options for the crossed out version, as requested. Also tried to make the revolver chamber logo look more like what its supposed to be, not a gear.

jazz logo storyboard

2023-11-22 20:11:15 UTC

Final_Film Company logo

2023-11-23 04:23:02 UTC

The Corner Bar Animation

ravassil — 2023-11-24 02:29:06 UTC

Corner Bar Mockup Signage

ravassil — 2023-11-24 03:25:37 UTC

Renegade Story Board

ravassil — 2023-11-24 06:41:09 UTC

renegade motion storyboard

tom575 — 2023-11-24 14:52:18 UTC

all you need is the top three and bottom three frames. just print those to use in the show, please.

bar animation

tom575 — 2023-11-24 15:00:39 UTC

nice music and clockhand turning.

but...as i have said in class a few times, if the punchline is you are open all the time, then think about fading in that tagline instead of just ending up on your logo. there needs to be a bit more drama at the end. ok?

crime final video

tom575 — 2023-11-24 15:02:47 UTC

it will not play for me. too large a file?

i hope you considered changing the typeface? you need to do that if true crime as well as mRenegade are to hang in the show. and let's get a better descriptive sentence for your cyborg

evermore

tom575 — 2023-11-24 15:10:13 UTC

you seem to be just setting type again, but the top one has promise, i guess.

it is elegant, and the small "o" is familiar to many viewers already. it could be a hotel.

or a product. it reduces okay as well...but barely. the fourth versions at bottom: if your idea is to make the "E" somehow start to disappear, that can work but you need to work it out better. maybe use dots for the horizontal lines of the "E"? you need to start designing and not typesetting

jazz and MOMI storyboards

tom575 — 2023-11-24 15:18:13 UTC

jazz: is there music/sound?

seems that the opening panel would show less that what you indicate.

start with just a couple lines of your logo, as you did with MOMI board.

and you need to say what happens at end...

screen turns to black with logo in color, etc.

i think 6 panels is all you need.

MOMI: this one can just be 6 panels as well.

But can you describe briefly how it appears on screen? will there be music or sound? voice over? and it ends with a block of red, etc. i think for this logo, you can change the colors and background to make it more exciting. both logos have a nice energy. need to convey that energy and creativity in each animation.

BHARMACY exterior signage

tom575 — 2023-11-24 15:24:47 UTC

nice work on the outdoor sign.

please consider what we discussed last class for your other projects.

For Bharmacy, once you have those graphic elements like the + and X then you should consider how they can play a part in branding.

MIXXXED DRINX. etc.

watt if

tom575 — 2023-11-24 15:29:26 UTC

line weights are good.

i still think the "w" could be slightly larger so the bottom of it would be lower to frame the tagline better, but i mean larger by maybe 5%.

The tagline is fun to read. I think it reduces well. think of why it looks this way in your animation. this treatment feels like it is for kids? color would be fun to use.

watt can be different color than if and tagline. the dot is your last punchline, so consider how you can save that light glow off the dot effect for the end of animation

BAR animation

tom575 — 2023-11-24 15:30:51 UTC

your exterior signage is much better than your animation. consider how you used texture in the sign and how that can help you in the animation.

bag etc

tom575 — 2023-11-24 15:37:01 UTC

show the before bag, please.

you have nice observations in class. many critiques at this point, so i'm surprised you cannot find some good ideas for both packaging and What If.

you ended your statement to me in Padlet with :(. what is the opposite of that sad face?

WHAT IF :)

X Renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-24 15:56:42 UTC

If the giant X was red and then RENEGADE in your upper right side version sat on TOP of the X, you would be saying your company

cannot be stopped. with the X on top of Renegade, you are saying your company is run of the mill and not creative.

so as animation, it would be simple to undertstand if the red X was on the screen and then RENEGADE "stamped" on top of it. Then your tagline or descriptive line identifying the company: is it just film production? etc.

as a black & white version, you can make the giant X 50% black.

Hope that is clear?

The only other version that could possibly work is the one that has the line "weaving" through the word, but it seems that the line should weave upward not downward.

If you can make the lkine weave up, that might work.

11.24 Evermore

2023-11-24 17:28:13 UTC

evermore

tom575 — 2023-11-24 18:52:24 UTC

it is more fun now, but it still lacks that certain character to make it memorable.

MORE works better than EVER.

in your ever: the e and v work pretty well, but your e and r not quite yet.

if you stack the word, think about moving the r in ever closer to the r in more — there is that opening in the upper part of the r in more where the r in ever can move closer to...if i'm being clear?

and this does not look like an FX studio.

seems like a normal film studio or maybe for animation? not special effects.

can you try this in color? that would help i think. animation certainly would help as well. maybe try to be more free-handed about more, so this has more of a personality. commit to one of the words more fully.

11.24 Apple Cider

2023-11-24 22:17:16 UTC

1) a version with e's that match more with the font

2) a no-nonsense sans serif

3) original packaging

Bharmacy Animation

jamcadam — 2023-11-24 22:43:27 UTC

To be frank, I don't know why you were talking about my bar animation before I even uploaded it. (I assume you meant the storyboard?) Regardless, Please tell me if I should change anything.

apple cider

tom575 — 2023-11-25 00:10:26 UTC

firstly, it looks good at first viewing.

good color choices as well as the "framing" devices, top and bottom.

the details need managing so this can be in your portfolio.

your iconic background elements look like they belong on a different package design. They don't engage with the main type or design. they just are there floating.

Your side design is very interesting...i think... since i cant really see the side.

I would like to see more of that design. It could seem that two different designers were involved? the sans serif is a bit cold, so it doesn't work as well as it should. it may be your choice of sans serif? therefore, your first idea seems to work best now. there are many type choices available, of course. the elegance of your framing does not seem to work as well with the "script" type, but the sans serif does not seem to fit either. we should chat about it. remind me please.

your work this semester is excellent.

the last couple projects lag behind your earlier efforts.

bar animation

tom575 — 2023-11-25 00:18:30 UTC

you are having fun with a narrative that has nothing to do with how clever you have been by changing Pharmacy to BhARmacy.

I think i mentioned a few times to always consider where the concept is in any design.

even in a logotype.

your idea lies in the "B" and in BAR, of course.

You can leave the animation alone, but it seems that a simple animation would start with PHARMACY, change the P to B, emphasize the word BAR, etc. get to the tagline, and if you want, include those markings you placed there...the X and + marks. I never quite understood why you added those marks, but here we are.

You found a nice texture to place your logotype for the exterior sign. did you read my comments about that?

that texture could be in your animation to give it some character, etc.

jamcadam — 2023-11-25 02:38:11 UTC

price tag 11.24

2023-11-25 04:09:22 UTC

recolored 11.24

2023-11-25 04:30:42 UTC

fieras original bag

ammcconn — 2023-11-25 05:37:58 UTC

What If Sketches (Again)

ammcconn — 2023-11-25 05:40:21 UTC

ive been sketching a lot in my notebook but i just got an opportunity to use my drawing tablet, so ive been trying to flesh things out a little more. i think a capital F will work better for my concept. i plan to work with it more between my shifts and hopefully have something more finalized for monday. probably gonna do type for most of the title and then the question mark F will be hand drawn to add personality?

MOMI storyboard edited !

2023-11-25 06:44:49 UTC

storyboard jazz edited

2023-11-25 06:46:03 UTC

new corner

2023-11-25 06:57:28 UTC

New Radius video

tom575 — 2023-11-25 13:34:38 UTC

nice work. much better. that is now a portfolio piece.

watt if in color

tom575 — 2023-11-25 13:35:41 UTC

much better. has more life.

ready for animation.

whatiF

tom575 — 2023-11-25 13:38:47 UTC

the F as a question mark makes sense.

maybe the i as well can be drawn? hard to tell until you try variations.

remember you have to have an animation also by monday.

bag

tom575 — 2023-11-25 13:42:46 UTC

you are in the right direction.

that ampersand however is very awkward. try a serif ampersand so it has some flare. after all, the addition of lime is a major part of the appeal.

sometimes you will find that an ampersand

looks like a capital E.

once you get a nice ampersand with character, maybe it is in a color, and that color can be the underline.

bar logo variations

tom575 — 2023-11-25 13:47:29 UTC

now you see, there are great variations?

minor suggestion: try placing the drink glass between the wine glass and the bottle.

ANIMATION: you can start with CORNER, then add the B and the A, then quick fades of each container, then replace each one at a time, then the tagline. it can be that simple.

if you can have three variations, it would work better. hope this helps. it looks like a fun idea.

MOMI and JAZZ storyboards

tom575 — 2023-11-25 13:58:55 UTC

both are more ambitious.

MOMI works better, I think. Easier to understand.

It is more dynamic than before.

Your last sentence, however, seems to repeat the same description, so settle on one way. "lands finally on red"?

"ends on red"?

JAZZ: why not start this one with those circles/balls bobbing around, different sizes, then settle on the ones that help form your logo. they can move around and then settle in place while the lines start to settle as well. the energy is similar to that opening title sequence i showed you from The Morning Show? and i think for this logo, you can show an orange background, at end, wait a beat, background turns black and the jazz logo remains colorful. your colors show off well on a black background. just think about it.

RENEGADE animation

tom575 — 2023-11-25 14:02:30 UTC

revisiting this... seems you could start with the whole screen filled with your metallic background, camera zooms out to reveal the smaller background for the letters, etc etc.

that way, the viewer "enters" into a world, instead os that usual white background throughout. think about it. get dramatic.

jazz logo / colors

tom575 — 2023-11-25 14:12:15 UTC

in class, if there is time, let's talk about this again... briefly.

you have a good logotype.

yes, your new version works better than before.

Jazz is not one thing. it is presented in a variety of ways at that location: dixieland, progressive, etc.

and your circles are better. i think you can probably do an animation, or at least a new storyboard now? if you do a new storyboard, try to keep it to 6 frames. with descriptions, of course.

the odd circle inside your letter A is there for a reasons, right? it can serve as an opening into this new world where there are many circles of different sizes that have fun and then settle into place with the word JAZZ, then in 2 seconds can change colors 3 times before settling in on your favorite color combination.

jamcadam — 2023-11-25 19:10:18 UTC

I skipped the storyboard step to speed up the process. If I need to make revisions to this I will do it after Monday

watt if animation

tom575 — 2023-11-25 19:45:59 UTC

in an animation, you can, of course tell a story; lead the viewer's eye, etc.

Lighting design or supplies is the occupation, so consider the word "light" being the yellow color, then the other words of the tagline can follow as the colors you have indicated. i think this would add punch and be funny.

True Crime Animation 11/25

2023-11-25 22:18:30 UTC

True Crime Poster Final Updated 11/25

2023-11-25 22:30:39 UTC

Bar Logo Animation Updated 11/25

2023-11-25 22:45:56 UTC

Renegade Logo Final

2023-11-25 23:45:48 UTC

RENEGADE logo final?

tom575 — 2023-11-26 00:13:30 UTC

now that you have simply bled the name off the top, there seems to be no reason to tilt it.

the discussion in class was that you can make some letters larger than others, some can bleed off differently than others.

this new version is very uniform. not as exciting as it should be?

11.25 Apple Cider

2023-11-26 00:14:38 UTC

front + side view: new & friendlier title sans serif; tried to integrate the patterns into the type (not sure if the "leaves" as the dots on the I's work?)

the side view is just a fall pattern with the directions to make the instant cider

RENEGADE LOGO again

tom575 — 2023-11-26 00:15:50 UTC

remember how you explored your RADIUS logo? you actually turned the A upside down in one iteration...why are you not exploring better ways to use letters with RENEGADE?

apple cider latest

tom575 — 2023-11-26 00:45:55 UTC

it is better.

nice to see that side view.

That side is very compelling.

the leaves atop the "i" of SPICED work.

i think maybe the leaf over the "i" of CIDER is fine.

OK, it is a good looking design.

Does it need help to be more of a surprise one?

Maybe...maybe...the word SPICED needs a red outline so that it indicates more a spicy flavor? Maybe just the leaves above the I of SPICED are red but keep SPICED as is.

Trying to make this pop more. Just think about it. If you are happy as is, leave it.

[11/25] Renegade Logo v3

jgdonova — 2023-11-26 02:01:49 UTC

jamcadam — 2023-11-26 02:20:17 UTC

RENEGADE X new

tom575 — 2023-11-26 02:56:55 UTC

the middle two color version works best.

it has a grander look.

you now have a successful logotype that has character.

doing an animation of this can be simple.

you can make the large red X first, one bar at a time, with sound effects (or not) and then have RENEGADE come from beyond our heads to land atop the X, then fade in

VISUAL EFFECTS...if you can, maybe add a bit of smoke? because it is "hot". ..etc.

package

tom575 — 2023-11-26 02:59:27 UTC

where is the "before" package?

this new design looks nice.

secondary type setting is very tight for a condensed face.

needs letter spacing to read better and look more contemporary

11.25 Evermore

2023-11-26 03:05:47 UTC

1st page black & white, 2nd page color

1) tried integrating the 'e' and 'r' of "ever" better

2) tried a more relaxed "more"

3) this bottom row is just a sudden idea I had...

[11/25] Renegade Logo Final

jgdonova — 2023-11-26 04:22:01 UTC

[11/25] Renegade Animation

jgdonova — 2023-11-26 06:14:18 UTC

Took your advice for the animation and tried to execute best I could. If FX are too much I can tone them down.

Updated Mockup

ammcconn — 2023-11-26 07:13:09 UTC

u were right the serif ampersand totally slays. there was empty space between spicy rolled blah blah and the flavor, and i wanted to fill it with nutritional info to keep up the lie that the chips are healthy. there is now an empty space between 2g protein and the chili peppers that idk what to do with. im thinking maybe a "non gmo" or "naturally made" type of symbol?

renegade animation

tom575 — 2023-11-26 13:32:55 UTC

it works. there are many ways to introduce the X, so no worries. nice work. you should consider sound effects for your portfolio.

we can always chat about it.

latest package

tom575 — 2023-11-26 13:46:21 UTC

you have a few "floating" lines of type.

can you tighten up the "spicy rolls..." and the weight and zero trans fat lines? also if you made the SPICY ROLLS...line all caps, it would just read stronger.

also, CHILI & LIME also float a bit too much. that should work as more of a unit. close up that space?

the overall image / design reads well, it just needs tightening up. you want fewer units of interests. right now you have four or five units for the viewer's eye to decide on.

jamcadam — 2023-11-26 17:49:35 UTC

jamcadam — 2023-11-26 17:51:18 UTC

jamcadam — 2023-11-26 18:05:11 UTC

bar menu

2023-11-26 19:15:44 UTC

why not, when you have the word "and" don't you use the plus sign?

i would try to have items that need additions, so you could use the + sign more often, since that is part of your branding.

bar bottle caps?

2023-11-26 19:18:03 UTC

are those bottle caps or meant to be coasters?

if they are bottle caps, you can show them as such, don't you think?

if they are coasters, not sure how they would be die cut? but they are interesting as designs.

chicken tenders?

2023-11-26 19:19:37 UTC

not very appetizing as you have portaryed them...maybe never could be.

asterisk? if so, where is the reference below to explain what you mean?

jamcadam — 2023-11-26 20:50:56 UTC

bar menu front, when I changed my illustration colors they become pixelated :(

2023-11-26 22:02:04 UTC

bar menu back

2023-11-26 22:02:39 UTC

new colors

2023-11-26 22:03:31 UTC

unsure on flipping the "s" in productions. think we concluded it would distract from the cleverness of the "e"..?

New Renegade Logo?

2023-11-26 22:13:53 UTC

Film Logo V3

memitche1 — 2023-11-26 22:53:25 UTC

jamcadam — 2023-11-26 22:59:30 UTC

memitche1 — 2023-11-26 23:09:34 UTC

jamcadam — 2023-11-26 23:13:51 UTC

[11/26] Ticonderoga Packaging v1

jgdonova — 2023-11-26 23:42:58 UTC

true crime

tom575 — 2023-11-27 00:24:08 UTC

now that you have made your image very soft focused, it seems to work best in your poster mock-up, so a viewer can see it from a few yards away and get the image right in their head. the digital ad does not work well since the image is not easily understood. it does not "read."

the word "KILLER" almost gets lost because the color blends in with background near the "LER."

Good for you for continuing to explore.

pencil package need to show BEFORE & AFTER please

tom575 — 2023-11-27 00:25:02 UTC

renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-27 00:37:04 UTC

do not face plant the "s" in productions.

look at your last color combinations, and please just try that last "e" as a warmer color like the colors for each of the other two.

because your last "e" almost disappears.

you have a logotype that looks like it's for a candy store, which can work for you.

ideally, it would be nice if you could try to

re-draw some of these letters so they become your own instead of typesetting.

but i understand you don't want to and there is little time now. please do the animation.

bar tagline?

tom575 — 2023-11-27 00:44:37 UTC

can you have more fun with your new tagline??

your branding indicates a bar that has been there for a long time, right?

it is a bar i can depend on for whatever i may want to drink.

it will never disappoint. very dependable

updated chip mockup again

ammcconn — 2023-11-27 01:36:55 UTC

tom tysm for the suggestions they always hit. it's looking a lot tighter i think, and i think im okay with that empty space between 2g and the chilis. it reads the way i want it to, leads the eye from the top to the bottom. do you think i should make gluten free more bold?

EDIT: i made gluten free the same size type as spicy rolled and it works well

memitche1 — 2023-11-27 01:41:41 UTC

memitche1 — 2023-11-27 02:03:51 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-11-27 03:28:31 UTC

packaging side by side with mockup.. hard to get full view on cylinder mockup

egporter1 — 2023-11-27 03:29:33 UTC

if?

ammcconn — 2023-11-27 03:54:43 UTC

i definitely want my if to have texture due to the scrappy sort of indie production company im going for. im playing with brushes right now but here's an example of something i might go for. the what wil be a typeface, probably a serif with close kerning. thoughts?

egporter1 — 2023-11-27 04:06:00 UTC

egporter1 — 2023-11-27 04:06:53 UTC

what if hand written

ammcconn — 2023-11-27 04:46:14 UTC

i tried it with the serif type what and hated it, it doesnt look like a unit. tried writing out the what instead and i am much more partial to it, it has much better flow. i will continue to work on it, but what do you think?

Hot Tamales Re-Design

ravassil — 2023-11-27 04:53:33 UTC

Corn Bits_Redesign_pattern ver

2023-11-27 04:57:29 UTC

flat ver

2023-11-27 04:58:34 UTC

Hot Tamales Mock Up

ravassil — 2023-11-27 04:58:45 UTC

Old vs New

2023-11-27 05:07:52 UTC

Revised_mockup

2023-11-27 05:13:36 UTC

community coffee

2023-11-27 05:42:30 UTC

2023-11-27 05:45:47 UTC

Ticonderoga Packaging (BEFORE)

jgdonova — 2023-11-27 05:56:55 UTC

what if logos with subheads

ammcconn — 2023-11-27 06:30:08 UTC

im pretty set on having the second o be the dot for the question mark, but im willing to change my mind if it isnt doing it for u. pretty much stuck between line weights for the subjeads; i prefer the thin but have gotten feedback to make it thicker.

11.27 Renegade Logo

jrgunner — 2023-11-27 06:57:57 UTC

Tea Box Packaging V1 (1/3)

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-27 07:22:01 UTC

(2/3)

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-27 07:22:45 UTC

(3/3)

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-27 07:23:16 UTC

Original Tea Packaging

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-27 07:28:28 UTC

True Crime Final Video (Edited Title)

ravassil — 2023-11-27 07:28:56 UTC

Nongshim Mockup

jrgunner — 2023-11-27 07:48:58 UTC

2023-11-27 07:50:54 UTC

2023-11-27 07:51:11 UTC

Nongshim Package

jrgunner — 2023-11-27 07:51:52 UTC

2023-11-27 07:52:03 UTC

2023-11-27 07:52:39 UTC

Renegade Storyboard

jrgunner — 2023-11-27 08:10:52 UTC

[11/26] True Crime Animation

jgdonova — 2023-11-27 08:32:17 UTC

What If Motion StoryBoard V1

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-27 09:30:16 UTC

2023-11-27 09:32:12 UTC

2023-11-27 09:32:52 UTC

Renegade Storyboard

2023-11-27 13:09:26 UTC

Renegade animation

tom575 — 2023-11-27 13:37:12 UTC

why the whole thing in black on white background?

i would think with that concept, the client would be thrilled to see color of any kind?

you set up the viewer for one thing — then you surprise the viewer with a completely different design, and that makes sense.

you can keep the animation movement idea, i guess, but it needs to have more fun.

package

tom575 — 2023-11-27 13:38:31 UTC

not sure it "reads". as we discussed in class, but it looks great. nice that you placed it in context with other similar products on the shelf.

what if animation

tom575 — 2023-11-27 13:41:31 UTC

you have a fun, lively logotype. many poaaibilities.

remember that you are doing this animation to possibly introduce this company or play at the start of a reel or a production.

so, why end on black & white?

animation introduction is a good time to have fun. you can try a few color combinations then land on your favorite color palette then add the tagline or description.

package

tom575 — 2023-11-27 13:43:00 UTC

first i've seen of this, so you can explain it in class? it has a nice feeling. looks expensive and still has a fun feel. not sure about your secondary type selection and positioning.

overall, nicely done.

evermore

tom575 — 2023-11-27 13:51:03 UTC

i really like the ever with the extended "v" on bottom left of first page. it wants to "embrace" the more.

the "o" however, could be read as an "e" maybe. maybe...

can you combine that "ever" from that bottom left with the more normal "more"?

hope that makes sense?

as for color, not sure which would work best but have fun with that, especially in your animation, since it is an animation studio. nice development

Renegade Storyboard

2023-11-27 13:52:09 UTC

renegade animation

tom575 — 2023-11-27 13:57:13 UTC

your storyboard makes sense.

now think about how you would really introduce this fun, whimsical idea to not only your client but to that client's audience.

usually, you do not want to have a white screen because it is very bright and hard to look at. so, consider if you used a color background for half the animation — perhaps the first 4 frames— then, if you want, change to white background to finalize your concept. people respond to color. explore more, please.

boost

tom575 — 2023-11-27 14:01:19 UTC

the best part of your design is hidden to the viewer, right?

you did such a nice jo with BOOST and the graphic elements, but they live on each side of the cylander.

renegade

tom575 — 2023-11-27 14:03:28 UTC

animation?

tamales

tom575 — 2023-11-27 14:16:33 UTC

fun design, but make sure the title is very readable.

that "candy" looks like a capsule.

where is the original package? maybe i missed it...you can explain in class.

true crime video

tom575 — 2023-11-27 14:17:35 UTC

nice but i wish your ending had a touch of color...in the TWIST?

revised true crime key art

egporter1 — 2023-11-27 15:22:59 UTC

removed camera/ tweaked background bit. let me know if i should change the type / if this works better

egporter1 — 2023-11-27 15:24:30 UTC

2023-11-27 15:45:37 UTC

renegade animation

egporter1 — 2023-11-27 16:26:26 UTC

Final Evermore Logo Revised

memitche1 — 2023-11-27 17:21:18 UTC

Evermore Animation

memitche1 — 2023-11-27 17:51:19 UTC

Phrmcy Motion Revision

jrgunner — 2023-11-27 18:52:52 UTC

phrmcy animation new

tom575 — 2023-11-27 19:46:30 UTC

it works fine. this is one of those things that can be picked at for days.

you don't have to change anything at this point. yes, i wish the background was not mostly white, but it's fine. fun movement and only 7 seconds.

nice work.

evermore animation new

tom575 — 2023-11-27 19:49:42 UTC

the movement works well, as does the new revised logotype. nice.

and tagline is better.

one thing: remember what i said about adding color in animation?

if you keep it as in in black & white, you can, but you could ad the V in color and then make all the rest of the letters light up in color also. just think about it.

what if?

tom575 — 2023-11-27 19:52:47 UTC

if yountried using a bevelled pencil or jjst drew with a pencil freely so there would be thicks and thins...for the what in particular... it might free you up.

the F looks clumsy so far but maybe the curved version that looks most like a ? might work?

murders evidence bag

tom575 — 2023-11-27 20:02:55 UTC

your large title type looks good as is.

this is better with the knife of course.

the scratched in 2000 works well.

you could try to add a little of the red color below— TWIST might be red? be sure it reads easily.

IMPORTANT: your description sentence: this is THE most important information on the poster.

please fix your typesetting so there is no widow.

Try enlarging the text maybe one or two point sizes so it takes up a bit more room...and no widows, please.

renegade animation

tom575 — 2023-11-27 20:20:25 UTC

you were not in today, and i made a point of saying to the class that if you can, you should try color in your animations, since you have a great opportunity to explore in motion. imagine a black screen with your logo fading in in white, then turning into a golden color with a blue (or pink?) eyeball. Just the flash of color changes everything.

then you can reverse it to be a white background and black art.

your animation is nice to look at. not sure you know when or what to do with your "eyeball"?

i like the flow of light at the end of your tagline.

Jazz Storyboard

2023-11-27 22:35:38 UTC

renegade redo

2023-11-27 22:50:05 UTC

renegade animation

tom575 — 2023-11-27 22:53:54 UTC

your thinking here is good...better than before.

but...why have that green ish last "e"?

why is it not an obvious warm color to match the other two?

start white back ground and end with white background is fine. nice

jazz animation

tom575 — 2023-11-28 02:41:02 UTC

storyboard: colors are okay. you should get to your JAZZ logo sooner, maybe in the fourth or fifth frame? you don't need three frames with circles when you are showing 6 total. careful that your colors are not in the Op Art category. You want the colors to be seen clearly. not vibrating too much, anyway.

Revised ver_Film Company_logo

2023-11-28 05:09:15 UTC

MILLENIUM MURDERS REDO

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-28 05:49:53 UTC

CRIME REDO V2 (Overlay 1/2)

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-28 06:16:27 UTC

CRIME REDO V2 (Overlay 2/2)

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-28 06:16:56 UTC

HERE IT IS SPELLED RIGHT

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-28 06:27:29 UTC

latest what if

tom575 — 2023-11-28 13:37:50 UTC

looks great. this is good enough for your portfolio.

DETAIL: ask me about how to place your description type under your logo.

evermore latest

tom575 — 2023-11-28 13:39:33 UTC

nice work.

clever way you placed

fx studio.

it actually works better when reduced.

do a nice animation. SOON

millennium latest

tom575 — 2023-11-28 13:45:14 UTC

it is great that you started over.

but not sure this is dangerous enough. looks like it could be an animation, not real life?

however, if you want to use a drawing of your murderer, make sure that blade does not rest right on top of the saloon door.

typesetting looks weak on all — look at all your valleys inside the sentence —except the one that looks like Star Wars. at least that typesetting looks commanding.

Birth Control Package Mockup

2023-11-28 15:37:21 UTC

True Crime Final Motion

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-28 16:52:54 UTC

Revised_True Crime_animation

2023-11-28 17:27:13 UTC

removed the answer, made the price tags bigger, title more visible, and last two frames longer

final true crime

egporter1 — 2023-11-28 19:53:07 UTC

renegade storyboard

2023-11-28 20:43:32 UTC

can you please try adding color?

pencil case

2023-11-28 20:45:14 UTC

yes, yours is better than the original. wondering why you chose a similar typeface for the name?

MOMI COLORED ENDING

2023-11-28 20:51:35 UTC

Only differnce between this version is the ending! this version is the one i would like to be shown for the senior showcase

true crime digital ad

egporter1 — 2023-11-28 20:55:06 UTC

true crime video/new

2023-11-28 21:33:35 UTC

works well. nice pacing.

please send to Cali...and Ella.

new digital ad

2023-11-28 21:36:54 UTC

Very nice idea. be sure to keep this for senior show. remind me please tomorrow.

MOMI new animation

2023-11-28 21:38:45 UTC

it works well. fine. show this one. be sure Ella knows.

packaging / new version

tom575 — 2023-11-28 22:39:10 UTC

much better. type change makes a big difference.

boost

tom575 — 2023-11-28 22:43:36 UTC

think about a different container so the full name shows up

motion missing?

tom575 — 2023-11-28 22:58:36 UTC

you need to complete every project.

video for new true crime?

let me know what you are missing tomorrow please. important

work?

tom575 — 2023-11-28 23:01:56 UTC

on Padlet?

please re-think your true crime image as we discussed. i had mentioned it before thanksgiving.

must have motion completed also, remember.

egporter1 — 2023-11-29 00:35:16 UTC

new community

2023-11-29 00:39:09 UTC

color combos

2023-11-29 00:40:58 UTC

Revised ver_True Crime_Key Art

2023-11-29 00:58:16 UTC

Revised ver (final)_True Crime- mockup

2023-11-29 00:59:26 UTC

Renegade Logo Updated

2023-11-29 01:16:39 UTC

Renegade Storyboard Updated

2023-11-29 01:18:02 UTC

Pencil box typeface rationale

jgdonova — 2023-11-29 01:22:37 UTC

I chose to use the same type because the parent company, Dixon, has chosen to do so for over 100 years. Their branding is very focused on legacy, quality, and trust. The image is a box from the 1920s with the same type. This brand popularized the idea of the yellow #2 pencil which is now iconic; they did so when using this type mark and have not changed it since.

Renegade Revision

jrgunner — 2023-11-29 01:31:17 UTC

community new one

tom575 — 2023-11-29 01:37:59 UTC

definitely better.

oddly silly for coffee, but it might work.

the type alone says not to take itself seriously. nice that you re-did your other one so quicly.

the bean is very odd on its own.

i assume the warmer colors work best, instead of green?

new renegade logotype

tom575 — 2023-11-29 01:43:41 UTC

logotype works better now.

adding pink to animation helps that project.

but i hope you see that you can explore more. that background can change a few times and it would not hurt your idea

Final Poster

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-29 02:12:04 UTC

Original Package

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-29 02:32:51 UTC

2023-11-29 02:45:28 UTC

new true crime video

egporter1 — 2023-11-29 02:49:37 UTC

changes to jazz

2023-11-29 03:19:31 UTC

true crime video

tom575 — 2023-11-29 03:20:34 UTC

remember that the description is very important?

your graphics are good, but did you forget the 2 in 2000? and it does not move very much since it is a motion piece.

no real punchline. your digital ad works best.

and yes, your poster is much better.

11.28 Evermore Animation

2023-11-29 03:20:55 UTC

the background shows up black in the preview, but it's a deep indigo

;package

tom575 — 2023-11-29 03:22:42 UTC

your version is of course better than the original, which looks like a nightmare.

i still think your speech bubbles could be a bit larger so they have more of a "say"

Mockup

mmgarcia13 — 2023-11-29 03:23:57 UTC

renegade revised

tom575 — 2023-11-29 03:24:27 UTC

very nice.

as a portfolio piece, it would be grteat to see you apply this.

there is an opportunity to use color in your animation...

murders revised

tom575 — 2023-11-29 03:25:59 UTC

it's your best version.

the road that is also a shadow is a good idea.

i wish we would have had more time to discuss type treatments.

animation evermore

tom575 — 2023-11-29 03:27:32 UTC

nice. work.

be sure you send to Cali.

let's talk a little about color if you can remind me.

Packaging Final

mjtucker1 — 2023-11-29 04:57:22 UTC

What If_ Logo animation

2023-11-29 06:39:31 UTC

What If_Animation-storyboard

2023-11-29 07:10:54 UTC

The Price Tag Killer_ Key art-storyboard

2023-11-29 07:24:59 UTC

Jazz_revised_storyboard

2023-11-29 07:37:30 UTC

True Crime Motion Revision

jrgunner — 2023-11-29 08:23:32 UTC

Renegade Motion

jrgunner — 2023-11-29 10:41:13 UTC

Renegade Motion (no texture)

jrgunner — 2023-11-29 10:45:32 UTC

what if animation

tom575 — 2023-11-29 13:41:59 UTC

very well done. make sure you give it to Cali and Ella.

renegade animation

tom575 — 2023-11-29 13:45:17 UTC

much better with color...and sound effect.

send it to Cali...and make sure Ella has it, of course

renegade color animation

tom575 — 2023-11-29 13:48:01 UTC

much more in teresting with colors. that last "e" still could be hotter. but it is okay.

just have to keep practicing.

community

tom575 — 2023-11-29 13:50:07 UTC

it is odd, but it works best as a horizontal, where we just see the basics of your design idea: holding hands and the title, family owned and coffee. coffee for kids?

practice type treatments in the future...and color.

jazz animation

tom575 — 2023-11-29 13:58:44 UTC

hard to follow your logic on this one.

try to tell the viewer what they are watching.

there is too quick a jump from color to white background to full logo.

twist revised motion

tom575 — 2023-11-29 14:00:57 UTC

works fine. in any video like this, there are many ways to display the type.

and yours dhows what is necessary.

keeps the viewer wondering what is next. so it succeeds. we can chat about it in class.

JAZZ UPDATED

2023-11-29 14:25:34 UTC

boost nature made

egporter1 — 2023-11-29 14:59:06 UTC

changed the mockup to see the 'boost' more clearly

Boost

2023-11-29 15:21:38 UTC

Shouldn’t the name be in a hot color

almyers1 — 2023-11-29 16:31:08 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-29 16:36:08 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-29 16:41:43 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-29 16:42:36 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-29 16:43:21 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-29 17:16:21 UTC

almyers1 — 2023-11-29 17:56:11 UTC

new new chips bag

ammcconn — 2023-11-30 03:29:56 UTC

i pulled the lines of text in a little more, is it working any better? i don't want it to look too tight, i would like there to still be breathing room if u catch my drift

question mark

ammcconn — 2023-11-30 05:08:51 UTC

im still working but what do you think with the emphasized question mark that you suggested?

bag. what if?. jazz.

tom575 — 2023-11-30 13:27:31 UTC

bag is okay now. if there was more time, i could sit with you and move type around, but it works better. gluten freer looks like it does not belong, still, so why not one line under chili&lime?. that way, it would belong to a unit instead of drifting.

What if? is better but your drawing of the ? is not very graceful...no thicks and thins.

that question mark IS your concept now, so it needs to be creative. you can try a thin line approach doubled with a thicker line, or two thin lines overlapping. it would/could show movement, etc.

gesture drawing...draw without looking at page...like your drawing class.

JAZZ logo applications: i had asked you both to re-visit your assignment after adding that black background. with a black background, you should really consider color for the logotype. we can talk in class if you cannot get to it.

book cover. bar logotype. RADIUS

tom575 — 2023-11-30 13:35:21 UTC

latest one is the best one. i wish your boots overlapped the type a bit more, but it works.

one of your best efforts.

i really don't think you need the eyelashes at the beginning of your logo... if you keep them at all. the menu looks very nervous, not relaxing. the eye idea works well enough in your motion piece.

RADIUS logo is very nice. if you don't have time to re-do your video, at least do a good storyboard...use the palm of his hand to place the price tag, not his wrist.

true crime

tom575 — 2023-11-30 13:40:12 UTC

please make a vertical underground image for the show. and i don't think the title should be italic.

you could probably touch the two words together and they would read fine.

work overall

tom575 — 2023-11-30 13:43:14 UTC

you have some good work.

please read my comments long ago about jazz logotype...now that it is in black background, think about adding color to the words, etc.

be sure to print out your book cover as a mock up for the show, as well as your package design and RENEGADE.

can you just try thinking about your post card again? just relax and think about DESIGN IS

2023-12-01 16:53:37 UTC

renegade storyboard

tom575 — 2023-12-01 17:48:55 UTC

it works.

However, the descriptions for your last frame, keep it simpler:

last "e" falls; "productions" fades in

background changes back to white

updated vitamin c packaging

egporter1 — 2023-12-01 22:40:07 UTC

boost

tom575 — 2023-12-01 23:15:57 UTC

yes, it is better, but that apple shape is the same color as the word...the "o" so the name does not stand out enough now. can you move that drawing a little off the "o"?

True Crime New Final

ravassil — 2023-12-02 00:34:54 UTC

True Crime Mockup New Final

ravassil — 2023-12-02 00:35:43 UTC

Hot Tamales New Type

ravassil — 2023-12-02 00:36:53 UTC

Hot Tamales Box Update

ravassil — 2023-12-02 00:37:41 UTC

true crime latest

tom575 — 2023-12-02 04:30:32 UTC

new type treatment works well. try to crop your potser mockup as a vertical

tamales

tom575 — 2023-12-02 04:32:18 UTC

now that you deleted that weords shape, it seems empty in that location. i really think you can add "very hot" beneath tamales...it would add a bit of humor, and obviously, because of your illustration, it looks very very hot.

2023-12-02 16:53:20 UTC

coffee boxed

tom575 — 2023-12-02 17:14:22 UTC

well, you found a way to present your redesign...a boxed coffee?

is there a fourth side or only three sides?

a top?

this presents better than before. looks like a fun idea, etc.

Ture Crime Mock up Final

ravassil — 2023-12-03 03:09:19 UTC

what if new proof

ammcconn — 2023-12-03 20:14:15 UTC

question mark with thicker and thinner parts. still working on placement of it in relation to type, and still doing some sketching as well.

whatif???

tom575 — 2023-12-03 22:22:00 UTC

yes, your are closer.

hard for me to suggest a few things you could do via Padlet comments.

the question mark now has more character because of thicks & thins. not sure you are exploring options. i still think you are holding back...

i think you mentioned the exercise of not looking at your pad while you sketched? I think I mentioned gesture drawing? your question mark still looks like the computer did it. no smooth edges, etc. has to feel more spontaneous, unpredictable.

if the whole concept of this name means that anything can happen; anything can be suggested; anything goes... think how that can manifest itself in a logo/logotype.

much easier in an animation, but how in a stand alone logo? maybe multiple question marks, overlapping, different weights, all hand drawn. Maybe the "if" starts to want to "play" inside that large opening inside the question mark.

new jazz storyboard

2023-12-04 02:10:45 UTC

new colored jazz

2023-12-04 02:11:36 UTC

jazz new logotype and storyboard

tom575 — 2023-12-04 03:04:50 UTC

both should be on your panel in gallery.

Logo now has surprising colors, which is better than dull or predictable.

Storyboard: it seems very clear what happens. describing a fade-in is good idea. leave it all in; it looks good with the descriptions included.

2023-12-04 05:17:17 UTC

2023-12-04 05:17:40 UTC

2023-12-04 05:17:59 UTC

ditched vegan/health food idea, just redesigned normal product packaging

2023-12-04 05:18:23 UTC

2023-12-04 05:19:50 UTC

ouroboro = snake eating itself = ancient symbol for eternity. (evermore = always)

2023-12-04 05:32:37 UTC

true crime underground poster

tom575 — 2023-12-04 13:35:30 UTC

please crop it as a vertical: 16 x 20 for the show panel

true crime storyboard

tom575 — 2023-12-04 13:37:46 UTC

you should add the important info: channel and start date, so it looks more professional.

evermore

tom575 — 2023-12-04 13:39:18 UTC

i think it's easy to understand the concept.

so, you think it works only as two color solution? not one color? might limit its use.

but the idea is fine. no time to make any changes now, anyway.

animation?

package

tom575 — 2023-12-04 13:39:51 UTC

can you show the "before" please?

Bar Science_animation_storyboard

2023-12-05 00:46:47 UTC

bar science animation

tom575 — 2023-12-05 01:09:48 UTC

remember we talked about using color?

and starting with the periodic table and closing in on B and Sc?

this storyboard looks too weak to include in your show panel.

and the nconcept takes away from your real concept of B and Sc...once you introduce new initials, etc. OK?

what if with hand drawn type

ammcconn — 2023-12-06 03:41:30 UTC

im thinking that if i draw over a typeface in the same scribbly manner as the question mark, but still enough so that its identifiable and not just my own handwriting, that could tie in the name. should i just try my handwriting instead? i could have the same scribbly effect for the animation.

what if?

tom575 — 2023-12-06 13:29:32 UTC

latest one is fine.

use ANIMATION under it now.

of course when you do animate it, anything goes. we cold see it come to life. i think we discussed how last time? keep it moving always. if there is time, i think it can still feel a bit looser...but it is late in the game. just get it done. thanks

What If? Logo Animation

ammcconn — 2023-12-07 03:31:21 UTC

thank you for encouraging me to see this through tom, and thanks for everything this semester :)

What If? Logo Presentation

ammcconn — 2023-12-07 03:32:39 UTC

your work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 12:51:26 UTC

You should be very happy with your work this half semester.

Renegade; Packaging; Bar Science, etc.

You listened and improved.

I hope you continue to explore typographic solutions throughout this coming year...and beyond.

Sorry we did not get a chance to chat yesterday or last night at the showcase.

what if, etc.

tom575 — 2023-12-07 12:55:49 UTC

that project could be never-ending, but it is great to see your animation.

i think you should consider calling it ANIMATION instead of PRODUCTIONS, since it really looks like an animation studio now. I had mentioned that before.

I wish I had the time to sit with you and go over ways the animation can expand.

I hope you consider exploring this project to include more branding elements. It would be a good portfolio project. I also hope you continue to explore typography...and have fun.

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 12:58:48 UTC

Hey. I hope you find time to continue to explore typography.

Please send me your Renegade van design if you compete it.

That is a stand-out project for you, and yuou should consider it as a major branding opportunity for your portfolio...many possibilities.

and have fun.

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:00:23 UTC

Please don't get discouraged.

There is life after milk duds. I think.

You have shown improvement.

Keep exploring typography...and have fun.

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:02:07 UTC

You should feel very pleased with your improvement over the second half of the semester.

Your true crime project is a stand-out.

Keep exploring. And having fun.

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:04:45 UTC

well...you showed improvement over the second half... last minute or not, your design skills are impressive.

and congrats on your new employment.

and i want tickets and a photo of you and BB.

have FUN

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:06:35 UTC

I hope you are happy with your work this semester. You showed improvement in the second half. I do hope you continue to explore type possibilities.

The bar project can help you get noticed, I think. And keep that book cover.

Have fun.

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:07:39 UTC

You showed great improvement this half semester.

I hope you keep exploring what type can do for you...you can tell great stories as a designer / illustrator.

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:08:37 UTC

I hope you never stop exploring typography...and design.

It does take work.

AND HAVE FUN.

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:09:55 UTC

Whatever you do decide to pursue, I hope you explore design possibilities.

You showed impressive skills in reviews.

Keep at it...and have fun

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:10:36 UTC

You improved this half semester.

Keep working... exploring. It takes time.

Have fun

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:11:26 UTC

I hope you continue to explore typography and all the possibilities of conceptual design.

And have fun!

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:12:15 UTC

It was great to see you continue to explore throughout this semester. Never stop.

You show great skill.

Have fun.

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:14:26 UTC

You kind of rushed through this second half of the semester, especially after Thanksgiving.

Your post card still stands out.

But you have impressive skills that you should continue to explore .

I hope you do. and have fun.

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:14:56 UTC

you work hard and continue to improve.

Keep exploring.

And have fun

work

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:16:17 UTC

from that first post card to true crime, you show great skill and impressive thinking.

I hope you continue to explore design and typography...and have fun.

ETC

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:17:35 UTC

Thank you again for being a great T.A.

I hope you realize you have great talent...and you listen and improve... great skills to have.

Keep exploring. and have fun

work etc

tom575 — 2023-12-07 13:19:02 UTC

You continued to improve over the semester.

I hope you keep exploring typography.

You are open...and you listen...and those are great traits moving forward.

Have fun.

what if final

tom575 — 2023-12-07 16:11:45 UTC

is very very good