https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm en-us 2018-01-31 15:51:34 UTC 2018-03-04 14:30:34 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Dartstarget.png 23alesser https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm/wish/227102616 Great job utalizing the time passing between sleep. The piece overall was very interesting and I enjoyed reading it. One thing I was confused about was the flow of time. It seemed like days were passing but then you mentioned only half of a day passed. That part was the only part that seemed unclear. Otherwise the piece had strong narration and was suspenseful. Good Job!!!]]> 2018-02-01 15:46:40 UTC https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm/wish/227102616 23tmetzger https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm/wish/227103681 Dear Andy, 
I thought that your piece plot was very intersting and I really enjoyed it. I like how your good word choice and how your detail was not over powering. One part I was a bit confused about was the scene where he got put in pod. I got a little lost there and It seemed unclear why he was in the pod and what the pod was doing to him. To clear that up I would add a little more detail. Otherwise good job, this would be a cool movie. --- Thomas]]> 2018-02-01 15:48:27 UTC https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm/wish/227103681 23cfallon https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm/wish/227103952 Hi Andy! Great job on your editorial! You now made me really want to have more sidewalks in our towns! First of all, I really liked your hook! You used a question and humor to really get me interested in your topic. Secondly, I loved your data! It really supported your topic. Next time, to really help going to the next level is use more advanced vocabulary in places such as the claims. Great job!!!!!!!!!]]> 2018-02-01 15:48:53 UTC https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm/wish/227103952 23mfela https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm/wish/227104658 Hi Andy, I think you did a great job on your suspense narrative! I like the way that you utilized high level words such as "tragedy" and "arrogance"! Something else that I enjoyed about your piece is how you really let the reader know how bad this Ritz syndrome really is. Something I think you could improve on is, describing the symptoms of the Ritz disease better. Such as, maybe saying what they look like when they have the disease! Overall amazing job on the piece! ]]> 2018-02-01 15:50:02 UTC https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm/wish/227104658 23cfallon https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm/wish/237454313 Hey Andy! Fantastic job on your essay! First off, I really enjoyed your bridge. It gave me all the back round information that I needed. Secondly, I liked the warrants. It really connected the data to your claims. Next time, to elevate your claims you could add some advanced vocabulary. Overall, great job!]]> 2018-03-02 15:46:28 UTC https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm/wish/237454313 23dpatel1 https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm/wish/237797090 Hey Andy! I liked reading your piece. One thing I liked was the word choice. Words like "pollute" and "extreme" are great words to spruce up your story. Something else that I thought was great was your similarities and differences. They made total sense and I, also choosing climate change, could see how they made sense with what the text said. One thing I would fix is the grammar as there are a few mistakes sprinkled throughout the piece. Overall, great job!]]> 2018-03-04 14:23:00 UTC https://padlet.com/23azhu/aay6ldageabm/wish/237797090