https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-10-04 18:19:38 UTC 2022-04-25 15:38:20 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f43a.png 28tmacisaac https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/1794096348 2021-10-05 18:35:51 UTC https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/1794096348 28jdowling https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/1797074363 Hi Sebastiao! When I was reading through your piece, the first thing I noticed is that you describe video games a lot, and how you love to play them. “I will most likely be pushing myself to beat my video game on brutal, sweating in the process.” In the snippet from your piece, readers can tell that you are very sincere when it comes to video games, by the descriptive words you use in this very short sentence. Another thing that I really liked about your writing was your closing. I really enjoyed how you put the image of a movie theater in the reader's head. I think this is very out of the box, and a very strong way to close your piece. The final thing that I really enjoyed reading in this piece was the little facts about you. “If you do find me writing, I will most likely be writing a Personal Narrative of a Haikus. I may do one of those things or I could be painting a beautiful piece or help cook or even go on a nature walk.” These really helped the reader get to know more about you! Great job!]]> 2021-10-06 16:09:51 UTC https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/1797074363 28hbeversluis https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/1800105816 I find that one of the best parts of your writing is your truly great description with you writing like when you stated: “ brutally, sweating in the process”. I find this a good way to shape your development as a writer and you seem to be doing good with forming descriptions with details and concepts. One wish for your all About Me paragraph is to use your description  details to make a fine conjunction to your ending so you really have a strong and great piece of writing for your website.]]> 2021-10-07 14:58:39 UTC https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/1800105816 28mlaurenzano https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/1920855243 Your memoir was fantastic! I loved the great attention to detail, it felt like I was really in your shoes and I could very clearly imagine how the breeze felt, how it was calm, and how you were feeling. The only thing I think you could do better on is rereading your piece. I found some areas where the grammar wasn’t correct. Great job! ]]> 2021-11-30 16:35:34 UTC https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/1920855243 28hbeversluis https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/1923136468 What I admired about your memoir is the composition of internal narration and external details that guided people away from just reading and actually giving a receptive feeling to the readers. I truly felt in tune with the atmosphere you used with a combination of the frosty environment and warm coziness of your coffee that you used as a backbone for the contrast between the two. One small item that I think could use tweaking is your transitions were a little cutoff in details externally and that confused me between your conjunctions.]]> 2021-12-01 15:56:09 UTC https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/1923136468 https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/1925944322 I really liked how much detail you put in your story ]]> 2021-12-02 19:25:51 UTC https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/1925944322 https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/2156802773 Hey Sebastiao! I really liked your story. I admired how you took your story slow and took time to emphasize about how things were happening. You really took time to things in and take it slow. I also liked how you were able to write so much in that time. It was amazing how all the stuff I read were made in that amount of time, that shows you have talent. Something I think you need to work on for this was the grammar. Some areas I looked at, some of the grammar didn’t really make sense to me. Overall, your story was amazing and I would definitely recommend it to others. Great job!]]> 2022-04-25 15:38:07 UTC https://padlet.com/28spinto/cfs85agqhb5ncjdx/wish/2156802773