https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf Make a note of how each stage has helped you to edit en-us 2018-02-04 16:57:39 UTC 2018-02-27 13:23:40 UTC hello@padlet.com rsudlow3 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227872539 I found this helpful as my partner spotted homophone mix-ups, but I'm still not sure my punctuation is always right..

Using this website helped me check my pace:
https://ttsreader.com/]]> 2018-02-04 16:59:00 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227872539 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227980917 I've noticed repetition and unnecessary words in my piece of writing.]]> 2018-02-05 07:08:49 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227980917 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227981243 I found this helpful as my partner noticed that some of the words I had italicised in my writing were not really emphasised that much when I was speaking.

I used Grammarly when I was checking my work for grammar and spelling. I also used the same website that Miss Sudlow suggested to check my pace and if my commas were placed in the right place, etc.
https://ttsreader.com/]]> 2018-02-05 07:11:05 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227981243 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227981607 I found that reading over my piece from different perspectives helps me figure out how to improve it for everyone.]]> 2018-02-05 07:12:47 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227981607 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227982589 My partner was able to help me out,  in creating an effective sentence structure. She helped in enhancing my vocabulary. ]]> 2018-02-05 07:17:40 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227982589 rhyhammon https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227982871 I have realised that although I talk about potential counter arguments I don't express clearly enough why my point is more valid.

I've also noticed that I only reinforce my points with actual facts near the very end of my essay.]]> 2018-02-05 07:19:08 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227982871 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227982924 I found that having my partner look over my Vlog was helpful as he spotted mistakes that I wouldn't have. For example: I wrote "Strip-up" instead of ]]> 2018-02-05 07:19:24 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227982924 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227982950 I noticed some ways that I could change the format of my writing so that it is more fluent. I was also able to cut back on some of the italicised words based on my feedback from my partner from the last idea. I was also able to choose some synonyms to words that work better in my writing's context.]]> 2018-02-05 07:19:30 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227982950 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227982978 This was very useful, my partner noticed that words that I emphasized in my vlog were not italicized in the written version. She also pointed out that I should try and us a range of punctuation to reach a top band.]]> 2018-02-05 07:19:39 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227982978 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227982990 My partner noticed my mistakes in spelling and tone of voice.
i have started to make some changes where my partner suggested. ]]> 2018-02-05 07:19:42 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227982990 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983019 By listening to my vlog again, I realized I had some unnecessary points that were not developed. This allowed me to make my coursework more concise and clear.]]> 2018-02-05 07:19:53 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983019 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983083 The first activity was extremely useful as having someone read your work and point out mistakes 
and even a help structure it better helped to enhance my writing. ]]> 2018-02-05 07:20:11 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983083 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983315 The buddy up activity helped us a lot as we all had very different perceptions of what was going on in each other's pieces. And where we need to fix punctuation add emotive language and some humour in it]]> 2018-02-05 07:21:18 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983315 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983540 Some of my paragraphs are not as clear as i want. 
Rhys's constructive feedback has helped me to improve]]> 2018-02-05 07:22:19 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983540 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983640 I have some irrelevant sentences in my piece, which stops the flow of all my points. ]]> 2018-02-05 07:22:47 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983640 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983687 I am in a group with Zayaan and Alexia, and i have found it useful to get their input on who i am talking to and how my language is effective on them. We also went through sentence structure and are currently working on grammar.

I do appreciate their inputs, and will work on trying to incorporate new effective vocab for my audience.]]> 2018-02-05 07:23:02 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983687 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983718 Watching myself helped me understand the mistakes I have made. For example I repeated the phrase because and escaping it will be a quick fix because I can use a thesaurus. As well as the phrasing was a bit muddled up. ]]> 2018-02-05 07:23:11 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983718 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983782 I realised while speaking that I've actually strayed off topic and I need to be more concise in my coursework. However, I feel I spoke well.]]> 2018-02-05 07:23:29 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227983782 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227984001 By listening to my writing, I was able to see that some of the paragraphs that I had made short and separate on purpose really aren't dramatic enough to be on their own. ]]> 2018-02-05 07:24:13 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227984001 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227984854 2018-02-05 07:27:46 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227984854 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227985069 Buddying up with a partner was helpful because by reading it out loud to yourself you might not be able to realise many parts that doesn't sound right but having someone listen to you, they are able to realise parts and mistakes you might've not.]]> 2018-02-05 07:28:48 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227985069 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227985239 Alexia and Daniella provided me with valid and highlighted feedback... they corrected my punctuation and any sentence structure errors. However, this may be biased as peers often fear to be brutal. ]]> 2018-02-05 07:29:36 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227985239 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227986256 I find it really helpful being able to discuss with someone about your ideas especially when it is someone you know and trust and they know you.]]> 2018-02-05 07:33:57 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227986256 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227986271 This was helpful as my partner picked up on a few errors that I hadn't before.

The test to speech conversion helped me check my pace.]]> 2018-02-05 07:34:00 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227986271 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227986557 2018-02-05 07:34:56 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227986557 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227986725 As my group and I (Julien, Nour and Jannah) have discussed, we find it really helpful being able to discuss ideas and thoughts with people you know and trust. It is also helpful being able to just 'go with the flow' and share your ideas and to get different perspectives.]]> 2018-02-05 07:35:33 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227986725 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987235 My partner was very helpful, and allowed me to identify any speech errors. I need to try a variety of sentence structures. ]]> 2018-02-05 07:37:31 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987235 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987264 When you are hearing the things that you say, it gives a different perspective and helps you to put yourselves in the viewers shoes, and see what you would comment on.]]> 2018-02-05 07:37:40 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987264 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987533 By reading my own writing, it helps me now look over my what i wrote, and i easily changed the wording of a few things because i heard what it sounded like, and i now know what it looks like.]]> 2018-02-05 07:38:50 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987533 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987697 By listening to what I wrote, it helped me to see how I should vary my sentence and paragraph lengths so they flow well when being read out.]]> 2018-02-05 07:39:34 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987697 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987772 I noticed some repetition that was unnecessary. ]]> 2018-02-05 07:39:53 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987772 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987776 By listening and watching myself whilst I'm not filiming helps me see and notice things that hadn't whilst I was reading it, such as: unescessary extra information that was repeated.]]> 2018-02-05 07:39:54 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987776 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987841 I used the text to speech conversion to make sure that my punctuation is correct and check the pace of my writing. The website wasn't extremely helpful because when a semi-colon was present, the voiceover did not emphasize it clearly.]]> 2018-02-05 07:40:10 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987841 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987988 I need to find more statistics to support my points. ]]> 2018-02-05 07:40:49 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227987988 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227988330 I think its really effective because I got to see if my group could recognize my target audience]]> 2018-02-05 07:42:11 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227988330 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227989239 I used the text to speech website and found this extremely helpful.]]> 2018-02-05 07:45:35 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227989239 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227989800 It helps to share with groups because it offers a broader perspective from different peoples points of view, firas and i worked together, but there might have been something we overlooked, so we worked as a group to help overcome this]]> 2018-02-05 07:47:38 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227989800 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227989906 By reading over my coursework again, especially after seeing Ryan's repeated use of dramatic and emotive sentences, it's made me change some of my working and ordering to have my best points at the end, and my most shocking statistics at the end.]]> 2018-02-05 07:48:05 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227989906 rhyhammon https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227990177 My partner brought to my attention the amount of questions I used in the very beginning of my work. I will try to spread them out across my paragraphs.]]> 2018-02-05 07:49:23 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227990177 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227991223 By watching and reading my coursework, it helped me alter a few things. Like in the vlog if the pace seemed to going to fast, I would add some sort of punctuation to help slow it down]]> 2018-02-05 07:52:33 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227991223 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227991805 I really liked this idea because the fresh perspective on my work was exactly what I need. My partner helped me with my punctuation and looking at the times when I repeated myself instead of clearly analyzing
 my points]]> 2018-02-05 07:55:01 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227991805 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227992958 Having other people listen or read my argument, they also have other perspectives than me and my partner so they are able to notice parts that might not make complete sense or missing punctuation.]]> 2018-02-05 07:59:49 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227992958 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227994031 2018-02-05 08:04:42 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227994031 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227994066 My course work was a bit over the word count limit so my partner helped me identify unnecessary words which was helpful]]> 2018-02-05 08:04:47 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227994066 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227994571 2018-02-05 08:06:45 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227994571 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227996544 Sharing with my group has helped me to make some improvements like using more effective adventurous voacbulary, and other small things that wouldnt have been noticed if not with a group.]]> 2018-02-05 08:14:02 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227996544 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998046 I don't thing I needed to do this as I just use grammarly to help with simple SPAG errors]]> 2018-02-05 08:19:30 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998046 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998224 I felt like being forced to film it, took my focus off of my writing and of course it took way too long to film. 
However I liked being able to hear and read it afterwards at the same time. It made it easier to notice any mistakes. ]]> 2018-02-05 08:20:08 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998224 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998419 I think filming was really important in the sense of our characters voice, we had a better idea about how we wanted our writing to come across. However, during the vlog, it was hard to show our choice of punctuation.]]> 2018-02-05 08:20:57 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998419 ethanjm17 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998585 The piece never flowed; I never delved into the point deep enough and I never made clear points.

]]> 2018-02-05 08:21:37 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998585 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998587 I really liked the independent editing because it was so much easier for me to hear MYSELF speak it alongside me editing my coursework than reading THEN editing.]]> 2018-02-05 08:21:38 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998587 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998597 My partner was very helpful at spotting mistakes and helping me improve sentences. However both of us had no idea how to cut the word count down.]]> 2018-02-05 08:21:40 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998597 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998874 My humor was too subtle, it went over most of my readers or viewers heads. There are also a few parts that most people lost interest in.]]> 2018-02-05 08:22:33 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227998874 ethanjm17 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227999413 I wasn't able to justify my points well enough; I feel like there is more I could do to effectively convey my PoV, maintaining quality rather than a certain quantity.]]> 2018-02-05 08:24:35 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227999413 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227999868 I tested my group to see if they recognised my target audience.]]> 2018-02-05 08:26:16 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/227999868 https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/229402125 Mine sounds more like an article and has too many facts. It doesn't seem as passionate as I would like it.]]> 2018-02-08 02:36:26 UTC https://padlet.com/rsudlow3/ajo8vqnbassf/wish/229402125