https://padlet.com/28aholm/9d2nwo8jtq8ojls0 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-10-04 18:14:36 UTC 2022-03-09 16:43:18 UTC hello@padlet.com https://cdn.shopify.com/s/files/1/2255/3255/products/Square__0000_beef_porterhouse_steak.jpg?v=1579445006 28cbeck https://padlet.com/28aholm/9d2nwo8jtq8ojls0/wish/1921262249 This was the best memoir I have read yet. The amount of detail in every corner of this, like naming the type of steak and describing your feelings. You did a great job of blending your memories into the story. It was hard to think of a wish but I guess it would be to slow down the ending to make it less confusing. I got a little bit lost towards the end. Amazing job Alex. ]]> 2021-11-30 19:32:46 UTC https://padlet.com/28aholm/9d2nwo8jtq8ojls0/wish/1921262249 28szamor https://padlet.com/28aholm/9d2nwo8jtq8ojls0/wish/1925499338 I’m very sorry that you had to go through that but the way you wove your words made the story come to life. And the additonal details you added for example, “At that moment I didn’t care about anything. All I wanted to do was lie down on my floor for the rest of my life. It was as if there was an emptiness inside my body that replaced everything.” It moved me and made me feel as if I was in your shoes and I felt the same greif and sadness you felt. I feel though as if your memoir went very fast, you could’ve streatched it out more. For example in this paragraph “I decided to tell all my friends about the bad news. Luckily, they offered to play with me for the rest of the day.” You could add what time of day it was or what season. ]]> 2021-12-02 15:58:15 UTC https://padlet.com/28aholm/9d2nwo8jtq8ojls0/wish/1925499338 28ealvarez https://padlet.com/28aholm/9d2nwo8jtq8ojls0/wish/1925925729 Your Piece was amazing. I can picture all of that happening in my head. The way you described how you felt was amazing. Of all I've read, yours was the most powerful. How you felt and how you worded everything was beautifully done. You did great with your figurative language and especially your inner thoughts. Even though your piece was amazing I would’ve liked to know what they were saying when you got upset

]]> 2021-12-02 19:16:08 UTC https://padlet.com/28aholm/9d2nwo8jtq8ojls0/wish/1925925729 28jalfarolozano https://padlet.com/28aholm/9d2nwo8jtq8ojls0/wish/2086474771 Hey Alex I really love the length of your essay and it was amazingly descriptive. The best part that I enjoyed is where you explained how playing games helps in life. I really wish that in the beginning where you said the boy would get called names I wish you added the names he would get called.]]> 2022-03-09 16:43:18 UTC https://padlet.com/28aholm/9d2nwo8jtq8ojls0/wish/2086474771