Thesis Statement by MLudlam https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h 1. Topic (specific, not vague) 2. Controlling Idea (opinion) en-us 2018-08-01 00:57:55 UTC 2021-08-11 13:29:55 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-uploads.storage.googleapis.com/302786669/de58a0f093ba080f711b63fa6f2aa9dc/writing_clip_art_xTgn7KXTA.jpg Indie developers have been and shall stay as the original embodiment of the video game art form compared to AAA games https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675414104 What do you mean "original embodiment" (too vague_]]> 2021-08-11 13:01:23 UTC https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675414104 Narrow your topic to a specific area. https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675432274 Major corporation and consumer waste is putting an irreversible effect on our planet. ]]> 2021-08-11 13:17:38 UTC https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675432274 Is the Indie Essay going to be a compare and contrast essay? Use the emojies to answer. mludlam https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675432880 2021-08-11 13:18:07 UTC https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675432880 While electric cars are said to be “The Future”, they don’t travel as far as gas cars and there are not enough chargers globally. https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675433929 2021-08-11 13:18:58 UTC https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675433929 Planet Essay is too broad...this could be a book instead of just an essay. Can you revise it? mludlam https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675433988 2021-08-11 13:19:00 UTC https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675433988 Good one! I assume all your development points will pertain to books and lectures vs. computers and the internet. https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675435893 In the past, education was based on books and lectures, today, it is based on computers and websites. ]]> 2021-08-11 13:20:30 UTC https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675435893 The Electric Cars statement sounds like a development point. Can you revise the Thesis to establish a topic with an opinion? mludlam https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675435980 2021-08-11 13:20:34 UTC https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675435980 Suggested revision: Parents must choose between private schools and public schools in order to select the best option for each child. https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675438995 Once you become a parent your mind set tend to change weather sending your child to a private school is  a better option an going to a public school.]]> 2021-08-11 13:22:44 UTC https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675438995 Leave out the word "your"...Fitness and exercise can improve a person's health (That's a Fact) and reduce the risk of avoiding several diseases (Too Vague). Where is the opinion? https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675442086 Fitness and exercise can improve your health and reduce the risk of avoiding several diseases.]]> 2021-08-11 13:25:02 UTC https://padlet.com/mludlam/ciybcteu8n5h/wish/1675442086