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Perfectly-written essay, ACE. You did really well in writing and using advanced vocabulary in your essay. Please check some areas of improvement in the highlighted areas. Please also finish writing till the conclusion and double-check your work.

7/10 Marks

If you’re planning to go to the beach, (P) you have to prepare and list about their culture, foods and cost that relatable with their place(s). So, (P)we don’t have to worry about trip consequences. In contrast, (P) there have (G) people who do not want to go (WM) picnic trip,they just want a rest at their home and hangout to shopping centers and buying some vegetables by reducing their stress. It’s a way of passing a simple holiday without concerning about cos because we’re living in large cities. (M?)

However,a person prefer (S-V) to living simply , (P) we just need a place to relax our tiredness and sadness.This is the point of view why do we should open our mind.We can feel the nature as well as happiness of our depress confession .

Teacher Mar Lar's comment:

Greatly-written essay, Ma Ei Phyu. You did try your best to write a good essay but there are some errors. Please check them in the highlighted areas. Please also finish writing and double-check your work. Try to write simple, concise and short sentences.

6/10 Marks

Firstly, both can reduce your street. While you have (a) holiday, you can get (a) new partner and also knowledge. Holiday can give you new idea(s) and experience about your a place where you choice (choose). Honestly, it can cost your (you) money but you have to get the (a) wide view (of) the value of you cost

Teacher Mar Lar's comment:

Good introduction and body paragraph, dear Scott. Please finish your essay. Please also check your grammatical mistakes in the highlighted areas.

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When you set off the holiday, you might feel abreak from stress zone, neither you choosed the places in beach or city area. The new environment will be given a relaxation.

On the other hand, in beach, can only explore on water activities, like water spot and diving. You can have more fun on shopping or different types of foods if you are in Large City area.

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Good introduction and body paragraph, dear Ma Mar Lar. Please finish your essay. Please also check for some grammatical mistakes in the highlighted areas.

3/10 Marks

Beach holidays are perfect for relaxation because you can enjoy the sounds of the breeze, and the softness of the sand, and the peaceful environment that provides the different vibes compare(d) (to) with large cities.

Teacher Mar Lar's comment:

Good introduction and body paragraph, dear Su Wai. Please finish your essay. Please also check your grammatical mistakes in the highlighted areas.

3/10 Marks

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Good introduction, Ma Win Thant. Please finish your essay.

2/10 Marks

In this paragraph I would like to talk about the similarities between spending holiday at city and at beach. (not necessary to announce what you are going to write) In these days, everything is expensive and either spending at (G) big city or at (the) beach(,) (P) the cost will be the same in general. You can relax in every place that you want though. (F/ I)

In spite of, (G) keeping in touch with nature ,(P) food, different cultures will be different. At (the) beach(,) (P) we can do physical activities. (For) Example, playing volleyball, surfing. On the other hand, At (In) big cities we can do indoor activities like bowling, swimming like that.

In sum of, you need to more relax with nature. But it is fine with if you are not fine with spending holiday(s) at (the) beach or nature places. The reason is you want a perfect life style (SP) more keep in touch with fresh air, playing (F) (play) physical activities.

Teacher Mar Lar's comment:

Well done, dear Lauren. You did really well in writing and structuring your essay. Please check some areas of improvement in the highlighted areas. Please double-check your work to avoid making grammatical, vocabulary, spelling, and punctuation mistakes.

6/10 Marks

Wherever you are planning to travel for vacation beaches or nearby cities, traveling helps you to gain new experience as you have to expose new things or new people. It can improve your interpersonal skills such as communication, for example, if you are at the beach, you will have to meet and greet with local people or if you are wondering around in the cities, you may need to mingle with city dwellers. Meeting with new people will enhance your confidence and some travel experiences will make you independent.  

Nonetheless, if you are on limited budget, you may need to consider cities over beaches. Cities are always a choice for young and energetic people and offer a wide range of accommodations and foods basically so that you can minimize your expenses during your trip. In contrast, beaches are luxury vacations for certain persons such as families and closed-friends. You can be delighted by spending couple of quality time with your beloved by doing such activities such as walling under beautiful sunset, bicycling on the sun or swimming with small waves. Unlikely, if you are with groups of friends, you can enjoy hopping cafes in the days or bars at the nights in the cities

To conclude, deciding where to travel is a depends on personal interests and emotions. By the time, you want embrace the nature beaches and mountains are options whereas if you want to take pleasure in modern life, cities are preferences.

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Good introduction, dear Ma Yamin. Please finish your essay. Please also check for some grammatical mistakes in the highlighted areas.

2/10 Marks

Firstly, if we visit to (a) big city, we can do everything like shopping to mall(s), visit to famous building(s), night market(s) and we can do sightseeing around the city.

However, if we visit to (a) beach(,) we can keep in touch with nature and we can explore different culture(s). We also try local food, see nature (V) beauty and also see sunset beauty natural. (G)

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well-written essay, Ko Bo Lay. You did try your best to write a good essay but there are some errors. Please check them in the highlighted areas. Please also finish writing and double-check your work.

5/10 Marks

If you choose to go (to the) beach, you can take your stress out in the same way as large cities. Plus, both of place(s) can clear our mind(s) and have fun due to being the place we want to go. Furthermore, you can take pictures with fascinating and delightful views from there. Otherwise, in large cities(,) (P) you can try their local food in the same way as beach. Another possibility is you can buy souvenirs from beach likewise large cities for your friends or relatives who left as a gift either.

When we go to the beach, we can have exactly splendid beach vibes. In contrast, going to the large cities can have tied up and excellent cities vibes as well. Besides, we can serve a variety of seafood as much as we want to eat on beach. On the other hand, we can have different kinds of meals we want to try at anywhere we like in large cities. Beach is more peaceful; we can take relax quietly, as well as we can do anything we want to either play on the sand such as badminton, football, and drawing on the sand or other activities like picnic with friends or family. Whereas, in large cities, we can try new things we have not done yet and have an exciting holiday due to having lots of places to go at there.

To sum up, both places have really exceptional things to do and try. In addition, both are worth to go as a vacation, waste your free time and money as well. You can choose either beach or large cities depend on your mind. However, as far as I am concerned, beach is more convenient for introverts and for large cities it is more suitable for extroverts. Anyway, it depends on you.

Teacher Mar Lar's comment:

Such a perfectly written essay, dear Hsu Pyae. You did a very great job in structuring your essay, using suitable words, and implementing transition words in your essay. That was impressive! Please also check for some grammatical mistakes in the highlighted areas.

9/10 Marks

Both travelling to a beach and a large city are delightful. They can be eye-watering expenses. We can either meet new people or get new friends whenever (wherever) we go. We travel because we want to leave from our daily mundane for a while. Going to a beach can give a new experience as well as the culture. Likewise, travelling to a large city does.

On the other side, some things that are abundant in a big city, can be rare or expensive at a beach. We can expose (G) (can be exposed to) with the nature at the beach. In contrast, we cannot expose; we will see apartments, supermarkets, restaurants, and many other things, in a large city, which (that) are not strange (to) for us. Both places can provide stunning views, but they are definitely different. Furthermore, the feelings will not be the same, too. For instance, a beach is not suitable for someone who does not like to swim.

All in all, travelling is good for both our mental and physical health. But there are a lot of points to consider before you travel. As I live in a big city, travelling to a large city will not give me a super new experience. Therefore, in my opinion, I prefer travelling to a beach.

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Perfectly written essay, dear Steven. You did really well in writing and structuring your essay. Please check some areas of improvement in the highlighted areas. Overall, very well done! Keep up your great work!

8/10 Marks

One big disadvantage of choosing big cities is you can get sick and tired of looking around the building. Furthermore, you have to spend a lot of money because of gifts and food are expensive in big cities. Also, there are many people in big cities, which means you should always take care of your wallet whenever you go out. However, if you visit the cities, you gain a lot of experience.

In contrast, choosing beach on holidays can relax your body and mind by sightseeing the ocean and sunbathing on the beach. Sunbathing can gain vitamin D in your body. Apart from this, you can delve into the sea creatures by diving. Enjoying plates of seafood on the beach is the most delicious food in the world. One negative impact is you can accidentally drown in the water if you are not careful.

In conclusion, if you want to relax and save money, go to the beach on holiday. Equally, if you want to explore new things and like crowded people, visit the big cities. To my mind, I would like to spend my holidays on the beach.

Despite the differences, both beach holidays and city holidays have certain similarities. Before anything else, beach trips serve as a break from everyday life, and exploring the city does likewise. Whether it’s sunbathing on the beach or enjoying the activities in the city, both types of holidays focus on relaxation equally. Moreover, one as well as the other provides opportunity to seek adventurous experiences. On city holidays, travelers can discover famous landmarks, enjoy local food and learn about local culture. In contrast, beach holidays allow travelers to enjoy water activities such as snorkeling, swimming and exploring the natural wonder. Lastly, no matter where we go on vacation, the memories of spending time with our loved ones will always remain the same.

However, there are also some differences to point out between those 2 kinds of holidays. One obvious difference is the environment. City holidays are centered around urban environments, giving an energetic and exciting atmosphere. Big cities allow us to entertain ourselves by going shopping, dining, and attending festivals. On the other hand, beach holidays promote a sense of relaxation and calmness as it is surrounded by nature, with sun, sand, ocean waves. Furthermore, the activities' accessibility is another key difference. Beach holidays tend to focus more on physical interaction with nature, whereas city holidays have a mentally stimulating core.

In summary, both of the places offer delightful experiences and provide access to adventure and relaxation, yet in very different ways. Personally, I would choose to go on beach holidays as I seek to chill out, connect with nature, and enjoy a slow pace. However, going to large cities may be ideal for those looking for dynamic activities. Ultimately, selecting the destination can depend very much on personal preferences and the types of experience you are seeking.

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When you visit a big city, you can enjoy shopping at malls and explore famous buildings. Night markets offer a lively atmosphere where you can experience the sounds of music and the buzz of the crowd. In spite of, sightseeing around the city allows you to explore famous building and vibrant culture.

On the other hand, if you visit to beach we can keep in touch with nature and we can explore different culture and enjoy local food, you can enjoy shooting sound of the wave and also watch a beautiful sunset of the beach.

To sum up, I admit that both options offer unique opportunities for entertainment and relaxation. In my opinion, visiting the beach allows you to connect with nature; while exploring a big city lets you experience modern life.

Both vacation forms can make us escaping from the robotic routine lives. Relieving worry, stress and bringing new refreshments are the extra bonuses of holidays. At the beach, we can have valuable family time by doing activities together like swimming, playing with sands in the natural world. Likewise, an awesome miracle can create by visiting unfamiliar tourist sites of large cities as adventurous tours.

However, the main differences between these two types of holidays are the impact of interferences and the surroundings' atmosphere.A trip to beach is more suitable for quiet life lovers. Being an isolated and urban area of somewhere, there would has the least negative impact from modernized life styles like traffic congestion in rush hours,air pollution and many different kinds of noises - car horns. On the other hand, city travellers have time consuming problems and getting lost in unfamiliar destinations because of the complicated geological conditions. If someone want to feel the traditional vibes of respective countries, beach is the recommended place. By tasting traditional seafood cuisines and communicating with local people can provide to have genuine traditional's vibe.Nonetheless, a visit to cosmopolitan, large cities can bring to be in mixed cultural environments.

In short, vacation is for recreation, whether it is staying at the beach or a journey to large cities.The

breathtaking natural sceneries of beach represent a peaceful life while the side effects of modernized life styles are still having in a city tour.

Depending on travellers' preferences, it is difficult to say which place is a best choice. Similarly, everyone should try for a different alternative journey type regardless of the individual's likes.

You can communicate with new people and learn the traditions of villages from the beach. Activities like sunbathing, swimming and other beach sports are a refreshing way

to relieve stress. The natural beauty of the ocean and stunning landscapes are some of the best memories for choosing this beach option for holidays.

From another point of view, holidays in big cities bring cultural and historical experiences and give endless options and modern attractions. Big cities like New York, London and California give a chance to learn about their cultural and historical buildings. And offer museums, theaters, and shopping at famous malls, which will provide endless opportunities for entertainment. Especially in December, you can feel how much local people celebrate Christmas intensely happy. Most of the places are covered with snow, Christmas trees, kinds of cookie shops and the show of the famous artists. These are make your holidays turn to the best choice ever. Ultimately, transportation is easy going everywhere. Public transport, bustling markets, and nightlife make city holidays more energetic and vibrant. You can feel a variety of feelings from these big cities which are different from your hometown.

In conclusion, the beach offers a special relaxation by breathing the fresh air and provides natural beauty landscape options. For the big cities, giving the chances for excitement and cultural immersion. Both places have their own beauties depending on the people.

In contrast, city holidays are filled with vibrant and offers a bunch of entertainment and cultural experiences. Big cities are characterized with iconic landmarks and museums to provide constant stimulation. For instance, travelers will have perfect holidays for those who enjoy staying active and absorbing themselves in the heart of urban life.

Despite their differences in pace and focus, both provide a meaningful break from daily routines, each giving chance positive ways to recharge. Beach holidays focus on rest and a slower pace, while city vacations encourage the mind through cultural engagement and activities. Lastly, whether people is seeking peace by the coast or the lively pace of city life, both kinds of holidays give different chances to recharge, providing travelers to explore new environments.