Narrative Essay: SHOW not tell by Keegan Kilrea

Kayla Carrillo

2018-03-08 15:16:00 UTC

My face was red, the frustration coming out of ears,I felt all the words coming up my throat just wanting to let it out

Kat S.

2018-03-08 15:16:02 UTC

Then right after that I was being strangled. <------ BEFORE
Then seconds later I was coughing and gagging reaching out for air. Hands were around my neck and I could not do anything about it other than dig my nails into Peter, but that would do nothing he was pretty much invincible. <----- AFTER

Ryan H

2018-03-08 15:16:16 UTC

The cops found him 2 hours ago he tried to escape and break out of their police car but they got to prison before he could so we are very happy that we caught him. He has been all over the news i´m surprised that you haven't heard about him everyone is talking about him. Some people wouldn't even leave their houses because they were to scared¨

Corban

2018-03-08 15:16:19 UTC

Every lick of ice cream on their tongues reminded of good times they had together and squashed all the scary and sad things.

Giuliano

2018-03-08 15:16:24 UTC

Cole could smell the hot black smoke coming towards him.

camila

2018-03-08 15:16:31 UTC

I can smell the soft and crunchiness of the bread I can already feel the bread going into my mouth I had no other choice but to steal it.

Matthew Soehn

2018-03-08 15:16:47 UTC

All of a sudden Elsa started shaking violently the tremors rocked her body from head to toe. And fell into a coma.

Shane

2018-03-08 15:16:52 UTC

“AHHH!!!”

It felt like a thousand tiny needles piercing me, it looked like veins were cut open and blood was flowing out, my hand felt like it was bulging.

Sobiya

2018-03-08 15:16:57 UTC

I reached out to go touch it but i kept getting pushed away. I tried again still nothing. At last, I reach out in front i got a glimpse of the gold, shiny, huge thing, but instead i got a glimpse and got to touch it. On the drive home all i thought about was how i touched the one and only NYC trophy.

Leah

65322 — 2018-03-08 15:16:59 UTC

But I came home full of tears flowing down my face and my dad and mom didn’t even ask why my face was all wet, because they did not care.

Anisa

2018-03-08 15:17:03 UTC

When I was walking to school that morning I noticed the sky was very gloomy after the rain last night. The ground was very damp while the air was still misty this morning.

Piotr

2018-03-08 15:17:12 UTC

When mom came home she could hear the sirens and see lights of police cars, ambulances and fire trucks.

Abdul

2018-03-08 15:17:21 UTC

I bolted out of my seat soon to realize that the door was locked my heart skipped a beat as I realized we were trapped.

Ryan S

2018-03-08 15:17:23 UTC

“Maybe we should go up our very creaky unstable stairs and see why mom wants us” said Tim.

Nickolas

663661 — 2018-03-08 15:17:25 UTC

When you took a step in there it felt like you got frostbite every time you step foot in this snow.

Deen

2018-03-08 15:17:31 UTC

“You hit the car head to head”
What happened to the other person.
There was no one in the other car, it was parked.
Do you want to see the video?
Not really, A timer went off, Oh it's time, time for what, surgery.

Luke RIcharrrrrrrds

2018-03-08 15:17:31 UTC

I said while my legs were tingling from being so scared from the last half hour.

Alex

2018-03-08 15:17:32 UTC

Josh and his uncle got their ponchos on and walked outside.They could hear the wind howling around them almost warning them to be careful.

Noah C.

2018-03-08 15:17:54 UTC

Where are we going?” I questioned, voice working now. “To a camp 10 miles south.” Someone responded, “There we will be assigned a designation.”

Diana

2018-03-08 15:17:57 UTC

I live in mansions where the ocean breeze hit our face every time we want outside.

matt

2018-03-08 15:18:13 UTC

The pizza smelled so good as I put it in my mouth the cheese was perfect and the the crust was stuffed. The cheese melted in my mouth it was the best pizza i had ever had and it was cooked to perfection.