My hobby by Linh Huong

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cancaucomhaimecon — 2021-08-31 14:16:01 UTC

Hi, my name is(1) …….. My (2)…………. is doing the gardening. (3) I ….... this hobby when I (4)……….. 10 years old. (5)…………… younger brother loves gardening, too. We spend (6)…………...free time doing it. After school, I often (7) ……………trees, vegetables and flowers (8)…………. my garden. I also get up very early to water (9)…………… every morning. I find this hobby fun and useful. I really enjoys seeing (10)………………... blooming and plants growing. I think I will definitely continue this hobby (11)………..doing the gardening can both (12)…………..me relax and keep me healthy.

Ngoc Anh : 8 marks ( Em rất chịu khó tương tác với giáo viên, tuy nhiên cần cẩn thận hơn trong việc soát bài nhé.)

2021-08-31 14:21:37 UTC

My name is Ngoc Anh. My (favorite-> k cần dùng thêm từ này nhé ) hobby is cycling. ( When I started cycling 8 years old-> Câu này nên sửa I started cycling when I was 8 years old). I often cycle with my younger sister. We often cycle in the morning and afternoon. I like cyling very much -> nên thêm phần này để giải thích tại sao mình thích hobby này VD: becase it can help me both active and healthy. I will continue this hobby in the future.

t châu -> Tran Minh Chau : 8,5 marks.( Em đã tiến bộ hơn rất nhiêu, mạnh dạn hơn, đọc hay hơn. Cần cố gắng khắc phục thêm về phần ngữ pháp. Mong em tiếp tục phát huy nhé)

2021-08-31 14:24:15 UTC

Hi my name is Chau. My hobby is drawing a picture. I stared this hobby when I was 5 years old. my sister likes draw-> drawing , too. I and My sister ofen draw a picture in my-> our free time. because it helps me creative and becmes a patient person. Em nê thêm một chút ở phần cuối để bài hay hơn nhé-> I will take up this hobby in the future and I hope I will become a famous artist in the future.

Vân Anh : 9 marks

2021-08-31 14:26:36 UTC

Good evening, my name is Van Anh. My hobby is folding. I started folding paper when i-> I was 9 years old. I have a friend, her name is Ha. She love -> loves folding paper, we often practise together in ( the free -> our free time). If you want to- > to be good at folding paper, you have to practice a lot. It is a little bit difficult but it helps me focus thêm chut này cho hay on doing things . I love folding paper very much.

Dũng Hoàng : 8,5 mark ( Bài em làm ý tưởng tốt, tuy nhiên cần chú ý về cách chia động từ và cần soát bài kĩ hơn tránh bị sai chính tả ở một số từ nhé.)

2021-08-31 14:28:06 UTC

Hí, My name is Dũng. My hobby is design-> designing the logo. I started this hobby when -> Em nên đổi thành since nhé this summer. I stared-> started design the logo and banner for the theme. It's difficult and very take-> takes time, but it's interesting and creative. It's help-> It helps me relax and happy -> be happy after hours of hard work.
I am going be a designer when I am 16 years old.

Yến : 8,5 ( Em có tố chất của bộ môn, tích cực tương tác với GV, cần cố gắng duy trì, cần cẩn thận và chú ý hơn về chia động từ nhé)

2021-08-31 14:28:35 UTC

Hi, my name is yen-> Yen. My hobby is drawing -> drawing a picture. I like this when I was 3 years old. My brother love -> loves draw-> drawing, too. when we have time, we usually draw a picture. I often draw about nature and fashion. I think it very-> it is very creative and interesting. ...... Em nên thêm một chút vào phần cuối nhé...VD: I will take up this hobby in the future....

Huyen : 8,0 marks ( Em đã có nhiều tiến bộ, cần tiếp tục mạnh dạn hơn nhé. Cô đã sắp xếp lại một chút để bài em hay hơn kể cả cách trình bày và nội dung. lần sau em nên để Tên ở phần Subject và bài viết để ở phần Write something here như thế này em nhé.)

2021-08-31 14:29:21 UTC

My name is Huyen. My hobby is drawing. When i-> I was 6 years old. I usually draw in my spare time. (i very like draw a lot because it helps me relieve stress -> I like drawing very much because it helps me relieve/reduce the stress after a hard-working day).

nguyên : 8,5 marks

2021-08-31 14:31:47 UTC

Hi I'm original( My full name is Nguyen Thao Nguyen), I love experiments (very much). I started (liking -> nên đổi thành "doing" nhé) it when I was 9 years old. I shared it with my old brother. It helped me to learn and understand more about the world of science.-> đoạn này hay..... Em nên viết thêm một chút ở đoạn cuối là.... I will continue thí hobby in the future because it is very useful and meaning ful.

Tiến dũng : 8 marks

2021-08-31 14:32:50 UTC

Hi, my name is Dung. My hobby is playing games. (When I started playing games 9 years old -> I started playing games when I was 9 years old). I often play the game Arena of Valor. I often play games with my friends.I ( omly-> only) play games when I've done my work. My brother shared this with me. .....
Em nên làm thêm phần cuối như thế này em nhé-> I think games are interesting, thay-> they help me more intelligent, but remember to play them in moderation. I will continue my hobby in the future.

Tâm : 9,5 -> Interesting and weldone!

2021-09-01 08:44:02 UTC

Hi ! My name is Tam. My hobby is reading book.I started it three years ago.I love reading novels because it help-> helps me relax after school. I often read books when I finish my homework -> hoac co the lam laf after finishing my homework. or in my free times.I think I should read more books because it is useful and interesting.

thais viquoc: Weldone! You are a hard - working student, keep taking this habit.-> 10 marks

vingan2011 — 2021-09-01 13:20:37 UTC

Hi I'm Thai. My hobby is composing music. I started this hobby three years ago. My brother is also. We use almost free time to compose a new song. The tasks when composing music are writing scripts, creating music,... I like this hobby because i can make many song and listen to it. I think I will continue this hobby to end of life. I very love my music.

Trung : 9 marks-> Em có nhiều tiến bộ, đã mạnh dạn hơn rất chủ động tương tác với cô giáo> Bài em có ý tưởng hay tuy nhiên em cần chú ý lỗi chia động từ nhé( VD đi sau like đông từ luôn để "ing"-> reading....; sau ngôi ba phải thêm "s"; VD như It help-> It helps). Em xem và chép lại bài vào vở nhé.

2021-09-01 13:20:50 UTC

Hi, My name is Trung. My hobby is read-> reading books. I started this hobby when I was five years old. I share it with my older brother. My-> I spend a lots-> lot of free time it. In my free time, I look for (books good and interesting-< interesting and good books). I like reading books because it help-> helps me gain new knowledges. I want to read all the books in the world

TÙng lâm-> Tùng Lâm : 8 marks ( Em đã có ý thức làm bài, đã rất cố gắng tiếp thu để quen với nội quy của nhóm học và cũng rất yêu thích môn học. Tuy nhiên em cần chú ý về cách trình bày( lỗi chính tả và dấu câu( cô đã sửa giúp)...., thêm ý tưởng đẻ bài thêm phong phú nhé. Em tranh thủ chép lại bài đã sửa vào vở nhé.

2021-09-02 15:52:00 UTC

hi-> Hi my name is Lam. My hobby is playing badminton I started playing cage bridge 4 years ago I often play with my brothers and sisters every afternoon I go to the stadium to play with my brothers and sisters until six now we just came back. I spent a lot of free time (to play)-> playing badminton, i->I like playing badminton because it's very useful and very interesting. Thêm chút cho đầy đủ...-> I will continue playing badminton in the future and I want to be a famous badminton player when I grow up.