Task 56 - Sample Essay by https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s Discuss the strengths and weaknesses en-us 2020-08-18 06:28:49 UTC 2020-08-18 17:27:39 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f31f.png Group 4 Aria and Helen aria11231123 https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s/wish/684481566 Strengths:
  • some correct good conjunctions （for example: however, nevertheless and etc.)
  • quotate data and examples to analyse
  • have references list and quotations
  • good use of heading



Weaknesses:
  • too oral(not objective), not academic writing (for example: I found, he talks and act.)
  • have topic sentence in introduction
  • no paraphrase in the first sentence
  • no uniform font, some bold, some not
  • some grammar problems
  • reference format is wrong, some references miss the volume and issue number, page numbers( for example :Bershire Hathaway  (2003),  Jardim, A, (1970) )


]]> 2020-08-18 09:34:47 UTC https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s/wish/684481566 Group 1- Mason and Kelvin lxdi1264896786 https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s/wish/684481701 Strengths:
1) Good use of signposting words 
 2) Good structure (clearly for reader to know which part the writer are discussed)

Weaknesses:
1)The essay mixed bold letter in several paragraph.
2)Some of topic sentences are missing or not clear.
3)Wrong format with references in-text(missing name).
4)There are many casual writing styles, not academic enough.

]]> 2020-08-18 09:35:05 UTC https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s/wish/684481701 Group 6 Xingchi & Lucas chenxingchi2020 https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s/wish/684481719 strengths:
  • completed structure
  • take advantage of diagram
  • critical discussion
weaknesses:
  • wrong formate
  • The font is not uniform
  • wrong quotation way (page number)
  • begin with direct quotation
  • informal style
  • wrong order of reference list
  • divide one topic into too many paragraphs
  • unnecessary subheadings
  • too many personal opinions
  • lost the topic sentence
]]> 2020-08-18 09:35:06 UTC https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s/wish/684481719 Group 3 https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s/wish/684481840 Strengths: 
- Quotation correctly.

Weaknesses:
- Too much hyphen.
- The format of text should be justified on both sides.
- The quoting points should be complete and cannot be omitted with ]]> 2020-08-18 09:35:18 UTC https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s/wish/684481840 Group 2 https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s/wish/684482242 Strengths:
Follow academic structure.
Some paragraphs have topic sentences.
Figures used to describe the main idea.

Weaknesses:
  • Introduction is divided into 3 parts, and the background is insufficiently presented. Outling should be put at the end of this part.
  • The conclusion is not in the academic style.
  • Inappropriate formatting.
  • Some paragraphs do not have topic sentence.
  • Referencing list : formatting problem, Harvard style.
]]> 2020-08-18 09:35:58 UTC https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s/wish/684482242 Group 5 Eva and Iris 1343174133 https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s/wish/684485989 Strengths:
1.Searched a lot of literature on related topics，use many references in the essay.
Weaknesses:
1.In academic writing, there should not have sub-headings, like "introduction", "conclusion"
2. A case is divided into paragraphs.
3. In conclusion, use "I", it is not academic in writing style.]]> 2020-08-18 09:42:44 UTC https://padlet.com/ectongue/9r2bjdkdtaydee2s/wish/684485989