Group 4 Mary, Jack, Maria by Ramis Yagofarov https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l Writing final exam en-us 2022-06-03 07:34:07 UTC 2025-05-22 19:04:01 UTC hello@padlet.com Hello to everyone by group 4😍 ramisyagofarov99 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2209931936 2022-06-03 07:39:32 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2209931936 Read and enjoy the Descriptive essay by Jack, comparison essay by Mary , and Cause&Effect essay by Maria 😘😍💕 ramisyagofarov99 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2209937437 2022-06-03 07:46:27 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2209937437 I chose this essay because my foreign teacher is extrovert and the students and I love her very much. She has a sweet smile on her face and her smile makes people feel good. He gets along well with students and helps us whenever we need help. He often happily chats with students, which makes him very happy. In summary, he is a good teacher. https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2210018457 2022-06-03 09:38:01 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2210018457 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2210020648 2022-06-03 09:41:12 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2210020648 I choose this essay because I was interesting for me, and written essay on advantages, and disadvantages of online classes. I written points on online classes vs tradition classes. This is also very helpful for my writing preparation. https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2210022466 2022-06-03 09:43:47 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2210022466 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2210023942 2022-06-03 09:46:16 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2210023942 I chose this essay because I think parents are a child's main teacher. They are a child's first teacher and what they teach is very important. It is very difficult to teach a child to do the right thing when his parents are always doing the wrong thing. This is because the wrong thing has become normal for them and it doesn't work. Therefore, having bad parents affects the physical and mental development of the child. https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2210026611 2022-06-03 09:50:55 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2210026611 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2210027673 2022-06-03 09:52:40 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2210027673 Group 2 from class 1-Reese Writing2 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2213567758 The author introduces the advantages and disadvantages of online courses in detail and logically. First of all, I explained that online courses can provide us with many advantages of online courses under the epidemic situation. On the contrary, it also tells the physical harm of long-term online classes.The article is clear, accurate and rich in examples.

]]> 2022-06-07 12:35:40 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2213567758 Group 2 from class 1-Miya Writing2 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2213574498 We like your article very much because I feel your love for your foreign teacher. I believe that this teacher must teach you a lot. You said that you used to be shy, but this teacher gradually changed you. In this article, you don't make many grammatical mistakes, your language is beautiful, but you have one mistake, your second and third paragraphs are completely repeated.]]> 2022-06-07 12:42:15 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2213574498 Group 2 from class 1-Judy Writing2 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2213575847 Our group really enjoy your essay. Your vocabulary and grammar are vast. There are no valid words in your essay. Besides，you are good at finding social problems. Parents really impact children's lives. ]]> 2022-06-07 12:43:35 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2213575847 Group 3 from class 1-Marissa 2150631198 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2213719840 I can tell from the author's essay that he really learn a lot from his first foreign teacher, and also the teacher is so fantastic just like Karen, according to the author's description. However, there is a spelling mistake in the last sentence in your supporting paragraph. I think it is "too" rather than "to". Maybe next time you can reread your amazing essay after you finish it. Besides, I really want to read a five-paragraph version since you have described the teacher so marvelously!]]> 2022-06-07 14:42:49 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2213719840 Group 3 from class 1-Marissa 2150631198 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2213736960 Your essay is arranged very logically, and I really enjoy reading your perfectly written 5 paragraph version! However, I strongly recommend you can condense the topic sentence of your second supporting paragraph, which means it could be even better to make it contains the comparison in this topic sentence. This is just my shallow groundless opinion. Anyway, I like your essay, and I can tell that you are so well done! Thank you to be so hardworking to letting me enjoy your fantastic essay!]]> 2022-06-07 14:57:39 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2213736960 Group 3 from class 1-Marissa 2150631198 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2213744822 I think this essay! It is so deep and thought-provoking! It is just beyond my word! However, I was wondering it could be even better if the topic sentence of the second supporting paragraph can be more concise. Besides, I really appreciate this concluding paragraph! It is so clear and logical. All in all, I love this essay and the whole group's work is so cute! ]]> 2022-06-07 15:04:26 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2213744822 Cynthia from Class 1 Group 3 2693341246 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214251696 This essay succeeds in portraying the foreign teacher.The emotions are very sincere and you can see how the author feels about his teacher.However, there are only four paragraphs in the essay. The first paragraph is too long and the topic sentence does not stand out. The topic sentences in the second and third paragraphs should be different and could focus on different details.]]> 2022-06-08 00:58:59 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214251696 Group 9 class2 Follen https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214262927 I like your essay very much.This essay is about the influence of parents to children.That's so meaningful.In our life，there are many cases that parents showing a bad example for kids lead to seriously bad effects.What's more ，your expression is logic.]]> 2022-06-08 01:09:16 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214262927 Group 9 from Class 2 - Amber 2677931438 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214269229 Your composition essay describes the advantage and  shortcomings of online class. But I am confused with your structure. The introduction paragraphy is good and attractive. And the first supporting paragraphy is mainly describing the advantages about the online class. But the second supporting paragraphy seems to compare the bad aspects of online class with the advantages of traditional classes. In my opinion, this essay isn't the mode of point-by-point. I understand point by point is an advatage with a shortcoming.

This comparision essay shows us many aspects of online. You are so well done.]]> 2022-06-08 01:15:09 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214269229 Cynthia from Class 1 Group 3 2693341246 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214275916 The essay describes the benefits and drawbacks of online classes and have some lights on those of students who are now taking online classes.The second paragraph，third paragraph and the fourth paragraph specifically talk about the advantages and disadvantages of online classes. However, the article would be better if each paragraph introduced the advantages and disadvantages of online classes from different aspects. And the first line of the first paragraph should be indented.]]> 2022-06-08 01:20:55 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214275916 Cynthia from Class 1 Group 3 2693341246 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214291749 The essay fits the character of the cause-effect essay. I think this topic is good. The supporting paragraphs are also all detailed and convincing. But the second paragraph seems to be the cause of the children's bad behavior rather than the result of the parent's bad influence on the child.]]> 2022-06-08 01:34:43 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214291749 Misha from Group9 Class2 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214305517 We really appreciate your article.According to your paragraphs,we learn that your foreign teacher is really a different and kind teacher.In addition,we can feel your love for your tracher.We all have a understanding of the emotions between students and teachers.You have a good use of adjectives.Thank you for sharing us with your story.]]> 2022-06-08 01:46:43 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214305517 Group 9 from Class 2 -Amber 2677931438 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214363840 The descriptive essay is very good. The sentences are detailed. You show a very good teacher to us.  We have feel the emotion that you love your teacher. The teacher's character is vivid. The whole stracture is clear and you show us many examples that make us understand well. According to your passage, wen can feel your strong love to your teacher. And you use many descriptive words that is organized well. But there are only 4 paragraphies.]]> 2022-06-08 02:36:46 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214363840 Group 9 from Class 2 - Amber 2677931438 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214400629 The cause-effect essay very logically organized. This passage shows us the effect of the bad parents. The topic is interesting and attractive. I wonde it shows us bad parents' effect to the children or parents' bad behaviors' effect. It maybe not very clear. Lack of companionship and care, violence and neglect ,all of these  will have negative impact on children. In addition, the passage is logic.

]]> 2022-06-08 03:10:17 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214400629 Group 3 from Class1-Clara https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214413615 This essay mainly talk about your foreign teacher，in the hook part，you use an old saying，i was attract to this sentence！
  I think it is very vivid and concrete that you illustrate the teacher's care for you by giving examples I learn about that your  
foreign teacher is a considerate people，and your continued progress.That‘s great！
But there are some small spelling mistakes，and your essay only have 4 paragraphs, i think maybe 5 paragraphs will be better！
 ]]> 2022-06-08 03:23:34 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214413615 Group9 class2 Follen https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214432578 The descriptive essay is very good.I think you must get along well with your foreign teacher.And the teacher helped you a lot. With the foreign teacher's help you become more outgoing. And you learned a lot which include grammar and the way of expression.But your essay only four paragraphs.In my opinion， five paragraphs will be better.]]> 2022-06-08 03:44:21 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214432578 Clara G3 from Class1 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214432933 It's good that your topic is relevant to reality.Then, your statement is clear and supports your point. But you still have some work to do First，the first paragraph should be idented .Second, your structure is not very clear. It does not follow the "Point by point" principle.]]> 2022-06-08 03:44:49 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214432933 Clara from G3 Class1 https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214440912 First of all, praise your format. Your article is about the result of bad education, but the first sentence of your second paragraph is about the cause of bad education. I think that sentence could be changed! In general, the structure of the article is clear and the support of the opinion is strong. After reading your essay, I understand that a bad way of education will have many negative effects on a child!]]> 2022-06-08 03:54:47 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214440912 Group 5 from Class 2(Roxanne) https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214813978 I enjoy reading your essay about the advantages and disadvantages of online classes.But I strongly recommend that you move the last sentence of the 3rd paragraph to the front,which can make the structure clearer.And I think other elements are terrific. You've done a good job!]]> 2022-06-08 10:21:24 UTC https://padlet.com/ramisyagofarov99/9rchvyorrhlfpd3l/wish/2214813978