https://padlet.com/26jleske/akbcpm17kt9d Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 19:28:49 UTC 2025-10-22 12:43:24 UTC hello@padlet.com https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/thumb/7/7a/Manchester_United_FC_crest.svg/1010px-Manchester_United_FC_crest.svg.png https://padlet.com/26jleske/akbcpm17kt9d/wish/420958180 A thing that I like in your story is  that you added more detail since I was last on and you did a lot of the things I told you to like add more info about people. Another thing that I like is that you added more detail about where your character is at the time and more about him. :)
One thing I can suggest is that when you read it over there can be mistakes and you have to read it good.
 

]]> 2019-12-06 19:23:34 UTC https://padlet.com/26jleske/akbcpm17kt9d/wish/420958180 26bdoyle https://padlet.com/26jleske/akbcpm17kt9d/wish/421813720 I really like how you used first person to demonstrate his feelings really goodly (is that a word) 
I kind of find it funny about the scene were he talks to the kid is that there was no parent so it made it funny that a kid was at the hospital alone 
A wish i have is that you would use more descriptive language and describe the charictor more

]]> 2019-12-09 19:23:12 UTC https://padlet.com/26jleske/akbcpm17kt9d/wish/421813720 26jcolvin https://padlet.com/26jleske/akbcpm17kt9d/wish/422199316 Hi Jonah, I really liked how Kyle was scared and then he saw a kid with cancer whom may not as be as lucky as Kyle or anyone. I also like how the title was named “Remembering” because Kyle was remembering he was lucky enough to do these things. Something you could improve on is I saw a lot of gigantic paragraphs, so maybe you could shorten them.

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