Central Ideas by Karen Goudreau

kgoudreau — 2017-10-19 13:38:40 UTC

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Brenda

bmliza24 — 2017-10-19 15:04:05 UTC

This person would have to edit the evidence and of

Alexis

2017-10-19 15:04:17 UTC

1. Over all the paragraph is pretty good.
2. But in the begging it says he who is he?

Sujan

snand24 — 2017-10-19 15:04:35 UTC

Who is the he?

Madison

mmharp24 — 2017-10-19 15:04:35 UTC

This was confusing and hard to read. It made me think twice on what I was reading

Allie

2017-10-19 15:04:44 UTC

I'm just a bit confused about the mastery part.

Dhruv

dnsata24 — 2017-10-19 15:04:45 UTC

Aidan

adrubi24 — 2017-10-19 15:04:47 UTC

It was good and gets right to the point of it but it's not specific

Carter

2017-10-19 15:04:48 UTC

This does explain what the paragraph is about, but is very specific, rather than being broad.

Eliza

2017-10-19 15:04:55 UTC

It was a little confusing

John

2017-10-19 15:04:57 UTC

That is a little confusing and also who is the scientist?

Dhruv Satanur

dnsata24 — 2017-10-19 15:05:07 UTC

It is talking about a central idea for the person but it is fuzzy

Brenda

bmliza24 — 2017-10-19 15:05:07 UTC

Doesn't make any sense

Erin

2017-10-19 15:05:10 UTC

Explain who is He but this person explained a bit that is good

Emma

2017-10-19 15:05:14 UTC

1. I like the sentence starter
2. This is confusing. Who is "he"

Paige

psmcla24 — 2017-10-19 15:05:22 UTC

The example is pretty good but they need to remove some details.

Charlotte

clbarr24 — 2017-10-19 15:05:26 UTC

It was good but they did not really say it in a good way

Sophia

2017-10-19 15:05:27 UTC

I didn't really understand this

SUJAN

snand24 — 2017-10-19 15:05:36 UTC

One thing: it is not nice to use the authors last name in a paragraph, use some respectful phrases.

Allie

2017-10-19 15:05:36 UTC

Is he the author?

David

2017-10-19 15:05:36 UTC

1. I think around the end the student did a decent job.
2. I think they could simplify and fix their grammar.

Nina

nmtran24 — 2017-10-19 15:05:38 UTC

I don't get it? Who is he?

John

2017-10-19 15:05:43 UTC

I like the summary there is nothing wrong with it

Aidan

adrubi24 — 2017-10-19 15:05:50 UTC

The central idea is good but is not specific

Alexis

2017-10-19 15:05:50 UTC

1.good paragraph
2. But who is he it's really confusing

2017-10-19 15:06:00 UTC

Was a run on sentence kinda and a few errors of wrong words and needed some more periods and commas.

Madison

mmharp24 — 2017-10-19 15:06:01 UTC

This was a clear summary of the article, but It was a little too long to be a detail

Gopal

2017-10-19 15:06:12 UTC

Who is the he?

Ryan

2017-10-19 15:06:13 UTC

Who is he

Cody

2017-10-19 15:06:14 UTC

To short

Aidan

adrubi24 — 2017-10-19 15:06:24 UTC

It was good but the sentence became to long

Sophia

2017-10-19 15:06:24 UTC

I understand that there trying to compare something but it doesn't make sense.

Bianca

2017-10-19 15:06:29 UTC

Who is he?..

Ryan

2017-10-19 15:06:33 UTC

Doesn't she the article and makes no sense

Allie

2017-10-19 15:06:35 UTC

I feel like they could cut out a few details.

Gopal Patel

2017-10-19 15:06:52 UTC

The paragraph is pretty good.

Carter

2017-10-19 15:06:53 UTC

It tells what the paragraph is about, but it says almost exactly what the paragraph says, instead of saying something in different words.

To long

2017-10-19 15:07:04 UTC

Madison

mmharp24 — 2017-10-19 15:07:08 UTC

This is repetitive from the article. They did not put (most) of their own words. This was though clear about the summary.

Brenda

bmliza24 — 2017-10-19 15:07:12 UTC

This is really good

Erin

2017-10-19 15:07:14 UTC

Explains good
But again who is he

Aidan

adrubi24 — 2017-10-19 15:07:14 UTC

It was very good and specific

John

2017-10-19 15:07:20 UTC

Good but the grammar is a little off

Dhruv satanur

dnsata24 — 2017-10-19 15:07:33 UTC

It central idea is on the dot but it has 2 ideas that are distant and combined them.

Charlotte

clbarr24 — 2017-10-19 15:07:33 UTC

They did good at the paragraph but they added to much details

Aidan

adrubi24 — 2017-10-19 15:07:34 UTC

Very general it's very short and doesn't even state the central idea and is very confusing

Erin

2017-10-19 15:07:43 UTC

I like the beginning
It was long but good detail

Allie

2017-10-19 15:07:46 UTC

In the text, it says that the cheeseburger WAS created by accident.

Paige

psmcla24 — 2017-10-19 15:07:53 UTC

The exampl has good information but should remove one of the evidences.

David

2017-10-19 15:07:57 UTC

I think the person did a good job with the beginning but toward the mid-end, it got confusionsing and added extra detail.

Alexis

2017-10-19 15:08:14 UTC

The paragraph states a bunch of facts which is great
2. i think this paragraph needs to be fixed.

Brenda

bmliza24 — 2017-10-19 15:08:18 UTC

This really good and spesfic

Aidan

adrubi24 — 2017-10-19 15:08:32 UTC

Too short and general

Eliza

2017-10-19 15:08:35 UTC

I think that it is a run on sentence but it is good

Allie

2017-10-19 15:08:38 UTC

I get it, but the author already states that our ancestors found fire not made it.

Emma

2017-10-19 15:08:42 UTC

1. I like this one. It states a lot of details the only thing is it might be toooo much<------ (that's my improvement thingy)

Jonathan

2017-10-19 15:08:47 UTC

Too lonf

john

2017-10-19 15:08:49 UTC

100 percent right

Aidan

adrubi24 — 2017-10-19 15:08:50 UTC

It was good and was specific and not general

Erin

2017-10-19 15:08:53 UTC

It is good bit make sure your words make sense

Cody

2017-10-19 15:09:05 UTC

No sense making

Michael

2017-10-19 15:09:09 UTC

Who is he is the author

Charlotte

clbarr24 — 2017-10-19 15:09:13 UTC

I think they did good but I think they added the same info and add a lot of details

Erin

2017-10-19 15:09:28 UTC

A bit confusing
Add more

Sujan

snand24 — 2017-10-19 15:09:34 UTC

You used evidence twice, and you should probably use a synonym.

John

2017-10-19 15:09:42 UTC

To short and didn't make sense

Brenda

bmliza24 — 2017-10-19 15:09:53 UTC

This this one is good but there is too much

Allie

2017-10-19 15:10:02 UTC

I would not use just the authors Last name. You could use "the author" or "Justin O'Niell"

Brenda

bmliza24 — 2017-10-19 15:10:04 UTC

Who is he?

John

2017-10-19 15:10:21 UTC

Can you be more specific

John

2017-10-19 15:10:39 UTC

Need to be more specific

Erin

2017-10-19 15:12:13 UTC

Good detail

Erin

2017-10-19 15:12:31 UTC

Give more examples
But good job

Charlotte

clbarr24 — 2017-10-19 15:12:47 UTC

It is good but I think their words were kind of confusing

Charlotte

clbarr24 — 2017-10-19 15:14:30 UTC

It did not make any sense

Charlotte

clbarr24 — 2017-10-19 15:16:03 UTC

They added the same words and some words were confusing

Charlotte

clbarr24 — 2017-10-19 15:19:46 UTC

They need a to be more specific in the sayings