https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w 🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️🅿️ en-us 2022-02-01 13:25:28 UTC 2022-04-11 16:50:50 UTC hello@padlet.com 27mmartucci https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2023536688 One star is I liked your body paragraphs and I thought that they had a good flow especially the warrants were very good and made each set of data easier to understand.
Another star you had is your counter argument and personally I thought it was very good and descriptive, school is also very important when playing sports so I can agree, nice job with that. 
My one wish is that the first claim was a little more clear because I didn't really understand it to well or what you were trying to really say in it maybe? Otherwise Amazing Job on this!]]> 2022-02-01 15:11:58 UTC https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2023536688 27miannotta https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2023854592 Hi Andrew, one thing I genuinely enjoyed about your essay were your 3 claims and body paragraphs that go along with them. All three claim were solid, and you explained your points solidly. The time in my class ran out, but I really liked reading your essay. Great job!]]> 2022-02-01 17:22:40 UTC https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2023854592 https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2023915543 Hi Andrew! I enjoyed reading your persuasive essay. I liked how you ensured people that the complex would come and you would work toward it. One thing you could have improved was only crediting your source once per data. Great essay!]]> 2022-02-01 17:49:10 UTC https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2023915543 27askara1 https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2023936147 One wish I have for you is to check you’re citation + data grammar. I see that in your paragraphs you are missing a citation or adding citations that aren’t needed. A star I have for you is I liked your claims. Your claims didn't just benefit the people who play sports, but also people in a community in general. as a reader it persuaded me to want this topic too (we had the same writing piece). Another star is about your conclusion. I liked how you said if Scotch Plains - Fanwood had a sports complex it would be #1 in NJ. Your writing is pushing 🅿️]]> 2022-02-01 17:58:33 UTC https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2023936147 27aliguori https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2023946398 Star - Your counter-argument made me think about the other point of view but then pulled me back into thinking about how the complex could really help more than school could. This was good in the sense that your idea about the complex could really improve the readers everyday living.

Star - I thought the conclusion really rapped up the piece well. If I were to skip strait to the conclusion I would be able to get a good sense of how your whole piece went and what all your claims were about.]]> 2022-02-01 18:03:24 UTC https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2023946398 27jau https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2088337471 I really wish you could have showed that the prototype was magnetic because i saw Patrick say it was magnetic. I liked how your presentation was clear to read. I liked how the cup could hold many object instead of a pencil]]> 2022-03-10 13:39:54 UTC https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2088337471 27askara1 https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2088850494 Star: I like the general idea for the product because personally I lose my pencils and I would invest in your product.
Star: I really like the feature that it can charge your iPad while also loading up to 8 pencils! This persuades me a lot to buy your product.
Wish: One wish I had for you was to add more information to your slides. I feel that a lot of the data you had was repeated often and the Sharks wouldn’t like that.



]]> 2022-03-10 17:46:43 UTC https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2088850494 27mkarp https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2088870387 Star: I think that the practical use for the product was very clear and pushin 🅿️. It established the practical use and the benefits of in a simple yet informative way.

Star: I thought that you did a great job with explaining why your product is better than competitors by appolying a complete comparison. It really established why yours would be more beneficailly than others.

Wish: I wish that your target audience established a much more wide range of people considering that students aren’t the only ones who use it and parents are too much of a generalization.]]> 2022-03-10 17:56:59 UTC https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2088870387 https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2139149936 Star: I like your data and you parenthetical phrases, they really help someone like me who doesn’t know a lot of abbreviations at all.
Wish: I wish that in the first paragraph that your data didn’t repeat itself.]]> 2022-04-11 13:24:14 UTC https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2139149936 27askara1 https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2139492354 Star : I really liked the images you used in your article. They showed how players act in the finals and how competitive they are.

Star : I really liked your subtopics because they really informed me about the NBA finals. 

Wish : I wish you shortened up the glossary to 6-7 words because it was a lot to read

Wish: I wish you shortened up the first subtopic. It looked like a huge chump of writing which is boring for a reader.]]> 2022-04-11 16:50:31 UTC https://padlet.com/27abalagot/b1rm7knrnxg89e4w/wish/2139492354