Peer Commentary on Poem Writing Task - Group 4 by NIE Literature Group https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak Select four poems and post a comment for each saying what you appreciate about it and affirm the experiences shared. en-us 2020-04-02 07:08:18 UTC 2020-04-18 14:48:56 UTC hello@padlet.com Two Objectives: 1) Affirmation; 2) Appreciation. nieliterature https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/504058586
Task:
a) Read all the 7 poems. Comment on at least 4 of the poems in this Padlet by clicking on the '+' button at the bottom if each column.
b) When commenting on the poems, and we would like you to 1. Affirm what you like about the poem and 2. Appreciate interesting techniques used. DO NOT give one word comments. Try to be detailed in your comments and give examples. Your comments should be at least three sentences for each poem.

Note: Use the following guidelines as you craft your comments:
 
1. Affirmation
DO: 
👍 consider what about the speaker's/poet's experience do you empathise with, and share your personal response. 
👍 affirm any of the experiences shared by relating it to personal experiences or knowledge of other similar experiences.
DON'T:
👎 put down another person's point of view expressed in their poem.

2. Appreciation
DO: 
👍 point out what was especially striking in terms of any possible literary devices or techniques used.
👍 point out any significant themes or ideas shared
DON'T:
👎 re-write the poem for your friend
👎 criticise the perceived quality of the poem

When responding to a fellow student’s poem, consider using these comment starters to generate more thoughtful responses:
👍 “I especially related to how...”
👍 “I could empathise with...”
👍 “What struck me the most was...”
👍 “I was surprised by…”
👍 “What I found interesting/intriguing was…”
👍 “I connected to…”
👍 “One word/phrase/point that you wrote that stands out for me is…”
👍 "The poem made think about/ reflect on...”
]]> 2020-04-13 04:59:18 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/504058586 Powerful Message! rebaryo https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/511976780 1) I love how the Poet addresses the  various stereotypes and restrictions placed on women and young girls.  I absolutely adore how the poet shows the restrictions  to be the hurdle that she has to pass before she can be her, own true, self.
2)  I do think the technique of asking questions is one that is very interesting and very effective for the issue that is being dicussed. I do feel that this provokes thinking in the reader, which I strongly believe is the best outcome for this poem to achieve as poeple should start questioniong as to why these rules and restrictions were put in place in the first place. 

-Andrea.R]]> 2020-04-17 02:35:33 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/511976780 Chanel. https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512004666 This poem tackles the gender stereotypes and questions the sexist, perhaps misogynistic social norms that we face everyday and I like that about it. I believe the use of repetition is really effective in emphasizing the doubt the speaker harbours.


]]> 2020-04-17 03:06:42 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512004666 Chanel. https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512005544 I like that this poem addresses how overwhelming it is to be in Singapore sometimes, with the competitiveness and all the emphasis on succeeding the conventional way. It’s really a sad thing because they’re right, sometimes, if we don’t know how to run, we don’t know how to move at all and we’re left behind. This also reminds me of the scene in Off Centre where Vinod tells Saloma about his status as a mentally ill rat who has only been taught to run and therefore never learnt to walk. I believe the accusatory tone and the usage of “you” really suits the poem.




]]> 2020-04-17 03:07:42 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512005544 Chanel. https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512006078 This poem speaks on the issue of bullying related to race, and it really brings out how sensitive the topic is for some and that while time may past, the harassment might have already manifested in years of self-doubt and therefore, no matter how guilty the perpetrator may feel, the scars have already been made. I like that it does not sugarcoat that aspect of bullying and makes its readers reflect on the racial slurs they may have carelessly said.]]> 2020-04-17 03:08:24 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512006078 Chanel. https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512006418 This poem is one that hit a little close to home because it highlights what I think every girl goes through during their adolescence. The entire cycle of self-doubt, of low self esteem, especially in a society that has grown increasingly judgmental with social media. 


]]> 2020-04-17 03:08:51 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512006418 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512084203 I love how this is something that i can relate to and when i read this poem i actually started reflecting about myself and notice that there is really a stereotype that strips our own identity away which is really sad because we are not ourselves anymore but a representation of what society wants us to be.
but i think the presentation of the poem could be nicer and easier to read (idk if its a style thing) but i really love the message behind it!]]> 2020-04-17 04:47:28 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512084203 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512092329 i really love this poem, because of the accusing tone it has and made me think if i actually hurt u before. This addresses problems that are happening in real time]]> 2020-04-17 04:59:24 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512092329 Impressive and Strong rebaryo https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512115512 1) I love how the poet named the poem to be in the french term, "never seen". I do think that it is a very creative way to show what the poem is talking about, as the poem's titles usually gives the readers a glimpse as to what is being discussed.

2)  I especially love the various metaphors used to convey the message, for example, " My hearts melt like diary milk, the same shade as my skin". This quote illustrates the poet's skin color. There are various instances in which the poet employs literary devices, and i do find that quite admirable!

-Andrea.R]]> 2020-04-17 05:33:36 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512115512 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512210715 I really like how the poet turned the domino effect into life and portrayed the feelings of the first,last and the dominoes that are in between.What I found really interesting was how the last domino "takes the heaviest load" and doesn't know what caused the fall which makes sense if we think about it.I also really liked the title,"fractured domino effect" because it gives a "darkness" to the domino effect.]]> 2020-04-17 07:12:49 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512210715 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512225086 I enjoyed reading this poem and found this relatable because it portrays the persona being restricted of their own identity or individualization by people who are supposed to guide them which I assume is the parents or the teachers. I like how the poet uses imagery to emphasize on the meaning and bring the persons's perspective to life.]]> 2020-04-17 07:23:02 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512225086 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512238635 What I found striking about this poem is how the poet portrayed Singapore's education system into a rat race which constantly tires out the rat which in this case is the message the poet has for the system. ]]> 2020-04-17 07:32:36 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512238635 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512243348 I like how the poet exposes the gender stereotypes and discrimination through this poem and also shows how it strips of one's identity and freedom.]]> 2020-04-17 07:35:40 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512243348 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512293659 I like how gender stereotypes are being addressed via a tone of indignance, really puts us viewers in your point of view and even makes us think back of the times when we've been discriminated by our gender. However, what is the real you? It interests the readers and we want to know you more and how gender stereotypes holds you back from doing certain things to achieving the real you
- Victoria]]> 2020-04-17 08:07:18 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512293659 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512321104 its a very interesting and unique poem
the structure is very interesting and the content is relatable]]> 2020-04-17 08:22:39 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512321104 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512322334 i love how this poem talks about gender stereotypes openly. it doesnt sugarcoat the issue. it feels very personal to readers as well because the poet used a first person's perspective. i relate to these issues and it is interesting  that the poet asked questions to get the message across. that was powerful.

]]> 2020-04-17 08:23:21 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512322334 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512340045 very cool how u used a different language and how direct it is. 
your poem sounds like it came from your heart and the experience is very real and personal to you, thereforre sounding like a mini rant which was beautifully done]]> 2020-04-17 08:33:02 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512340045 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512355908 interesting and very captivating as it has alot of feelings captured into this one poem. it links the domino effect to life very well and i love the ending]]> 2020-04-17 08:40:10 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512355908 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512358359 alot of images came to me when i read this poem and the descriptions were well written
it really hits hard and i can relate to how trapped one feels
i love this poem alot]]> 2020-04-17 08:41:34 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512358359 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512362411 this poem really highlights a struggle one would feel from expectations 
i guess that the"..." were done intentionally but i cannot fully understand the purpose of it. isit to show the personas uncertainty in things?  but a very unique style

]]> 2020-04-17 08:43:47 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512362411 Society in a summary rebaryo https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512364974 1) I love the way the poet described society to be, the poet reveals the true nature of scoiety and how society percieves him/her to be. The poets description on how society, and his/her parenst are restricting him/her was compelling.

2)  I love how the poet employed certain literary devices, such as the achievements and accolades being percieved as diamonds was really clever of the Poet.  I also love how the poem's tone is as though the Poet is addressing the person whom she is talking about in the peom. 

-Andrea.R]]> 2020-04-17 08:45:14 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512364974 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512380484 i love that this poem uses 2nd person's perspective to connect with the readers. the accusatory tone makes us readers really think deeply if we do these things that the persona mentions. throughput the poem, the persona places emphasis on others telling them everything they shouldn't do and this is beautifully wrapped up in the last stanza with the persona asking what exactly is it that they want he/she to be.]]> 2020-04-17 08:55:00 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512380484 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512382465 this poem uses effective questioning in order to gain its readers' attention. it also referenced to off centre which is great because as lit students, we have analysed the book so much that we somewhat connect with the characters and are able to call back to references in the book. im able to relate some themes from off centre to this poem. it also talks about the sad transition from childhood to teenage in singapore]]> 2020-04-17 08:56:01 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512382465 Striking Comparison! rebaryo https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512387475 1) I love the Poem's overall message! Its absolutely ingenius of the poet to link metamorphosis to a rat race. I also love the Poem's name, as it is very intriguing, and is also quite insightful as to what the poet is going to talk about in the poem.

2)  The poem makes a clear reference to Singapore's education system, and how children seem to lose their innocence as they lose theri "bright smiles". I really do find it quite commendable, as the Poet is addressing problems and getting to the heart of the problem by emphasising how the whole problem began.The poet is calling out the whole system. Moreover, the poet calling the whole system is very powerful, as a rat race is an endless, self-defeating, or pointless pursuit. The phrase equates humans to rats attempting to earn a reward such as cheese, in vain, And in this poem, it is addressing how Singaporean students chase after good grades and "success" blindly.

-Andrea.R]]> 2020-04-17 08:58:28 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512387475 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512409392 the metaphor of the persona being a tree is powerful because despite the adversities, it still grew, showing that the persona remained strong. i love that this is in a letter format because it feels so much more directed at the bully and just shows the intense emotions the persona has built up against the bullies.]]> 2020-04-17 09:10:27 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512409392 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512427291 i loved the use of french in the title to give us a glimpse into the overarching theme of the poem.the metaphor of the dairy milk chocolate was really powerful as that's something i relate to as well. the other metaphors are equally powerful. the persona's realisation of what a society he/she lives in comes across beautifully in the poem.]]> 2020-04-17 09:20:18 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512427291 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512446071 this poem is really powerful in terms of highlighting how we're focusing on chasing of success and other things that the world expects us to have, and it really hits the readers. good job :D
- victoria]]> 2020-04-17 09:30:16 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512446071 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512454604 really love the imagery and metaphors given in the poem which strikingly conveys the pain you've felt since such a young age :( definitely is a reminder to racist bullies in Singapore that race does not define our intellectual abilities

- victoria]]> 2020-04-17 09:34:46 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512454604 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512460761 highlights the limitations of what being a girl feels like and what we are stopped from doing solely because of our gender. the ellipsis highlights uncertainty because of the comments from people around us and that's something really powerful in this poem :) 
- victoria]]> 2020-04-17 09:38:18 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/512460761 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/514354299 i like how the writer has a repetition of the word 'want' as it puts an emphasis on what you want to put across. furthermore, it is a strong word as it shows that the writer is very persistent about her/his beliefs. however i feel like the poem is very repetitive so i think you could elaborate on your point more :)]]> 2020-04-18 14:05:05 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/514354299 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/514373441 i enjoyed reading this poem as the writer has written it at in way where we will fully emphasize with what she has gone through. there is also a hint of how she doesnt really care about the negativity around her by using the word 'just'. ]]> 2020-04-18 14:24:31 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/514373441 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/514384797 it is very interesting how the writer shows how the domino effect will bring negativity towards everyone. the last stanza really made me realize how the last one in the domino will have to take in the most impact. the fact that the last one will have to absorb all the impact that is being put. an also how the last one has no one to rely to and i can infer that the last one is the one who wants to make a change.]]> 2020-04-18 14:35:54 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/514384797 https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/514390597 i love how the poem exposes how the singapore education system is. having the top education comes with a cost and that is our happiness. how us singaporean students have questionable morals as we are forced to put our success in education before anything else ]]> 2020-04-18 14:41:56 UTC https://padlet.com/nieliterature/atrxhax1jvak/wish/514390597