This business has some differentiations compared to other cafe businesses. First of all, 'A cup of flower''s targets are elderly women and women in their twenties. These days many coffee shops target only young generation so there are so many take-out cafes appeared. But our business sell cups of flower and herb tea to give satisfaction to elderly people also. Secondly, we serve a cup of tea with a beautiful flower. So customers can enjoy visual things as well as tastes. Finally, I plan to sell other products such as dry flower postcards, diffusers, various teabags to customers.
 

 To become successful, we need to decorate interior for perfect mood and serve fresh  cups of tea and flowers to customers. In order to do this, we need a large budget. Around 10 million won will be needed at the beginning of the business.

What a brilliant idea! Best of luck!

First of all, we hope to make money by printing customized pictures. On special day, we want to memorize all memory forever. In case of that, Han paper picture is appropriate.

Secondly, pictures printed on Han paper don’t change the color in all time. Han paper is made by Koreans tradition so it is tough. The color doesn’t change for all time because ink is permeated into the Han paper.

Finally, we can not only spread out our Korea’s paper but also introduce Korea’s tradition and culture.

To become successful, we need to advertise to tourists , a family, a newly met couple. We plan to distribute a photo bookmark printed on Han paper. Also, we have a plan which is to make customized website. In this website, we can print out any picture or any size whatever you want

Thank you for listening

Great idea. I love that you are giving out bookmarks as a way to advertise!

I think that people should do recycle for this three reasons. First of all, A lot of people are using plastics which are very bad for environment. If they just throw away plastics without recycling, they generate chemical and toxic gas. After that, they will pollute the air. Also when plastics are thrown out to the ground, it takes 500 years to decay. Secondly, recycling is more helpful to the economy. It can reduces production costs. Last but not least, the huge amount of trees are cutting down to make paper in every day. We have to save the tree and preserve it for our planet so recycling is a great help to that.

If we do recycle, we can save the money about 60 billion won per year. So we will be able to use that money to environmental businesses. And if trees are protected, the air will be more cleaner. Then all lifes on the planet can live in the healthy earth.

That's a really excellent essay, Sunhyung. It is perfectly organised into paragraphs, and you have a great range of vocabulary and some really good ideas. Well done! :)

Just a few small errors:
1. do recycle - we say to recycle or to do recycling.
2. Plastics - plastic is uncountable and always singular.
3. Can reduces - after can/could we always use the infinitive with no 's'
4. save the tree - only one tree?
5. It will be more cleaner??? What is the rule for comparatives with short adjectives? e.g. colder/smaller?

   

I am writing to notify about the necessity which the present traffic system have to be changed. 

First and foremost, the number of cars was increasing on A-Hyun station since it has carried out the city plan. 

Therefore it has to plan newly to install traffic lights and to make an intersection. 

A few days ago I crossed the big street then almost got a car accident due to the confusing signs and traffic lights. 

Even though there are a lot of huge trucks keeping the construction but isn’t any safety device. 

Secondly, pedestrian walkways are not certain from cars. 

It can really cause life-threatening accidents. 

The construction’s plans remain about 3~4 years to the end, we knew that, there is no time to waste.  

Finally, an apartment complex which contains over 1,000 families is built, it likes increasing rates of cars and population.  

People who live in New Town are already gathering their complaints. 

And they also need adequate policies and alternative plans against present traffic problem. 

I hope you will recognize these problems, notifying plans about change the traffic system. 

and I am looking forward to your reply.

Ms. Kang 

I’m writing about the suggestion a new policy about preservation and safety in Hangang park. At the moment this area is an absolutely beautiful place in Seoul and people love this area. Especially in summer, many people come and enjoy the fantastic night scenery so this area always is crowded by the riders, runners, camping people and someone just for a walking around. 

In addition to this, sometimes some dangerous things happen in this area. Some bicycle riders hit people by mistake almost everyday, some people steal other's stuff, some drunken people threaten the others, and even harassment crimes happen in the camping place. 

If you consider the new policy or regulation about this area to preserve and people can enjoy more peaceful and plenty rest. 

I hope that the Hangang park will keep sustainable and people will be  pleased with this a long period. 

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully

Seonyoung Park

That's really good Seonyoung!
very formal and official, and some good ideas for the mayor to consider. I hadn't realised there were so many problems in the park!

Some small errors:
1. Some + plurals. No preposition
2. Stuff is uncountable and always singular.
3. Harrassment crimes are plural - it's not just one.
4. keep + sustainable = collocation
5. people will be pleased with this for a long period