P7 WW: FRQ1 Essay Strengths. by Stephanie Faucette

The complex word choice when describing the image of dreariness to the reader, using words like fatigue and simplicity.

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The Author consistently restates her thesis and claims in each argument and at the end of each paragraph.

Textual Evidence

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In body paragraph 3, the writer has good inclusion of textual evidence when she uses only specific, descriptive words from the text that clearly display the author's emotions instead of full sentences.

Depth of Analysis

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In body paragraph 2, the writer is describing the diction the speaker uses to describe his feelings. The writer includes was words have an impact on the reader but continues to explain how the words impacts the readers feelings.

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The conclusion sentence clearly, and concisely wraps everything she said in her whole essay up, and depicts exactly the point she was trying to prove.

word choice

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i think this writer did a very good job at choosing words that correctly describe the feelings she is trying to convey. Especially in paragraph 1 when she uses the word "escapism" or in paragraph 2 when she continually uses the words "monotonous" and "deary" to restate the author's feelings.

Concise and Smooth Structure

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Throughout the essay, the author articulates each of her topics with brief yet thought-provoking analyses to back up her strong evidence. She re-emphasizes her point throughout paragraphs and even includes conclusions.

strong word choice

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Throught the essay the writer displays strong word choice which helps to show her sophistication of thought. The writer uses word/phrases such as "sense of escapism" and " juxtaposing people".

word choice

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In the second body paragraph she uses complex wording including, "fatigue and simplicity" and later "calmness and grimness" to evoke the readers feelings relating to the poem.

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For the second paragraph to explain why the writer used similes and metaphors they furthered proved that by using using a different literary device, diction.

Quote Incorporation

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In paragraph 3, the writer seamlessly incorporates her evidence into the writing, helping the flow of the paragraph.

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In body paragraph 1, the writer clearly illustrates how the personification of the barren moors equates to the loneliness the speaker feels. She writes, "this address further contributes to this sense of distance that the speaker has created between himself and the real world." This analysis effectively walks the reader through her thought process.

Complexity of thought

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In paragraph 1, the student points out that the speaker talks to the landscape using second person to emphasize the distance between himself and reality. It demonstrates complexity of thought in an original and clear way.

Thorough analysis/connection to thesis/complexity

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A strength presented through out the FRQ was the frequent draw back to the complexity noted in her thesis. Her paragraphs gave a well thought out analysis and concluded with the contrasting the emotions within the barren moors.

Concluding Sentences

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In all the body paragraphs, specifically body paragraph 1, the writer concludes her talking about a juxtaposing or complex idea, connecting the paragraph to the main argument of the essay while also smoothly transitioning into the next paragraph.

Straight to the point

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Through out the essay, the writer never strays away from the topic she is presenting. She provides concise analysis that keeps the reader on track and fully portrays Channing's feelings toward the Moors.

Evidence

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The writer did an excellent job of providing strong evidence in clear topic sentences and specific examples throughout the essay. In paragraph 3, she uses tone and clearly explains the effect the tone has on the audience and how their feelings are influenced.

Complexity

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Complex thinking is displayed when the writer says, "While the speaker may feel lonely and somber at the moors, the audience can infer that he also appreciates the quietude of the setting." The writer recognizes that the speaker in the poem might have had more emotions than he necessarily let on, such as sadness or grief. This shows that the writer understands that there is depth to the poem's words.