https://padlet.com/26jmccummings/arieasksd4pe Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 15:13:03 UTC 2019-12-10 14:59:51 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f984.png 26svanterpool https://padlet.com/26jmccummings/arieasksd4pe/wish/421697972 I loved how you used a lot of sensory words in the story. I can imagine everything that Jordyn is doing. I also loved that you described everything that was around Jordyn. It gave me a nice picture of the setting. I wish that you can decide if it’s 3rd person or 1st person. Otherwise, really nice story. 

]]> 2019-12-09 16:37:29 UTC https://padlet.com/26jmccummings/arieasksd4pe/wish/421697972 26shaley https://padlet.com/26jmccummings/arieasksd4pe/wish/422185021 Something I really enjoyed your writing piece was the part when the class was talking about what they wanted to Christmas. I love how three people said what they wanted, but then you tie it in with when you were talking about what Jordan wants for Christmas. It truly gives the writing that “mature factor”. Something else I liked is how you really did show realistic thoughts of Jordan. They truly were thoughts of a 5th grader and how quickly their thoughts jump. That also shows how the can be mentally unstable.Something I think you could work on is that you could do a better job at editing because I did see a good amount of  mistakes. ]]> 2019-12-10 14:52:18 UTC https://padlet.com/26jmccummings/arieasksd4pe/wish/422185021