https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 17:27:33 UTC 2026-01-09 14:35:42 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/26bd.png https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2357732008 Your piece is amazing! A strength was all of your detail. I could feel what you were feeling in that exact moment when you started to not feel good and when you got sent to the nurse. Another strength was some of your figurative language. Your figurative language put me in the moment. I could see this happening in real life. Another strength was the beginning of your peace. It got me hooked and it made me just want to read more and more about what happened to you that day. I wasn’t able to find any wishes in your memoir. That’s how good it was! ]]> 2022-10-26 17:40:54 UTC https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2357732008 https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2486535503 Hi, Kayla! A strength in your essay, “Uniforms are Not Good for Kids,” is the anecdote. I liked how your scenes were very elaborate to the point you're trying to make. As you explained the importance of your data in a scene you don’t just list a scene to make the story come together. Instead you use good descriptive word choice and make the scene in a way that shows that you care about your issue. In addition, I like the way you include people talking to each other. This is because it makes the anecdote come alive. However, a suggestion I could offer for improvement in your essay is to have more elaborate punctuation. While you had an amazing essay, there were some errors in punctuation that didn’t seem right to match with the he rest of your work.  Overall, your essay you created an amazing essay!

]]> 2023-02-17 16:31:14 UTC https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2486535503 https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2490188893 Hey Kayla, something good in your essay was definitely your antidote. I like how you explained the scenarios and fully expanded them . I also liked your introduction paragraph and how it was Thoroughly explained and you made it so that readers would want to read the whole thing. One thing I think you could have changed was the last part of your conclusion paragraph because that last part didn’t make that much sense to me]]> 2023-02-21 19:29:16 UTC https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2490188893 29malhouch https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2524290834 Hi Kayla! One start I think did well was expanding is some parts nad adding a lot of detail. Another thing I think you did well was choosing a good theme for you essay. But I think one thing you could improve on is not using the same transition word more than once.

]]> 2023-03-20 21:38:11 UTC https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2524290834 29igiannacio https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2525808430 Hey Kayla! One star I will give you for your paragraph “Human and Animal Discrimination” is that you didn’t repeat transition words in your paragraph. You really varied your choice of words and didn’t sound repetitive to the reader, AKA me! Another star is your elaborate explanations. You expanded them a lot with tons of support for your evidence and it was very convincing that your claim is true! I couldn’t find a wish because your paragraph is great!]]> 2023-03-21 17:30:39 UTC https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2525808430 https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2623544542 Hey Kayla! Your presentation was great. I like how you rymed your title,it makes me feel really interested in your research of tik tok. I also like how you put your sentences in bullet points so it won't be in a huge paragh. I like it because I think it sounds nicer and it's short and sweet. Another thing that I loved about your work is that it matched with each background,it looked very aesthetic. One wish is that maybe add more details to your bullet point sentences.]]> 2023-06-14 15:09:20 UTC https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2623544542 https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2623683516 2023-06-14 18:23:20 UTC https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2623683516 https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2623691413 Hi Kayla, the star of your writing presentation was how intriguing it was to read your hook and how it really caught my attention. As well as how your hook included some Mandy details and sounded very unique. Another star that I noticed from your presentation was your closing because it ended off your slides perfectly. Leaving your reader with a simple reminder of your topic so they can forever remember your topic . Though your slides were well I do wish your slides included more detail and connected to your topic in a better way. So your reader could be more interested and pleased with your presentation visually.]]> 2023-06-14 18:35:46 UTC https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2623691413 29cjackson https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2624962289 I love your title, “The Tik Tok Clock”. I like it because it is very catchy to me. I loved all of your pictures, they were so pretty! For example, the one on slide four of TikTok open and the American flag behind it. Overall it was great, but I think on slides 3-5 you can try replacing “TikTok” with ‘it’ in some spots. I think it was an amazing presentation though.]]> 2023-06-16 00:34:05 UTC https://padlet.com/29kpadillacarvajal/akxon3yxft4futpj/wish/2624962289