Expert Author by Kimberly Hernandez-Delacruz https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib Made with no regrets, whatsoever en-us 2017-05-09 16:39:22 UTC 2017-05-22 15:56:38 UTC hello@padlet.com Favorite Books hernan_kimber02 https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172373967 Books made a big impact on me when it came to how they influenced my literacy. The main books that really got me into writing in the first place was the series called 'Seekers' Erin Hunter. The series really impacted the way I saw writing and reading as a whole, even though I read the books back in the beginning of fifth grade, it really did change my perspective, literally. The book had different perspectives between the characters, and I found it amusing to read. However, what really amused me, was the story line. I'll be honest, I was never good at writing in fifth grade, I was terrible. The story line in the book was something so unique in my opinion, because the book was about three bears, all from different species along with another one that can shape-shift, and them trying to either find a new place to live in or to find their families. the book changed the ways I saw perspectives a long with the way I overall thought about story line.

 At the beginning of the year, I can admit that my writing wasn't the best. It did have good word choice, however the plot was a disaster. I will be showing a small piece of my old writing piece and compare it to my new one. 
"The horrible feeling of guilt that  made them feel deathly sick. As if someone blamed everything that went wrong in the world on them.They managed to wake up after having seen bits and pieces of what seemed like visions. Seeing the war over and over again, a terrifying movie playing it their head non stop. They felt like they were spinning and it took them a while to realize where they were. The monster looked at them with their calming eyes, they had barely moved location."

I don't know if you can notice, but I felt pretty lost and confused myself while writing this. I had no idea where the plot was going. Just by showing a bit more of my new writing piece, you can see I can actually see that I have more a plot and my story is built up a bit better. Here's a small piece of my new writing piece. 
""Never.... and I mean NEVER mention that woman again in my presence... Am I understood?!" His voice boomed throughout the room, although it seemed bold, Olivia easily picked up on the hints of sorrow and pain in his voice. If it was anyone else, nobody would have noticed the agony in his statement. Olivia had dealt with her father for far too many painful years. Robert had still not stopped kicking her, tears still tumbling down Olivia's face. When her father was finally pleased with the damaged he had done, his kicks came to a stop. Robert started to walk away and when he was at the door, he looked back at Olivia with a piercing gaze then mumbled one single word. 

Pathetic."

I’d like to believe that if you can see the small differences, you can see that the new story is more built up and has more of a story to go with it. I think this is mainly because I looked back at what I learned about plot and saw that others were a bit confused when it came to it in my old story.
]]> 2017-05-17 16:04:46 UTC https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172373967 Journey hernan_kimber02 https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172384317 When it comes to how far I've come with my writing, It's a long story that place in a short amount of time. My writing didn't improve over night, even if it felt like it. I just improved and looked at it in a different way. Others may see is as a subject, while others like me see is as our privacy and time. When I changed the way I looked at writing,  my writing itself changed. I was improving more and more each day without even noticing it, and it's kinda weird looking back at it. I changed a lot when it came to my literature. During the summer, I had been reading but not exactly writing. I just wanted to read and entertain myself with it. When I first to my Language Arts class, I'll admit, my writing truly was terrible. However, I had the information and perspective I needed to change that, and that's what happened, I changed the way I wrote. Some people said that my writing pieces and my Fire-Ups were too long, but I begged to differ. Everyone, and I mean everyone, has a different writing style. Some are silly, others are formal, I just turned out to be a formal writer. People said that i should write less when it came to my writing, but I didn't do that. I write, a lot. I was always a fan of reading and writing, but my writing is a type in which I feel like I have to cover the whole subject thoroughly. That is what I did, it was my writing, and wrote how I felt like it. ]]> 2017-05-17 16:37:13 UTC https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172384317 Non-Stop hernan_kimber02 https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172625574 When it comes to writing, I go all out. That's just the way I learned to write. I don't know if anyone reading know about how John Jay, James Madison, and Alexander Hamilton had to write a series of essays called the federalist papers back in 1787, but I sometimes feel like the Hamilton of that group. The plan was to originally write 25 essays defending the new United States constitution. The work would be divided equally among the men, but In the end, they ended up writing 85 essays. John Jay got sick after writing 5, James Madison wrote 29, while Alexander Hamilton wrote the other 51. It was unrealistic, but Hamilton just didn't give up and continued writing. This was all in the span of 6 months, and I know it sounds like I'm exaggerating when I say this, but I sometimes feel like Hamilton. Just always Non-Stop. ]]> 2017-05-18 16:06:44 UTC https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172625574 Fire-Works hernan_kimber02 https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172628196 I've always come a long way when it comes to my Fire-Work documents, and I'd like to believe that this time is no exception. Language Arts has always been my favorite class, that was just a fact.  always enjoyed being able to take the time to write during school, and not only write, but also read occasionally. In any case, out Fire-Work documents are a way to demonstrate our daily work in a valid way. We are currently on our last Fire-Works document and it's due tomorrow. This my Fire-Works document. As always, I'm proud of the work that I have showed in this document. I always make sure to stay on task and complete the daily agendas a long with self-evaluating. I made sure this last document was no exception. Now, if I compare this document with my very first document at the beginning of the year, the word progress and growth are written all over. I really can't begin to explain how much I have actually grown. Let's take a look at one Fire-Up from both of these documents.
My very first document may be found here. 

Let's start with a Fire-Up from my first document to begin.  

"Date:9/15/16
Fire-Up:What is  the conflict in the story you're writing or the one you're reading
Title:Opening conflict in your story
Response:The opening conflict in the book Wolf Brother is that there is a dark spirit that is taking over animals and making them impossible to kill.The main character's father is killed by these animals.The main then tries to get as far as possible from these animals while facing many challenges along the way.He is being hunted down by both these animal and a another tribe which wants his because they heard he's a wolf whisperer.He avoids the animals  all with the company of a small wolf pup he found along the way."

Okay, let me just start this off. It's terrible.
]]> 2017-05-18 16:16:15 UTC https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172628196 The Evolution Process hernan_kimber02 https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172632242 We all evolve one way or another, it's just how our species works when it comes to learning. Now, this doesn't mean that we all were born as monkeys then evolved into out human selves, it just mean that we learned a lot throughout all of our lives. During evolution, we all get better at certain things, and in the mean while, we also might get worse at others. I will be talking about all of my evolution in my writing throughout the year, and I'm honestly very proud of all of it. My writing has always been something I've taken pride in, but this year, I almost see it as my legacy. I'm amazed myself at how much I've evolved and how much I've grown. Seriously, I really learned a lot. I will be showing my old writing piece, which is actually something a small amount of people have actually looked at and read. Now that I compare it to my new writing piece, I learned to take more pride into my new one.

here is my old document. Now let's take a small piece from it, similar to the very first post that i have in this padlet.

"Over time,this world has changed drastically.Some say it's better and other say it's gone down a terrible path. Time is something that cannot be stopped along with something that  you cannot travel back into. Does time travel really exist or will be ever be able to travel back in time? Time gives us scars if you look at it. The way our world has changed can be throughout of as a scar. No one knows if these scars are permanents. This is a story about Time’s scar"

That paragraph was the very first paragraph of my story. Immediately, we are greeted with just the narrator talking. I make it sound as if the narrator will be talking throughout the whole story while really I smoothly translate into a third point of view later on. Now let's take a loot at my newer piece of writing. My newer piece of writing may be found here.

" A relief-ful sigh escaped Olivia's lips involuntarily as she closed up her math book and put away her now finished homework. Relief washed over her as she no longer had any school work to finish. She glanced at her clock. 1:30 AM. Once again she had managed to stay late up at night just by doing school work. She stood up from her desk chair and walked towards her window. She admired the small view from her window, her body loosening as she felt at ease now that her work had been done."

Now, that is the first paragraph of the writing piece I am working on currently. Instead of a narrator talking, we are greeted with a third-person point of view and from the start know that the characters' name is Olivia. Now, if we really think about it, both of these are actually different. One seems more well put together while the other one was getting there. My newer writing piece is obviously more sophisticated and more wisely put together, while my older piece of writing can be easily distinguished as a piece of writing by a sixth grader. I like writing in a formal way in which makes me look or sound older and or wiser when it comes to the writing factor. I'm obviously very proud of the progress I have accomplished.

]]> 2017-05-18 16:31:13 UTC https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172632242 Vocabulary hernan_kimber02 https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172679963 Vocabulary is a big part about my progress throughout the school year, not to mention that without it, good quality writing would be hard to come across. Vocabulary.com gave me a new way to learn vocabulary, and it always let you learned at the speed that you needed. I honestly learned a lot from this website and I'm excited to show all of my progress throughout this year.
Here is the list of all the words I learned from this school year. I will be using them in a sentence and the word with the link attached to it will be the word I mastered.
1.  The boy was working to execute all of the tasks on his agenda.
2. distinguish
3. The grace and magic of the forest music was outstanding, calming any living and non living things in sight.
4. The principal of the movie was the plot, without it, it would have been boring!
5. if you reflect on your mistake, you won't do it again.
6. I must consider that if I go to see the movie, I won't have time to finish my homework later.
7. The principle walked out of the office, causing the talking in the hallway to mutter down to silence.
8. If I intend to smile, I won't forget to do so!
9. A slave being beaten and torched, no one to help, nothing to do.
10.The patient is in severe state, they may not make it...
11. I'll admit, that was a pretty good job you did out there ont he feild.
12. I wasn't able to walk until I got the cast off my foot!
13. My theory has moe than enough proof, however, the concept is a bit far-fetched.
14. The party caught me by surprise, but I enjoyed it!
15. Food is scarce, you must understand that!
16. The husband walked down the hall, cradling the baby in his arms.

]]> 2017-05-18 20:00:28 UTC https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172679963 NoRedInk hernan_kimber02 https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172816414 NoRedInk is another big source that we used for improving our writing, specifically, when it came to grammar. NoRedInk actually showed me a lot of things and helped me with subjects I struggled with. It allowed me to learn things in a fun way and it let me master subjects. NoRedInk had helped me when it comes to my writing pieces, due to the fact that it showed me what was correct and incorrect when it came to subjects. I'm proud to be able to show and explain the subjects that I've mastered with the side of this program. These are the subjects I mastered. Honestly, I'm very proud to announce that I have mastered thirty topics on this program.

Now as for actual full subjects I've completed, my main ones are adjectives and commas for clarity, a long with a few other subjects that I'm getting close to mastering. However, I really have learned a lot from this program and site and I believe it is a factor of my improvement during my writing this year. ]]> 2017-05-19 14:28:56 UTC https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172816414 Impacting my life hernan_kimber02 https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172927038 Writing and school really impacted my life in multiple ways. I was able to process bigger words, correct all my mistakes, and it helped me to talk over all as well. I improved a lot with this and and honestly I wasn't just able to talk, I was able to read fluently, and write better quality writing. Writing did impact my life and a lot of things about it. I saw myself reading a bit more than before and I had enjoyed it more. I also saw that I was actually passionate about the reading and writing that I did. Now, I take pride in all of the writing that I do, and I make sure that it is always be best quality that it can be. Each day, writing becomes a bigger and bigger part of my life. Honestly, I wouldn't be the person I am today without writing. Writing made me at different perspectives in life and it really helped me with everything in complete honesty. Writing and reading was my small escape, I was able to write what I wanted and read what calmed me down. During December, January, and February, I was dealing with a big thing in life. I will not address what it was, however I will say that reading was really able to comfort me when nothing else could. 

I'm sure I'm not the only one that has experienced this. Being able to calm yourself down by either reading or writing. My life has always been a bit more complicated than the ones of those around me, and I learned to live with it, literally, if you know what I may be implying. I was able to work through it all, and come on top, all thanks to reading and writing. ]]> 2017-05-20 14:48:34 UTC https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172927038 Writing piece hernan_kimber02 https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172928546 My writing piece, much like most of my writing, is something I take pride in. My writing piece however, is probably my piece of writing that I put the most work in, of course, other than my Fire-Works documents. I am really proud of all the work I put into this piece, and I know that my writing will only be getting better over time. The main thing I want to improve in with my writing is probably showing and not telling, in the beginning chapter, you may notice I tell a bit more than I show, so I want to go and revise the whole chapter. I will also be revising one paragraph for this post, showing me improving with showing and not telling. I think that this will be a good way to show what I learned while at the same time actually helping me with the writing piece. 

My writing piece may be found here. I take pride in every word written in that document. Here will be the paragraph I will be revising. 

"She only lived with her father, whom she wasn't very fond of. Her father very rarely got money, and the only times he did it was from gambling, thus resulting in her father barely being able to pay the rent of the small two story home they lived in. With the fact that Olivia's father barely had enough money to pay rent itself, Olivia almost never ate." 

Okay, I'll be honest, I'm not that proud of all the telling I did in that paragraph. I will be revising this paragraph, it will be hard to show all of the things I told, but ill be able to work with that challenge. Now here is the revised version of that paragraph. 

"She continued looking out the window, observing that some of the paint on the fence had been peeling off. Her ribs were uncomfortably against the window, the cold touch sending small chills down her spine. She appreciated that the house was empty, even if there was one person coming soon. She let her body go as she leaned against the window and looked out of it."

So, I actually think i did really well revising that paragraph. While yes, it didn't explain the dad part, it gave the reader enough information to infer that not much money is on Olivia's name, which I think is enough. I'm really proud of that revision.

I think that my writing piece is really of four quality. It really overall shows a lot of my growth and the story is easy to follow, interesting, fluent, and the story line has a lot of potential. I've always been proud of my writing pieces but i think that this one is specifically better than the others. I really am happy about this writing piece and the work I put in it. I really am proud to say that wrote everything in that document. ]]> 2017-05-20 15:15:11 UTC https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172928546 World Wednesday hernan_kimber02 https://padlet.com/hernan_kimber02/c6ilpiwgd2ib/wish/172933663 Our lives always change, and sometimes, one class period is what causes it. I will be talking about something that I learned in science, and it's about our carbon footprints. Our carbon footprints are a big part of our lives, and quite literally as well. Our carbon footprint is how much energy we use, how much waste we produce, and how our actions and lifestyle impact our life. This is a big subject to write about in all honesty. While some might not notice it, our world is becoming a dump. Each day, more waste is being produced, deforestation occurs, and everything. Learning about this honestly changed my life. It changed the way I looked at packaging, deforestation, pollution, and how energies are produced. 

Our carbon footprints impact the way we live, and just being aware of it can help. Unplug a cord that isn't being used, even if it's not being used, energy still runs through it. Just being aware of small stuff really makes a difference. Another thing is recycling and composting. My old school, Central Elementary, was a green star school. Each class composted, recycled, and had a trash bin. It was a cycle, a process, another small thing I noticed is that in central, we used to get hand sanitizer before we ate lunch, and here, we just get our lunch. That doesn't have to do with our carbon footprint, just something I noticed. In anycase, the only classrooms we have that compost and strict recycling in is in science. I think it would be better if we had all of those cans in each classroom, then we would be able to produce less waste easily. 

Our carbon footprints make up our lives, and I have seen that I have been more aware of those kinds of things. I’ve been learning a lot more about things that impact our lives and impact who we are and our world around us. Learning about my carbon footprint has really helped me make changes in my life, and I’m proud of the changes made. 

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