https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3 Hello! Welcome to my padlet! Thank you for readying my writing pieces. Make sure to leave a comment, can't wait to read your comments! Please keep them positive :) en-us 2018-02-01 17:41:46 UTC 2018-03-28 16:54:52 UTC hello@padlet.com 23bdavey https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/237077744 I suggest that in your research simulation writing as your hook, you include a different that includes a person involved in one of the two articles so that the reader starts to understand what you writing will be about. When I started to read I thought I was on the wrong writing because you were talking about someone that has nothing to do with the article so just change the quote to someone that is involved with this topic. -Brianna Davey

]]> 2018-03-01 18:04:17 UTC https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/237077744 23scohen https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/237423289 Yo waddup squad fam. here i have a review of "Behind Locked Walls" by Veronica Legerme. the first star is the hook. it's really good and pulls me into the story. my second star is the conclusion. yeah it was pretty good. lastly, i didnt like the word choice. it wasn't lit enough. thats all.. kthxbai]]> 2018-03-02 15:01:21 UTC https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/237423289 23bvalente https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/237450557 Hey Veronica! Your vignette was amazing, I loved all of the description throughout the story it really brought it to life. Also, I really liked your use of dialogue and your dialogue tags used great word choice. In the future, I suggest checking over your pronunciations and making sure there's nothing missing (periods, commas, etc.). Overall, great story!
~Bianca V.]]> 2018-03-02 15:40:36 UTC https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/237450557 https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/237516459 Something that I really liked about  your  research simulation was your transition words. Instead of repeating then or next you used a variety of different transition words.- Brianna Davey]]> 2018-03-02 17:37:21 UTC https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/237516459 https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/237517651 Something else I enjoyed was your difference between the two sources because not everyone would have noticed and you explained it very clearly.-brianna davey]]> 2018-03-02 17:39:45 UTC https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/237517651 23elin https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/246988019 2018-03-28 16:50:22 UTC https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/246988019 23elin https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/246988114 One thing i liked about your magazine article was that you added dialog from other people. One thing needed improvement when you said "Rihanna and Jenner’s relationship was as toxic as fire beaming through the woods." I didn't really get what this means because does that mean Rihanna and Jenner's relationships is going horrible?]]> 2018-03-28 16:50:31 UTC https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/246988114 23elin https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/246988145 One thing you done well was when you]]> 2018-03-28 16:50:34 UTC https://padlet.com/23vlegerme/bsduekehn5q3/wish/246988145