Revising Your Narrative Writing by Alice McNally https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv Revise 1 or 2 of the "telling" sentences below and rewrite it and add more description by using strong action words, feelings or emotions using dialogue to make a "showing" sentence. en-us 2020-05-13 10:37:40 UTC 2023-02-22 22:36:08 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f387.png The baby walked toward the cat and tried to pull its tail. All of a sudden, the cat clawed the baby's face and the baby wailed so loudly that his mom had to sit him down on her lap. amcnally13 https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570646537 2020-05-13 16:46:06 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570646537 amcnally13 https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570655640 2020-05-13 16:49:22 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570655640 IA https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570729136 The rabbit was it his burrow when a fox tried to claw at him. The fox dug in the burrow and found the rabbit. The rabbit got chased by the fox until he ran on the road, and when he turned around, his eyes were as wide as saucers. a car came rushing toward him. Thankfully, the driver found him and stoped in the nick of time. "Phew" thought the rabbit. "No one will be eating me today."

]]> 2020-05-13 17:16:37 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570729136 MF https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570729707 the boy was going on the bus when his homework got wet, suddenly, he started screaming. He was so sad because his teacher knew that this   had happened before, so he knew she would be very mad at him.]]> 2020-05-13 17:16:50 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570729707 The bunny was hoping on the road get to the store, but then out of no where a car came and almost hit the bunny. The bunny was so lucky it wasn't hit because the car turned just in time. https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570729735 md

]]> 2020-05-13 17:16:51 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570729735 Aw https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570730089 The little girl walked through the grassy field to her favorite park.

]]> 2020-05-13 17:16:59 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570730089 Dm https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570730737 The boy was sad because he lost his homework on the bus while dancing on the bus]]> 2020-05-13 17:17:12 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570730737 jc The little girl was walking in the grass one day when she met a snake.oh! I forgot to tell you that the girl was a cow girl! She took the snake and used it as a lasso and got a rock to fling it into the air with.She then threw it into the air and down came the snake, going faster than a race horse and it was badly hurt, so it couldn't attack any one , so the girl kept walking in the grass. https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570730956 2020-05-13 17:17:17 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570730956 AH https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570730981 The boy lost his home work when he was walking to school.]]> 2020-05-13 17:17:18 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570730981 SD https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570731058 My teacher told me that i got good grades i jumped in joy!]]> 2020-05-13 17:17:20 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570731058 Bg. My teacher told us about the fire so we atade alorte. https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570732853 2020-05-13 17:17:59 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570732853 Aw https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570733634 The boy was sad when he lost his homework because it had his favorite pencil attatched to it.]]> 2020-05-13 17:18:17 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570733634 Aw https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570737587 A rabbit was crossing a road so a bird wouldn't eat it but a car was coming so the car swerved right  just in time.]]> 2020-05-13 17:19:51 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570737587 The bunny was hoping on the road because it was trying to get to the store but a car was going very fast and almost hit the bunny https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570738512 2020-05-13 17:20:14 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570738512 IA https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570739609 The boy walked to school not knowing his bag was open. A dog came and ran up behind him and grabbed his homework. The boy did not notice it, so when he came to school, The teacher asked him where his homework is and then he realized it was gone.]]> 2020-05-13 17:20:42 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570739609 IAR https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570743034 The  rabbit was hopping around the street when car passed by the rabbit but as soon as the diver saw the rabbit he stoped before he hit the bunny.]]> 2020-05-13 17:21:53 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570743034 Ah https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570743513 The teachers said their is fire and the teacher said , “I will call the firefighters to help.“]]> 2020-05-13 17:22:05 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570743513 The little girl walked through the field to go home https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570746239 2020-05-13 17:22:59 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570746239 SL https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570748116 The quiet and self kept boy was sad because his math homework and reading homework were the best pecies of homework he'd ever done and they were gone.]]> 2020-05-13 17:23:41 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570748116 The house next to our school caught fire because they put torches near the walls. https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570749912 2020-05-13 17:24:24 UTC https://padlet.com/amcnally13/bahxmc5snmyfeyzv/wish/570749912