https://padlet.com/27rplatts/bcxw1xpl2ufxxi5v Please provide some feedback on my writing pieces! en-us 2022-01-31 17:41:32 UTC 2022-04-11 17:08:58 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/27rplatts/bcxw1xpl2ufxxi5v/wish/2023455009 Hi Robbie! I think that your persuasive essay is great. One thing that I really like about your essay is your word choice. By using high level vocabulary in your piece, it makes the whole essay seem more professional and brings it to the next level. I also think that the anecdote in your 3rd body paragraph truly makes the issue of spotted lantern flies feel more dire. By allowing the reader to put themselves into that scenario, it definitely made me more eager to get rid of these pests!
One thing I think you could improve, however, is that mostly in your 2nd body paragraph and a bit in the others, it seems like it has two separate claims in it? For example, in your 2nd body paragraph, you begin with talking about how the spotted lantern fly doesn’t have many natural predators with one piece of evidence, but then it begins explaining how the spotted lantern fly drains sap from plants with your other piece of evidence. I think that both of these claims are good and have the potential to persuade your reader, but by focusing on one, and really bringing that point home, you could make your points even more clear.
All in all, I think that you did an expert job with this essay. Keep making using great word choice, using anecdotes, and in the future, maybe clarify your claims to bring your essay to the next level!]]> 2022-02-01 14:39:44 UTC https://padlet.com/27rplatts/bcxw1xpl2ufxxi5v/wish/2023455009 https://padlet.com/27rplatts/bcxw1xpl2ufxxi5v/wish/2023957865 For starters, I really liked your word choice. There were some very advanced words in your piece that really brought the whole thing together. My second star is for the call to action. It gave a nice summary of the piece and I think it would be very effective in convincing people to care about spotted lantern flies. My one wish is just to let you know, you have a personal pronoun in the first thesis. I would remove that.]]> 2022-02-01 18:08:43 UTC https://padlet.com/27rplatts/bcxw1xpl2ufxxi5v/wish/2023957865 https://padlet.com/27rplatts/bcxw1xpl2ufxxi5v/wish/2088352909 Hey Robbie. Your Buy My Product presentation was great. It was put together well, and organized(like your product). It also proved your point about what your product is and how it is useful. One wish I had was you make it slightly more engaging/fun, and a little less factual info. Other than that, great job!]]> 2022-03-10 13:47:59 UTC https://padlet.com/27rplatts/bcxw1xpl2ufxxi5v/wish/2088352909 27kreinemann https://padlet.com/27rplatts/bcxw1xpl2ufxxi5v/wish/2139522476 My first star is your design. Your design is very unique and well constructed and I thought you designed it very well.
My second star is your subtopics. I thought they were all interesting and sometimes it was something I didn't even know existed!
My wish is that sometimes I got a bit confused and had to re-read to understand what you were trying to say.
Overall, I thought your informative article was really good! ]]> 2022-04-11 17:08:58 UTC https://padlet.com/27rplatts/bcxw1xpl2ufxxi5v/wish/2139522476